0910G WDI小组追星剑特训第1期 Issue 17-By 小欣

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0910G WDI小组追星剑特训第1期Terminology 关键字眼
issue17."There are two types of laws: just and unjust. Every individual in asociety has a responsibility to obey just laws and, even more importantly, todisobey and resist unjust laws."



在文章前面把自己对题目中关键字的辨析也加以说明：
对unjust产生的怀疑——既然是法，就要obey,何谈不公正？衡量标准听谁的？
对disobey的反对—— disobey想咋地？个人disobey的意义大小？人人从自己角度利益出发disobey对社会带来的不良后果。

提纲：
1.赞同：each individual has a responsibility to obey laws.
2．是法律就要obey，不存在disobey的问题。
3.对unjust的定义。对某个群体，或通常弱势群体才有所谓unjust。所以每个个体公民的责任是通过advocate，帮助当权者修订完善法律的公正性，而非阻挠。

The speaker divided laws into two types: just and unjust, and claims that everyone should disobey the unjust laws. In my opinion, I agree that every citizen in our society has a responsibility to obey every single law, but helps to eliminate the unjust aspects within the laws.

First of all, I believe that it is the basic responsibility for every individual to obey all laws, and never only obey the laws that he feels more just. Before I explain this, there is a question that needs to be clarified: what is the function or purpose of laws? I may say that a law is to guarantee the utmost rights of everyone, and to keep a social harmony. Therefore, we have the responsibility to obey all laws and make society a harmony.

Moreover,I disagree that the laws can be divided into two types based on some individual perspective. I believe that unjust parts exist in laws. In other words, there is no absolute just all over all laws. So it is ridiculous to shake the authority of laws by disobeying it. Disobeying or resisting a law may lead to other bigger social issues, which would definitely betray the responsibility of a citizen.

Admittedly,unjust aspects of laws exist. We shall do our utmost to help government to reduce the unjust factors within laws and make our society a more democratic one. Here, I think it is necessary to define “unjust”. Unjust only makes sense when the rights of a group of people cannot protected fairly by laws. Usually,those groups of people are from marginalized community that has less power comparing to the law-makers. Therefore, it seems that disobeying and resisting behaviors are the only ways for them to rebel against the authority and fight for their equal rights. However, their behavior is futile but has bad influence on social harmony. I think it is everyone’s responsibility to help the voice from those groups of people be heard, and find advocates to deal with their problems. Plus, if one is from the marginalized group, he needs to advocate for himself.

In short, the authority of laws should not be shaken by irresponsible behaviors,such as simply disobeying. However, to deal with the unjust parts of laws, it is our responsibility to seek ways to improve it, such as advocating.

lucarlUID: 2616426

哇，赞小欣~写出对关键词的辨析~

我马上给你改~

lucarlUID: 2616426

对不起小欣，这么晚才给你改。
发帖后颜色不对了，上传了word版在下面。

The speaker divided laws into two types: just and unjust, and claims that everyone should disobey the unjust laws. In my opinion, I agree that every citizen in our society has a responsibility to obey every single law, but helps to eliminate the unjust aspects within the laws.


最好开头先定义一下every single law is just, though there are unjust aspects within the laws.怎样下面第二段开头的TS句也不会让人搞不清出怎么就出现laws that he feels more just了。个人建议哈~

First of all, I believe that it is the basic responsibility for every individual to obey all laws, and never only obey the laws that he feels more just. Before I explain this, there is a question that needs to be clarified: what is the function or purpose of laws? I may say that a law is to guarantee the utmost rights of everyone, and to keep a social harmony. Therefore, we have the responsibility to obey all laws and make society a harmony.


这里涉及到“怎么搞定所有人的权利”问题。肯定不能都完全满足，所以要找平衡点。这句话说出来，就和前面的laws that he feels more just对应了。应该找一个平衡点，而非哪个人觉得更加just的laws。

Moreover, I disagree that the laws can be divided into two types based on some individual perspective.题目只提到just and unjust，没有说这个是因为什么分出来的。这里直接默认是站在个人的角度来区分出的just and unjust。那么我想，要先交代一下哈。呃，牛人们说不要默认E-raters了解你脑袋想的什么~呵呵 I believe that unjust parts exist in laws. In other words, there is no absolute just all over all laws. So it is ridiculous to shake the authority of laws by disobeying it. Disobeying or resisting a law may lead to other bigger social issues, which would definitely betray the responsibility of a citizen. 这个很可能，如果能再举例子就更好啦~

Admittedly, unjust aspects of laws exist. We shall do our utmost to help government to reduce the unjust factors within laws and make our society a more democratic one. Here, I think it is necessary to define “unjust”. Unjust only makes sense when the rights of a group of people cannot protected fairly by laws. Usually, those groups of people are from marginalized community that has less power comparing to the law-makers. Therefore, it seems that disobeying and resisting behaviors are the only ways for them to rebel against the authority and fight for their equal rights. However, their behavior is futile学习了 but has bad influence on social harmony. I think it is everyone’s responsibility to help the voice from those groups of people be heard, and find advocates to deal with their problems. Plus, if one is from the marginalized group, he needs to advocate for himself.


最后一段论证很有条理~学习~

In short, the authority of laws should not be shaken by irresponsible behaviors, such as simply disobeying. However, to deal with the unjust parts of laws, it is our responsibility to seek ways to improve it, such as advocating.


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okusaUID: 2342264

谢谢！我写的着急，有些思路在写的时候就遗漏了，你补全的好！
问下你说“呃，牛人们说不要默认E-raters了解你脑袋想的什么”啥意思

紫薇花开UID: 2461167

文章不错，匆匆看了一下

lucarlUID: 2616426

谢谢！我写的着急，有些思路在写的时候就遗漏了，你补全的好！
问下你说“呃，牛人们说不要默认E-raters了解你脑袋想的什么”啥意思
okusa 发表于 2009-7-2 13:09

呃，我想说的意思是，要把话说完整了，有的时候会遗漏一些东西，体现出来就是文章在思维上产生了跳跃，比如一些必要的概念没有交代清楚。

okusaUID: 2342264

改了的附件传上来了