Argument9 【四人行小组】第11次作业 小白

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This argument has several flaws as follows: first it unfairly assumes that the procedure is responsible for the higher grades; with the false assumption the arguer hastily infers that the worse employment in Omega University (OU) is due to that employers believe the grades are inflated; finally without considering the effects of the procedure overall, the arguer unconvincingly proposes to terminate the evaluation. Synthesizing the fallacies above, the proposal is ill-considered to some extent.
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To begin with, no evidence shows that it is (the procedure which encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness) 不太准确，其实就是evaluation that leads to the risen grade averages of overall students. It is entirely possible that (under the pressure of employment and fierce competition) 这么说合适么？我会直接用due to the pressure and competition，而不是under，恩，也有可能我不太习惯这个用法 in the society, the students (take more effort on the study) 好词组 thus they deserve the better scores. In addition, perhaps the curriculums are not as difficult as fifteen years ago and it is easier for students to have a higher grades. In summary, without ruling out the possibilities above, it is unfair to assume that the procedure results in the enhanced overall student grade averages.
Given that the procedure should be (responsible for) 我要学会用这个词组 the higher scores, the conclusion that the students in OU suffer from the worse employment than students from Alpha University (AU) because the employers regard the grades as inflated ones is groundless. In all likelihood, the students from the AU are more competent and deserve the good jobs. Or probably the reputation of AU is much better than OU thus it is reasonable that graduates from OU cannot be employed as well as students from AU. What's more, it is likely that the majors in OU are (suffering a bad job market) 这个表达不错 while the ones in AU are enjoying the situation that there is more demand than supply. Hence, without overall comparison between OU and AU, it is impossible to infer that the potential employers believe the grades at OU are inflated which leads to a worse employment than AU.
首先汗一个，我写的时候完全忽略了跟AU的比较，哎，审题大意啊
Last but not the least, even if it is necessary, the suggestion that OU should terminate the evaluation of professors is hasty, without considering the positive effects of the procedure. Obviously the OU introduced this procedure fifteen years ago with the expectation of better education which probably has occurred thanks to the evaluation. With it, the OU can avoid some irresponsible teachers or professors who take little care about teaching and students. The faculty must take great effort on the curriculums thus the quality of education is guaranteed to some extent. To sum up, only by evaluating the effects of the procedure all sidedly, the proposal is substantiated.
As I presented above, the argument is not well-documented. In order to propose an effective suggestion, the arguer needs more investigation on the grades and employment and (accurate comparison between OU and AU) 这个表达好. Additionally, before the proposal is provided, the overall evaluation of the positive and negative effects of the procedure is indispensable as well.
结尾很不错，分两层叙述，很明了