噼里啪啦。。。我也来开个aw裁缝铺<8.9--8.15>

berninaUID: 2503038

前两天一直处于忙死状态，这两天决定洗心革面好好干活，所以决定开个裁缝铺，给大家改改作文

规矩很简单：每天晚上9点第一篇我来改，每天改一篇， 按点收文，不要占楼。。。

营业日期，定为 09.8.9——09.8.15

ps: 请先自改！！！拜托拜托拜托。。。。。。。。。。。

就想到这么多，以后想到了再加上吧

对了，此贴只发连接，文章发到版面上，还有，为了让更多的板油被改到，大家自觉不要重复占楼哦~

实在抱歉，又要开始忙了。所以修改铺要提前关门了。。。。改到8.15号，不好意思。

congcong1011UID: 2526300

顶~~~

Neptune2010UID: 2626044

顶一个~

文赋UID: 2611067

先写一个，我有一篇刚写好的Argument可不可以啊？Issue还没开始准备呢。
第一次写出来自己比较满意的，我就指望这一个月时间搞定GRE的AW了。呵呵。

TOPIC: ARGUMENT200 - Statistics collectedfrom dentists indicate that three times more men than women faint whilevisiting the dentist. This evidence suggests that men are more likely to bedistressed about having dental work done than women are. Thus, dentists whoadvertise to attract patients should target the male consumer and emphasizeboth the effectiveness of their anesthetic techniques and the sensitivity oftheir staff to nervous or suffering patients.
WORDS: 297-->301
TIME: 00:45:00+00:10:00
DATE: 2009-8-9 11:53:02

In this argument, the author concludes thatmen are more likely to be distressed about having dental work done, and s/hegive some advices to dentists about modifyingtheir advertisement. However, a careful analysis of this argument will revealhow groundless the conclusion is.

To begin with, the author's conclusion isbase on a statistics result; however, the author may omit some alternatives tothis phenomenon. According to another research result, it holds male are likelyto have dental problems and other diseases for their unhealthy lifestyle, such as excessive and uncontrolled smoking,eating or drinking. Thus, if in this argument, the more male subjects in itsstatistics, the less reliable the study's result. Moreover, the author assumesmen have more painful dental treatment experience than women. However, it is ironical that if male patients areunconscious during dental work done, those conscious female patents should bemore distressed than male.

In addition, if the author's conclusion isacceptable, it is not necessary to modify the advertisement. Firstly, for mostpatients, they do not have any experience about dental disease; therefore, theyare possibly careless about neither the anesthetic techniques nor the skill of dentists' staff butfocus on some economic factors, like the treatment fees and bill. Second, Evenif patients will choose dentist when they have some dental diseases, the besttarget for dentist to attract should be female rather than male, for byimproving their skill and equipment, female are more likely to suffer morelitter pain.

In conclusion, before any final decisionsare made about should dentists change their advertise, the author shouldprovide more evidence than men are suffer more pain than women about havingdental work done. To strengthen the argument, the author should have to confirmthat patients’ choice is mainly relying on advertisements.

swekimnUID: 2649781

9点~~ 谢了~~哈哈~~我果然无良了~~果然我的时间和寄托时间是一致~~
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=994148&extra=

文赋UID: 2611067

原来这个帖子是发在9点的帖子才改。太神奇了。

simplelife1211UID: 2669353

https://bbs.gter.net/thread-994444-1-1.html
先谢了

421899282UID: 2595732

我抢~~
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-994098-1-1.html

Garfield0818UID: 2661872

这怎么没有办法看时间啊

Garfield0818UID: 2661872

楼主就帮我改一下吧。。。

Garfield0818UID: 2661872

贴作文了，麻烦楼主了
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-995284-1-1.html

421899282UID: 2595732

我zai抢~~
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-994098-1-1.html

Garfield0818UID: 2661872

楼主没时间的就帮我看一下跑不跑题就可以了哈，或者给我看看这个能有三分吗。。。多谢了啊~~~

panda17UID: 2663026

今天帮我改一下吧！谢谢啦O(∩_∩)O
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-995223-1-1.html

Garfield0818UID: 2661872

没改。。。楼主休假去了。。。