我的作文

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Hardly could we deny we make decisions every day, ranging from critical things such as determining the future career to trivial stuffs like which food we should have for supper.模板开头，不错不错。 However, here comes a more detailed question whether we prefer others making decisions for us to making one for ourselves. As far I am concerned, I deem in most cases, we prefer to make decisions on our own. My reasons are as follows.

First of all, we have the ability to make decisions for ourselves for the simple reason that nobody will know us better than ourselves. When in the face of a moment of decision, especially relating closely to our interests., we have to make it based on personal conditions. For example, I decide to have a further study abroad. But it means I have to give up a myriad of valuable things such as the high-pay job in a business company, the separation from my families and friends, familiar domestic living environment. But more importantly, I think all these things deserve the exchange for an opportunity for a further study in MBA. That is because I have a full and clear understanding of myself- I am aggressive in the business realm and the experience of foreign education in MBA is a significant plus to my future career. The rudder of our life boat ought to be handled by ourselves and we must control our lives completely because we always know ourselves better than others and then are probable to make correct and provident decisions
这个例子相当不错

Also, as the modern life is more complex, we have to well deal with a large amount of tasks, which have the tendency to become more difficult. So likewise, others are too busy to make decisions for us and have no inclination to bear related responsibility. Take my experience for example. When I was a freshman in a business company, I was caught into a state of mess because I am unfamiliar过去时比较好 with processing fairs. Fortunately, a comrade (colleague) named Mary lent her hand to me and pulled me from the dog of trouble. Nevertheless, after a couple of days when I asked for her help just as I did in the past, she refused and had a serious talk with me: "you have already adapted to the job. If I continue to make decision for you in tasks assigned by the superior, you will get into a languid person that is prone to rely on others. Everyone has his or her business. So no one can replace you in making your own decisions." So I become truly independent from that moment on and keep the principle in mind that we have to bear responsibiity that belong to us. It turns out to be necessary for us to make decisions for the argument above.你这个例子我有点搞不明白，如果说扣题的是后面别人说的那句话，前面的的东西我感觉有点冗长。前面最好也时不时的扣一下。后面借那句话把这个例子推到一个更高的意义层面上就更好了。

To sum up, given that we are the optimum persons to make our own decisions and others have no right and time to replace us in making decisions, I am convinced that in modern life, most people would like others to make decisions for themselves rather than to make decisions for themselves
（这个结尾我很喜欢）

模板掌握的真不错。四段论的我倒是第一次见，长知识了。小狗语法很好。

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我也觉得我正文第二段例子冗长了，准备精简，还有你说的升华很好，我会照办的，谢谢啦

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9.2作业
The speaker disagrees with the assertion cited in the passage that technology, legal protectionfor private property and the decrease in procduction cost are three major contributors to the shift from the cottage industry to the factory industry in theUK. He provides several reasons to disprove the passsage's arguments as follows.

First of all, the professor mentions that in the early Industrialized period, many machines such as steam engines were in a state of experiment. So steam engines could not be used to boost production, not to mention they drive the transition from the cottage industry to the factory industry. This point casts doubt on the view in the passage that the advance of technology is one major impetus to lead to the occurrence of the factory industry.

Also, in the passage, the author deems that the second cause is the establishment of a stronger legal protection for private property. Nevertheless, the professor refers to one example that in Holland, a country that also established legal system to protect private property, no change from the cottage industry to the factory industry ever happened. So this evidence questions the second argument of the passage.

Finally, contrary to the statement in the passage that it is a desire to reduce production costs that results in the move from cottage production to factory production, the professor argues that such transformation is not to save production costs but to increase it.
For example, captalists had to buy land for factories, buid factories as well as hire supervisors, all of which would expense a large amount of money, and then increase the burden of production costs.

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用word改的  昨天上不去网 抱歉

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恩？难道我会错意了？ 我以为9月2号只有我和wondersmiths2两个人一组呢 不好意思哦 给他看了没给你看。。。现在补过~

第一个理由少说了一点，就是当时的时代更注意多hire people来提高利益，而不注意提高科技。然后再加上你的“更何况那个时候还没有steam engine...”这样更全面一点

第二个理由：“ a country that also established legal system to protect private property, no change from the cottage industry to the factory industry ever happened.”这样不能成句，没连词，要么分成两句，要么加个“however”

第三个：all of which would expense a large amount of money,
expense只有名词 不可以用作动词哦，换cost吧

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作為老師是與學生有良好關係的能力重要，還是專業知識重要
Hardly could we deny that it is teachers' main responsibility to cultivate students to pursue their academic achievements. As a result, the importance of teachers' possessing professional knowledge is manifest. Nevertheless, I deem it is more significant for teachers to have the ability to build harmonious relationship with students than to just owning professional knowledge. My reasons are as follows.

First of all, only through good communication and exchange with students could teachers can impart academic knowledge to them effectively. Nowadays, more and more people concern and emphasize the necessity for teachers to pursue the educational arts- how to make students absorb what they are taught with more initiative and enthusiasm.Obviously, thorough communication plays a positive effect in this process. Try to imagine, a teacher treats students in rather a rude and non-communicative way that he or she keeps infusing knowledge into students' minds beyond their capacity of receiving and understanding. That may lead to a disastrous consequence- students are more likely not to keep up with the teaching process teachers ever set and shift to blame themselves for not clever enough; what is worse, they may lose interest in study. So we have to admit as teachers, they have the responsibility to establish fine relationship with students and ofen get to know students' ideas about teaching through frequent talks so that students could benefit a lot from a suitable teaching plan.

Also, apart from receiving knowledge , students still can get more valuable things from teachers when they get along well with each other. For one thing, my English teacher Mary, for instance, always pass such belief to us like that- we are asked to build confidence- one of the most essential qualities for only coward people withdraw in the face of difficulties, and in contrast, confident people face trouble more bravely and thus gain more chance to get success. This creed stays in my mind for a long time and guides me to meet challenges in my life and work frequently. For another thing, based on harmonious relationship with our teachers, we even regard each other as precious friends. Obviously, teachers are those who own more experiences than our peer friends. I, for instance, often call my teachers for helping me analyse problems I encounter; in most cases, I can handle the issue more smoothly due to a completely new version towards it. So I am remarkably lucky to have those who are not only teachers, also my intimate friends. It is no wonder an agreeable relationship between teachers and students works to benefit students a lot for their life outside school.

To sum up, given that harmonious relationship enables teachers to indoctrinate knowledge to students more effectively and students can get a myriad of valuable things such as confidence and help from teachers just like close friends, I am convinced that it is more critical for teachers to build an agreeable interaction with students than just owning academic knowledge.

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抱歉啊，今天有事，评的晚了。原来大家都还没评呢，呵呵。
Hardly could we deny that it is teachers' main responsibility to cultivate students to pursue their academic achievements. As a result, the importance of teachers' possessing professional knowledge is manifest. Nevertheless, I deem it is more significant for teachers to have the ability to build harmonious relationship with students than to just owning professional knowledge. My reasons are as follows.写的很好，句式多样化，用词也很好。

First of all, only through good communication and exchange with students could teachers can impart academic knowledge to them effectively. Nowadays, more and more people concern and emphasize the necessity for teachers to pursue the educational arts- how to make students absorb what they are taught with more initiative and enthusiasm.Obviously, thorough communication plays a positive effect in this process. Try to imagine, a teacher treats students in rather a rude and non-communicative way that he or she keeps infusing knowledge into students' minds beyond their capacity of receiving and understanding. That may lead to a disastrous consequence- students are （两个动词啊~）more likely not to keep up with the teaching process teachers ever set and shift to blame themselves for not clever enough句子有点长，读起来有点拗口; what is worse, they may lose interest in study. So we have to admit as teachers, they have the responsibility to establish fine relationship with students and ofen get to know students' ideas about teaching through frequent talks so that students could benefit a lot from a suitable teaching plan.理由很好啊，推理也很好，就是个别句子需在再斟酌一下。

Also, apart from receiving knowledge , students still can get more valuable things from teachers when they get along well with each other. For one thing,我觉得要先说下主句再举例，直接举例有点突然。 my English teacher Mary, for instance, always pass such belief to us like that- we are asked to build confidence- one of the most essential qualities for only coward people withdraw in the face of difficulties, and in contrast, confident people face trouble more bravely and thus gain more chance to get success. This creed stays in my mind for a long time and guides me to meet challenges in my life and work frequently. For another thing, based on harmonious relationship with our teachers, we even regard each other as precious friends. Obviously, teachers are those who own more experiences than our peer friends. I, for instance, often call my teachers for helping me analyse problems I encounter觉得句子也是多谓语了; in most cases, I can handle the issue more smoothly due to a completely new version towards it. So I am remarkably lucky to have those who are not only teachers, also my intimate friends. It is no wonder an agreeable relationship between teachers and students works to benefit students a lot for their life outside school.&感觉这第 S8
感觉这段写的没有上一段好，理由和你该段开头的主旨句有点偏差。

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To sum up, given that harmonious relationship enables teachers to indoctrinate knowledge to students more effectively and students can get a myriad of valuable things such as confidence and help from teachers just like close friends,这句话有点长，读起来句子有点问题，主语总换，而且结构也不好，建议分成单句写。 I am convinced that it is more critical for teachers to build an agreeable interaction with students than just owning academic knowledge.

总的来说，你的作文写的很好，比我的好多了，词汇变换多，句子变化也多。但是有的时候长句容易出问题，所以建议适当的用长句，不要用太多，由于这个被扣分就不值得了。
以上是我个人愚见，水平有限，不对的地方忘见谅。

luke_003UID: 2660230

不好意思啊小狗，我竟然忘了评你的，真抱歉，现在补上，希望还来得级。
  Hardly could we deny that it is teachers' main responsibility to cultivate students to pursue their academic achievements. As a result, the importance of teachers' possessing professional knowledge is manifest. Nevertheless, I deem it is more significant for teachers to have the ability to build harmonious relationship with students than to just owning professional knowledge. My reasons are as follows. !（第一段很精彩，deem 和own用的太好了，学习~~）
h4 {8 M* s9 @! V( v% `3 z9 @, B- @ First of all, only through good communication and exchange with students could teachers can（can去掉） impart academic knowledge to them effectively. Nowadays, more and more people concern and emphasize the necessity for teachers to pursue the educational arts- how to make students absorb what they are taught with more initiative and enthusiasm.Obviously, thorough communication plays a positive effect in this process. Try to imagine, a teacher treats students in rather a rude and non-communicative way that he or she keeps infusing knowledge into students' minds beyond their capacity of receiving and understanding（这句很不错，但有点太冗长了）. That may lead to a disastrous consequence- students are more likely not to keep up with the teaching process teachers ever set and shift to blame themselves for not clever enough; what is worse, they may lose interest in study. So we have to admit as teachers, they have the responsibility to establish fine relationship with students and ofen get to know students' ideas about teaching through frequent talks so that students could benefit a lot from a suitable teaching plan.（文笔真的很好，觉的在能断句一下会更好）. X1 j6 Y0 S, [ / i9 {! Z* f( O0 j& j/ E' aAlso, apart from receiving knowledge , students still can get more valuable things from teachers when they get along well with each other. For one thing, my English teacher Mary, for instance, always pass such belief to us like that- we are asked to build confidence- one of the most essential qualities for only coward people withdraw in the face of difficulties, and in contrast, confident people face trouble more bravely and thus gain more chance to get success. This creed stays in my mind for a long time and guides me to meet challenges in my life and work frequently. For another thing, based on harmonious relationship with our teachers, we even regard each other as precious friends. Obviously, teachers are those who own more experiences than our peer friends. I, for instance, often call my teachers for helping me analyse problems I encounter; in most cases, I can handle the issue more smoothly due to a completely new version towards it. So I am remarkably lucky to have those who are not only teachers, also my intimate friends. It is no wonder an agreeable relationship between teachers and students works to benefit students a lot for their life outside school. 4 E# Y2 l1 A! i2 c/ _9 s+ d [) x6 B6 z% X% U To sum up, given that harmonious relationship enables teachers to indoctrinate knowledge to students more effectively and students can get a myriad of valuable things such as confidence and help from teachers just like close friends（好长好强的壮语从句，但是否太长了呢？）, I am convinced that it is more critical for teachers to build an agreeable interaction with students than just owning academic knowledge
非常不错，语言也地道，单词量丰富，应该会有很高的分数了，向你学习，不足的地方是，楼主在挥洒自如的时候，能否把句子在精简一些，这样真的是锦上添花~~~

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Many teachers assign homework to students every day. Do you think that daily homework is necessary for students? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

Hardly could we deny that it is teachers' main responsibility to cultivate students to pursue their academic achievements. And it

seems common for teachers to assign homework to students every day to guarantee the educational quality. As far as I am concerned, I deem it is necessary to do so and my reasons are as follows.

First of all, homework can be seen as a significant feedback for teachers to know the level of students' mastery of knowledge.As students, we often are required to accomplish homework as well as possible. In fact, we still have weakness in the system of course knowledge and thus the homework can work to reveal honestly what we are yet not good at in lessons. Therefore, teachers can get a full understanding of our drawbacks and then try to help us correct them more concisely. Take me for example. I am now prepared for the IBT examination;the fact is that I am very poor in listening section and this weakness exists in my homework paper. My IBT training teacher Mary get to know the situation through it and then teaches me how to make my schedule more properly so that more time would be left to specially make up for my listening. What is more important, she asks me to build confidence and emphasize only with more courage and confidence could we get access to success more probably. So I am really appreciate it for her instruction and I have made remarkable progress in my English listening. It turns out dramatically important to let teachers know students' mastery of lessons and in this sense, the significance of homework is manifest.

Also, homework can enable students to allocate their time after school more properly, avoiding just playing or sleeping all the time.We have to admit too much homework means an excessively heavy burden on students' shoulder beyong their capacity of endurance. However, it does not indicate no homework would definitely have positive effect on students. In fact, without homework, students would tend to kill the time aimlessly and meaninglessly. It is possible that they will choose to become a couch potato and watch TV all evening or surf the internet around with nothing of value to accomplish. So homework can help make students keep what they have learned in mind and allocate their time for study and play more scientifically. What is more, the stress of a certain amount of homework force students to become more efficient and then have a better performance on course at school. In this sense, barely could anyone deny the importance of homework.

To sum up, for one thing, homework works as feedback to let teachers know whether students have got disadvantages in understanding knowledge. For another thing, homework compels students to stick to what they have learned when after school, avoiding all-time playing or sleeping. So it is necessary for teachers to assign homework to students.

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小狗 9.9日作业
The prefessor casts doubt on the passage's assertion that three theories have been proposed to explain how birds navigate a long distance to reach a particular destination. He provides three reasons to disprove the arguments in the passage.

First of all, contrary to the sun theory about birds'  navigation in the passage, the professor mentions that although the sun plays a helpful  role in birds' migration, yet actually many species of birds can navigate at night without the help of the sun. So it is obivious that the sun theory is questionable. In addition, the professor refutes the star theory about the migration of birds by pointing out that only one species of birds konwn have the ability to use stars to guid their navigation, while other birds lack such capacity. So the professor uses evidence above to challenge the first argument of the passage.

Also, although it does work for landmarks to orient birds during migration as the passage cites, yet the prerequisite is that birds must ever make the journey before and get familiar with these landmarks. According to the professor, birds can also find way home even if they are located in a strange area without the help of previous landmarks. So such evidence disproves the second argument of the passage.

Finally, in the lecture, the professor deems the  possible internal magnetic compass can merely distinguish directions of North and South, by sensing the earth's magnetic field. And in fact, this equipment proves useless because birds' home always exist in complex terrains, even human navigation equipment could not find access to birds' destination. So the professor thinks  it is unconvincible to conclude that birds can guided by the earth's magnetic field.

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不好意思，我老是评的很晚，因为要做实验，很是烦呢，不过你放心，我肯定会改的。见谅。Many teachers assign homework to students every day. Do you think that daily homework is necessary for students? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

Hardly could we deny that it is teachers' main responsibility to cultivate students to pursue their academic achievements. And it seems common for teachers to assign homework to students every day to guarantee the educational quality. As far as I am concerned, I deem it is necessary to do so and my reasons are as follows。第一句的倒装用的真得很好，我要学习一下了。

First of all, homework can be seen as a significant feedback for teachers to know the level of students' mastery of knowledge.As students, we often are required to accomplish homework as well as possible. In fact, we still have weakness in the system of course knowledge and thus the homework can work to reveal honestly what we are yet not good at in lessons. Therefore, teachers can get a full understanding of our drawbacks and then try to help us correct them more concisely. Take me for example. I am now prepared for the IBT examination;the fact is that I am very poor in listening section and this weakness exists in my homework paper. My IBT training teacher Mary get(gets) to know the situation through it and then teaches me how to make my schedule more properly so that more time would be left to specially make up for my listening. What is more important, she asks me to build confidence and emphasize only with more courage and confidence could we get access to success more probably. So I am really appreciate it for her instruction and I have made remarkable progress in my English listening. It turns out dramatically important to let teachers know students' mastery of lessons and in this sense, the significance of homework is manifest.very good!真羡慕~~

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Also, homework can enable students to allocate their time after school more properly, avoiding just playing or sleeping all the time.We have to admit too much homework means an excessively heavy burden on students' shoulder beyong their capacity of endurance（真的很好）. However, it does not indicate no homework would definitely have positive effect on students. In fact, without homework, students would tend to kill the time aimlessly and meaninglessly. It is possible that they will choose to become a couch potato and watch TV all evening or surf the internet around with nothing of value to accomplish. So homework can help make students keep what they have learned in mind and allocate their time for study and play more scientifically. What is more, the stress of a certain amount of homework force（forces） students to become more efficient and then have a better performance on course at school. In this sense, barely could anyone deny the importance of homework.

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To sum up, for one thing, homework works as feedback to let teachers know whether students have got disadvantages in understanding knowledge. For another thing, homework compels students to stick to what they have learned when(when 不要吧) after school, avoiding all-time playing or sleeping. So it is necessary for teachers to assign homework to students

你的写作功力太强了，作文应该能得满分，是不是考过GRE了呢，要好好向你学习~~

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1 three reasons to disprove the arguments in the passage  ---这里作者不是给了三个理由，而是从三个方面一一驳斥了作者的论点。

2the professor mentions that although the sun plays a helpful  role in birds' migration----汗，偶怎么没有找到教授说过这句话阿。他貌似没有肯定过太阳的作用。

3教授之所以驳斥了stars compass，给出的关键理由是：只有一种鸟被“明确证实了”拥有这种能力，其他鸟还没有被明确证实过可以利用star。“while other birds lack such capacity. ”这本身和事实稍微有点出入。

4 第三段Finally后面，理解错误。那教授貌似没有否定鸟可以定为南北，他只是说“尽管鸟可以定为南北极，也不足以让他们精确找到位置。”

辛苦了，其实比我做得好^^;

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The prefessorcasts doubt on the passage's assertion that three theories have been proposedto explain how birds navigate a long distance to reach a particulardestination. He provides three reasons to disprove the arguments in thepassage.
First of all, contrary to the sun theoryabout birds'  navigation in the passage, the professor mentions thatalthough the sun plays a helpful  role in birds' migration, yetactually many species of birds can navigate at night without the help of thesun（我觉得晚上飞行这个论点应该说一下的）. So it is obivious that the suntheory is questionable. In addition, the professor refutes the star theoryabout the migration of birds by pointing out that only one species of birds konwn have the ability to use stars to guid their navigation, while other birds lack suchcapacity. So the professor uses evidence above to challenge the first argumentof the passage.
Also, although it does work for landmarksto orient birds during migration as the passage cites, yet the prerequisite(你应该考过G了吧) is that birds must evermake the journey before and get familiar with these landmarks. According to theprofessor, birds can also find way home even if they are located(是located么，我怎么记得是change后strange了) in a strange area without the help of previous landmarks. So suchevidence disproves the second argument of the passage.
Finally, in the lecture, the professordeems the possible internal magnetic compass can merely distinguishdirections of North and South, by sensing the earth's magnetic field. And infact, this equipment proves useless because birds' home always exist in complexterrains, even human navigation equipment could not find access to birds'destination. So the professor thinks  it is unconvincible(unconvincing)to conclude that birds can guided by the earth's magnetic field.

恩，很好的啊，没啥问题，verygood。 注意拼写，然后最后最好总结一下，

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是否要在繁忙时间对繁忙路段课税
It is almost every driver's experience that they have to endure up to three or even more hours to wait in a traffic jam during rush hour, especially on rush-roads. It is no wonder that government should take powerful measures to improve transportation conditions. However, I don't think it is a good idea to charge tolls for rush-hour and rush-roads. My reasons are as follows.

First of all, it is unnecessary that drivers on rush-roads during rush-hours should pay the charge and government can come up with more feasible projects to handle transportation problems. As we all know, every citizen has equal rights to make use of and enjoy the convenience brought by public facilities including roads, of course. That is because actually we citizens including drivers pay taxes and part of these taxes could be used for ameliorating transportation conditions. So it makes no sense to require drivers to pay extra expenses for rush-roads. In addition, just simply charging tolls for rush-roads during rush-hours would be seen as a negative measure to deal with traffic problem for it deprives drivers of rights and needs to arrive at the downtown via rush-roads. Instead, government should shift more energy and money to handle the issue positively; establishing more highways, opening underground channels or encouraging more people to choose buses or subways as transportation tools, for instance. So such rule as charging drivers for rush-roads and rush-hours should not be set and enforced.

Also, the negative effect of enforcing the rule is manifest, which could not be overlooked. It is well known to us that rush-roads always are connected to the downtown. The downtown can be seen the most prosperous, crowded and busy area, where stand countless shopping halls, companies, restaurants, hotels. What if the passages to this area are blocked, to some extent, by charging tolls for rush-hours and rush-roads? Maybe the number of people for entertainment would be declined greatly for the extra transportation output; office clerks might complain for the increased driving cost and companies might decide to move to a new area out of the downtown. All of these assumptions would lead the downtown area to a state of great depression. So this rule should not be made for the possible negative effects.

To sum up, for one thing, it is unfair that drivers should be charged for extra expenses for each citizens has equal rights to enjoy the convenience brought by roads. For another thing, we must take into account the possible disadvantages if the rule is made. So government should not set such rule and instead have to handle transportation issues more positively.

luke_003UID: 2660230

又改到你的作文了，真是有缘，说真的，从你文章里能学到很多东西呢。
It is almost every driver's experience that they have to endure up to three or even more hours to wait in a traffic jam during rush hour, especially on rush-roads. It is no wonder that government should take powerful measures to improve transportation conditions. However, I don't think it is a good idea to charge tolls for rush-hour and rush-roads. My reasons are as follows.很喜欢你的写作风格，不过我们的观点总是相反，呵呵。
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, z7 S& @. o& p- x' B- }First of all, it is unnecessary that drivers on rush-roads during rush-hours should pay the charge and government can come up with more feasible projects to handle transportation problems. As we all know, every citizen has equal rights to make use of and enjoy the convenience brought by public facilities including roads, of course. That is because actually（这几个词在一起有点拥挤的感觉，能分开些吧） we citizens including drivers pay taxes and part of these taxes could be used for ameliorating transportation conditions. So it makes no sense to require drivers to pay extra expenses for rush-roads. In addition, just simply charging tolls for rush-roads during rush-hours would be seen as a negative measure to deal with traffic problem ，for it deprives drivers of rights and （后面这句与前面不太搭，感觉少点什么）needs to arrive at the downtown via rush-roads. Instead, government should shift more energy and money to handle the issue positively; establishing more highways, opening underground channels or encouraging more people to choose buses or subways as transportation tools, for instance. So such rule as charging drivers for rush-roads and rush-hours should not be set and enforced（个人感觉这句不要也行）.  h, V6 _# L" S3 B8 k, N5 Y- \) \
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Also, the negative effect of enforcing the rule is manifest, which could not be overlooked. It is well known to us that rush-roads always are connected to the downtown. The downtown can be seen the most prosperous, crowded and busy area, where stand countless shopping halls, companies, restaurants, hotels. What if the passages to this area are blocked, to some extent, by charging tolls for rush-hours and rush-roads? Maybe the number of people for entertainment would be declined greatly for the extra transportation output; office clerks might complain for the increased driving cost and companies might decide to move to a new area out of the downtown. All of these assumptions would lead the downtown area to a state of great depression. So this rule should not be made for the possible negative effects.
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0 |. u% M- e: Z; }4 ?/ V" f) MTo sum up, for one thing, it is unfair that drivers should be charged for extra expenses， for each citizens(citizen) has equal rights to enjoy the convenience brought by roads（这里强调citizen也有义务更好一点）. For another thing, we must take into account the possible disadvantages if the rule is made. So government should not set such rule and instead have to handle transportation issues more positively.
  侬写作功底真的很powful，感觉内容很丰富，基本没什么问题了，对付托福足够。对长句的驾奴是你的强项，但也是容易出错的地方，什么前后一致，顾此失彼，都有可能，不过你应该能克服。