我的作文

annskyaUID: 181142

偶查了几次字典>_<
偶学习的对象
如：sb has equal rights to make use of sth
enjoy the convenience brought by....
it makes no secse of ...

整体结构上来讲，不知道是不是中间没有空行，我觉得有点不够精炼。
内容还蛮不错。

annskyaUID: 181142

另外为什么要明天给我评呢？我前天写错了题目，昨天9.10的题目没有写错，在3楼啊。

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楼上那位说的“明天”是指今天9.11

gy0510150556UID: 2546647

The passage mentions stripes offer zebras protection from predators in three different ways. However, the professor in the lecture does not agree that these three theories could accout for the funtion of zebras' stripes.

First of all, although the vertical stripes on zebras create optical illusion and predators may falsely judge the distance between them and the zebras  seems smaller, yet these stripes prove useless in actual attacks by predators. That is because predators such as lions tend to keep chasing zebras and manage to capture them when zebras become exhausted, not just start attack on first sight . So this evidence questions the first argument of the passage.

Also, the author asserts that all the zebras keep together as a large group,the pattern of each zebra's stripes blend together and creat a confusing image to predators like a large. moving, striped mass. However, according to the lecture, it does not make predators become confused because lions or othes predators do not merely use their eyes to spot preys ; instead, they often also use smell to locate zebras. So the analysis above criticize the second assertion of the passage.

Finally, contrary to the belief that zebras often stay in a place with tall grass and then generate a perfect camouflage to protect them from predators, as mentioned in the passage, the professor points out zebras, in fact, tend to stand out on the open ground, which can spot predators easily. Once they find predators, they will run fast and then avoid the attack by predators. So this fact challenges the third argument of the passage.

ly8768UID: 2452066

63# gy0510150556

The passage mentions stripes offer zebras protection from predators in three different ways. However, the professor in the lecture does not agree that these three theories could accout(account) for the fuction(function) of zebras' stripes.

First of all, although the vertical stripes on zebras create optical illusion and predators may falsely judge the distance between them and the zebras seems smaller, yet these stripes prove useless in actual attacks by predators. That is because predators such as lions tend to keep chasing zebras and manage to capture them when zebras become exhausted, not just start attack on first sight. So this evidence questions the first argument of the passage.

Also, the author asserts that all the zebras keep together as a large group, the pattern of each zebra's stripes blend together and creat(creates) a confusing image to predators like a large. moving, striped mass. However, according to the lecture, it does not make predators become confused because lions or othes(others) predators do not merely use their eyes to spot preys ; instead, they often also use smell to locate zebras. So the analysis above criticizes the second assertion of the passage.

Finally, contrary to the belief that zebras often stay in a place with tall grass and then generate a perfect camouflage to protect them from predators, as mentioned in the passage, the professor points out zebras, in fact, tend to stand out on the open ground, which can spot predators easily. Once they find predators, they will run fast and then avoid the attack by predators. So this fact challenges the third argument of the passage.

总体来说都不错，可是错别字实在是太多了，影响分数啊

luke_003UID: 2660230

this evidence questions the first argument of the passage.4 L+ m/ V) T9 A7 o" T
the analysis above criticizes the second assertion of the passage.; N+ k$ I1 Q) v" T/ O9 s  t
this fact challenges the third argument of the passage.
受用了，我要借鉴过来~~~

gy0510150556UID: 2546647

现在这个年代，一个人想一辈子呆在一个单位工作是不可能的，是不现实的。你是否同意这个观点？
Hardly could we deny that most people long for a stable job with a relatively high salary. However, I deem it is impractical for us to settle down to a job all of life and my reasons are as follows.

First of all, repeating what we are familiar with in jobs all day will exhaust our aggressiveness; instead, we should risk trying something new as breakthroughs in jobs. As we all know, if we feel too comfortable in a familiar environment, we will go lazy and lack of a sense of crisis. Obviously, the absence of aggressiveness will make us unconscious of the imminent crisis and get eliminated passively. Luckily, most people become ware of this point and try to make appropriate changes. For instance, I feel bored with follow similar work schedule almost every weekday and it seems that such repetition leads me to a state of stalemate- no more progress ever to make. So I decide to go abroad for further study in my realm and choose big business companies for my internship. In this manner, I can get a higher position to restart my career and find a better job. So staying in a familiar job environment will make people lose sense of crisis and it is a better idea to try something new, including a new job or a further study, to get breakthroughs.

Also, in modern life, more and more young people choose to create business and they just regard employee experiences as a precious opportunity of learning. It is truth that job markets, nowadays, are teeming with countless graduates. Compared with the limited amount of jobs available, the population of graduates is too much. Considering the fierce competition of job markets, many young people start their own undertaking. In addition, these young people are likely to get a part-time or full-time job in a related company and learn how to exert management strategies, the ways to build great interpersonal relationship and establish cooperation with clients. So once they get familiar with the operation process of a company, they will quite the old work and become self-employed. After all, young people have a bigger ratio of success with
the advantage of ages and spirits of unyielding. So, today more and more people are less likely to settle down to a job all life and instead, prefer creating their own business.

To sum up, it is impossible for people to settle down to a job throughout life. For one thing, people are more aware that repetition in a job will exhaust their aggressiveness and instead, they would rather try new things; for another thing, more and more people prefer to start their own business today.

luke_003UID: 2660230

Hardly could we deny that most people long for a stable job with a relatively high salary. However, I deem it is impractical for us to settle down to a job all of life and my reasons are as follows.开头简洁清爽！. D+ n0 s* S# J
First of all, repeating what we are familiar with in jobs all day will exhaust our aggressiveness; instead, we should risk trying something new as breakthroughs in jobs. As we all know, if we feel too comfortable in a familiar environment, we will go lazy and lack of a sense of crisis. Obviously, the absence of aggressiveness will make us unconscious of the imminent crisis and get eliminated（get eliminated，不才，没看懂是啥意思） passively. Luckily, most people become ware（aware） of this point and try to make appropriate changes. For instance, I feel bored with follow(following) similar work schedule almost every weekday and it seems that such repetition leads me to a state of stalemate（很棒的词）- no more progress ever to make. So I decide to go abroad for further study in my realm and choose big business companies for my internship. In this manner, I can get a higher position to restart my career and find a better job. So staying in a familiar job environment will make people lose sense of crisis and it is a better idea to try something new, including a new job or a further study, to get breakthroughs.0 Z& b& F5 ]+ B% _% x/ k7 Q
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Also, in modern life, more and more young people choose to create business and they just regard employee experiences as a precious opportunity of learning. It is truth that job markets, nowadays, are teeming with countless graduates. Compared with the limited amount of jobs available, the population of graduates is too much. （写的很好啊，学习）Considering the fierce competition of job markets, many young people start their own undertaking. In addition, these young people are likely to get a part-time or full-time job in a related company and learn how to exert management strategies, the ways to build great interpersonal relationship and establish cooperation with clients. So once they get familiar with the operation process of a company, they will quite the old work and become self-employed. After all, young people have a bigger ratio of success with the advantage of ages and spirits of unyielding. So, today more and more people are less likely to settle down to a job all life and instead, prefer creating their own business.
To sum up, it is impossible for people to settle down to a job throughout life. For one thing, people are more aware that repetition in a job will exhaust their aggressiveness and instead, they would rather try new things; for another thing, more and more people prefer to start(starting) their own business today.
很不错，遣词造句很地道。考过GRE就是不一样，有个别小错误，不过很容易改正。学习~~

ly8768UID: 2452066

66# gy0510150556

Hardly could we deny that most people (are) long for a stable job with a relatively high salary. However, I deem it is impractical for us to settle down to(是这样用吗) a job all of life and my reasons are as follows.

First of all, repeating what we are familiar with in jobs all day will exhaust our aggressiveness; instead, we should risk trying something new as breakthroughs in jobs. As we all know, if we feel too comfortable in a familiar environment, we will go lazy and lack of a sense of crisis. Obviously, the absence of aggressiveness will make us unconscious of the imminent crisis and get eliminated passively. Luckily, most people become ware(aware) of this point and try to make appropriate changes. For instance, I feel bored with follow similar work schedule almost every weekday and it seems that such repetition leads me to a state of stalemate- no more progress ever to make. So I decide to go abroad for further study in my realm and choose big business companies for my internship. In this manner, I can get a higher position to restart my career and find a better job. So staying in a familiar job environment will make people lose sense of crisis and it is a better idea to try something new, including a new job or a further study, to get breakthroughs.

作文题目是待在一个公司是否现实而不是是否有好处

Also, in modern life, more and more young people choose to create business and they just regard employee experiences as a precious opportunity of learning. It is truth that job markets, nowadays, are teeming with countless graduates. Compared with the limited amount of jobs available, the population of graduates is too much. Considering the fierce competition of job markets, many young people start their own undertaking. In addition, these young people are likely to get a part-time or full-time job in a related company and learn how to exert management strategies, the ways to build great interpersonal relationship and establish cooperation with clients. So once they get familiar with the operation process of a company, they will quite the old work and become self-employed. After all, young people have a bigger ratio of success with the advantage of ages and spirits of unyielding. So, today more and more people are less likely to settle down to a job all life and instead, prefer creating their own business.

To sum up, it is impossible for people to settle down to a job throughout life. For one thing, people are more aware that repetition in a job will exhaust their aggressiveness and instead, they would rather try new things; for another thing, more and more people prefer to start their own business today.

先不修改文章的语法了。感觉你对文章的题目理解有偏差，两个分论点都感觉像是说不在一个公司的好处。第二点还好，结尾提了一下中心句。但这样还是偏题了