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赶紧改哦~那几道A你看了么~大部分都是科学考古类的~再加上次彗星那道~
emily_feifei 发表于 2009-8-16 20:31

都没看呢，囧，看不进去。你有哪几个觉得写不出三个点的？彗星的那个还行吧，现在觉得没什么问题啊

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（当时这题没人给我看过~你先帮我看看这篇吧~很早的~我最近找了一些资料~然后又改了好久）
144"It is the artist, not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value."
*a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.

提纲：
1.        什么是艺术（艺术作品，艺术创作，艺术欣赏的结合）。艺术的价值，并非市场价值，而是因各人的欣赏眼光不同而不同。
2.        既然各人眼光不同，为何一些作品恒久永流传，另一些fade了？
3.        艺术家的作品分两种：a. 可被当代接受的（William Shakespeare梅兰芳，莫奈Claude Monet）
4.        b. 未被当代接受的（Rembrandt）。对前者，审视的主体主要是人民大众，批评家的作用较小；对后者，批评家的作用不可忽视。

Words: 732（真要考这题估计都打不完~）
Retrospect to the course of history, we feel grateful to find that there exists abundant works of art which are of great value to society. However, we seldom think of the critics who also play an indispensable role in the process of creating the value of the works of arts.
In the first place, we should identify what exactly the art is? Can the artistic creation be regarded as art? Or can one single work of art be reckoned as art? Neither. In my point of view, it is only when the artistic work combined with the process of creation, and the appreciation of the it together can we call it “art”. But when it comes to the value of the art, can we just simply equate the market price with the value of the work of art? Actually, market price is relevant to the value of art, but it cannot stand for the true value of art. Hypothetically, if a painting was believed to be the work of Da Vinci while several years later people discover that the painter is someone else, then its market price would slum from hundreds of thousands of dollars to a dozen dollars. However, to the real aesthetic critics, they would probably hold that someone who was equally as excellent as Da Vinci at that time but was ignored. This painting was still invaluable to the ones created by Da Vinci. Here, we may understand that the true value of art cannot be converted to the market price. The true value rests in everyone’s own taste. What is meant by this is that a highly spoken work of art by one could mean garbage to another.

With regard to what has mentioned above we seems to be confused again. Why did parts of the numerous works pass from generations to generations and become imperishable while others faded in the long course of history?

To answer this question, I would first give a classification of the works of art. The first type I would label it with "Contemporarily acceptable", which means that those works win their popularities in their own era. Examine many of such works, like the plays of William Shakespeare, the paintings of Claud Monet, and so forth, share something in common, which is that they win the acknowledgment of the folk mass in their time fortunately. Such works are mostly likely to be handed down to descendents. In this aspect, the artists as well as the fold mass work together to give ever-lasting value to society. MeiLanfang (the Chinese Peking Opera artist) who was not only adored by Chinese people, but also brought such artistic form to the outside world is a vivid example. Despite some critique, it was MeiLanfang who managed to astound foreigners with Chinese culture. Just as what I have believed before, it is very possible that those works which are accepted by their era would have a better chance to be remembered eternally whether they were criticized or not at that time.

On the contrary, another type of the works is "Contemporarily unacceptable". Unlike the former type, works belonged to this type are rather unfortunately to be harshly criticized or even forgotten by their contemporaries. Such consequence can be ascribed to several reasons; but among them one is standing out that it is because of the difficulty to comprehend such works at that time that make these works to be reckoned as unacceptable. I would raise Rembrandt, one of the greatest painters in 17th centuries, for instance. It was not until more than one hundred years after his death that Holland was surprisingly to discover that many famous painters regarded themselves as enthusiasts of Rembrandt and many critics spoke highly of his works. Sadly, the painter was once laughed at by the whole country and buried as a beggar. From my point of view, such works need subsequent critics to excavate their value; otherwise those gorgeous works would suffer permanently forgotten fate.

The value of art has little to do with the market price; instead, it rests on everyone’s own taste. If, fortunately, accepted by the folk mass, it is very likely that they would give perpetual value to society. If not, on no account should we afford to neglect the crucial role critic plays in the field for the reason that they have the ability to discover the value.

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当时这题没人给我看过~你先帮我看看这篇吧~很早的~我最近找了一些资料~然后又改了好久）
144"It is the artist, not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value."
*a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.

提纲：
1.        什么是艺术（艺术作品，艺术创作，艺术欣赏的结合）。艺术的价值，并非市场价值，而是因各人的欣赏眼光不同而不同。
2.        既然各人眼光不同，为何一些作品恒久永流传，另一些fade了？
3.        艺术家的作品分两种：a. 可被当代接受的（William Shakespeare梅兰芳，莫奈Claude Monet）
4.        b. 未被当代接受的（Rembrandt）。对前者，审视的主体主要是人民大众，批评家的作用较小；对后者，批评家的作用不可忽视。

Words: 732（真要考这题估计都打不完~）
Retrospect to the course of history, we feel grateful to find that there exists abundant works of art which are of great value to society. However, we seldom think of the critics who also play an indispensable role in the process of creating the value of the works of arts.
个人还是不喜欢这种开头，娓娓道来不适合AW，虽然有些范文是这样，但是你考场上肯定没这么淡定吧？那后面可能会和前面不一样。

In the first place, we should identify what exactly the art is? Can the artistic creation be regarded as art? Or can one single work of art be reckoned as art? Neither. In my point of view, it is only when the artistic work combined with the process of creation, and the appreciation of the it together can we call it “art”. But when it comes to the value of the art, can we just simply equate the market price with the value of the work of art? Actually, market price is relevant to the value of art, but it cannot stand for the true value of art. Hypothetically, if a painting was believed to be the work of Da Vinci while several years later people discover that the painter is someone else, then its market price would slum from hundreds of thousands of dollars to a dozen dollars. However, to the real aesthetic critics, they would probably hold that someone who was equally as excellent as Da Vinci at that time but was ignored. This painting was still invaluable to the ones created by Da Vinci. Here, we may understand that the true value of art cannot be converted to the market price. The true value rests in everyone’s own taste. What is meant by this is that a highly spoken work of art by one could mean garbage to another.
这个贬值论有点想法，虽然我不同意，但是写起来也算个亮点。

With regard to what has mentioned above we seems to be confused again. Why did parts of the numerous works pass from generations to generations and become imperishable while others faded in the long course of history?
很好的过度段

To answer this question, I would first give a classification of the works of art. The first type I would label it with "Contemporarily acceptable", which means that those works win their popularities in their own era. Examine many of such works, like the plays of William Shakespeare, the paintings of Claud Monet, and so forth, share something in common, which is that they win the acknowledgment of the folk mass in their time fortunately. Such works are mostly likely to be handed down to descendents. In this aspect, the artists as well as the fold mass work together to give ever-lasting value to society. MeiLanfang (the Chinese Peking Opera artist) who was not only adored by Chinese people, but also brought such artistic form to the outside world is a vivid example. Despite some critique, it was MeiLanfang who managed to astound foreigners with Chinese culture. Just as what I have believed before, it is very possible that those works which are accepted by their era would have a better chance to be remembered eternally whether they were criticized or not at that time.


On the contrary, another type of the works is "Contemporarily unacceptable". Unlike the former type, works belonged to this type are rather unfortunately to be harshly criticized or even forgotten by their contemporaries. Such consequence can be ascribed to several reasons; but among them one is standing out that it is because of the difficulty to comprehend such works at that time that make these works to be reckoned as unacceptable. I would raise Rembrandt, one of the greatest painters in 17th centuries, for instance. It was not until more than one hundred years after his death that Holland was surprisingly to discover that many famous painters regarded themselves as enthusiasts of Rembrandt and many critics spoke highly of his works. Sadly, the painter was once laughed at by the whole country and buried as a beggar. From my point of view, such works need subsequent critics to excavate their value; otherwise those gorgeous works would suffer permanently forgotten fate.

The value of art has little to do with the market price; instead, it rests on everyone’s own taste. If, fortunately, accepted by the folk mass, it is very likely that they would give perpetual value to society. If not, on no account should we afford to neglect the crucial role critic plays in the field for the reason that they have the ability to discover the value.


后面没仔细看了，不过也是后面才写道重点。前面都是背景和引子，考试的时候就省略吧？
我觉得语言已经定型了，一个是速度，一个是逻辑了。
祝你考试时保持清醒和灵感。

emily_feifeiUID: 2626151

我现在紧张啊紧张啊~早上都没睡好~睡觉时也在想万一抽到的题我没想法怎么办~

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那怎么开头？

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那怎么开头？
emily_feifei 发表于 2009-8-17 07:51

我们寝室昨天晚上玩游戏，累死了

还是像你以前的那样开头啊，引子不长但是恰到好处，最后一句话是Topic sentence

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我现在紧张啊紧张啊~早上都没睡好~睡觉时也在想万一抽到的题我没想法怎么办~
emily_feifei 发表于 2009-8-17 07:50

不会的，我觉得先写让步段，反正得写，写着写着就想了许多其它的了。要是那段最后不准备当让步的也很好改的啊，把那些for sure去掉就行可

emily_feifeiUID: 2626151

我们寝室昨天晚上玩游戏，累死了

还是像你以前的那样开头啊，引子不长但是恰到好处，最后一句话是Topic sentence
wk4a 发表于 2009-8-17 08:57

恰到好处的开头是讲缘分的~那才真需要灵感闪现呢~刚最后模了一次~感觉I写的贼垃圾~字数也不够~不想却写了560~确实写着写着能想到一些东西~
However, nevertheless, on the contrary,质量依旧是低劣的事实没法更改~！

emily_feifeiUID: 2626151

还有A33很成问题~我不会找~

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TOPIC: ISSUE16 - "Although many people think that the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life are entirely harmless, in fact, they actually prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals."
WORDS: 284
TIME: 00:50:00
DATE: 2009-8-16 15:53:16

1.
过奢侈生活的人不一定会weak-minded。
2.
正是因为有充足的物质保障，学习的更多更好。
3.
是否有strong will还要看精神上的锻炼。

In china, it is always take for granted that any rich family can seldom last its prosperity for three generations, for however much wealth can be by fops’ extravagance. Indeed, luxuries and convenience in life, if overly enjoyed, can be like sweet poison to weak people both physically and mentally. But as far as I am concerned, what really determines people’s characters is the way they deal with what life has brought.

Race cares, villas and untold club privileges, they are all so amazing and amusing for people to enjoy. But these comforts in life are often considered, at their best, to be little helpful for a boy to grow to be a man, and a man to be a real man, for the sloth and avarice they might cause. Sometimes a luxurious living style can even ruin people who are too busy enjoying superficial happiness to keep in minds what really counts. However, such a situation is not necessary. Buffet, one of the richest men in the world and aged more than sixty, is still working happily in many fields like stocks, real estate and high-tech investment. He can easy buy whatever he wants, or go to any places of interest as journey destinations anytime, but he does not give up working at an old age. He is an excellent example of people who have strong will and brilliant minds while enjoying comfortable life at the same time. On the contrary, even without being able to enjoy abundant material life, some people failed to become iron-willed and unbending. That are those who beg in streets and steal during nights.

Actually, thanks to these sufficient material supports, many great people spare less attention on how subsistence needs but their own interests and higher spiritual ambition. Everyone’s time and effort, however significant, is limited. Properly taking advantage of conveniences in life can release pressure and help regain vigor. What is more, such kind of a life usually means education superiority since tuition for many top private universities. Ieoh Ming Pei, one of the world best architects, whose father participated in the foundation of China bank, was born in a rather wealthy family in early the twenties century. He spent most of his time in Suzhou classic garden during his boyhood. For him, he was the empire of the gorgeous and enriched garden. Convenient early life does not make him want to stop enjoy this luxury forever but activated him to devote his fervent to architecture. At the age of eighteen, Pei went to MIT and Harvard University for further study. Later on, he started to gain his fame for marvelous works he designed. In this case, it is the luxury that leads him to the path to success.

Whether one could increasingly become strong and independent has little to do with available material supply, since various outcomes have be witnessed. What really cultivates him or her into a person with strong character is the valuable spiritual suffering encountered in life. To steel a person, practice on volition is indispensable. In military training, for instance, instructors seldom deprive solders' foods, clothes or any other living basis. In stead, hey demand these young solders to march for long hours, to practice actions countless times and even coerce them not to sleep for several days to develop their spiritual endurance. People are actually quite aware of that spirit power does not come from or deprived of by what they eat and wear but what difficult they come thorough.

Family wealth which can not be passed to the next generation is ruined by people who used to own it instead of having cursed its owner. Efficiently and carefully taking advantage of convenient life, more joy and success could come.

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33.The following report appeared in an archaeology journal.
"The discovery of distinctively shaped ceramic pots at various prehistoric sites scattered分散 over a wide area has led archaeologists to ask how the pots were spread. Some believe the pot makers migrated to the various sites and carried the pots along with them; others believe the pots were spread by trade and their makers remained in one place. Now, analysis of the bones of prehistoric human skeletons can settle the debate: high levels of a certain metallic element contained in various foods are strongly associated with people who migrated to a new place after childhood. Many of the bones found near the pots at a few sites showed high levels of the metallic element. Therefore, it must be that the pots were spread by migration, not trade."

1. no efficient conections are proved as the arguer does not offer information about whether bones contained such metallic element are found only at sites where pots are uncovered. if metallic element in bones is identified in a more widespread area than pots are located, the conection between bones and pots are invalid.
2. even bones is firmly conected with pots, they can still be traded to these sites rather than by imigration. Perhaps merchants use these pots as container to store food, which contains the metallic element and are sold with pots together. Thus, people could have bought them both.
3. manual workers who made these pots can also brought them to many other places for sale. They could be living in their original villeges but make a living at areas where pots are found today.

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恰到好处的开头是讲缘分的~那才真需要灵感闪现呢~刚最后模了一次~感觉I写的贼垃圾~字数也不够~不想却写了560~确实写着写着能想到一些东西~
However, nevertheless, on the contrary,质量依旧是低劣的事实没法更改 ...
emily_feifei 发表于 2009-8-17 09:58

施主勿需过于执着，但求能引进话题表明中心乃善哉。

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TOPIC: ARGUMENT190 - The following is a letter to the editor of the Glenville Gazette, a local newspaper.

"Over the past few years, the number of people who have purchased advance tickets for the Glenville Summer Concert series has declined, indicating lack of community support. Although the weather has been unpredictable in the past few years, this cannot be the reason for the decline in advance ticket purchases, because many people attended the concerts even in bad weather. Clearly, then, the reason for the decline is the choice of music, so the organizers of the concert should feature more modern music in the future and should be sure to include music composed by Richerts, whose recordings Glenville residents purchase more often than any other contemporary recordings. This strategy will undoubtedly increase advance ticket purchases and will increase attendance at the concerts."
WORDS: 307          TIME: 00:35:00（加快啊）  我也想啊，写起来没动力        DATE: 2009-8-16 15:53:17

In expectation to attract more audiences to Glenville Summer Concerts, modern music and works of Recherts are suggested to be brought in, based on the arguer's conjecture that the declined popularity of concerts is not due to weather conditions. Good intent as arguer possesses, the reasoning progress suffers serious fallacies which have significantly weakened the suggestion. （这开头很不错啊~）我固定用in expetation.... based on...你也弄一个呗

The arguer, at the beginning, fails to substantialte（substantiate） the premise that tickets purchase has declined and thus some strategies are needed to increase it. Advance ticket is not necessarily connected with the whole tickets sold. For people who what to enjoy Glenville Simmer Concert series can buy entrance tickets after they arrive the concert rather than buy them in advance. It is a reasonable possibility that though few advance tickets are sold at first, but most are sold out soon just when concerts are about to begin. Without providing actual number of attendance, it is not convincing to indicate that the support for community has declined.
（这段论证不错）
Even if there are indeed fewer people who go to the summer concert, possible reasons can not exclude weather condition. Though, according to arguer, many people attended the concerts in bad weather years ago, no evidence shows there are still so many people are willing to bear bad weathers. Since people in few years ago can be well prepared for bad weather like rainy or windy days by bring umbrellas with them or wear thicker overcoats, they are free to care less about weather conditions. However, as the arguer mentions, weather becomes hardly predictable. Even if people yearn to enjoy concerts, they have no idea what the weather might give them. Perhaps after one or two times of unexpected getting soaked experiences, people are afraid to feel embarrassed again.（生动嘎~） In this case, weather can still be a reason for the declined audiences.

To attract people to come back to concerts, trying to meet their taste（别扭~）为什么啊？迎合口味 is reasonable, but the arguer can not attribute the reason to choice music and focusing on Richerts's recordings can be absurd as not credible information can indicate people are fond of this musician's work. Music styles are various,（vary） from Baroque style to Classic, from Romantic music to modern style. It is harsh to conclude that people must be fond of modern music. In addition, though people who buy Richerts's recordings more often than any other contemporary recordings for sure, it still remains unknown its percentage compared with classic recordings. Perhaps people buy much more other recordings composed buy classic musicians and among which, Rechert is not a popular one. As a result, the popularity of concerts is still not promising.
（还有一点我想到的是~即使这帮人喜欢现代音乐了~即使他们喜欢那人了~都买了CD了~有可能就不去听演唱会了~ 然后找找为啥人少了~有可能是concert质量不不行了~）
对！现代的可以看现场版，拿来和classic对比下。
Without investigating the actual attendance of the concerts, the whole strategy is not necessary but a wasting of time and money. To support the argument, more information about real reasons about the declining audiences (if there has been one) should be offered. The taste of potential andiences is also needed to found out to perfect the strategy.

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文章不发了~看看我的提纲~
TOPIC: ISSUE16 - "Although many people think that the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life are entirely harmless, in fact, they actually prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals."

1.        人类的本性是永不知足。不仅是物质上追求更美好的东西，精神上也需要得到满足。奢侈和便捷在一定程度上，已经成为了人们精神追求的一部分。
2.        奢侈便捷是相对的，如今习以为常生活也许在古时看来是遥不可及的梦想。正是因为人这种不断追求更好生活的本性让社会不断进步。
3.        Cynics对于这种生活的批判，巴不得我们回到自然原生态的社会。
4.        事实上，人们也许过于依赖便捷带来的好处了，但是这正是人们运用强大独立的思维，智慧驾驭事物的体现。

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我说怎么没看到你的A190，原来你发的是I的……我直接看了题号就做了。