快考试了，忘狠批作文~~~

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09.12.12

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology makes people's lives simpler in turn to make people's lives more complicated.

With the continuous rapid development of the technology, the human civilization has stridden a big step forward, from the former antique carriages symbolizing the royalty to the fashionable automobiles in the line of a traffic jam at present, from the previous oil lamp flicking faintly to the popular fluorescent lamp twinkling brightly in myriad families, we enjoy the tremendous convenience brought by the advance of technology as well as the astounding troubles in front of us. Should we just proclaim that technology makes people’s lives simpler in turn to make people’s lives more complicated? In such a dilemma, I am on the side of the above conclusion.
Firstly, whether you have realized or not, technology has deeply rooted into the daily life of modern society and is playing a dispensable role in the economic development of the whole world.
Particularly since the 21st century, the progresses in the aspects of computer network technology and electronic information technology have triggered the laptops and cell phones which once were considered the luxuries to flood into common households and become a integral part of simple civilians. Imagine that, without the mobile phones, how can we keep touch with our parents as ease at any time? Without the internet, how can we confabulate with our intimate transoceanic friends? Without the television of high definition, how can we enjoy a audio and visual feast from the fabulous Hollywood film? Therefore, we have to admit that technology has improved the life level and transferred our rigid living mode in coincidence with the highlighted slogan: “ The development of technology is the primary productive force”.
Secondly, everything has two sides, it is the multitude social and environmental problems accompanied with the tremendous convenience, pleasure and treasure brought by the high-tech advancement, which we have to face. For example, the evolution of atomic physical theory provided the scientists and politicians with the sophisticated nuclear technology as well as the nuclear catastrophe of Hiroshima and Nagasaki in Japan, it is the first time the man-kind have the ability to exterminate themselves; the development of chemistry made the chemists possessing the capability to transform the nature as well as causing thousands of innocent people wounded or died from the dangerous fireworks and powders; the advancement of biological technology enabled us to enjoy the right to create new lives which once was being monopolized by the god as well as leading to some ethical confusion. We cannot list all of the problems that challenge us.
In a word, the fact is that some troublesome problems come with the tremendous convenience in the process of technological development. We cannot allow the temporary benefits to blind our eyes, instead, we should make the best use of the highly advanced technology to solve the problems around us and live harmoniously with the nature,

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Does advice given by older people more valuable than from people at your age?
In today’s society it is common to see many youths pour their inner hearted botheration to their intimate friends mostly of the same age while keeping their mouth closed to their parents or other seniors. They always complaint “my parents don’t understand me, their thought are so conservative that I cannot take them as my outlet of feelings’’, words like this. Obviously, the generation gap has come into being. Whereas I stand on the converse side, I am in favor of the elders’ opinion rather than my peers’.
Firstly, the life of philosophy from the senior is their precious treasure which accumulated in their entire life. As they have lived through the juvenile stage and the autumn of their life, now they are basking in the sunset glow, they virtually have blazed a trail through all manner of obstacles. From their fighting and tumbling experience, they have the ability of predicting what may await us, bewilder us or block the way of us, they understand which benefits us most more than ourselves. Since they have undergone countless frustrations and tribulations in their lifelong journey, they point a bright smooth path for us with the hope that we can avoid fall into the same old trap again through learning from their past mistakes.
Secondly, the helpful advices of the senior are all from their inner heart. Since they are neither political swindlers nor unscrupulous merchants, besides, they have no conflict of interest with us, the hearty words that pass onto us actually are some kind of embodiment of the elders’ attention and cherishment to the next generation. Their benevolently offer to guide us through the labyrinth of life simply in the sincere expectation that we will live a healthy and happy life. So why not stop for a while and take a heart-to-heart conversation with the senior? You will certainly be astonished by sharing the feelings with them.
Thirdly, from the aspect of our peers, it may easily strike a chord between us since we share the same eave, they can feel the real empathy for us and what we have been through. By the frequent communication and the same experience, we find much more that can talk about. However honestly speaking, most of the adolescence behavior are out of impulsion, plus the potential conflict of interest may be provoked unconsciously, it is hard to tell the suggestion the peers provide with are all from their inner hearts, or partly out of the instinct reaction that always disturb our sensible judgments, or just for the maintenance of their own interest. Hence, I think you’d better ponder or considerate carefully before you decide to follow the peers’ opinion.
In a nutshell, Words can obliterating rewrite wrong, wrong can tear up the paint-painting, only road of life is not wrong path, it is not reversible, so we must carefully treated in every step of life. And in contrast with the peer, the senior are sure to be a fabulous catalyst for our ascending the mountain of success and appreciate the delightful scenery along the trip.

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Does advice given by older people more valuable than from people at your age?

我期末考试抽到的口语题呢~

感觉下面的几句可以再斟酌一下~
1、 the life of philosophy from the senior is their precious treasure which accumulated in their entire life
2、 they have lived through the juvenile stage and the autumn of their life
3、 the helpful advices of the senior are all from their inner heart.
4、 Since they are neither political swindlers nor unscrupulous merchants, besides, they have no conflict of interest with us。感觉这个原因用得怪怪的，并且since一般引导的原因有点自然而然、显而易见的意味在里面。

然后总的感觉下来是句子有点冗长、有些地方的修饰词有些刻意和生硬，
没有具体例子，感觉内容比较空。

你好~我还是菜鸟一只，刚准备起2月底的托福。
不过我要考的是一个大学自己弄的托福，老托福形式。
本来是打算3月底考的，如果2月那个考的不错就不考新托了。
所以现在还不太了解托福的写作的要求，看的这篇文章仅从个人角度来谈，我是英语翻译专业的，大二。

我想问一下，托福的作文是不是要站稳一个论点呢？比如这个话题，我口试的时候是，
分析older people。
1、他们有经验、眼光更广、看问题更全面。可以举例子：分析毕业的3大出路
2、他们的建议初衷都是为了我们好

但是
1、conservative，lack innovation，中庸求稳。举例子：adventurous life
2、不太了解我们想要的是什么生活，举例子：选择文理科的问题
3、有我们自己的判断力，想清楚自己想要的是什么

但是感觉写作文下来的话，我的这种组织形式好像离题了。。
求指导，谢谢~~

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1月11日改好了, 但不会传附件啊

juliagoUID: 2912431

只能贴了
1/11
In today’s society it is common to see many youths pour their inner hearted botheration to their intimate friends mostly of the same age while keeping their mouth closed to their parents or other seniors. They always complaint “my parents don’t understand me, their thought are so conservative that I cannot take them as my outlet of feelings（情绪的发泄途径？）, words like this. Obviously, the generation gap has come into being. Whereas I stand on the converse side, I am in favor of the elders’ opinion rather than my peers’.
Firstly, the life of philosophy from the senior is their precious treasure which accumulated in their entire life. As they have lived through the juvenile stage and the autumn of their life, now they are basking in the sunset glow（呵呵， 楼主好文采，膜拜!）, they virtually have blazed a trail through all manner of obstacles. From their fighting and tumbling experience, they have the ability of predicting what may await us, bewilder us or block （并列帝!）the way of us, they understand which benefits us most more than ourselves. Since they have undergone countless frustrations and tribulations in their lifelong journey, they point a bright smooth path for us with the hope that we can avoid fall into the same old trap again through learning from their past mistakes.)

Secondly, the helpful advices of the senior are all from their inner heart. Since they are neither political swindlers nor unscrupulous merchants, besides, they have no conflict of interest with us, the hearty words that pass onto us actually are some kind of embodiment of the elders’ attention and cherishment to the next generation. Their benevolently offer to guide us through the labyrinth of life simply in the sincere expectation that we will live a healthy and happy life. So why not stop for a while and take a heart-to-heart conversation with the senior? You will certainly be astonished by sharing the feelings with them.(写的很好, 但为什么没举例子呢?)

Thirdly, from the aspect of our peers, it may easily strike a chord between us since we share the same eave, they can feel the real empathy for us and what we have been through. By the frequent communication and the same experience, we find much more that can talk about. However honestly speaking, most of the adolescence behavior are out of impulsion, plus the potential conflict of interest may be provoked unconsciously, it is hard to tell the suggestion the peers provide with are all from their inner hearts, or partly out of the instinct reaction that always disturb our sensible judgments, or just for the maintenance of their own interest.楼主,你这观点不好懂啊！好像和上一个理由重复了一样 Hence, I think you’d better ponder or considerate carefully before you decide to follow the peers’ opinion

In a nutshell, Words can obliterating rewrite wrong, wrong can tear up the paint-painting, only road of life is not wrong path,（我不太懂这句话） it is not reversible, so we must carefully treated in every step of life. And in contrast with the peer, the senior are sure to be a fabulous catalyst for our ascending the mountain of success and appreciate the delightful scenery along the trip.
楼主, 看你的文章我感觉很受教, 你的文章修辞用的好极了!如果是限时写出来的话，简直是incredible！恩, 请原谅我水平有限, 没改出什么来

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谢谢你的建议，我第二专业是英语，很久没参加英语的大型考试了，22号一战IBT，也只打算战一次，是缺少例子了这篇文章，我现在最大的问题时拿到一个题目没话说，缺乏论据。打算多列点提纲，你举例的毕业三大出路是什么？IBT里面的作文都是A&D形式的，一到三个论点，只要能说清楚都可以

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2011.1.12.独立
09.11.8NA
" c, Q' M0 z/ Q/ ?# ~Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The teacher should be paid according to how well students perform

The teachers which undertake a great responsibility of education in our society are traditionally considered as the illuminant lamps that guide the adolescence to the bright track, but now more and more people argue that some teachers are "burn out" and don't take seriously of their work, and they propose that the teachers should be paid according to how well their students perform. I think it sounds not a good idea, and I am not in favor of that.
First of all, is there being an equal evaluation system to grade the students' perform? Absolutely not. And in the present examination-oriented educational background, the only criteria that schools or parents adopt most is the test scores. But does all the students' ability show on the thin paper? There are many aspects of capacity that the students can demonstrate beyond the test, such as social ability, communication ability and the ability to be a responsible team member.

More of that, the poor performance of the students cannot fully due to the duty of the teachers. If the students are not interested in learning some kind of subject, or they just cannot concentrate on their study because of the family conflicts at home, whatever the teachers have tried their best, for example, grade the students harshly, keep them in the class after school, the whole efforts of teachers properly will come out in a vain. Besides, the academic ability of every student is different from each other, some may be limited for some unknown reasons, we cannot impute all the responsibility to the teachers.
Most important of all, if the teachers are valued by the performance of the students which largely depend on the test marks, the teachers will be concentrated only on the average score of the whole class, and in turn to ignore some students who learn more slowly than their peer, that is certainly what we don't expect to see. What's more, if the teachers only motivated to increase the average score of the class, they will surely not keen on cultivating the students' ability, for example, the best educational mode of understand a key-point of a subject is encouraging the students to discuss in groups, but under the pressure of new standard of payment, the teachers will urge the students just focus on the text-book and the students may cram for the continuous examination miserably.
In a nutshell, I don't agree it is fair to pay the teachers according to how well the students perform.

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5# juliago
你的积分应该是可以发附件的啊，嗯，这篇文章我一开始不知道怎么写，百度了下论点，是缺少例子，想不出来了，我现在最大的问题就是看到个话题没话说，呵呵。谢谢你的修改，嗯，继续加油~~10 days left

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改好
欢迎回该～

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看完之后内牛满面，自愧不如啊～只敢提提建议额，谈不上批改了
The teachers which undertake a great responsibility of education in our society are traditionally considered as the illuminant lamps that guide the adolescence to the bright track, but now more and more people argue that some teachers are "burn out" and don't take seriously of their work, and they propose that the teachers should be paid according to how well their students perform. I think it sounds not a good idea, and I am not in favor of that.

First of all, is there being（去掉being） an equal evaluation system to grade the students' perform? (加It is )absolutely not. And in the present examination-oriented educational background, the only criteria that schools or parents adopt most is the test scores. But does all the students' ability show on the thin paper? There are many aspects of capacity that the students can demonstrate beyond the test, such as social ability, communication ability and the ability to be a responsible team member.

More of that, the poor performance of the students cannot fully due to the duty of the teachers. If the students are not interested in learning some kind of subject, or they just cannot concentrate on their study because of the family conflicts at home, whatever the teachers have tried their best, for example, grade the students harshly, keep them in the class after school, the whole efforts of teachers properly will come out in a vain. Besides, the academic ability of every student is different from each other, some may be limited for some unknown reasons, (加and )we cannot impute all the responsibility to the teachers.

Most important of all, if the teachers are valued by the performance of the students which largely depend on the test marks, the teachers will be concentrated only on the average score of the whole class, and in turn to ignore some students who learn more slowly than their peer, that is certainly what we don't expect to see. What's more, if the teachers only motivated to increase the average score of the class, they will surely not keen on cultivating the students' ability, for example, the best educational mode of understand a key-point of a subject is encouraging the students to discuss in groups, but under the pressure of new standard of payment, the teachers will urge the students just focus on the text-book and the students may cram for the continuous examination miserably.

In a nutshell, I don't agree it is fair to pay the teachers according to how well the students perform.

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2011年1月13日独立
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Is relate well to other people more important than studying hard at school?
思路
不同意
论点一
学校是学习知识的地方，学习不好，以后很难在社会上立足；

论点二
好好学习也有助于改善人际关系；

论点三
过分处理关系会影响学习，限制个人发展。
Nowadays more and more students complaint that :he/she did not get a decent score on some subjective subjects, such as composition or dissertation, just because they had not impressed the teachers well enough, and those students who were
excellent in the academy often flaunt their advantages in front of the teachers and got well along with them. As far as I am concerned, it is a puerile prejudice since they impute the unsatisfactory records to the relationship between teachers and students which has not been carefully managed, I definitely cast an affirmative vote on the argument that studying hard is more important than relating well to other people at school.
First of all, as an academic institution, the school has provided a desirable learning environment for the students to get splendid education. On the side of school, its primary responsibilities are imparting skills and knowledge to the students and constructing a favorable teaching mode of self-learning, self-thinking and self-solving some professional problems by the students, instead of telling the students how to making a well-rounded relationship among people. And on the side of students, now their priority at school are absorbing more and more essences and spirits of knowledge passed on by their teachers and learning how to cultivate a thinking mode of themselves. It is the transcripts records that the only criteria to judge if you can get admission to the dreamy university. So without outstanding academic manifestation, you will hardly be able to establish yourselves on the competitive society.
More of that, if students are able to display their strong-points in the academic field through hard working , this will in turn to bring them a harmonious relationship which is out of their expectation. For example, the students were strangers to each other before the enrollment of school, they are not familiar with each other about how they behave or act simply according to the appearance, and then some body take the notes carefully in classes, answer the teacher’s questions quickly and correctly, besides he/she mostly rely on themselves to solve some complicated puzzles and receive a decent record on every subject. Since he/she possesses such desirable merits which are worthy to be followed, many peers would ask for his/her help on some complex problems and would like to make friends with him/her. What’s more, through the friendly communication and by the way of helping and affecting each other, the teachers are astonished by the overall improvement on the academic performance of the class.
Last but not least, if the students put excessive energy on the relationship management, they will be bound to lag behind the other students on the study which is the main concern. For instance, the students who get an intimate accompany with peers of the same sex, they spend all day along, such kind of interaction may narrow their horizon and limit their thought modes; but if they keep a close touch with a classmate of the opposite sex, they can easily fall in love at school, which is too early for them since they are not mature enough to be burdened with such responsibility. All the above instances mentioned may play a negative influence on the growth of the students, let alone the study.
In a nutshell, for the sake of keep you steady hold on the society in the future, I sincerely highly suggest that the students should concentrate on the academic study and work as hard as you can rather than relating well to other people.

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加油～～

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6# 冬咚宝

三大毕业出路就是

就业、考研、出国~

juliagoUID: 2912431

抱歉， 今天有些事要办，所以现在才有时间来改你的作文
你写的很好哦， 词汇句式都很rich

Nowadays more and more （俗气了，用an increasingly number of ）students complaint that :he/she did not get a decent score on some subjective subjects, such as composition or dissertation, just because they had not impressed the teachers well enough, and those students who were excellent in the academy often flaunt their advantages in front of the teachers and got well along with them. As far as I am concerned, it is a puerile prejudice since they impute the unsatisfactory records to the relationship between teachers and students which has not been carefully managed, I definitely cast an affirmative vote on the argument that studying hard is more important than relating well to other people at school. 感觉你第一段写好长啊

First of all, as an academic institution, the school has provided a desirable learning environment for the students to get splendid(这词用的好大啊) education. On the side of school, its primary responsibilities are imparting skills and knowledge to the students and constructing a favorable teaching mode of self-learning, self-thinking and self-solving some professional problems by the students, instead of telling the students how to making（make） a well-rounded relationship among people. And on the side of students, now their priority at school are absorbing more and more essences and spirits of knowledge passed on by their teachers and learning how to cultivate a thinking mode of themselves. It is the transcripts records that the only criteria to judge if you can get admission to the dreamy university. So without outstanding academic manifestation, you will hardly be able to establish yourselves on the competitive society.怎么不举例？不过句式变化蛮多的

More of that, if students are able to display their strong-points in the academic field through hard working , this will in turn to bring them a harmonious relationship which is out of their expectation. For example, the students were strangers to each other before the enrollment of school, they are not familiar with each other about how they behave or act simply according to the appearance, and then somebody take the notes carefully in classes, answer the teacher’s questions quickly and correctly, besides he/she mostly rely on themselves to solve some complicated puzzles and receive a decent record on every subject. Since he/she possesses such desirable merits which are worthy to be followed, many peers would ask for his/her help on some complex problems and would like to make friends with him/her. What’s more, through the friendly communication and by the way of helping and affecting each other, the teachers are astonished by the overall improvement on the academic performance of the class（这句话多余啊）.'

Last but not least, if the students put excessive energy on the relationship management, they will be bound to lag behind the other students on the study which is the main concern. For instance, the students who get an intimate accompany with peers of the same sex, they spend all day along, such kind of interaction may narrow their horizon and limit their thought modes; but if they keep a close touch with a classmate of the opposite sex, they can easily fall in love at school, which is too early for them since they are not mature enough to be burdened with such responsibility. All the above instances mentioned may play a negative influence on the growth of the students, let alone the study（这段很有说服力哦）.

In a nutshell, for the sake of keep you steady hold on（hold on 不是坚持住的意思吗？感觉不适合） the society in the future, I sincerely highly suggest that the students should concentrate on the academic study and work as hard as you can rather than relating well to other people.