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128 110115NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The main role of the university professor is to educate students rather than to do research.


When you ask a professor about his or her working condition, he or she will probably tell you that they are busy ,doing their own programms or eraning money. As there are an increasing number of professors who devote themselves more to their own work than to students, I think it’s necessary to point out that the main role of university professor is to educate students .

When a person makes up his or her mind and choses the role of professor, it means that coming with him a duty to teach and educate. I have an example of the importance for an professor who fully devote himself to his Architectural Studio in ShenZhen and have no time for his undergraduators. The students ,without directors, only rely on themselves and their ability of design dropts greatly .Even though a professor only spent limited time with students , this period of time is the accumulation of handful of previous work.s.


In addition , education takes time. Professors have to spend time prepaing for tomorrow’s lecture and revising students
homework. Everyday a professor may has different work, so placing educational work at first place, which means doing preparations for lessons first and then reserch programms, might help him or her finish a day’s work on time
and tomorrow’s arrangement will not be disturbed.


What’s more, professors often offered some advantages by government as profits for their respecting characters, which is a part of social benefit. Therefore, when enjoying the benefit offered by the whole society, is it more likely for them to show thanks by teaching devotedly as they are grateful people.

To conclude, everyone has different roles in the society but one has limited time. Therefore, it’s important for us to learned the ability to pick out the important roles and change our characters according to occasions.
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发表于 2012-1-29 22:24:39 |只看该作者
Improving schools is the most important factor in successful development of country.


In this era of fast changing, many countyies are in the process of  developing. Do they emphasize on improving schools which is especislly useful for rise the educational condition—or do they try hard to improve socity’s ecnomic conditions which in some degree determines people’s life ? In my point of view, I disagree with the notion that improving school education is the
most important factor in successful development of country.


First of all, improving schools---the places for basic and fundermantal education---can only benefit society’s educational conditions. One thing we feel about in our daily life is that a country—like a huge machine that consists of different functions ----is never been determined by one factor but the co-work of many factors. As commonly ackonwledeged that the improvement of educational system enables schools to create more excellent graduates, but without the support of financial system, the educational system itself couldnot, in most case, afford new equipments and new staffs. In this case, improving schools in not the only factor which contribute to the success of a country----schools themselves have to depend on other factors to improve.

What’s more, different countries have different strategies to develop. Some countries, which accept the importance of education, are likely to put improving schools in the first place of development while some other countries, which think highly of the importance of econmy, may regard developing economy as the most important factor of the success development of a country.

In addition, improving schools often takes long time to get the final result, as it takes a period of time,sometimes longer than a whole generation,
for the graduates to step into the society and show their talent.Therefore, improving schools might not be the most important factors because we cannot wait this long for the final ending.


To conclude, there are various factors contribute to a society’s develepment, and a society’s success, like a man’ s success, is the ultimate result after a tough and long process. We can never say one specific factor will determine a society’ s future, it’s always the result of mutual working.

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发表于 2012-2-8 02:00:18 |只看该作者
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28 101031NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is often not a good thing for people to move to a new town or a new country because they will lose their friends.

Have you ever have the feeling that the whole world has been filled with lonelyness and no friend can talk to you or help you because they are thousands of miles away from you, or have you ever thought of beening left aside by your classmates because you are new to this school and cannot join your new classmates?Things goes like these when people moving to a new town or a new country, so I strongly agree that moving to a entirely new place might not be a good idea.

To begin with, lonelyness, known as an striking emotion which may hurt one’s heart and reduce one’s energy to fight, is likely to occure when moving from a familiar place to a new one.One thing happens in this situation is that when your neighbours and classmates are having fun together during the weekends , you can only stay at home watching YuTube videos-----because you are new here and have no friends. Just try to think,who wants to play with those people having no common interest with him,or with those knowing nothing about his life surroundings? No one does. Therefore, the new settlers, in most case, will feel lonely and helpless, especially when their original life styles are greatly different from the present life conditions.

What’s more, moving to a new place also means a long process of leaning ----not only to learn konwledge-----but every tiny thing around you. You have to find out where to port your cars, how to buy a train ticket, where to buy meat, and how to book milks. The notion----rebirth, equalling to relearning almost everything in every aspects of your life ,which is an enduring process -----can easily illustrate this point. .In this case, I think moving to a new city or a new town is not good at all.Even though there are some adantages, it’s not worth getting those benefits after a long time of enduring.

In addition, we have to find new jobs after arriving at a new place and we may confront with difficulties during working periods, bacause the education systems may be different in two distinguished cities.Despite jobs, you will still run into other diffculties if moving to strange places.

To conclude, I strongly disagree with the bahavior of moving to a new city or town. If we want to try some different life styles, we can have a travel and enjoy an exoit trip. If we want to stay close to our families, we can go there and live with them for a period of time. Moving to a new place can only bring you mass of problems to solve, and dozens of upset emotions to calm down.
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发表于 2012-2-9 10:34:13 |只看该作者
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210101203NA Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents should help children to do their work or encourage childrento do their work independently.

Parents ,as the most intimate people in our life , play an important role in our daily lives, in both daily routines and working field. However, as every individual has to be independent ,we have to finish our work and make schedules independently.  

To begin with, parents are easy to worry about the child's academic achievement, especially when children are learning a major that parents donot understand. Therefore, their behaviours of urging children to finish their work or even try to finish the works themselves, are in fact the release of their own anxiety, because they eager for their kids' better achievement but can only help nothing. In this case, some children, especially those lazy bones, are likely to make benefit from their parents' love and depend on their parent's help to finish their works, which definitely in contrast with parent's original motivation. Therefore, it's not sensible for parents to help their children dealing with their works.

In addition, parents should neither encourage their children to go on any academic precess as well. It universally acknowledged that students ,especially teenagers, are rebellious. Thus, though parents try to persuade their kids to work hard or finish their work on time, they will end up  discovering that the persuasion is of no use.  As a teenager once, I understand that the only thing the kids will do is sitting in front the desk and play cellphones, assuming that they are studying hard.

What's more, being an adult, children should acquire the ability of making schedules. In this way , they should list things  in sequence in their schedule list ,and arrange their time to finish these schemes. An adult must build the ability to control, both the process of making schemes and carrying out , parents' help and persuasion are of no help but ruin.

To conclude, every individual could enjoy being free and independent. Everyone who always rely on parents' help or persuasion will never grown up. But who want to staying as an kid?  pN$ @-
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已经改好了~~

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Ecology, plant science or Biochemistry, which one point to my future?

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发表于 2012-2-17 14:45:09 |只看该作者
改好了~~~
这是我的作文~~~
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1332586-3-1.html
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本帖最后由 sillyds 于 2012-2-17 23:51 编辑

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明晚回来先帮你改,但是你好像弄错了题目

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哦,这是我自己的的进度写的作文,多谢
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本帖最后由 sillyds 于 2012-2-18 23:58 编辑

In China, most universities, especially theold campus , are located in communities. This is because China has high densityof population and accordingly limited lands, but more importantly , having auniversity among the community brings

convenience to residents, especially students. Therefore, I think it's abenificial(excellent因为用在这里似乎有问题应为is beneficial for) idea to have a university situated in my community.

Having a university located in thecommunity, will surely bring some inconvenience to the nearbyneighbourhoods.Because the university may attract large amount of crowds(large crowds),creating noise during ceremonies , and cause traffic jams during commuter time.Moreover, the university campus always covers wide areas, which sometimes cutoff residents' shortest route from one place to another. In this case, theyhave no choice but to across the campus , otherwise they can only take theirways(the more distant way) outside campus, which are often more distant(删除这句,觉得这么会简洁些).

However, according to my own experience ofliving beside a university, the overall positive effects of
having a university in the community outweigh(outweight)its negative effects.,I have been living beside a university since I was ateenager, and whenever I back home from school, I am so glad that I can stillenjoy the educational resource and free sports facilities provided by thenearby university. I play tennis in its gym and run at its track. And what Ilike most is its library ,where I used to spend hours reading architecturalthesis and sketching on the kraft.


Moreover, the living standards of ourcommunity arise due to the settlement of the university. In the previouscommunity I used to live in, there are rubbish thrown everywhere. But theenvironment in my current community is tidy, because the majority of the(删除)residents here are teachers from the nearby university, who are supposed tohave high moral standards. In addition, the supermarkets in the communityoffers basic supply to the university students as well as the teachers.


In conclusion, to locate a university amonga community is beneficial in acquiring resources and arising community's livingqualities. Though it may also bring some disturbing effects, the overalleffects are satisfying.(Despite some disturbing influences, the overall effects brought by the nearby university are satisfying.) Therefore, it's sensible to have a university locatedin our community.

文章总体不错,用例子论证较好,但句式变化不够多,
有些句子有语法错误,纯属个人意见

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