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shadowranUID：2864083

8.28
2009.7.25
　Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Movies and TV programs made in one’s own country is always more interesting than those made in other countries.　

Coincident with the development of the entertainment is the growing discussion that whether movies and television programs made in one's own country is more interesting than those made in other countries. From my own perspective, I disagree.


First of all, ancient movie broaden our horizons. It is common that the TV programs and movies from other countries always come with their own unique culture background. By watching Gossip girl, people in China get familiar with the scandal life of Manhattan with the gorgeous clothes and the special spots which are not easy to see in China. Prison Break like the name said told the story that happened in the prison which is unfamiliar for Chinese even for Americans themselves. The O.C shows the American school life with the love story around a couple of teenager, the thought and the attitude to the love are totally different from those of Chinese girls and boys.


Not merely the different life, do other countries' TV programs and movies also produced by advanced technology. Car chasing scene is one of the most significant aspects of the American movies, they have the profound experiences with that, the lens they used and the explosion scene are always with the precise technology. The CG animation technology make the unrealistic scene come true. The 3D film is also the big stride of the history of the movie.


Striking although the valuable aspects of the foreign TV programs and movies leads to are, the merits of our local country should not be ignored too. Our own products could be easily understood by the audience due to the same language, and it is easy to feel the emotions of the spots which are the common spot in our daily life. Who will not feel comfortable when the scene of hometown being before your eyes during living abroad?

In conclusion, although the local TV programs and movies is appeal to us as the similarity, ancient products give us the experience of different life and the enjoyment of modern technology. So, it is too reckless to say that the TV programs and movies of our own country are always better than those of other countries.

shadowranUID：2864083

TPO 11

The lecture questions the idea presented in the text that modern people have less literature environment.

According to the lecture, people could improve themselves by many reading material such as the science writing or the history. The reading passage, by contrast, says that nowadays due to the decline of reading novels, no other methods could let people get the benefits that book does.

The lecture made the point that movies and music are the new way to transmit the culture and by this way the culture could be delivered much directly, which gives people the efficient ways to get close to the literature. The reading, in contrast, held a different view that music and movies are wasting time.

Finally, the lecture argues that the writers are also the reason why people nowadays do not want to read the book, because the modern book are too difficult to understand, which clearly decrease the passion of reading books. However, the reading passage contends that writers are declining due to the level of the readers are going down.

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8-28 综合 改

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2010年8月30日 Y

       Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?  Some people think making sure that others (influential people or potential employers) know about your strengths and accomplishments can help you succeed, if you do not do this, you won’t have a successful life.

Coincident with the skyrocketing development of the society is the growing awareness of the discussion that should people show their accomplishments and strengths to others. Some people claim that admiring oneself will make people feel disgusting. Others, on the other hand, claim that it is better to show the strengths to others because it will be benefit for the career and could improve oneself. However, from my own perspective, I vote for the latter view.

Basic to the good job is showing the strengths. A recent investigation conducted by Chinese Academy of Social Science demonstrate that in China three-quarter companies require the people to show their abilities and experiences by self-introduction or the resume. This statistics may manifest the phenomenon that showing the strength is the basic process of getting the job on account of efficiency of the interview. In addition, showing the strengths could get a better job, the company could put the person in the right position by considering their strengths, which contributes directly to enhancing the work efficiency. Moreover, people could earn more chances by showing the strengths, it is common that people in the company have the same level of working abilities, the deference is who can express the strong desire to withstand the responsibility of the new challenge by showing the strengths.

Not merely being benefit for the job, does showing the strengths also bring on the favorable effects on improving the personal skills.  For instance, someone is good at the communication, he will try to get more chances to talk with others and the talking skills will continue going up with this trend. And showing the strengths could attract more people, talking with a variety of people play a great role in achieving various skills and experiences.

Striking although the valuable aspects that showing strengths leads to are, isn't it necessary that the destructive aspect that showing abilities causes should never be ignored too, if the other people's feeling is taken into deliberation. Obviously, showing oneself frequently may destroy the relationship with others. No one like to hear someone admire himself all the time even it is true, and this put the negative influence on the team work as there is no good communication. People may feel lonely even have the mantle disease.

In conclusion, having a better life is the final goal everyone pursues. Only when do a good job and have the chance to improve themselves, can they be confident to say that they are fully prepare to enjoy the life. Showing the strength is one of the best way approaches to helping people to accomplish the two. At the same time, people should control the frequency of showing themselves, so that they can enjoy all the valuable aspects that showing the strengths leads to without any hesitation.

30分钟写的，思路有点乱，这题目没怎么写过，光改拼写错误了，估计悲剧了。。
还是自己小修改了下。。

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8.28 indepedent  feedback

shadowranUID：2864083

6# 伶女
谢啦，刚来，还不太熟，而且你的题目和我的也不一样，我还以为不是同一天的作业呢，下次有几乎帮你改

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?  Some people think making sure that others (influential people or potential employers) know about your strengths and accomplishments can help you succeed, if you do not do this, you won’t have a successful life.
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2010年8月31日 独立：
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　　Parents should allow children to make their own choices rather than determine their children’s future for them.　　(Family)

Coincident with the development of the society is the growing awareness of the discussion that whether children determine the future by themselves instead of following the instruction of their parents. Some people claim that, children should make the decision by themselves because they know what they need. Others, on the other hand, argue that parents should determine the children's future because they have vast experiences and have financial support. However, from my own perspective, I vote for the latter view.

Basic to the right decision is being full of experiences. A recent investigation conducted by Chinese Academy of Social Science demonstrates that in China three-quarter students who finally go to the university are follow the instruction of their parents. This statistics may manifest the phenomenon that children go to the right college successly on the account of the suitable university as the consequence of the decisions of their parents. Parents have a broad range of experiences, they know which university have the better academic environment and in the scope of the ability of their children.

Not merely the right decision, does following the determination of the parents could have financial support. It is common that children are too young to have the job to earn money so that they could not deal with the problem which may happened in the future due to being lack of the money. A high school student, who want to go to the music bar to have the show instead of going to school every day, if he just make this decision without talking with his parents, he would not withstand the harsh life that the reality causes, one of the reason is he has no money. Hence, children should let their parents make the decision for them because they could support them financially.

Striking although the valuable aspects that parents making decisions leads to are, isn't it necessary that the merit of making decisions by children themselves should never be ignored too, if the promoting the ability is taken into deliberation. Obviously, making the decisions by themselves exert the positive effect on enhancing the independence, which will put the children in the favorable position in the future life.

In conclusion, the better decision is the final goal children pursue, only when have rich experiences and the money,  can they be confident to say that they could make the right decision. Making the decision by parents is one of the best approaches to accomplish the two. At the same time, parents should cultivate the children's independence, so that children can enjoy all the benefit that the decision made by parents contributes to without any hesitation.

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In conclusion, having a better life is the final goal everyone pursues. Only when do a good job and have the chance to improve themselves, can they be confident to say that they are fully prepare to enjoy the life. Showing the strength is one of the best ways approaches to helping people to accomplish the two. At the same time, people should control the frequency of showing themselves, so that they can enjoy all the valuable aspects that showing the strengths leads to without any hesitation.
半小时写成这样还写那么多已经非常好了

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8.31 独立 改    （谢谢你给我的批改，改的太认真了）


Coincident with the development of the society is the growing awareness of the discussion that whether children determine the future by themselves instead of following the instruction of their parents. Some people claim that, children should make the decision by themselves because they know what they need. Others, on the other hand, argue that parents should determine the children's future because they have vast experiences and have financial support. However, from my own perspective, I vote for the latter view.

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Basic to the right decision is being full of experiences. A recent investigation conducted by Chinese Academy of Social Science demonstrates that in China three-quarter students who finally go to the university are follow the instruction of their parents. This statistics may manifest the phenomenon that children go to the right college successly on the account of the suitable university as the consequence of the decisions of their parents. Parents have a broad range of experiences, they know which university have the better academic environment and in the scope of the ability of their children（表达好像有问题）. 8 Y2 D" C4 c2 B/ r* F

Not merely the right decision, does following the determination of the parents could have financial support. It is common that children are too young to have the job to earn money so that they could not deal with the problem which may happened in the future due to being lack of the money（重复）. A high school student, who want to go to the music bar to have the show instead of going to school every day, if he just make this decision without talking with his parents, he would not withstand the harsh life that the reality causes(被动）, one of the reason is that he has no money. Hence, children should let their parents make the decision for them because they could support them financially. / z6 ]$ G3 \" n0 J

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Striking although the valuable aspects that parents making decisions leads to are, isn't it necessary that the merit of making decisions by children themselves should never be ignored too, if the promoting the ability is taken into deliberation. Obviously, making the decisions by themselves exert the positive effect on enhancing the independence, which will put the children in the favorable position in the future life.

In conclusion, the better decision is the final goal children pursue, only when have rich experiences and the money,  can they be confident to say that they could make the right decision. Making the decision by parents is one of the best approaches to accomplish the two. At the same time, parents should cultivate the children's independence, so that children can enjoy all the benefit that the decision made by parents contributes to without any hesitation.

1、我感觉文章句式太过复杂不仅加大语病检查的难度且难表达清楚自己的意思，再加之中国学生表达没有本土学生简练、清晰，这就使得行文更难理解。当然如果你能驾驭这么复杂的句式，我感觉还是没问题的。

2、文中一些例子并没很好展开。第二段调查家长意见对学生择校的影响，并没有提到学生自己是否愿意，以及毕业之后是否后悔。第三段写学生去酒吧打工，没提到对他学习有多大的不利影响。

shadowranUID：2864083

9.1
独立：

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should pay more attention to health-care issues than environmental issues.

原汁原味 30min（除了拼写错误。。。）

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独立：
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should pay more attention to health-care issues than environmental issues.

原汁原味 30min（除了 ...
shadowran 发表于 2010-9-1 14:11

写的很好，句子通畅，感觉像是gre里的作文，我挑不出毛病，不好意思。

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...既然是GRE的文章。。。就不看了。。。

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12# shadowran

学习了！