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After first glance, I tend to agree with the solution that movies and televisions should show audience that being a good people is rewarding because good people could receive reward and bad people could receive punishment. So, a lot of people, especially children can get educated to be a good person. However, after analyzing the really life around us, I am wondering whether the good can be rewarded as these media show us. And is it necessary for the media to show the truly fact of life.

Admittedly, movies and televisions naturally have a function of guiding the audiences. It is wise to show the result that good people finally being rewarded so the audiences will tend to be a good person and afraid of doing something bad because they will remind the scence that the hero being punished after doing bad things. Thus, this conception can benefit the society for more people will want to be a good person.

However, in fact, real life is not always like that. Sometime good people can't be rewarded and bad people lead a leisure and success life. So, people must feel frustrated after hearing these real life stories and wondering whether it is worthy to be a good person. For example, some people steal some materials from their factory to their home. Some people are afraid of being punished as the movies or televisions may showed to them, so they never do that. But the later group of people is still frustrated when they see those people get benefits for a long time and never being found by the supervisors. So, what is the problem we find from this example? The later group of people is not "good enough", because they are still needed to be told that not stealing thing from the factory is the basic thing a citizen should do. Thus, movies and televisions only show the good result for a good person is not enough to educate a person.

So what is the best solution? In my opinion, medias such as movies and television have the responsibility to educate the audience that being a good person is necessary whether there will be good result. Hence, always show that good people get rewarded and bad people get punished is not enough, though it may be work in children who is still have limited life experience.

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After first glance, I tend to agree with the solution that movies and televisions should show audience that being a good people is rewarding because good people could receive reward and bad people could receive punishment. So, a lot of people, especially children can get educated to be a good person. However, after analyzing the really life around us, I am wondering whether the good can be rewarded as these media show us. And is it necessary for the media to show the truly fact of life.（开头写得不错）

Admittedly, movies and televisions naturally have a function of guiding the audiences. It is wise to show the result that good people finally being rewarded so the audiences will tend to be a good person and afraid of doing something bad because they will remind the scence that the hero（是否该换个词？）
being punished after doing bad things. Thus, this conception can benefit the society for more （most）
people will（删除） want to be a good person.

However, in fact, real life is not always like that. Sometime good people can't be rewarded and bad people lead a leisure and success life. So, people must feel frustrated after hearing these real life stories and wondering whether it is worthy to be a good person. For example, some people steal some materials from their factory to their home. Some people are afraid of being punished as the movies or televisions may showed to them, so they never do that. But the later group of people is still frustrated when they see those people get benefits for a long time and never being found by the supervisors. So, what is the problem we find from this example? The later group of people is not "good enough", because they are still needed to be told that not stealing thing from the factory is the basic thing a citizen should do. Thus, movies and televisions only show the good result for a good person is not enough to educate a person.

So what is the best solution? In my opinion, medias such as movies and television have the responsibility to educate the audience that being a good person is necessary whether there will be good result. Hence, always show that good people get rewarded and bad people get punished is not enough, though it may be work in children who is still have limited life experience.

楼主语言功底很不错，第一篇就写得很流畅。不错不错。
文章中心意思是电影内容与实际的差别，正是因为实际和理想的差别才需要教育，才需要感化的么。感觉楼主的驳斥论据不足，不足以让人信服。仅个人意见，仅供参考，期待回改。
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Younger school children (ages five to ten) should be required to study art and music in addition to math, science, history and language

I tend to agree with this notion that younger children in school should be required to study a lot of useful subject, like math, art, music and so on. Children can benefit from the study because they can broaden their eyes, learn basic skills in their early life when they learn the skills very quickly. However, we need find a balance that we should let the children learn them but also in an appropriate amount and never let the children gain study burden.

The requirement to let the school children to learn these basic and useful subject can really broaden the children’s horizon and give them an opportunity to find out their interesting. When I was about 10 years old I feel very good at the science class because I really enjoy observing the experiments the teacher done. Moreover, I enjoy make models using the materials in the science class. Gradually, I found my interesting in science and I make up my mind to become a scientist. It is the science class helps me to know myself better because I know what I like and dislike after I tried them.

Study some skills at an early age is sometimes very important. I found it is so difficult for me to begin learning how to play violin when I entered college. How I wish I have some music training in my childhood. So I will have a better scence of music and some better physical condition, such as the flexible and length of my fingers. Thus, learns many skills can be helpful because you never know which one you may need in later life.

Nevertheless, teachers should pay attention to the students’ feeling. They should encourage them to learn and lead them in an appropriate way. It is important to know that children do not need to be good at every subject. They just need a good experience, find their interesting and build some foundation for their future.

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9月21号，在这里
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Younger school children (ages five to ten) should be required to study art and music in addition to math, science, history and language

I tend to agree with this notion that younger children in school should be required to study a lot of useful subject, like math, art, music and so on. Children can benefit from the study because they can broaden their horizon, learn basic skills in their early life when they can learn these skills easily and quickly. However, we need find a balance that we should let the children learn them but also in an appropriate amount. We should never let the children gain study burden
.

The requirement to let the school children to learn these basic and useful subject can really broaden the children’s horizon and give them an opportunity to find out their interesting. When I was about 10 years old I was interested in the science class because I really enjoy observing the experiments the teacher done. Moreover, I enjoy making models using the materials in the science class. Gradually, I found my interesting in science and I made up my mind to become a scientist. It is the science class helps me to know myself better because I know what I like and dislike after I tried it.

Studying some skills at an early age is sometimes easier than begin studying them when you are an adult. I found it is so difficult for me to begin learning how to play violin after I entered college. How I wish I had some music training in my childhood. Thus, I would have a better scence of music and some better physical condition, such as more flexible of my fingers. In short, learning many skills can be helpful because you can gain some basic skills which maybe helpful to your further study.


Nevertheless, teachers should pay attention to the students’ feeling. They should encourage
them to learn and lead them in an appropriate way. It is important to know that children do not need to be good at every subject. They just need a good experience, find their interesting and build some foundation for their future.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Advertising is the most important cause of unhealthy eating habits.

In this information age, advertising is everywhere. A person may receive many piece of advertising from the post on the wall, television in the cafeteria or just when you search the Internet, there maybe an advertising jump out telling you there is a fantastic restaurant. Therefore, a lot of people gain information from advertising and some of them begin to eat the food the advertising recommend Thus, for the first glance, advertising would be a major cause of people's bad food habits. However, if we analyzing the situation more carefully, we will find that it is people’s own condition, which would be the most important cause the bad food habits.

Admittedly, advertising affect our thinking and predilection. Children may want to eat fast food, like KFC. Because the attractive advertising. Then they may gradually gain the habit of eating that kind of food everyday. This is an example of unhealthy eating habits causes mainly because adverting let the children know them it. However, there is more deep reason. If the children do not have much money to buy the food, which may be expensive to some families, they will not buy the food. They may eat KFC once a month. That is no problem to the children's health. Thus, I think the most important cause for children to eat too much fast food instead of eating normal food at home is because they have enough spare money to buy them.

It is in similar reason why Chinese eating more fat than before. And it causes over-weight problem and the some disease. Is it because the effect of advertising? I think advertising is one of the causes, because it tells people where to eat fat food. But advertising is not the most important cause. It is because the economical growth here in China and then people willing to spend money in food consuming. Without the willing of Chinese to consume, I think they won’t eat too often, and won’t gain eating too much fat as a food habits.

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25号的作文 只有半个月不到就考试了， 大家狠批

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我不会上传word。。囧~先贴上来吧~~真不好意思~~

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Advertising is the most important cause of unhealthy eating habits.

In this information age, advertising is everywhere. A person may receive many pieces of advertising from the post on the wall, television in the cafeteria or just when you （称谓糅杂了，前面是 a person, 这里变成 you 了） search (感觉改成进行时比较好 when you are searching) the Internet, there maybe an advertising jump out telling you there is a fantastic restaurant(呃，句子糅杂了，建议把there may be 删掉). （In this information age, advertising is everywhere in various cases, such as posters pasted onto the wall, short promotional videos on TV or so. And even an advertising picture may jump out of the screen while you are surfing the Internet. ）Therefore, a lot of people gain information from advertising and some of them begin to eat the food the advertising recommends. Thus, for (at) the first glance, advertising would be a major cause of people's bad food (eating) habits. However, if we analyzing (analyze) the situation more carefully, we will find that it is (due to the) people’s own (individual) condition, which would be the most important cause (of) the bad food habits.

Admittedly, advertising affect our thinking and predilection. Children may want to eat fast food, like KFC. Because the attractive advertising. (呃，这个原因好像比较缺乏说服力) Then they may gradually gain （gain偏增加，获利的意思，养成习惯的话用form，develop，fall into） the habit of eating that kind of food everyday. This is an example of unhealthy eating habits causes mainly because adverting let the children know them it.（句子杂糅This is an example of unhealthy eating habits caused mainly by adverting，我觉得这个例子不太好） However, there is more deep （deeper） reason. If the children do not have much money to buy the food, which may be expensive to some families, they will not buy the food. （If the family has no ability to afford it, the child would not rely on this fast food. 这个反驳我觉得也不大好，因为在老美看来说不定快餐式最便宜的食物了，我也不确定哈，就是觉得换个理由反驳会更好点）They may eat KFC once a month. That is no problem （There would be less harm）
to the children's health. Thus, I think the most important cause for children to eat too much fast food instead of eating normal food at home is because they have enough spare money to buy them.

It is in similar reason why Chinese eating more fat than before.（The situation that Chinese eating more fat than before may result from the same reason） And it causes over-weight problem and some other diseases. Is it because the effect of advertising? I think advertising is one of the causes. Because it tells people where to eat fat food. But advertising is not the most important cause. It is because (of) the economical growth here in China and then people’s willing to spend money in (on) food consuming. Without the willing of Chinese to consume, I think they won’t eat such kind of food too often which is often expensive, and won’t gain eating too much fat as a food habit.

文章给的理由不大合理，好像坏的饮食习惯的形成是由于老百姓收入太高引起的，呃，好奇怪啊~
我水平也不高，很抱歉没办法帮你修改更多了，建议动大手术好好改改这篇文章。
另外一定要注意每段结束呼应一下题目。

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~~~10月9就考试了

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你28号的作业呢？我只看见你的链接，没看到你的作文

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In many contries the most popular things among young person is traveling. Some of them tend to travel in their own country because it is more convenient and cheaper. Others prefer to travel in a foreign country because it is more exciting and beneficial. For me, traveling abroad is more appealing to me. Because I am so curious about the different culture, sceneries, and the unusual experience in the journey.

Admittedly, there are many places in my own country that I am thirsty to visit. Like the highest mountain in Tibet, tiananmen square in Beijing and many other small places where I can always find fun things from there. Meanwhile, it is convenient because I have no problem communicating with others and I do not need money exchanging and adapting of time difference.

However, traveling in my own country can’t give me a closely way to experience the culture which is total different from my country. For example, in my country, the traditional painting is called Chinese painting, which is usually abstract but meaningful. So, if I want to visit a oil painting museum, go to the Louvre Museum in France is a better choice. From there, I can see the most famous painting in Renaissance and see the latest trends. Thus, traveling abroad means an opportunity to open our eyes.

Additionally, I can grow from traveling abroad because the difficulties I may meet. For example, traveling aboard means getting away from your parents and your friends(if you travel along). I need to gain a skill to communicate with others with limited foreign langrage level and learn to understand their different living habits and manners. And I also need to deal with a lot of emergency situations such as being lost and being stolen. I believe, all of these difficulties can help me to be a more mature person.


In sum, travelling abroad is a good class full with different culture, scenery and valuable experiments. Though this class we can broaden our horizon and learn to face the difficulties in journey of life.
                                                                                                            

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12# nishuowoshei 链接里面就是文章 偷了下懒 没复制 额呵呵

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DATE: 2010-10-1 上午 11:54:00

spending time alone is the best way to relieve stress?

In the modern society, the problem of stress is very common. When we are facing stress, leaving us along could sometimes be a good solution because we could really enjoy the time when we are alone and forget about stress. However, in most cases, just spending time alone is not a good way to relive stress. We need to think about why we feel stress, and find a person to help us.

Spending time alone sometimes can really be useful. We can have a good sleep, listen to music, watch interesting movie or just everything you wanted to do. Meanwhile, we will not worry about our impressions to others. For example, we can scream loudly in the top of a mountain, that must be efficient to relive the stress. On the other hand, we won't be disturbed by others if we are facing the deadline stress.

However, we just need others' help sometimes, spending time alone can not solve the problem which cause us feeling stress. For example, when we come to a new school, we may feel stress adapting to the new style of teaching in the class and making new friends. The best way to relive this kind of stress is to talk to the professor who may help you adapt to the new study environment fast. And then, talk to the students nearby can be the first step of making new friends. Thus, we will no longer feel stress after we begin talk to somebody who can solve us the problem.

All in all, in order to relieve stress, sometimes we need spending time alone because we can have a good rest and refresh our mind. In other cases we need to think carefully about what is the causes of stress, and then, try to solve the problem. Maybe, contacting with a person who can help you is a good beginning of relieve of stress.