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Gyps_rueppellii 发表于 2012-7-31 14:35
One can learn a lot about the person from the type of friends the person has
One can learn a lot about the person from the type of friends the person has.
It is believed that knowing a person can be more difficult than knowing other animals or things a lot (This 'a lot' goes with 'difficult', not 'animals or things', i.e. you'd normally say '..can be a lot more difficult than..'). In this situation, how we can learn about others may be an essential problem ('essential' for what and in what sense? Such empty statements do not add much to your discussion.). No matter what ways others propose, from my perspective, I think one can learn about a person in- depth ('in-depth' is an adjective, so it doesn't go with the verb 'learn'.) through different kinds of friends he or she has. I would like to illustrate my reasons as follows ('as follows' is a fixed expression.).
The first and foremost reason is that we all know the truth that, in most situations, people are willing to make friends who have the similar characteristics with themselves. So we, of course, can learn about a person by his or her friends. If a person is exocentric (This does NOT mean 'extrovert'. It is a linguistic term meaning a construction that has a different function or meaning than its constituent parts, e.g. 'English horn' is neither from England nor a horn, but a woodwind instrument, so we say this name is exocentric.), the friends must be outgoing and talkable (I guess you mean 'talkative'..). We can, therefore, know what the person's disposition is. Otherwise, they should have the mutual interests. Hence we can know the person's hobbies by knowing what his or her friends like. In other words, friends just like the people in the mirror of the person (I know what you're trying to say here but the way you constructed this sentence is rather awkward..at the very least, you would have said 'friends ARE just like the person in mirrors'..). For example, the FBI would investigate the friend's of a criminal, usually to know what the criminal is like. Since the police of America (Now, the FBI is not usually considered a 'police' force. It's primarily an intelligence unit for national-level security cases. But then again, it's actually the 'normal' police force, not the FBI, that will investigate most civil crimes..it's not very clear what level of operation you have in mind here, but I'd suggest keeping to either the 'FBI' or the 'police' in both sentences.) would like to learn about people in this way, we have no reason to abandon this efficient means ('means' as meaning 'way, method, instrument' is a word in itself, and is not the plural of 'mean' – as in the phrase 'a means to an end'.).
What is more, as a rule, friends know a person most deeply (A 'rule' is a standard or qualification for doing something, not for the quality or state of things. If you say 'friends know a person most deeply' is a 'rule', it means friends must voluntarily come to know a person deeply, or else they won't be qualified as friends – which would be rather awkward and hard to justify. What you meant to express is actually 'a rule of thumb'.). Therefore, we can gain lots of information about a person from his or her friends. With regard to time, people stay with friends for the longest time except parents. So people's friends are in the ascendant (Not sure what you want to express by this.) when we want to learn about people. As a survey released by a prestigious group, after doing research on three thousand people between 18 and 40, shows that 80 percent of them would like to get along with friends (People wanting to get along with friends has nothing whatsoever to do with whether their friends know them the most..). Considering myself for example: I learned about my best friend Hanna Chen through her ordinary friends from the? past. Because of them, I know what her hobbies are, what her quality is and so forth. When I really understood her by myself, the information from her friends was surprisingly similar to what I got. (This only means her friends know her truly well. It doesn't prove that her friends know her better than everybody else, which is the point you should be justifying.)So friends are crucial to learning about a person. They are like the shadow of the person.(This sounds really like your previous point about how friends are similar to the person..) We can save a great deal of time in this way.
In the final analysis, admittedly, people do not show their real characteristics most of the time. In another words, some people are good at pretending. If we as a strangers want to know one, it will take much time for us to really understand him or her. On the contrary, the friends have gotten along with him or her for a long time, they must understand each other very much (Run-on. You can't connect two independent sentences with just a comma.). They must know what his or her real quality is. Sometimes we are cheated by others because we do not realize their true colours. Theoretically speaking, people can understand others within two years, but in reality, some people are so hard to understand that it will take a long time to know them. So learning about a person's types of friends can facilitate our process of knowing the person. More importantly, we can know the substance of a person.(I don't see why this warrants a completely new paragraph. It seems to me that you've just been building on the point 'friends would know a person most well'. In other words, I feel this paragraph and the previous one should be related, but you seem to intend them as completely independent points since you made no effort in connecting the paragraphs.)
In a nutshell, we should realize the importance of one's friends when we want to understand one. Friends are the corner stones of knowing others.
总结:
请非常注意单复数和短语搭配。。尤其是题目中已经出现了learn about the person结果你都没注意到自己写的一直是learn。。另外就是后两个论点明显找不出话说的感觉于是开始原地绕圈。。同样,建议你学会从自己能驾驭的例子和素材中去提炼论点,而不是先有论点再凑例子。。为了论点凑例子很容易变成生搬硬套。
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