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tiannipUID：2745078

水平太次，请修改的同学忍耐，谢谢！7.11作业
题目：
Do you agree or disagreewith the following statement:
People should have hobbies and dophysical activities that are very different from their own work. 10,4,10

作业：
There was an argument that ifpeople should have hobbies and does physical activities that are very differentfrom their work. Some people would think a hobby or do physical activity thatwas similar with work might have benefit to their career. But I do not agreewith them.

First, people should takerest after work. Working mean you need to do some thing you like to do or disliketo do for eight hours in one day and five days each week. After working youshould have a rest to release your mind and body from job otherwise you mayburn out. A hobby that is different from work could make some part of your brain,which is lacking of excising in work activity. And the muscle, which is not usedin work, could take excise by a physical activity different from work.

Secondly, you can open yourmind by having a hobby, which is different form your work. Take someinteresting thing as a hobby mean you will spend lots of energy on it. You canlearn a lot of knowledge about your hobby. For me, my hobbies are paper folding.It is very different from my work researching and developing as a engineer. Ihave learned some knowledge, which I could not get in my job. Such as differentattribution of different paper, how to consoled the folded paper by water. OnceI make a object by paper-folding to explain my idea when I was working.

May be some people have ahobby or do physical activities that are not different from their own work. Butit would be a rare condition. And I suggest they should find some other hobbyand do a physial activities they are not used to do.

byebyehakuUID：3124349

谢谢修改~~！！
嘛……我有几句话确实是凑字数来着的……
但是关于“建议此处不要说不能进入university而选择职业学校”这点……我不是很明白原因……
如果可以请解释下~

heyxUID：2943262

改完了。
我们是一组的，记得帮我的文章也去改改~

byebyehakuUID：3124349

改好了哦~~

byebyehakuUID：3124349

文章我我下了 改好了发上来
这是我的作文 欢迎批改~~
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1292096-6-1.html

tiannipUID：2745078

byebyehakuUID：3124349

改好了~~

byebyehakuUID：3124349

TPO10 综合写作我下下来了  改完了传上来~~
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... e%3D1#pid1775496663
这是我的作文贴  欢迎批改~~~谢谢~~！！！

tiannipUID：2745078

找翅膀的兔子UID：2854568

改好了~~也谢谢你的修改~

tiannipUID：2745078

不记得花了多长时间了，中间PPT跳出来过一次。呵呵。

smenxiaoUID：2929493

不好意思，我等级不够发不了附件，只能贴这里了。

8月1日 20090227NA

A job with more vacation time is better than a job with high salary but less vacation time.

When people are looking for job, they may face a difficult option, a job with more vacation time or a job with high salary but less vacation time. For(In) my opinion, I think a job with more vacation time is better than a job with high salary but less vacation time.

First, if people have a job with more vacation time, it will be possible to spend time on their hobbies(改成First, a job with more vacation time will enable people to spend more time on their hobbies好像好一点). People would have hobbies(改成Everyone enjoys some hobbies好像好一点), such as playing game, swimming, shopping or collection. Whatever they choose as hobby, it would need to spend times to get more information, to communitycommunicate with other personpeople who hashave the same hobby. To do some thing which is interesting for a person is the best way to relax them. After taking rest, people have enough energy to face the new works. This is one reason why I think a job with more vacation time is better.

Secondly, taking a job with more vacation time means people could have more time to compare(?or accompany?) with their family. They have enough time to take a travel with family, to watch movies with their lover. More communication would promote family relationship.
In Contrast(On the contrary), it will be a terrible thing if one has less vacation to spend with family.(觉得这句话有点啰嗦，可以留下”if one”后面的，与后句直接连接) Children may think their parents do not love them, or wife may think her husband do not want to stay with her.

Thirdly, it seems better to have high salary.
Because people may feel good to buy some expensive think what they want. (这两句话放在段首有些歧义，可以变成”Thirdly, though it may seem better to have high salary because people may be content with the luxuries they bought”)
But I think it only makes someone feel happy temporallytemporarily. This feeling of happiness will not last a long time. On the other hand, money cannot buy anything, such as love. But you may receive your love by spending time on searching.

So, in my opinion, a job with more vacation time is better than a job with high salary but less vacation time.

after90sundaeUID：3132327

改好了

tiannipUID：2745078

独立作文一篇，以word的形式上传的。麻烦修改的同学用word的修订模式进行修改。应该会方便一些。完成时间：1小时 ：（
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来而不往非礼也~