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It is hard to conclude whether people will be more successful and happier(我觉得这句话跟题目表达的不一个意思) because of different environments of different countries. However, when specifying the situation of my homeland China, an old and beautiful country now both flourishing and suffering of(我觉得suffer一般跟不好的词吧) the rapid growth of economy and transition of(of 改成from) traditional social institutions to modern forms. I agree that people who go outside will be more successful than their peers who stay in villages, nevertheless it is still difficult to claim these people will be more happier as well(as well 表示相同时用,此处用不恰当).
I will explain why people (加上go outside)will be more successful first(Firstly,放在句首比较好). In my perspectives, to be successful means a person can achieve his potentials to a great extent, even if he might not be fortunate or hold a high status in society. According to this definition, people who go outside have two advantages to attain success. First, compared to(改为with) people living in villages, those who live in towns and cities are easier to access to high qualified education, a crucial element to abet people to recognize their potentials and enhance their ability to get their potentials. Universities locate exclusively in cities, especially in metropolises, and thus people who are ambitious to achieve their goals or want to seize a better position in force market have to go to cities to learn professional knowledge and to widen their visions and deepen their comprehension about the world. Additionally, cities are freer and can provide chances to various people with disparate backgrounds, interests and skills who are searching(改为striving for吧) their destiny. Those who engage in less productive or traditionally forbidden occupations, such as actors and athletes, can be very popular in cities. On the contrast, it is almost impossible for a person to become a famous actor or athlete, if he chooses to stay in village during his whole life.
To the question that who will be happier, I think there is no certain answer. The chief reason is that I believe(我觉得做认为讲believe不太合适) happiness is a kind of feelings and it has very few connections with objective circumstances, except for some extreme situations such as famine, ill health, or having barely any freedom. For instance, a person who relies on alms and enjoy his idleness every day, can be very happy; on the other hand, a millionaire or either billionaire might feel extreme frustrated and choose suicide finally. Thus it is not possible to judge whether a person is happy or not merely according to the position he lives. (举得例子挺不错,值得我学习)
第一次改,不好请见谅,链接是我写的,麻烦了[url][/url]https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1283345-1-1.html |
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