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po上以前写的822作文~~多交流哇~~
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Compared with people who live in urban areas, the people who live in rural areas can take better care of their families.
The past decade has witnessed the remarkable changes in the urban areas.; As urban areas is regarded as symbol of hi-technology and high salary, more and moremany people think prefer rushing into the urban areas to pursue their dreams, where also has more facilitated medical condition and higher education institution. These things allow helping them people to earn more money to take better care of their families. While others claim that the people live in urban areas are busily engaged in their work that they don’t have enough time to look after their families. I side up with the former issue, the reasons are as follows.

It would be of use to begin by examingWe may with propriety consider that living in urban areas is convenient. As incredible development had taken place in technology, people have more alternatives in transportation. Subway, only accessible in urban area, enables people to arrive their destination in a shorter time. For instance, it may takes people liveing in rural areas 2 hours on commuting everyday by bus which may takes  half of time in urban areas by subway and taxi. Thus it people in urban areas can save a lot of time on commuting and spend more time with family members. Furthermore, the shopping mall and the hospital are placing in all parts of the area, it is convenient for the resident to go shopping and take medical treatment.

At the same time it is true to say that in contrast with limited medical facilities of rural areas, those in cities are more advanced. Lacking of specialized doctors and improved equipments, clinics in rural areas can only cure a few aliments, such as flu and cold. Nonetheless, when facing more intricate diseases, the things they can do are resigning themselves to witness the patience to death or send to larger hospital. It is not common for us to hear the news that people’s disease deteriorated or even lead to death after getting medical treatment in rural areas. How can we take care of our family members even if we cannot ensure their security?  

Undoubtedly, some rural areas are less polluted, people may do not have to worry about the hazard of eating polluted food, thus stay healthy. In fact, since the constructing of industry production base has been forbidden in urban areas, they moved to the rural areas, which lead a series of environment problem. Because of lots polluted air and water which exhaled the pungent odor have been put away, thesey things are very likely doing to do harm to the people livinge in the rural areas and may lead to more serious problems subsequently.

Taking into account all these factors, we may safely draw the conclusion that people living in urban areas can take better care of their families.

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已改~LZ文写的很好,看了take care 那篇,很受启发……感觉看了你写的,觉得我写的完全角度有问题的感觉………………
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  已经修改啦~ 多交流!
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非常抱歉 由于前几天有事去外地了 所以推迟了修改作文 实在不好意思 已改好 望过目
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8.23~不好意思,改完了~
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  soda, 来迟啦~~~  改好的作文奉上~  明天新作文一起来~
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  综合基本没批改可说了~~  Nice~~
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同学不好意思,我不知道我被分了组,晚了
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么事么事哈。。~~~多谢修改哇~~

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不好意思。。昨儿写的不是指定的作文题= =。。。
各种乱七八糟的理由我就没写作业。。原谅我吧= =。。
又要辛苦同组童鞋了。。
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sodapeng 发表于 2012-8-27 19:07
不好意思。。昨儿写的不是指定的作文题= =。。。
各种乱七八糟的理由我就没写作业。。原谅我吧= =。。
又 ...


LZ加油!已改!
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