[主题活动] 【新GRE】AW零散版友互改贴（Issue） [复制链接]

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发表于 2011-5-13 16:02:07 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览

本帖最后由蒲若苇于 2011-5-13 16:28 编辑

随着GRE改革，AW+V+Q都是机试，这就更考验大家的耐心及细心还有体力。
鉴于很多童鞋并没有参加作文互改小组，却仍想找其它童鞋互改文章，特开此贴，为这些零散版友提供一个改文提高的平台，希望每个参与者都能从中受益。

新GRE考试官方样题：
http://www.ets.org/gre/revised_general/about/content/analytical_writing

面向对象：全体版友（尤其是零散版友）
活动时间：即刻
活动内容：互改作文（Issue）题库见附件
      另：可参考grrrgrrr童鞋的帖子：
         首发！ETS官网公布的ISSUE新题库(加编号和翻译)！各位新G战友加油！https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1261346-1-1.html

活动规则：

1.接龙修改：按楼层由远及近的顺序选择最近一楼的未被修改且具备修改资格的版友习作进行修改，一般是你修改帖的上一楼。不允许随意挑选楼层修改。

2.互改操作：
（1）首先跟帖占一层楼写上“占位改**楼”的字样，但是不急着修改，以防被人占楼；
（2）然后立马将自己的一篇习作跟贴发上来；
（3）第三步才是返回编辑第一个帖子修改别人的文章。
（4）特殊情况：如果目前没有可供修改的文章，请等上一楼贴出来修改。

3.批改要求：认真，仔细，负责

将你要批改的习作粘贴到修改楼中，在原文中修改即可。最好用不同颜色的文字进行修改，从文章的行文结构，逻辑推理，立意正否等方面进行评论，当然，最后请提出你自己的看法和建议。

4.习作要求：

（1）提交前首先自己用Word检查语法及拼写错误，并进行至少一次的全文修改。
（2）为方便他人修改，理解你的立意及行文思路，推荐附上自己列的中文或英文提纲。

5.奖惩措施：

（1）奖：认真及时修改他人习作者，加3~5声望或10~20寄托币。
（2）惩：有以下行为之一者，扣1~2声望或10~15寄托币：

      a.占楼后未在24小时内修改者
      b.只发自己习作未改他人者
      c.不按接龙规则，随意挑选楼层修改者

请参加的童鞋们本着认真的态度改文及上传习作
你的认真会换回他人的认真！

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发表于 2011-9-18 23:05:03 |只看该作者

没有回应，顶一下，之后参与进来。

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板凳

发表于 2011-9-19 20:17:16 |只看该作者

没人发习作？那我来做第一个吧！
题目：Some people believe that society should try to save every plant and animal species, despite the expense to humans in effort, time, and financial well-being. Others believe that society need not make extraordinary efforts, especially at a great cost in money and jobs, to save endangered species.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.

Well, according to the argument I realized that it does our responsibility to take care of our environment and diversity, after all, we could barely survive without the stability of the our living conditions. However, given the limited resources and our needs to development, we shall never compromise our future to every piece of natural news, we do not have such amount time and energy to deal with every single plant or animal which was endangered after all.
When it comes to human activities, we humans no longer have to wait to adapt to the environment through natural selection, in stead, we simply change the environment to meet our needs, and to be the dominate species of life and bring environmental change wherever we go. Every single tree was cut down and every building was built on, squeezing other species into a small tiny corner where they hardly can afford themselves. So, we owe this kind of liability protecting endangered animals as well as plants in certain degree. Thus, there are so many Nature Conservation been launched in the purpose of offering suitable habitats and mostly making up what we humans have done impulsively. Had we done nothing effectively saving certain species, especially the ones are conducive to our economics or further development, we could only see them on our text books in the form of pictures or just several lines of description. That is pathetic. Besides, we shall never ignore its chain reaction: if the deer died out, where are the wolves supposed to find food?
Though we may do something to deter the process of extinguish, of course we have precipitated it, we ultimately have to give in the powerful natural selection: die or adapt. In addition, we do not have so much time, money and energy devoting to every vulnerable species. If we do, we no doubt risking squandering our resources which could be applied to relieve the demanding and immediate problems such as education equipments improvement, medical research and environmental protection. Animals and plants can seldom survive without aids in today's circumstance, and we humans also need to march on. If we stopped helping them all, our future might probably go further which we may spend another decades to catch up. That teaches us that we have to learn how to make choices.
To sum up, though it is important to assist those species at the edge of extinction, the point is that whether they can surmount their fate has nothing to do with human beings but their own -- adaptability. Here comes a conclusion that we need to strike a balance between diversity and our own further development according to the finite resources.

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