GRE作文6分教学博客

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2014年8月3日，为了验证我的写作教学理念，我参加GRE考试，获得作文满分。目前已确定通过寄托论坛帮助版友备战GRE作文考试作为我的博士论文课题。希望在寄托论坛上邀请部分G友一起研习GRE作文，在帮助各位备考的同时，采集第一手的科研数据。
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本博客至2015年12月的内容已由版友yingyingClaire整理成两份PDF文件，现附在这里供大家参考。请注意其中的范文尚未校对，错漏之处难免，请见谅！

下面这个附件里包括issue和argument相关的帖子和策略

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• 请初次练习的同学先写issue 15和argument 85。
• 写作前一定要认真阅读本博客，学习1+3模型。博客2楼的issue和argument各有三个入门帖是必读的；GRE作文视频讲座也应该看看，并欢迎提意见。
• 点击这里可以查看我指导过的版友练习帖。有很多常见的问题，请大家练习时引以为鉴。
• 发帖后请看看楼上版友的习作，如果我没有及时点评，请抽空点评。
• 为了中国考生的长远利益，请考虑写信给ETS要求issue和argument分开报分并返还考场作文。详情戳这里。
  

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2024.7.12 考的GRE，在王老师的博客帮助和启发下，写作拿了4分，感谢王老师！

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Argument 2

In this argument, it is proposed for the city government to devote more money in annul budget to riverside recreational facilities to fulfill the recreational needs of local people. The evidence provided in the statement are, people lived nearby complaints about the quality and smell of the river and people rated water sports and their favorite ones. However, to evaluate the credibility of the argument, the following pieces of evidence are needed and relevant implications are discussed.

First, we need information about how the survey is designed in details. For example, where do people usually do water sports? According to the argument, the river’s quality is terrible and smelly. It is not likely that people will do sports in such condition.Therefore, it is possible that people do sports in private-owned swimming pool or public swimming pool. Also, who have been surveyed? Is this sample representative? If the people filling the questionnaire are mostly teenagers, it is not surprise that the rank water sports as their favorite. But if so, then the assumptions are proved unwarranted, and the use of the river is not likely to increase as expected even after the cleanup.

Second, we need maps that picture the landscape of local and surrounding areas. Is it possible that people travel a bit to nearby rivers to do water sports? Is there any wider and cleaner river around? This information is missing in the argument.Obviously, people love to travel during weekend and they also prefer cleaner water areas. Without the maps, we cannot speculate where and how people do water sports. In such instances, this argument may not hold true, and the budget spent on cleaning water is not closely linked to the increased use of local river for water sports.

Third, we also need demographics of the city that describes who lives around the river and who lives far away. Even if the survey indicates that people favor water sports, we cannot speculate who were surveyed. Are they young teenagers, adults, or elderly? Also, we lack information of who made the complaints. Apparently, we cannot assume they are the same group of people. In this case, we must obtain information of local demographics to calculate the relative living distance of different age groups. If people who love water sports live far away from the river, then the cleaned river may not attract them to take buses or subway. Hence, the budget could be wasted.

To conclude, to make good use of the budge, the city government should seek information regarding survey design, maps, and local demographics. It is the city government’s responsibility to make wise and informed decision on behalf of its citizens. (448)

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Issue 84
All college and university students would benefit from spending at least one semester studying in a foreign country.
In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.


It is argued that all college and university students would benefit from immersing in a foreign country for at least one semester. Some advocates that such opportunity would provide students with more chances to interact with local people, to enhance their understanding of culture and language as well as history. However, there are also cases that the time spent in labs or preparing for certificates is of utmost importance. Hence, I personally partly agree with the statement with the following reasons.

I would say for students majored in humanities and social sciences, studying abroad is key to fully fulfill the graduation requirement and advance their understanding of the theories. For example, an Asian Psychology student would be surprised to find out that not all folks in the world are collective, family-centered and hierarchical when compared to folks living in western world such as United States, United Kingdom and Germany where a individualism and egalitarianism culture persists. Thus, such experience is valuable to supplement with what the textbook and lecture cannot offer. Also, for students major in sociology, they can take the time to observe how the society, social structure, social capital differs from their home country. These learning materials may not even be provided by their school teachers who have not been abroad. Taken together, going abroad for exchange is fundamental for humanities and social science students.

For science students, it is also vita to be exposed to different labs with different dynamics and culture. Normally, if a student stays in one lab for continuous three years, he/she is likely to make noticeable progress, such as conference poster, manuscript etc. However, to achieve even more, one has to step outside of his/her comfort zone, and learn from different supervisors. If he/she is lucky to be supervised by a foreign professor, he/she might acquire new perspective, new standpoint, and new methodology. With these intangible asset accumulating, this learner will eventually benefit his/her long-tern development as a researcher.

However, the are cases that this statement may not hold true. I would like to take accounting students for example. For accounting students, most of the time they spent is on learning the accounting principles of local country, and preparing for numerous exams such as CPA, CFA, ACCA to obtain certificates. If they spend one semester abroad, this would impede their career life and cause one-year delay for successful graduation and job hunting. Therefore, not all students are suitable for exchange abroad.

To conclude, I think not all college and university students are necessarily study in a foreign country for at least one semester. Students in humanities, social sciences and science would benefit from such design, but students in finance and other sectors may not. To make full use of the four years, one should be proactive to seek help from academic adviser and make preparation ahead of everything such as exchange, intern and summer course. In consideration of future development and successful career, every valuable chance in school such as peer network, and interview preparation, exchange funding should not be missed.

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