=七月流火=小组第5次小组作业 issue 208 by maggiegu1019

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208"The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. You can tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people."
人们的眼神穿着和动作都揭示了他们的态度和兴趣。你可以透过观察一个社会中人们的外貌和举止来认识该社会的理念和价值观。

Somebody maintain that how people look, dress and act reveals their attitudes and interests, and the values and ideas can be identified by virtue of observing the appearance and behavior of each human being. In weighting up both the prospective
benefits and potential risks I side on the opposite and reckon that appearances and acts ,to some extend , however, are considered as a reflection of a individual , under most circumstances ,there exists many other elements which exert unrelenting effect
which should never be overlooked.

Firstly, I concede that the appearance and act, is widely accounted as the reflection of a person. It do partly have a tendency to be accordance with the interests human being . A person who favors the chinese tradition literature may prefer dress on cheongsam in a party. The young people, who pursue Hip-hop musicof course like to wear jackets and jeans, in order to imitate the pop Star they worshiped. Women pursue a occupation in a government organization should never dress on a sexual T-shirt and a mini-skirt.

Secondly, the quantum leap in technology and natural science, to certain extend, lead to the globalization of the society as a whole. The people all around the world are becoming more familiar with each other. The T-shirt are popularization in both western and eastern nations. The portable food, such as KFC ,can be seen on the streets in China. Another instance is that, the former UN secretary General, appreciated the efforts Ameson Foundation made to promote French in China for the reason that it gave impetus of culture understanding and peace. Even the society above show we are more commons among the world, can we hastily draw a conclusion that under the superficial similarity, people from variety nations share the same ideas and interests? That is of course ridiculous.

Thirdly, the attitudes and interests, together with values and culture mores, are internal characters of a individual, how can these be narrowed down and simplified to only by observing the look ,dress and act. Even I suppose what the author proposed is right, how can we imagine that people with different background, such as culture mores, values, ideals, history, civilization and creativity, evaluate the very only outlook as the similar reflection . Admittedly, it is a subjective evaluation.

Last but not least, addressing on the purpose of understanding and identifying
the internal character of different society, such as interests ,ideas, creativities, attitudes ,there exists many other episodes which should never be overlooked. Studying the history may be proposed as a better method. The history, which is consists of values, civilization, traditions, customs, imagination of each society, is deposit of culture and accounted as one of the indispensable nation traits. By this virtue, the internal characters of a society will be show more accurately. Take American history for instance, we can see that the American appreciate individuality and freedom extremely.

To sum up, though the appearance is widely considered as the way of evaluating the internal characters, which reflect a individual's spirit, fabric and soul, there deemly exist other factors should not be overlooked. If we often narrowed a complicated matter down to a simple one as the author proposed, everything, on certain occasion, may be massing up.

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Somebody（the author） maintains that how people look, dress and act reveals their attitudes and interests, and the values and ideas can be identified by virtue of(by way of) observing the appearance and behavior of each human being(the members of society). In weighting up both the prospective benefits and potential risks I side on the opposite and reckon that appearances and acts ,to some extend , however, are considered as a reflection of a individual , under most circumstances ,there exists many other elements(尽量不用这种泛泛的说法，要么说明确切的因素，要么不说) which exert unrelenting effect which should never be overlooked.（主题句稍微有点长，特别是在首段，没必要写长句，尽量表达清楚就可以了）

Firstly, I concede that the appearance and act, is widely accounted as the reflection of a person. It do partly have a tendency to be accordance with the interests of human being. A person who favors the chinese tradition literature may prefer dress on cheongsam in a party. The young people, who pursue Hip-hop musicof course like to wear jackets and jeans, in order to imitate the pop Star they worshiped. Women pursue a occupation in a government organization should never dress on a sexual T-shirt and a mini-skirt.(例子很恰当)

Secondly, the quantum leap in technology and natural science, to certain extend, lead to the globalization of the society as a whole. The people all around the world are becoming more familiar with each other. The T-shirt are popularization in both western and eastern nations. The portable food, such as KFC ,can be seen on the streets in China. Another instance is that, the former UN secretary General, appreciated the efforts Ameson Foundation made to promote French in China for the reason that it gave impetus of culture understanding and peace. Even the society above show we are more commons among the world, can we hastily draw a conclusion that under the superficial similarity, people from variety nations share the same ideas and interests? That is of course ridiculous.（用ARGUE的眼光看，在其他方面文化趋同不一定在社会看法和价值观不同的地方人们的外表和行为也会趋同，可能内在的差异还是会反应在表象上）

Thirdly, the attitudes and interests, together with values and culture mores, are internal characters of a individual, how can these be narrowed down and simplified to only by observing the look ,dress and act. Even I suppose what the author proposed is right, how can we imagine that people with different background, such as culture mores, values, ideals, history, civilization and creativity, evaluate the very only outlook as the similar reflection . Admittedly, it is a subjective evaluation.（这里举出这么多culture mores, values, ideals, history, civilization and creativity，不如把题目里的idea和value细致定义一下）

Last but not least（非常口语化的词组，可以直接用finally等等）, addressing on the purpose of understanding and identifying the internal character of different society, such as interests ,ideas, creativities, attitudes ,there exists many other episodes which should never be overlooked. Studying the history may be proposed as a better method. The history, which is consists of values, civilization, traditions, customs, imagination of each society, is deposit of culture and accounted as one of the indispensable nation traits. By this virtue, the internal characters of a society will be show more accurately. Take American history for instance, we can see that the American appreciate individuality and freedom extremely.

To sum up, though the appearance is widely considered as the way of evaluating the internal characters, which reflect a individual's spirit, fabric and soul, there deemly exist other factors should not be overlooked. If we often narrowed a complicated matter down to a simple one as the author proposed, everything, on certain occasion, may be massing up.

总体上感觉，语言是没什么问题的，最大问题是缺少对题目概念的定义，如果可以融汇在文章的某些句子中最好，如果不行，开篇就说明，尽量不要发散出去，用很多同义词去解释概念。例子很充实，着重描写社会而不是个人是一个很好的角度，解决办法也很实际。

不知道为什么颜色没了...还好我都用小括号改的 hahaha...