进军美利坚作文组－10。7号

daisy840228UID: 2684617

10.7 Technology cause children show less creative than they were in past.

This is an era characterized by uncparalleled explotion of technology, and technology prevelent in every tiny bit of modern life, such as advanced mobile phone, computer, televison, and washing machine. When asked to the impact to the creative of children, arguing that technology cause children show less creative are those who hold opinion that technology has paved the way for children’s life. While others believe that, instead, technology actually promote them to explore the mysterious world and show more creative. As far as I am concerned, I side with the latter one. Of countless reasons, I will present the most conspicuous ones here.

The first plain truth, I am presenting here is that technology, especially the computer technology, give children access to a vast ocean of information and knowledge which set the stage for the creation.Only after connecting with this knowledge, children would create some ideas based on that. For example,kids invariably ask their father or mother questions as why leaves of tree is green or why objects far away looks smaller. Parents may not give a clearly answer, they are supposed to stop asking in the long run and feel nothing curious as their parents. However, assited by the computer, children can get all they wonder. And based on the knowledge, they might try and then create the blue leaves or telescopes themselves.Therefore, it is the knowledge or information produced by technology that gives them the opportunities to do more and profound
creative activities.

Furthermore, Not only does technology show children the mysteriod world, but also set a great number of good examples to children,which intrigue motivation to invention.
It is no better illustration that can prove the view, namely If one sheep leaps over the ditch, all the rest will follow. From radio, television, to computer, children get the information and news about the creators’ life, especially the little creators. This would definetely leave some imprint to their aggressive heart to some extent. The result is quite overt。More and more children throw themselves into explore the unknowned world and dream up being a scientist some day.

To sum up, taking on account of access to knowledge and setting a good example brought by technology, we may safely reach the conclusion that Technology cause children show more creative than they were in past.

scutgongUID: 2564275

我看了你的文章，写的还不错。但是呢，很多单词的拼写错误。这里我不一一指出，你在word中很容易看到。继续努力。

victorwzdfUID: 2696440

用了许多很多高级的搭配，整体相当不错，但长句子太多。可以多考虑短句子镶嵌其中，锦上添花。

daisy840228UID: 2684617

10.8  是telephone 还是television对人类的有more effects?

As the prevalence of technology, telephone and television pervaded into every corner of our lives. Pound to pound, I believe that television has more effect on people’s life. Of countless reasons, I would provide the most conspicuous ones here.

The first plain truth, I am presenting here, is that televison is capable of comforting and entertaining people, serving as a means to help people relax and relieve the pressure after a very stressful working day. A fair part of single people tend to open the television as soon as they come home. Why? Because it can relieve the loneliness and help them relax. A similar case as this, when peple are having a little get-together with some friends, the host would also turn on the television even though they do not raise their eyebrow to it. In fact, television has become an essential part of people’s live.

Furthermore, Provide information of all sorts, influencing people’s behavior and thinking. For example, people like to talk about the soap drama or soccer game on the television last night.By talking and discussing, their thinking are clined to be the main current of the society. At the same time, they may even mimic the actor on the screen for varieties of reasons. Television never tire of telling stories about those who have come to successful quickly by all means, which also set good examples to the audions. That is one of the most important reasons that people learn from the television.

Admittedly, as one achievement of the modern technology,telephone, does have some merits to our daily life, it enhance the communication among people, shorterning the distance. However, taking account of means of relaxation and impact on behavior and thinking, I can safely come to a conclusion that television has more effects to people’s life.

doubledianUID: 2661760

10.8  是telephone 还是television对人类的有more effects?
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As the prevalence of technology, telephone and television pervaded into every corner of our lives. Pound to pound, I believe that television has more effect on people’s life. Of countless reasons, I would provide the most conspicuous ones here.# x- n2 f4 s) R/ u, j: ~

The first plain truth, I am presenting here, is that televison（拼写错误） is capable of comforting and entertaining people, serving as a means to help people relax and relieve the pressure after a very stressful working day. A fair part of single people tend to open the television as soon as they come home. Why? Because it can relieve the loneliness and help them relax. A similar case as this, when peple（拼写） are having a little get-together with some friends, the host would also turn on the television even though they do not raise their eyebrow to it. In fact, television has become an essential part of people’s live. 2 Q) ^- K( O5 O9 @1 N. d- v

Furthermore, Provide information of all sorts, influencing people’s behavior and thinking. For example, people like to talk about the soap drama or soccer game on the television last night. By talking and discussing, their thinking are clined（这是个名词） to be the main current of the society. At the same time, they may even mimic the actor on the screen for varieties of reasons. Television never tire of telling stories about those who have come to successful quickly by all means, which also set good examples to the audions（拼写）. That is one of the most important reasons that people learn from the television. , G7 ?' A2 t) ^/ k. s

Admittedly, as one achievement of the modern technology, telephone, does have some merits to our daily life, it enhance the communication among people, shorterning（拼写）the distance. However, taking account of means of relaxation and impact on behavior and thinking, I can safely come to a conclusion that television has more effects to people’s life.

写得很不错呀，观点明确，论证也很好，高级词汇、词组用的也相当不错。除了个别拼写错误，建议你每次交作业的时候先放在word上修改。有空给我传授点经验吧，我作文写的很差劲，虽然天天在写，但是还写不好。继续加油呀！

LRXSSUID: 2695903

As with the prevalence of technology, telephone and television pervaded into every corner of our lives. Pound to pound 不懂什么意思耶 M我下, I believe that television has more effect on people’s life. Of countless 这个词觉得用在这里过了  感觉就是为了用这个词而用这个词 reasons, I would provide the most conspicuous ones here.
The first plain truth, I am presenting here 短句用得好, is that televison is capable of comforting and entertaining people, serving as a means to help people relax and relieve the pressure after a very stressful working day. A fair part of single people tend to open the television as soon as they come home. Why? Because it can relieve the loneliness and help them relax. A similar case as this, when peple are having a little get-together with some friends, the host would also turn on the television even though they do not raise their eyebrow to it. In fact, television has become an essential part of people’s live. . O( ?. V# p- Q
Furthermore, Provide providing information of all sorts, influencing people’s behavior and thinking. For example, people like to talk about the soap drama or soccer game on the television last night.By talking and discussing, their thinking are inclined to be the main current of the society. At the same time, they may even mimic 感觉用imitate好些  the actor on the screen for varieties of reasons. Television is never tired of telling stories about those who have come to successful quickly by all means, which also set good examples to the audions audiences. That is one of the most important reasons that people learn from the television. # F8 P& E, H& D! c8 E" H# [9 i
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Admittedly, as one achievement of the modern technology,telephone, does have some merits to our daily life, it enhances the communication among people, shorterning the distance 用and连吧  不是很长的句子. However, taking account of means of relaxation and impact on behavior and thinking, I can safely come to a conclusion that television has more effects to on people’s life.

内容还行
个人见解  感觉有点偏
只是在一味论述电视的影响力  并没有和电话进行比较  只是结尾处带了一下  我觉得应该在两段中  加上电话并不能达到这些影响的论述

daisy840228UID: 2684617

“At about nine o’clock this Saturday morning, I walked on the Jianguo Road to visit my friend. Suddenly my purse was robbed by a man in a black T-shirt. I shouted at that moment and ran after him.Nobody in the street try to help me.Then the man got tired of my follow and turned around and gave me a cut on my arm. To my surprise, nobody come to help me immediately…”

Reading the news I could not stop pondering on this issue. Undoubtedly, the friendship among people has changed.The kind-hearted neighour has gone. Instead, people in the city are not acquait with each other even though they have benn neighour for several years. The reason that people are getting cool are as follows.

The first plain truth, I am presenting here, is that communication among people have decline, since the ability of work independently and work stress both have been enhanced. Especially with the advent of advanced technology, people could work at home alone companying with a computer, they communicate with the boss and collegues by electronic mail or chatting online.At the same time, nowadays the pressure of work has been heavier and heavier, resulting in the sharp descline of communication among neighours, friends, and even family members.No wonder the friendship in people’s deep heart is plummeting.

Another further and subtle fact is that people are inclined to avoid trouble as much as possible, standing on the ground that the rate of crime goes up and the world is intricated. The television, internet, radio, and other medias have never tire of telling news about the crime and foul-heart event happened just closeby and recently. People become fill with scare to get in touch with strangers. For example, when an stranger come straight to you and ask the way to some famous place, you maybe wondering that if he try to steal something or this is the onset of a cheat as what you read from the newspaper.

Thereby, the friendship and trust among people get to a bare minimum, and happen the event at the beginning of the text.To prevent the similar things happen again, what should we do is the most important to consider next, after knowing the reason why people get less friendly.

daisy840228UID: 2684617

10.11  Do you agree or disagree: people should live in the city or country all life instead of moving to another place.

I am always amazed when I heard people said that we are going to live in the city until we died. Admittedly, living in the same city all the time have some merits, such as being familiar with this neighborhood and getting accustomed to the life style. However, In my point of view, I am, and would always be supportive for the opposite view that people should sometimes move to another place to have a new life. The reasons are as follows.

The first plain reason, I am presenting here, is that since life is full of opportunities and challenges to us, we should seek for the best for ourselves. In a rapidly developing society, we are forced to adjust ourselves to adapt to the world. For example, one of my friend served for the headquarters of a company for a long time. He worked hard and played some creative job there. Since the excellent work force there, only did he get promotion if he was willing to work in the new department in another city. My friend took that job without hesitation, because in the new department he could manage a team, and show his talent completely, which meant that he had a prosperous future only sacrifice with transferring. I believe there are numerous examples like this. Truly, it’s more brilliant for us to move to another city to pursue a better being.

Furthermore, Moving to another country means refreshing our experience, rendering us to be familiar with more knowledge about custom, culture, history of the city, resulting in more colorful life. For instance, living in a new place, we could get new neighbor and make more friends. Since there are different rules in different places, we could take part in the activities, such as campfire night, get-together，visit the museum and well-known places of interest to know more about the city, and to adapt to it. As the famous saying appeared in the movie Forrest Gump goes, life is like a box of chocolate, you would never know what you are going to get. Adapting to the unfamiliar community would add the interesting and fascinating aspects of life.

To sum up, considerable though living in the same city can bring, they can not compete with the merits that moving occasionally enjoys if challenge life and colorful life is taken into consideration.

gracewillowUID: 2241547

10.11  Do you agree or disagree: people should live in the city or country all life instead of moving to another place. % U5 w' o- z$ b! V' f I am always amazed when I heard hear (前后时态不符) people said say that we are going to live in the city until we died die. Admittedly, living in the same city all the time have has some merits, such as being familiar with this neighborhood and getting accustomed to the life style. However, In in my point of view, I am, and would will always be supportive for the opposite view that people should sometimes move to another place to have a new life. The reasons are as follows. ; L  ~; L4 k: _* F! e( D" Q The first plain reason, I am presenting here, is that since life is full of opportunities and challenges to us, we should seek for the best for ourselves. In a rapidly developing society, we are forced to adjust ourselves to adapt to the world. For example, one of my friends served for the headquarters of a company for a long time. He worked hard and played some creative job there. Since the excellent work force there, only did he get promotion if he was willing to work in the new department in another city. My friend took that job without hesitation, because in the new department he could manage a team, and showed his talent completely, which meant that he had a prosperous future only sacrifice with transferring by only sacrificing himself to transfer. I believe there are numerous examples like this. Truly, it’s more brilliant for us to move to another city to pursue a better being.' t + K2 \- X- v2 T3 k" {9 ]4 Z9 U % k+ K* h, P9 f  a( ]- [ Furthermore, Mmoving to another country means refreshing our experience, rendering us to be familiar with more knowledge about custom, culture, history of the city, resulting in more colorful life. For instance, living in a new place, we could can get new neighbor and make more friends. Since there are different rules in different places, we could can take part in the activities, such as campfire night, get-together，visiting the museum and well-known places of interest to know more about the city, and to adapt to it. As the famous saying appeared appearing in the movie Forrest Gump goes, life is like a box of chocolate, you would never know what you are going to get. Adapting to the unfamiliar community would add the interesting and fascinating aspects of life. [+ r; q$ k  K: K8 T To sum up, considerable things though living in the same city can bring, they can not compete with the merits that moving occasionally enjoys if challenge challenging life and colorful life is taken into consideration.

daisy840228UID: 2684617

|10.12 do you agree or disagree
getting university education is the most important factor for success.# l1 I

In the modern society, more and more people go to university for further study to get a better being. A fair part of people who hold the opinion that college diploma underlines perfect job advocate that getting university education is the most crutial factor for success. Personally speaking, important though studying in college is, it doesn’t mean it is the most important factor for success, since many qualities rest on success.

There are varieties of characteristics for success, such as industriousness, strong will, brightness, advanced knowledge, chance. Success is consistent with them altogether and earned by differing ways. As the old saying goes, success equals ninety-nine percent of hard working and one percent of luck. Thereby, success could be earned not only by the knowledge attained in university, but also by the experience of work and knowledge people earned themselves. There are countless examples which show that many person get success without attending college or even without obtaining middle school education. Bill Gate, as a genius in computer area, He actually didn’t finish his college study. Now nobody hasn’t known his name. Li Jiacheng, as a well-known businessman, was not able to finish his high school condition. But can anybody say that they are not successful?

Furthermore, learning knowledge at college would improve the proficiency in onecertain field, and render students easier avenues to accomplish their goals. However what if students do not study hard or work hard to improve their ability? The answer stands to reason. Nowadays, partly since the education system is not ideal for students, especially in some lower-class schools, students have no purpose or have no means. They just indulge themselves in computer games, idling around the community. In a way, hardly could they find a enjoyable job at the last moment in university.

To sum up, I do, and will always support that children should have access to get further study in college. And I highly believe it will take more chance for people to reach some goals in lives. But I oppose that getting university education is the most important factor for success, standing on ground that success is a integrity composed of many qualities.

daisy840228UID: 2684617

10.13 The parents do not understand their children as well today as parents understood their children 50 years ago

In modern society, people have more sensitive relationship between each other. When asked to parents and children, it does so. Most people claim that nowadays parents do not understand their children as before. I side with it. Of countless reasons, I would present the most conspicuous ones to you.

The first plain truth, I am presenting here, is that parents suffer greater work pressure and burdern heavier shoulder than before. We can see people walk hurriedly on the road, a fair part of them are parents. No one can deny that the life burdern and work stress is harder and harder. The price of house skyrocket unexpectedly, the everday expense rise suddenly, the transportation fee never draw down, school charge the kids higher and higher, the boss bemoan the work again . All of these pile up to sharpen parents burdern in work.family and children. As a cicular consequance, parents are compelled to do nothing but work harder and harder.Nonetheless, fifty years before, there are not so many people in the world, and so many vacancy of decent jobs long for people to take it. People could take care of a fancy work and sweet family, for the job is under their control. Thus, they have more time to play with their children, sharing the secret in deep heart and knowing each other better.  

The furthermore and subtle fact is that children are not willing to communicate with their parents or open up their heart to them. Children have access to a large amount of information online, they tend to form their view about the world unconsciously. Since the way they look at the world is so differing from their parents, their topic and concern would stay no consistency with their parents, either. That is one of the most convicing reason that children get less communication with their parents or even look down upon them. While in the past, children only have partner with dolls,books and some other toys. The only thing they can get information from is book, which is quite limited and controled by their parents. Besides playing on their own,They are eager to communicate with parents, tell their dear father or mother what they just learn and what is so funny to them.

To sum up, based on both parents and children’s sake, I can safely draw the conclusion that the parents do not understand their children as well today as parents understood their children 50 years ago.

joyce455UID: 2614743

10.13 The parents do not understand their children as well today as parents understood their children 50 years ago In modern society, people have（a） more sensitive relationship between each other. When asked to parents and children, it does so. Most people claim that nowadays parents do not understand their children as before. I side with it（？I stand by it/I on the side of it）. Of countless reasons, I would present the most conspicuous ones to you. R- ~- R& i1 @; { The first plain truth, I am presenting here, is that parents suffer greater work pressure and burdern heavier shoulder than before. We can see people walk hurriedly on the road, a fair part of them are parents. No one can deny that the life burdern and work stress is (are)harder and harder. The price of house skyrocket unexpectedly, the everday expense rise suddenly, the transportation fee never draw down, school charge the kids higher and higher, the boss bemoan the work again (很多句子的并列最好加些连词，或者也改为短语). All of these pile up to sharpen parents burdern in work.family and children. As a cicular consequance, parents are compelled to do nothing but work harder and harder.Nonetheless, fifty years before, there are not so many people in the world, and so many vacancy of decent jobs long for people to take it（去掉it）. People could take care of a fancy work and （a）sweet family, for the job is under their control. Thus, they have more time to play with their children, sharing the secret in deep heart and knowing each other better.(三个短语是并列成分，应该都用不定式)  9 T# e0 A& L2 D7 Z5 h4 M( w# C. r ; D+ ~* K2 g( ~! t The furthermore and subtle fact is that children are not willing to communicate with their parents or open up their heart to them. Children have access to a large amount of information online, they tend to form their view about the world unconsciously. Since the way they look at the world is so differing from their parents, their topic and concern would stay no consistency with their parents, either. That is one of the most convicing reason that children get less communication with their parents or even look down upon them. While in the past, children only have partner with（改为as） dolls,books and some other toys. The only thing they can get information from is book, which is quite limited and controled by their parents. Besides playing on their own,They are eager to communicate with parents, tell their dear father or mother what they just learn and what is so funny to them.3 Y# |5 d% O7 w8 Z5 k - F; O; ]& K6 J/ I7 o1 V+ Y To sum up, based on both parents and children’s sake,（应为for one's sake） I can safely draw the conclusion (与前面的sum up重复了)that the parents do not understand their children as （去掉第一个as）well today as parents understood their children 50 years ago. 第二点原因从children着手，感觉有些偏离题意，还是应将侧重点放在parents understand children上，除了些小的语法错误整体还不错。行文也很流畅 如果有改的不对之处欢迎批评指正

karen_0315UID: 2590040

10.13 The parents do not understand their children as well today as parents understood their children 50 years ago

In modern society, people have more sensitive relationship between each other. When asked to parents and children, it does so. Most people claim that nowadays parents do not understand their children as before. I side with it. Of countless reasons, I would present the most conspicuous ones to you.

The first plain truth, I am presenting here, is that parents suffer greater work pressure and burdern heavier shoulder than before. We can see people walk hurriedly on the road, a fair part of them are parents. No one can deny that the life burdern and work stress is harder and harder. The price of house skyrocket unexpectedly, the everday expense rise suddenly, the transportation fee never draw down, school charge the kids higher and higher, the boss bemoan the work again . All of these pile up to sharpen parents burdern in work.family and children. As a cicular consequance, parents are compelled to do nothing but work harder and harder.Nonetheless, fifty years before, there are not so many people in the world, and so many vacancy of decent jobs long for people to take it. People could take care of a fancy work and sweet family, for the job is under their control. Thus, they have more time to play with their children, sharing the secret in deep heart and knowing each other better.

The furthermore and subtle fact is that children are not willing to communicate with their parents or open up their heart to them. Children have access to a large amount of information online, they tend to form their view about the world unconsciously. Since the way they look at the world is so differing from their parents, their topic and concern would stay no consistency with their parents, either. That is one of the most convicing reason that children get less communication with their parents or even look down upon them. While in the past, children only have partner with dolls,books and some other toys. The only thing they can get information from is book, which is quite limited and controled by their parents. Besides playing on their own,They are eager to communicate with parents, tell their dear father or mother what they just learn and what is so funny to them.

To sum up, based on both parents and children’s sake, I can safely draw the conclusion that the parents do not understand their children as well today as parents understood their children 50 years ago.
语言，结构，内容都很不错，还有很多我没有用过的词，学习了~

daisy840228UID: 2684617

This is an era charicarized by the unparalleled explosion of technology. Consequently, technology has prevailed into every corner of people’s life which leads to massive change to it. When it comes to success, there is still no universally agreed-on opinion that if it was easier to make success in the past than people now. A fair portion of people who bemoan the current situation and impute it to technology hold that it is much harder for present people to achieve their goals. However, I, as a commonalty, strongly contend that people are inclined to get success easier owing to technology. Of numerous reasons, I will present the conspicusous ones to you.

To begin with, nowadays people have impartial opportunity to get high-quality education. No matter who we are, from a wealthy family or just from a rural poor family, we all get the chance to study in university and devote ourselves to the society utilizing our knowledge we learned. It makes every person who work hard and possess great determination could realize his or her dream. For instance, my farther dreamed to attend college and become a lawyer as his carrer, while he couldn’t because even he studied hard, he was not chosen to enroll in the university in cultural revolution when people who belong to some organization have the priority to school. On the contrary, I am fortunate that I live in a period symbolied by peace and harmony, Everybody have chance including me to go to college to chase the dream and get success.

In addition people have convenient access to the information they need nowadays. With the advent of computer, especially internet, provide a vast ocean of knowledge and information in all sorts. Whatever we need, just google it. Based on this facility, we could know whatever we want, try our best without too much barrier to make succeess. There is old saying says that knowledge is limitless, the more you learn, the more you find to be unknown. Exatly,only innocent breeds arrogance, while knowledge lead us to a wonderful world where ample things await you to explore and sufficient chances of success expect you to get.

To sum up, due to fair chance to get high education and convenience facility leading to success. Therefore, I strongly supportive of that present people are prone to getting success.

daisy840228UID: 2684617

10.15 教师是否应该获得跟doctors,lawyers,business leaders一样的收入

In the rapidly developing society, what is the most important element? Undoubtedly, talent. Teacher consequently plays a more crutial role in the upcoming decade. Therefore there is a hot controversy that if teacher should earn the money as much as doctors, lawyers, and business leaders. Personally speaking, I strongly advocate that teachers should gain higher salary than now. Of countless reasons, I will present the most conspicuous ones to you.

The first plain truth, I am presenting here, is that teacher is so important to each human being that we cannot pay the price for losing them. While nowadays in most cities of china, teachers only lead a life from hand to mouth. Some even do not earn enough to support the whole family in the village. In the current situation, how could they dedicate themselves to the education, to the future of the society. So the number of teacher decline a little in some period, as few of them quit the job. As old saying goes, teachers are the soul cleaner of human generation. Only by teacher’s work can each individual walk on the right road and become a useful and decent person contributing to harmony and development of community.

The furthermore and subtle fact is that it is teacher who cultivate talents, such as doctors, lawyers, business leaders, why can’t they get the same salary as them. Essentially, no teacher no them. Teachers impart all of their knowledge and deep expectation to students. Under the caring and love, each student obtains sufficient knowledge to chase his or her dream and becomes qualified to the work in varieties of area.

In addition, teachers deserve high value due to their fairly hard work. Admittedly, it is the nature of teacher need all educators work hard, therefore they entitle to lead a better life.