麦子的作文作业 & 20天冲刺日记

heqiang_1001UID: 2607349

20天冲刺倒计时    100+  30+25+20+25

刚刚看了那个四战的帖子，看的我直想哭，我真害怕……
我一点都没有信心，我甚至没有勇气说我要冲刺100+，因为我已经不知道自己的水平就究竟在什么地方。
二战了……容不得闪失。昨天知道，连我家在SY的老房子都为我牺牲，被老妈卖掉了，那个我度过了小学初中和高中十几年的家，心里很难受。
不能抱怨了。开贴监督自己。
我还是要相信会有回报的，我付出的一切都会有回报的。

请大家监督，同时共勉！

10.25~11.4  每天任务

阅读：黄金29篇  每天3篇+分析   1.5h   (现在做到23篇，第一遍还有6篇，两天做完，开始第二遍。）
        TIME 看新闻        每天半小时
        单词         从4级开始过一遍 4级+6级+托福   每天300个。 1h

听力：
        高分120    两个加起来还有差不多10个test。一天一个test +分析  2h   （10天听完）
        TTC         一天一课。 认真听，记笔记，0.5h  
        delta        再过一边，重点：学科词汇，听篇章逻辑结构。先复述，然后看文本找不会的地方            2h

口语：按分类提纲准备全部1、2题段子，注意说话的语气和感觉，不是单纯背诵。  2h  
         4~6 题 口语真经    1套                                                                0.5h
         delta听完了，当天的内容，跟读。                                                    0.5h

作文： 美利坚小组   作业完成并上传        争取1h 搞定。作文一定要限时。
          互改+学习其他人的好作文          1h
          汉译英篇章翻译    老美范文+新三   各一篇       1.5h  

一定要做到！！！

时间分配：
早上5点45起  （手机坚决放床下，不能那上床）
6点~7点30      互改作文+学习习作+Time      上个星期差不多是这样，基本可以实现
8点~12点        汉译英篇章翻译+TTC+delta         自习室
中午                吃饭睡觉洗头洗衣服处理工作等等一切杂事
2点~5点          背单词+口语                             自习室
5点半~10点      作文+阅读+高分120                自习室（带电脑）
回寝室             口语真经+白天没完成的任务         
完成了睡觉

也许这个计划太过于理想和细化了，我知道自己可能还会有被牵扯精力的时候。某些工作某些饭局某些必须去上的课程。
但……必须保证的有：阅读，作文，高分120. 以及 篇章翻译。

麦子加油！！！！！！

gracewillowUID: 2241547

Do you agree or disagree: people should live in the cityor country all life instead of moving to another place.

Nowadays, there is a contorversial discussion that wherther (whether) one should  live in one place for the whole life or not. This problem is a much debated one in that it affects everybody in their daily life. Some people insist on living in the city or country all life, considering a familiar way of life. while others have an opposite attitude that living in different places could experience different enjoyments of life. When it comes to me, I denefitely regard the latter as a better choice.
As the high speed of this society, characters may prefer jobs that could povide the chance to have a panorama or high salaries. Thus, one could not guarantee that he or she would work for just one company at one place all life. A better job chance in another place may be a reason that people should move. To illustrate this, there is a recent investigation conducted by sociologists (or a sociologist)  that (which) is very persuasive:. The research indicates that more than 70 percent working people declare that they don't oppose to move (don't oppose moving or are not opposed to moving) to another place to develop their job careers. $ W7 x: a: r2 X$ k5 _+ |+ A
Living in different place, people could experience differernt way of life as well as different characteristics and customs. Living in city has obvious advantages. There are enough restaurants, supermarkets, and shopping malls to meet the basic needs of life as well as parks,cinemas and musemus (museums) to meet citizens’ culture demands. While people who live in the country (countryside) could breath fresh air every day. life is quite and calm there. A good case in poins is the experience of my grandparents. They studied and worked in a big city for nearly 20 years. After they retired, they moved to country (the countryside) where scenery is so beautiful to enjoy a dignified retirement. In different periods, they chose the most proper environment to live.+ A3 V+ J4 n. @, R4 I% \
With the development of new technologies, the cost of life has been decreased. There is no need to worry about cost of moving both in money and risk (the cost and risk of moving). Compared to the condition many years before, people dare (dared) not to leave the place where they live from genertation to generation at that time because they have (had) no ability to build a new life in a short time. While in morden time, people could adapt to the new life quickly when they pursue high quality of life.+ k. I# E0 b% F- A! S. b! E  Q8 J
In conclution (To sum up前后重复使用conslusion), Ttaking all the factors mentioned above,we may safely reach the concluction that move (moving) to another place in modern time is a better way of life than just live (living) in one place for all life time.

zhangyzzzUID: 2615373

Nowadays, there is a contorversial discussion that wherther(whether) one should  live in one place for the whole life or not. This problem is much debated one in that it affects everybody in their daily life. Some people insist on living in the city or country all life, considering a familiar way of life. while others have an opposite attitude that living in different places could experience different enjoyments of life. When it comes to me, I denefitely(definitely) regard the latter as a better choice.$ z% [$ Y- d: F$ Y2 P# [
As the high speed of this society, characters(感觉用在这里不太合适) may prefer jobs that could povide the chance to have a panorama（这个用法没见过，最好确认一下） or high salaries. Thus, one could not guarantee that he or she would work for just one company at one place all life. A better job chance in another place may be a reason that people should move. To illustrate this, there is a recent investigation conducted by sociologists that is very persuasive(改成 a recent investigation conducted by sociologists is very persuasive): The research indicates that more than 70 percent working people(employees) declare that they don't oppose to move to another place to develop their job career(这两个词有点重复).
  c3 M; V3 ?6 n7 s$ P" y# s: I6 jLiving in different place, people could experience differernt ways of life as well as different characteristics and customs. Living in city has obvious advantages. There are enough restaurants, supermarkets, and shopping malls to meet the basic needs of life as well as parks,cinemas and musemus(museums) to meet citizens’ culture demands（这一句不错）. While people who live in the country could breath fresh air every day. life is quite（quiet） and calm there.( And thus it is wise to live in different places in different periods to enjoy the more advantages.) A good case in points is the experience of my grandparents. They studied and worked in a big city for nearly 20 years. After they retired, they moved to country where scenery is so beautiful to enjoy a dignified retirement. In different periods, they choose the most proper environment to live.(感觉例子和论点有一点脱节，中间再过渡一下比较好)+ i2 C1 T$ z( n* s5 a
With the development of new technologies, the cost of life has been decreased. There is no need to worry about cost of moving both in money and risk. Compared to the condition many years before, people dare not to leave（有些别扭，people daren't leave） the place where they live from genertation(generation) to generation at that time because they have no ability to build new life in a short time. While in morden time, people could adapt to new life quickly when they pursue high quality of life.(这一段论点很有好，很独特。)* i: f7 U2 z6 ?6 p
In conclution, Taking all the factors mentioned above,we may safely reach the concluction that move to another place in modern time is a better way of life than just live in one place for all life.(结尾最好能突出一下自己的文章中的论点，单纯用一个better不太足够，就换成 more benefits for career, enjoy more fun, more convenience to move. )
1. 整体结构和论点都不错。例证有些地方不太充分 和贴切。
2. 有一些词语和表达比较生僻。
3. 结尾最好能小小总结一下，不用太多，只要把论点的关键词给出来就好。

heqiang_1001UID: 2607349

10月14号作业
it was easier to make a success in the past than people now
As the development of new technologies, people ’ s daily life has become more and more convenient and comfortable. While the intenseness of competition between people has also been increased in modern society. Nowadays, there is a controversial discussion that it was easier to make a success in the past than people now. As we know, success means the achievement of something people desired,planned,or attempted.Cosidering various demands of modern people both in material and spiritual life, I don't think success is easier to make now than in the past.

There is no denying that people in 21 century have more access to the latest technology and information. Countless new inventions and technology has been applied to improve people's life equality, so that life can be easier in modern society. From the basic needs of shelter and food to the exploration of outer space, the progress of human civil iz ation was marked by tremendously rapid and ever-accelerating change. However, the point of view that success is easy to achieve in modern society because of these developments are presenting something without sufficient proof. Though life equality improved and advanced instruments brought convenience for people's work, people are pursuing larger goals with a high level of skill and knowledge. When people under the same high develo p ped external conditions, all of them have the same chance. Thus, they should also make great efforts to achieve what they desired and what they want in this competitive circumstances.  

On the other hand, economic development of the world is materially unbalanced. People in develo p ping country gain less opportunities in education and other aspects. If they want achieve great success in this world, they should put more efforts compared with some other people who have more chances and better learning and working environment. While, people of different region in the past, without such close communication, don't need to compete with people in other areas. Thus, they are more easy to achieve their goal under the same circumstances.

In conclusion, Taking all the factors mentioned above,we may safely reach the conjunction that it was not easy to make a success in the modern society because in this serious competitive society, people face more and more challenge and competition.

感觉好难……写不出例子，全是说理。越写越没话，而且好像好有点跑题……郁闷中。
谢谢批改的同学!

doubledianUID: 2661760

10月14号作业( x# y6 @9 ]2 C
it was easier to make a success in the past than people now
As the development of new technologies, people ’ s daily life has become more and more convenient and comfortable. While the intenseness（我在字典上查的没这个词。。。intense是adj） of competition between people has also been increased in modern society. Nowadays, there is a controversial discussion that it was easier to make a success in the past than people now. As we know, success means the achievement of something people desired, planned, or attempted. Cosidering（拼错了吧） various demands of modern people both in material and spiritual life, I don't think success is easier to make now than in the past. 9 N3 H+ z5 `4 |0 B" @7 c, u9 @
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There is no denying that people in （不用加the吗？我记得好像不知道谁说过，在写作文的时候如果出现数字最好用英文直接表达，不要用阿拉伯数字写出来）21 century have more access to the latest technology and information. Countless new inventions and technology has been applied to improve people's life equality, so that life can be easier in modern society. From the basic needs of shelter and food to the exploration of outer space, the progress of human civil iz ation（这个地方咋了？？拼错了？） was marked by tremendously rapid and ever-accelerating change. However, the point of view that success is easy to achieve in modern society because of these developments are presenting something without sufficient proof. （好长的一句，写的有点问题）Though life equality improved and advanced instruments brought convenience for people's work, people are pursuing larger goals with a high level of skill and knowledge. When people under the same high developped（拼错了） external conditions, all of them have the same chance. Thus, they should also make great efforts to achieve what they desired and what they want in this competitive circumstances（这个地方有复数了，前面怎么还有this啊）.  ( B# G6 n! u1 _3 ?6 h8 J2 f5 J

On the other hand, economic development of the world is materially unbalanced. People in develo p ping country gain less (fewer)opportunities in education and other aspects. If they want achieve great success in this world, they should put more efforts compared with some other people who have more chances and better learning and working environment. While, people of different region in the past, without such close communication, don't need to compete with people in other areas. Thus, they are more easy(easier0to achieve their goal under the same circumstances.

In conclusion, Taking all the factors mentioned above, we may safely reach the conjunction that it was not easy to make a success in the modern society because in this serious competitive society, people face more and more challenge and competition.
正如你所说的，貌似论证方面不太好，再就是有点不细心，但是整体来说我认为还是可以的，继续加油！

HYPS2011UID: 2618437

As the development of new technologies, people ’ s daily life has become more and more convenient and comfortable. While the intenseness of competition between people has also been increased in modern society. Nowadays, there is a controversial discussion that （whether） it was easier to make a success in the past than (do )people now. As we know, success means the achievements of something people desired, planned, or attempted. Cosidering(considering) various demands of modern people both in material and spiritual life, I don't think success is easier to make now than in the past.

There is no denying that people in 21 century(in the 21st century) have more access to the latest technology and information. Countless new inventions and technology has been applied to improve people's life equality (quality), so that life can be easier in modern society. From the basic needs of shelter and food to the exploration of outer space, the progress of human civil iz ation was marked by tremendously rapid and ever-accelerating change. However, the point of view that success is easy to achieve in modern society because of these developments are presenting something without sufficient proof. Though life equality improved and advanced instruments brought convenience for people's work, people are pursuing larger goals with a high level of skill and knowledge. When people under the same high develo p ped external conditions, all of them have the same chance. Thus, they should also make great efforts to achieve what they desired and what they want in this competitive circumstances.
句子不错哈 这一段。

On the other hand, economic development of the world is materially unbalanced. People in develo p ping country gain less opportunities in education and other aspects. If they want(to) achieve great success in this world, they should put more efforts compared with some other people who have more chances and better learning and working environment. While, people of different regions in the past, without such close communication, don't need to compete with people in other areas. Thus, they are more easy (easier)to achieve their goal under the same circumstances.

In conclusion, Taking all the factors mentioned above,we may safely reach the conjunction that it was (is)not easy to make a success in the modern society because in this serious competitive society, people face more and more challenges and competitions

不错哈！可以加入些例子 更好

heqiang_1001UID: 2607349

10.16 years from now, people will have more leisure time
With the burgeoning of science and technology, people’s quality of life has been improved in various aspects.However,drastic pressure as well as intense competition in modern society has also increased.Nowadays,there is a controversial discussion that whether people have more leisure time years from now. This problem is much debated one in that it affects everybody in their daily life.When it comes to me, I definitely believe that convenient and flourished as life is in modern time, people has more leisure time indeed.

Sociology have put great emphasis on the importance of quality of life, which is as important as life itself. Both material demands and cultural demands are essential factor about our quality of life.To put the academic debate, I think it's the new technology and science       that contribute to such a convenient and harmonious society. Saving a lot of time is one of an outstanding merits of modern machines.For example, Thinking of the fact that people spend several days on sending a letter in the past, there is no denying that communicating freely and easily through Internet or phone saves much time for we human’s daily life. Thus, people conduct their work more effectively and efficiently than before. The opportunities and chances to relax and entertain themselves from hard work has been greatly improved, which is synonymous with the fact that people have more leisure time if they want.  

Besides,Apart from the argument above,a more essential factor that must be taken into consideration is that life are more flourish and picturesque. A good case in point is the experience of last generation of our parents. When my mother had a date with my father in 1980’s, a movie projecting on a large open square gave her great impression till now. It’s because they seldom had a chance to enjoy a movie at that time, which is a luxurious entertainment for them. While, young people have numerous way of dating such as skating, singing in KTVs and so on,owing to economics’s rapidly developing.As the matter of fact, these examples are defying enumeration. Thus, without such a flourish environment, people can’t have so much choices to spend their leisure time.   

Admittedly, numerous though the advantages that development of technology enjoys are, we could not ignore that people’s living pressure nowadays which make most modern people spend all their leisure time to learn or to do the work in order to be come more competitive.

In conclusion, Taking all the factors mentioned above,we may safely reach the conjunction that people have more leisure time from the benefit of new technology and flourish life.Only by developing technology continuously and changing people’s mind of relaxing, can a people do their work in a more effective way and really enjoy the leisure time after their hard work.

觉得第二个论点又写左了……唉。
语言、句型、词汇还是有点贫乏，麻烦修改的同学了！谢谢！

heqiang_1001UID: 2607349

10月17号作业
To truly understand world event, we should get our news from newspaper; television cannot provide enough information.

Nowadays, some people hold the opinion that television cannot provide enough information so that we should obtain our news from newspaper to truly understand world event. Although I agree that news reports and writing documents could provide a rather detailed description of the event as well as some comments from the reporters, there is far more merits,which news report in words cannot provide, owned by television and video. This opinion overstated the comparative significance of newspaper.

First of all, news report with a video recording condition of the scene on television is usually more accurate and more convincing than a written record.It is extremely doubtful whether a journalist could recount the invent completely and objectively(in complete and objective detail) no matter how keen and skilled he is. For instance, could we feel the tension and excitement of the winning touchdown at the World Cup from the newspaper? Could we enjoy the action and story developed through impressive dance on the newspaper? Remembering the sudden attack of the World Trade Centre, any writing reports are too pale to express that immense trepidation and that astonishing scene of September 11 Attacks in New Work. These are important world events in contemporary life which we may put in a time capsule. Only by these video record on television, could we capture our life and times for descendants and historians.

In addition, It is the news from newspaper that reflect some attitudes and opinions of the authors through their words, at least to some extent. Guided by the authors minds toward things that happened just recently, Individuals may be lose their own comprehensions and judgements about these events. Moreover, there is no denying that most of mainstream medias serve for the governments. From this point of view, Neither the newspaper nor the television could provide us the truest and the most objective information for public considering some public opinions which may has negative impacts on the domination of government. A good case in points is the experience of myself. I prefer to read some blogs on the Internet after I have already got frames of today’s major events from newspaper or television. By reading these articles from different people, I definitely get deep knowledge of most events for I have to think carefully, make a judgement between different attitudes and develop my own conclusion.

In the final analysis, from the foregoing discussion, we could safely reach the conclusion that television has its own merits to help us get some fresh and direct information compared to newspaper. Every thing has its own merits, so we should balance its pros and cons. Only by getting information from both newspaper and television as well as thinking deeply by ourselves, could we truly understand the world event.
   
总结：
1、开头还是不会写，总是中规中矩的，而且在开头中没有列出己方观点。
2、还是没有限时，没有independent ，查了词典和老美范文里的一些表达。（人家为啥就写得那么好昵~~）明天一定开始要限时写。

lmsleeperUID: 2559158

To truly understand world event, we should get our news from newspaper; television cannot provide enough information.Nowadays, some people hold the opinion that television cannot provide enough information so that we should obtain our news from newspaper to truly understand world event. Although I agree that news reports and writing(written) documents (此处指代不太明确，news report既包括报纸也包括电视，能否直接说“literal report”)could provide a rather detailed description of the event as well as some comments from the reporters, there is far more merits,which news report in words cannot provide, owned by television and video. This opinion overstated the comparative significance of newspaper. I4 {: B+ q) q3 g
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First of all, news report with a video recording condition of the scene on television is usually more accurate and more convincing than a written record.It is extremely doubtful whether a journalist could recount the invent（event） completely and objectively(in complete and objective detail) （说记者不客观好像缺乏依据，后面的例子也不能证明这点。）no matter how keen and skilled he is. For instance, could we feel the tension and excitement of the winning touchdown at the World Cup from the newspaper? Could we enjoy the action and story developed through impressive dance on the newspaper? Remembering the sudden attack of the World Trade Centre, any writing reports are too pale to express that immense trepidation and that astonishing scene of September 11 Attacks in New Work. These are important world events in contemporary life which we may put in a time capsule. Only by these video record on television, could we capture our life and times for descendants and historians.（个人感觉本段其实在说文字没有video形象生动，打动人。主题句最好点明这点。）
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In addition, It is the news from newspaper that reflect some attitudes and opinions of the authors through their words, （at least可以不要） to some extent. Guided by the authors minds toward things that happened just recently, Individuals may be lose their own comprehensions and judgements about these events. Moreover, there is no denying that most of mainstream medias serve for the governments.（这个...有点绝对了吧，没证据啊。） From this point of view, Neither the newspaper nor the television could provide us the truest and the most objective information for public, considering some public opinions which may has negative impacts on the domination of government. A good case in points is the experience of myself. I prefer to read some blogs on the Internet after I have already got frames of today’s major events from newspaper or television. By reading these articles from different people, I definitely get deep knowledge of most events for I have to think carefully, make a judgement between different attitudes and develop my own conclusion.（本段主题不太明确,是说 不管电视还是报纸都不能提供足够的和可靠的信息 ？最好在主题句写明。）
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" ?, d7 F# f$ ?$ m9 f, BIn the final analysis, from the foregoing discussion, we could safely reach the conclusion that television has its own merits to help us get some fresh and direct information compared to newspaper. Every thing has its own merits, so we should balance its pros and cons. Only by getting information from both newspaper and television as well as thinking deeply by ourselves, could we truly understand the world event.（最后终于点明观点。其实第一段最好就明确观点，我开始还以为你支持TV反对newspaper呢）

总的看法：
用了很多高级词汇，句式多变，例子也比较形象，但文章的逻辑性有待加强。
还有就是长句过多，影响了行文的流畅和节奏感。
其实文以载道，能表达清楚观点的文字就是好文字，不要为了复杂而复杂。

建议：1、先写论证段，再写第一段和最后一段，这样也许能避免写离题。
2、一点小窍门：在一个意群结束前，尽量不要变换主语，这样能帮助读者跟上作者的思路，使文章不至于有太大的跳跃性。
其实这些毛病我也有，而且我的写作基本功有问题，语法拼写错误不断...
祝共同进步！

XXNSHUID: 2714313

麦子10.19 作业（我自己的账号登不上了）
该重视学习concepts &ideas呢，还是重视学习facts呢？
Nowadays, there is controversial discussion about which is more important between concepts and ideas study and facts learning. This problem is much debated one in that it affects everybody in their daily life. When it comes to me, I definitely regard the former as a better choice with the reasons that follows.

Considering various facts in all kinds of aspects, there is no denying that individuals couldn’t spend that abundant time on learning every facts. Thus, generalizing theories and concepts hiding under facts has definitely improved our learning efficiency. Taking a simple physical concept as an example, as we know a body falling toward the earth is one of the most common motions in our natural which, however, is also a typical example of constant accelerative motion. Had we learned the concept of constant acceleration, students could get a more easier and clearer understanding of the principle about body falling. Putting more emphasis on the learning on the concepts and ideas could help student learn more at the same period compared to the way of learning just facts.

Concepts and ideas generalized by facts in a certain field could been applied in another fields or being used in our daily life. That is to say, learning concepts and theory deeply could bring great benefits to us from which we may find surprisingly that it’s magical that we could explain a lot of things in our daily life with one theory. By which means could people have been stimulated more interests and potentials. A good case in point is the example of myself. After I had learned the concept about the theory of decreasing marginal benefit in my economic class, within a gradual deep comprehension of it, I gradually felt that there are far more phenomena which can be explained by the theory not only the economic matters. A sense of achievement and a rather strong desire to know more about this interesting subject has been risen in my heart with my findings,which could be achieved by learn some economic facts only.

Admittedly, numerous though the advantages that learning the concept and ideas enjoys are, we could ignore that the importance of facts study. Facts are fountainheads that we get our concepts and ideas from and are the oils where we will put the concepts and ideas into practise. We should also facts learning seriously purposing on a more practical understanding of the concepts.

Taking all the factors  mentioned above,we may safely reach the conclusion that we should draw more emphasis on the importance of learning concepts. Though facts has its own merits, we should balance its pros and cons. Improvement of learning efficiency and strong interests as well as deep comprehension are things that we focus on.

总结：
第二个观点似乎不是很有说服力，而且和第一个观点有点重复。
语言干巴巴的，例子也不生动。写着就感觉很没意思，呃~~

谢谢修改的同学！

半夏之北UID: 2517498

10.16 years from now, people will have more leisure time7 V4 b+ l* |- J8 {
With the burgeoning of science and technology, people’s quality of life has been improved in various aspects.However,drastic pressure as well as intense competition in modern society has（have） also increased.Nowadays,there is a controversial discussion that whether people have more leisure time years from now. This problem is (a) much debated one in that it affects everybody in their daily life.When it comes to me, I definitely believe that convenient and flourished as life is in modern time, people has more leisure time indeed.

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Sociology have put great emphasis on the importance of quality of life, which is as important as life itself. Both material(这指的是什么啊） demands and cultural demands（这和前面有点重复） are essential factors about our quality of life.（可以用play a key role的句型）To put the academic debate, I think it's the new technology and science       that contribute to such a convenient and harmonious society. Saving a lot of time is one of an outstanding merits of modern machines.For example, Thinking of the fact that people spend several days on sending a letter in the past, there is no denying that communicating freely and easily through Internet or phone saves much time for we human’s daily life. Thus, people conduct their work more effectively and efficiently than before. The opportunities and chances to relax and entertain themselves from hard work has been greatly improved, which is synonymous with the fact that people have more leisure time if they want.  这句没有主题句，而且前两句和主题好像没什么关系

Besides,Apart from the argument above,a more essential factor that must be taken into consideration is that life are（is） more flourish and picturesque. A good case in point is the experience of last generation of our parents. When my mother had a date with my father in 1980’s, a movie projecting on a large open square gave her great impression till now. It’s because they seldom had a chance to enjoy a movie at that time, which is a luxurious entertainment for them. While, young people have numerous way of dating such as skating, singing in KTVs and so on,owing to economics’s rapidly developing.As the matter of fact, these examples are defying enumeration.（这句没看懂） Thus, without such a flourish environment, people can’t have so much choices to spend their leisure time.   这个论点有点跑题了，跟have more leisure time没什么关系啊 。你可以说人们的观念变了比如宁愿牺牲工资而要求享受更多的闲暇时间

Admittedly, numerous though the advantages that development of technology enjoys are, we could not ignore that people’s living pressure nowadays which make most modern people spend all their leisure time to learn or to do the work in order to be come more competitive. 2 i.


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In conclusion, Taking all the factors mentioned above,we may safely reach the conjunction that people have more leisure time from the benefit of new technology and flourish life.Only by developing technology continuously and changing people’s mind of relaxing, can a people do their work in a more effective way and really enjoy the leisure time after their hard work.

用词和句型都很丰富~~但是论点选的不太好

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Nowadays, there is a controversial discussion about which is more important between concepts and ideas study and facts learning.这种句子最好只用一个and  This problem is much debated one in that it affects everybody in their daily life. When it comes to me, I definitely regard the former as a better choice with the reasons that follows.

Considering various facts in all kinds of aspects, there is no denying denial that individuals couldn’t spend that abundant time on learning every facts. Thus, generalizing theories and concepts hiding under facts has definitely improved our learning efficiency. Taking a simple physical concept as an example, as we know a body falling toward the earth is one of the most common motions in our natural which, however, is also a typical example of constant accelerative motion. Had we learned the concept of constant acceleration, students could get a more easier and clearer understanding of the principle about body falling. Putting more emphasis on the learning on the concepts and ideas could help student learn more at the same period compared to the way of learning just facts.8 E: r, R$ y, P0 ?8 m9 [

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Concepts and ideas generalized by facts in a certain field could been applied in another fields or being used in our daily life. That is to say, learning concepts and theory deeply could bring great benefits to us from which we may find surprisingly that it’s magical that we could explain a lot of things in our daily life with one theory. By which means could people 我觉得有问题 难道是倒装？不大懂 have been stimulated more interests and potentials. A good case in point is the example of myself. After I had learned the concept about the theory of decreasing marginal benefit in my economic class, within a gradual deep comprehension of it, I gradually felt that there are far more phenomena which can be explained by the theory not only the economic matters. A sense of achievement and a rather strong desire to know more about this interesting subject has been risen 被动就不用的了in my heart with my findings,which could be achieved by learn some economic facts only.2 S) v( r* K" I8 t

Admittedly, numerous though the advantages that learning the concept and ideas enjoys are, we could ignore that the importance of facts study.有点武断了  不能说ignore Facts are fountainheads that we get our concepts and ideas from and are the oils where we will put the concepts and ideas into practise. We should also facts learning seriously purposing on a more practical understanding of the concepts.这句话的动词呢

Taking all the factors  mentioned above,we may safely reach the conclusion that we should draw more emphasis on the importance of learning concepts. Though facts has its own merits, we should balance its pros and cons. Improvement of learning efficiency and strong interests as well as deep comprehension are things that we focus on.' _) \$ C


第一个论点  讲认识概念可以加深理解  第二个讲可以拓展知识  感觉有点单独 可以 comparetively speaking 一下  

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10.23作业 大学应不应该要求所有的学生都学习除了本国文化以外的文化？
Nowadays, there is an controversial discussion about whether university should demand all the students to learn other cultures except their native culture. Some people insist that it shouldn't  be everyone's basic course considering students should focus on their own major. However, in my opinion, this argument is too absolute. Keeping some knowledge of different cultures could indeed bring some benefits to people's life,because of this rapidly developed international cooperation.
With this rapidly economic development nowadays, international cooperation and communication becoming more and more important. No matter which subject individual specializes in, people should keep some basic knowledge of foreign culture under this globalization environment. For instance, at the beginning of this global economic depression last year, I have read "Great Game", which tells about the history of the wall street and the economic development of American from 1653 to 2004.American and its wall street are definitely the centre of global economy. Owing to my own understanding about American economic culture from this book,I have come to my own conclusion about the reason of this depression and which role it will play in human history process. Having more knowledge about other cultures help to understand world events more deeply.It's the responsibility of our new generation that pay close to the world trends in various aspects.

On the other hand, learn foreign culture could also help people understand their native culture more strongly and adequately. During people's growing up, their native culture could been seen in all aspects of life. They have a deep knowledge about it. While, this  subtle influence limit further development of their own culture, at least to some extent. Because people couldn't recognize its weak points which may be passed on the culture from one generation to generation. Thus, it is necessary for our university students to learn foreign culture. Only by this, could we put an objective perspective on our own culture and absorb merits of other culture.

To sum up, we could safely come to the conclusion that university has responsibility to set course about foreign cultures for all students. Knowing more deeply about world events and their own cultures are the reasons that I support to this argument.

总结：1、开头没有明确点出论点。
        2、第二段没有例子
        3、语言仍然简单贫乏。
写的还是有些费劲，不知道怎么提高，平时看的咋就用不进来呢……哎。感谢批改的同学。

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10.23作业
大学应不应该要求所有的学生都学习除了本国文化以外的文化？  A: C* b4 a6 K* [0 N& b" y
Nowadays, there is an(a) controversialdiscussion about whether university(universities)should demand all the students to learn other cultures except their nativeculture. Some people insist that it shouldn't be everyone's basic course(s) considering students should focus on their ownmajor(此句没有明确表明观点，只是说other foreigncultures not belong to the basic courses of students). However,in my opinion, this argument is too absolute. Keeping some knowledge of different cultures could indeed bringsome benefits to people's life, because of(后面是从句，应去掉) this rapidly developed international cooperation.9 l# T+ ]: A' Y; q* t

With this(the) rapidly economic developmentnowadays, international cooperation and communication (are)becoming more and more important. No matter whichsubject(no matter what subjects,你看这样的表达对不？QQ聊) individual specializes in, people should keep some basic knowledgeof foreign culture under this(the) globalizationenvironment. For instance, at the beginning of this(the,this这个：用于指当前、邻近或刚提及的人或物) global economic depression lastyear, I have read "Great Game", which tells about the history of the wall street(Wall Street) and the economic developmentof American(America,美国) from 1653 to 2004. American and its wall street are(is)definitely the centre of global economy. Owing to my own understanding about (the) American economic culture from this book, I havecome to my own conclusion about the reason of this depression and which role it will play in human history process（后半句什么意思）. Having more knowledge about other cultureshelp to understand world events more deeply(这句话好像有点小问题哦). It’s the responsibility of our newgeneration that pay close to the world trends in various aspects.
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On the other hand, learn foreign culture(s) couldalso help people understand their native culture more strongly and adequately.During people's growing up, their native culture could been(be)seen in all aspects of life. They have a deep knowledge about it. While, this  subtle influence limit furtherdevelopment of their own culture, at least to some extent. Because peoplecouldn't recognize its weak points which may be passed on the culture from onegeneration to generation. Thus, it is necessary for our university students tolearn foreign culture(前面的论点不能得出这个观点吧). Only by this, could we put anobjective perspective on our own culture and absorb merits of other culture(s).' L% k0 t  }/ V5 e! K
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To sum up, we could safely come to the conclusion that university hasresponsibility to set course(s) about foreigncultures for all students. Knowing more deeply about world events and their owncultures are the reasons(这里应用形容词吧，如必须的，可行的...) that I support to this argument.9 F; c, C8 Q& a9 m$ c9 U0 ~; }% U& c/ S

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写的还是有些费劲，不知道怎么提高，平时看的咋就用不进来呢……哎。感谢批改的同学。

只说一些不好的地方了，优点我就不讲了，呵呵，有一些语法错误，代词this,the之间的用法要多注意，在使用句子结构时个人觉得还是从简单到复杂，还有一些问题可以QQ聊。谢谢你给我修改~~~