麦子的作文作业 & 20天冲刺日记

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自改  10.23作业 大学应不应该要求所有的学生都学习除了本国文化以外的文化？
Nowadays, there is an controversial discussion about whether university should demand all the students to learn other cultures except their native culture. Some people insist that it shouldn't  be everyone's basic course considering students should focus on their own major. However, in my opinion, this argument is too absolute. Keeping some knowledge of different cultures could indeed bring some benefits to people's life,because of this rapidly developed international cooperation.

Nowadays，university students are busy studying courses related to their major in order to get a high competitive position in future job searhing makets. While globalization is becoming more and more fashionable in every aspects in our society. Under this circumstance, there is an conroversial discussion about whether university should require all the students to learn foreign cultures. From my own perspective, I firmly support the argument that students should learn foreign cultures.

Learning foreign culture make great benefits to students deep understanding and their futher development. First of all, It would enlarge their horizons by learn more cultures. For instance, at the beginning of the global economic depression last year, I have read "Great Game", which tells about the history of the Wall Street and the economic development of America from 1653 to 2004.America and its wall street are definitely the centre of global economy. Owing to American economic culture learned from this book,I have come to my own conclusion about the reason of this depression and which role it would play in human history process(the process of human history). Moreover, with this rapidly economic development nowadays, international cooperation and communication becoming more and more important.For example, it is hardly to imagine that a university graducate could do successful business with foreigners without any knowledge of other cultures. The university students are the hope of a nation and they have the responsibilities to make the world better. Thus, to prepare for this mission, it is necessary for them to study diverse cultures.


学习狂狂作文：一段里可以分三个小观点，从三面来阐述一个总论点。一句论述+一个例子。

On the other hand, learn foreign culture could also help people understand their native culture more strongly and adequately. Only when you put your native culture in the whole picture can you find out the unique characteristic it possesses. During people's growing up, their native culture could been seen in all aspects of life. They have a deep knowledge about it. While, this  subtle influence limit further development of their own culture, at least to some extent. Because people couldn't recognize its weak points which may be passed on the culture from one generation to generation. Thus, it is necessary for our university students to learn foreign culture. Only by this, could we put an objective perspective on our own culture and absorb merits of other culture.

To sum up, we could safely come to the conclusion that university has responsibility to set course about foreign cultures for all students. Knowing more deeply about world events and their own cultures are the reasons that I support to this argument.

Indeed, we should attach importance to our native culture and publicize our culture if possible. To do better in these globalized society, it is indispenable for us to learn foreign culture to protect our native culture, learn excellent knoeldge and social development. In conclude, the university students should play a important role in acquire knowledge of other cultures. I strongly agree that the college students should be acquired to study foreign culture.

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24号作业  hen relaxing, some people like to spend time alone. What's your opinion?

Nowadays, with the burgeoning of science and technology, people under drastic pressure are occupied with busy work. Under this situation, There is an controversial discussion about whether people should spend time alone to relax or not. When it comes to me, I firmly hold the opinion that the way how we relax depends on different circumstances of our work or study.

Full days of communicating with different people are definitely so arduous that people who do this kind of job have no more interest to communicate with people after their work. The most enjoyable relaxing for these individuals may be just sitting in a deep armchair watching the sunset which is always blocked by the forest of the building in cities. At this time, hardly anyone want to be disturbed. They are bathed in their own quite emotions and feelings alone. As an minister in our students'union, plenty of works occupied most of my leisure time. I did more to keep away from all my friends or schoolmates than to talk or communicate with them when I felt tired. A book of classic work as well as a cup of coffee would bring me to an exhilarating experience at that time.

Admittedly, human should have private space to relax themselves. However, we should also pay some attention to abundant and colourful world at our leisure time, especially for those people who have no chance to communicate with other people during their work. For instance, some programmers are focusing on writing codes all day long . What they should is just to try their best to complete tasks by themselves. Lacking of communicating with outer environment brings negative influences on both their healths and their lives. It makes matter worse if they continuously keep alone at their leisure time. Thus, these type of people should open their mind and leave their time and attention to their family, friends or coworkers, which is also a good way for them to relax.

Indeed, we should attach importance to the way how we relax to ensure our health level and improve quality of life. It is better for us to devise different ways to release pressure under different situations.

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20天冲刺倒计时    100+  30+25+20+25

刚刚看了那个四战的帖子，看的我直想哭，我真害怕……
我一点都没有信心，我甚至没有勇气说我要冲刺100+，因为我已经不知道自己的水平就究竟在什么地方。
二战了……容不得闪失。昨天知道，连我家在SY的老房子都为我牺牲，被老妈卖掉了，那个我度过了小学初中和高中十几年的家，心里很难受。
不能抱怨了。开贴监督自己。
我还是要相信会有回报的，我付出的一切都会有回报的。

请大家监督，同时共勉！

10.25~11.4  每天任务

阅读：黄金29篇  每天3篇+分析   1.5h   (现在做到23篇，第一遍还有6篇，两天做完，开始第二遍。）
        TIME 看新闻        每天半小时
        单词         从4级开始过一遍 4级+6级+托福   每天300个。 1h

听力：
        高分120    两个加起来还有差不多10个test。一天一个test +分析  2h   （10天听完）
        TTC         一天一课。 认真听，记笔记，0.5h  
        delta        再过一边，重点：学科词汇，听篇章逻辑结构。先复述，然后看文本找不会的地方            2h

口语：按分类提纲准备全部1、2题段子，注意说话的语气和感觉，不是单纯背诵。  2h  
         4~6 题 口语真经    1套                                                                0.5h
         delta听完了，当天的内容，跟读。                                                    0.5h

作文： 美利坚小组   作业完成并上传        争取1h 搞定。作文一定要限时。
          互改+学习其他人的好作文          1h
          汉译英篇章翻译    老美范文+新三   各一篇       1.5h  

一定要做到！！！

时间分配：
早上5点45起  （手机坚决放床下，不能那上床）
6点~7点30      互改作文+学习习作+Time      上个星期差不多是这样，基本可以实现
8点~12点        汉译英篇章翻译+TTC+delta         自习室
中午                吃饭睡觉洗头洗衣服处理工作等等一切杂事
2点~5点          背单词+口语                             自习室
5点半~10点      作文+阅读+高分120                自习室（带电脑）
回寝室             口语真经+白天没完成的任务         
完成了睡觉

也许这个计划太过于理想和细化了，我知道自己可能还会有被牵扯精力的时候。某些工作某些饭局某些必须去上的课程。
但……必须保证的有：阅读，作文，高分120. 以及 篇章翻译。

麦子加油！！！！！！

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先汇报今天任务完成情况：
1、阅读tpo9 3篇分别错：3、6、2   所有的概括要点题都错了。看了这个是弱中之弱了。
2、高分120 2 Test 1   错12个，尤其是animal demonstication ，错了4个。
3、看了半小时time， 没啥感觉
4、摘录了伤口，旸旸的人作文里的例子。

今天各种耽误，任务很多都没有完成……惭愧一下。赶紧把配送的作业做完，明天早起。！

感谢阿呆对口语的点评,总结如下：
1、在维持速度的同时，语音语调尽可能抑扬顿挫，不要总是一个频率。
2、争取一次录满意。对时间有概念，多长时间逻辑分析多长时间例子。慢慢练，慢慢摸索。
3、在现有速度下，通过适当停顿和强调，将内容变成一个一个意群，还不是一口去全说完。是听者能够很好的理解。
4、练习时，自己就有主次、缓急和递进的感觉，保证说完想要和需要说的。

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24号作业  when relaxing, some people like to spend time alone. What's your opinion?

Nowadays, with the burgeoning of science and technology, people under drastic pressure are occupied with busy work. Under(既然前面已经用过一次under了，那就换成in吧，而且感觉一般是under the circumstances, in the situation) this situation, There is an（a） controversial discussion about whether people should spend time alone to relax or not. When it comes to me, I firmly hold the opinion that the way how we relax depends on different circumstances of our work or study.

Full days of communicating with different people are definitely so arduous that people who do this kind of job have no more interest to communicate with people after their work. (这句话很长，不过不很简洁，还感觉像是翻译过来的，这样改改可能比较好：Having a job which needs to communicate with different people all day long, he or she(本来想用people,后来发现会与前面那个people指代不清) definitely feels so arduous that he or she doesn't have any interest to chat with others after work.)The most enjoyable relaxing way to relax for these individuals may be just sitting in a deep armchair and watching the sunset, (因为关系不太紧密，属于补充性内容，which前加个逗号更好)which is always blocked by the forest of the building in cities. At this time, hardly does anyone want to be disturbed(hardly 开头的句子要部分倒装，助动词提前). They are bathed（这个词不太好了，我专门查了字典，主要还是洗澡的意思。换成immersed\indulged好些） in their own quite emotions and feelings alone. As an（a） minister in our students'union, plenty of works occupied most of my leisure time. I did more to keep away from all my friends or schoolmates than to talk or communicate(这两个词意思差不多，用一个就好了) with them when I felt tired. （这里最好也加上个连词，比如moreover\furthermore之类的）A book of classic work as well as a cup of coffee would bring me to an exhilarating（好词） experience at that time.
例子都挺好的，不过结构略显松散。因为你第一段说明了要case by case，那么我觉得后面的两段内容用on one hand, on the other hand开头会更有逻辑。而后你自己在学生会任部长的那个例子，前面最好也来个for example之类的词，这样一目了然，判官一看就知道你是要举例子来支持自己的观点。有时候多那么一两个词，结构关系就能清晰不少。

Admittedly, human beings should have private space to relax themselves. However, we should also pay some attention to abundant and colourful world at in our leisure time, （一个人休息并不意味着生活就不colorful了呀，只是说和很多人在一起也能使人放松，让人开心 ）especially for those people who have no chance to communicate with other people during their work（有啥子工作不能和人讲话么？呵呵，思路可以适当放宽一点，不一定说一定是这种工作性质的人才需要与他人一起娱乐放松的,或者不必说得那么绝对，只是与人交流的机会少一点）. For instance, some programmers are focusing on writing codes all day long . What they should do is just to try their best to complete tasks by themselves. Lacking of communicating with outer environment(外部环境？呵呵，外国人不一定懂哦，前面这些直接说成lacking communication) brings negative influences on both their healths and their lives. It makes matter worse if they continuously keep alone at during their leisure time. Thus, these types of people should open their minds and leave their time and attention to their familyies, friends or coworkers, which is also a good way for them to relax.5 T/ A/ p

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Indeed, we should attach importance to the way how we relax to ensure our health level(chinglish) and improve quality of life.（有时候一句话表达不好可以写成两句话的，比如这个就能改成we should attach importance to the way how we  relax, since an enjoyable relaxation could not only maintain our mental health but also improve our lives） It is better for us to devise(你是想说diversify吗？) different ways to release pressure under different situations.

总评：词汇和语法都不错，主要是结构方面需要完善一下，让各个部分联系得更紧密。
        另外思路方面还应该拓宽一点，我猜你是因为第一部分写了那些工作中常与人打交道的人，所以第二部分就想的是那些不怎么和人打交道的工作。
        这个题目好像就是我第一次托福的题目，当时只有22分，感觉这个挺难写的。

看到你的计划，很感动，能这么努力的付出，一定会有好结果的。不过还是要适当休息，保持清醒的大脑也很重要。家里的事也别去想，父母都是尽自己所能支持孩子的。

给你改得挺严的哈。其实每个人的思路都有些不一样，我是以我的理解来改的，所以提的建议比较多啦。希望能对你有些帮助。

加油哦！

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第一次综合写作   高分120 practise 3

The listening material is mainly discussing that giant-impact theory that the Moon form from the earth. However, the reading passage contends that this theory is questionable. The professor's lecture casts doubts on the reading by several points that are contrary to what are stated in the passage.

First of all, in contract to the argument stated in the passage that no trace of a huge mark on the surface of the Earth has been found, so that there is no evidence to prove that a huge collision took place, the professor holds the view that the Earth had been smacked about four billion years ago, the huge mark or other evidence may be disappeared by force of time. It's also that rock collided the Earth for millions of years. No evidence could be found in the map of planet is natural for it may disappear long ago.

However, the lecture opposes to the point made in the passage that there should be some similar in composition between the Earth and the Moon, if the Moon came from the Earth. The professor claims that we should take different environment into consideration. Take water as an example, The Moon has been heated entirely, so the temperature there is much higher than on the Earth. The water has been evaporated and got to the space. That is why there is no water on the surface of the  Moon.

Furthermore, while the reading passage demonstrates that the density of the Moon is much lower than that of the Earth, the lecture maintains a different point of view, the professor indicates that the Moon are not from the core of Earth, so its density should be consistent to the earth surface, which evidence has already been found.

To sum up, the contents in the reading passage are totally contradicted by the lecture and the lecture advocates totally different ideas on the topics made in the reading passage.

发现个问题……打完模板，再看笔记，好多内容竟然忘了……

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先汇报昨天任务完成：
1、英汉翻译：老美范文+新三 各一篇
2、TTC 上课带着耳机听了差不多1个小时。效果一般，一阵明白一阵不明白的。
3、口语作业   第一次一遍录，很混乱
4、综合写作   120 Practice3

呃……昨天下午加小半个晚上，因为某些原因没有学习。不想再被这些影响了。杜绝。加油，抓紧时间。

昨晚12点开始准备今天专业课的presentation，案例比我想象的难多了，弄到临晨4点……早上顺利完成任务，还被表扬了，吼吼，开心下~~不是很困。收拾下把口语点评了去吃饭，然后正式开始今天的学习任务。
今天上午的内容不做了……把下午晚上的完成。

另非常感谢伤口的作文点评，是我遇到过的作文评点中，最认真的了，再次感谢。
作文：语言和语法继续保持，语言坚持积累和应用。重点放在论点展开和文章逻辑结构上。

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27号 独立作文 Agree or disagree: The next twenty years from now on, students will not use printed books any more.

With the burgeoning of science and technology, reading with electric books has played a more and more important role in people's daily life. There is an controversial discussion about whether printed books will not be used twenty years latter. When it comes to me, I definitely disagree with this arguments considering several merits of printed book, which can't be substituted .

Admittedly, the use of  Internet and other electrical instruments has brought a great deal of benefits for our studies by easily achieving plenty of information. However, Much time and energy spent in search of necessary information has decreased our efficiency, at least to some extent. Take a common scene in our daily study as example. When we decide to collect some useful knowledges on the Internet, millions of items, which includes advertisements, news, comments and so on,  has been emerged on our screen as soon as we google it. How could people find what they want in these large amount of information? How could we students to decide which one is correct or subjective or meaningful for us to use? While, printed book has already been selected by editors. The quality has been guaranteed compared to what we read on the Internet. Scientific classification alas help us find what we need easily. By which means, large improvement of efficiency both in time and our energy has come true.

On the other hand, as the  rapidly development of our society, individual pay more and more attention to health. The radiation of the screen as well as long time stimulus to our eyes are something we are forced to focus on. A recent investigation showed that, nearly eighty percent of students'parents appeal to a limited time of their children using computer or other electrical book. Students, especially those who are growing, should pay much attention to protect their eyes and physical fitness. That is another reason that printed book can'be replaced by electric books completely.

Finally, numerous though the advantages that electric resources enjoys are, we should balance its pros and cons.Taking all the factors  mentioned above,we may safely reach the conclusion that printed book cant'be replaced completely after twenty years. High efficiency of searching information and healthy consideration are factors why we choose to read printed books.

拼写错误：
Efficiency completely scientific classification conclusion guarantee
忘记的词：
资源 recourse 替代 replace substitute 收集 classification

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汇报今天任务：
1、阅读  黄金 3篇  不能因为看懂了文章，细节题就不去定位根据记忆写……事实证明……一篇文章错3个细节题，要命…… 单词，单词！一定要看。单词题总是错，哎。
2、听力  BARREN   7/34.  今天 关于文章结构的题错的比较多，how to organise 之类的。还有一篇Lecture错了3个题，应该是没有听明白。明天看一下文本。
3、作文
4、口语   还是得充分准备，45秒没有说满。

下午睡过去了，当补昨天的觉了。3天了，都没有全部完成当天的内容……哎。明天一天没有课，早起，争取把计划贯彻下去。

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23# heqiang_1001

With the burgeoning of science and technology, reading with electric books has played a more and more important role in people's daily life. There is an(a) controversial discussion about whether printed books will not be used twenty years latter. When it comes to me, I definitely disagree with this arguments(argument) considering several merits of printed book, which can't be substituted.

Admittedly, the use of  Internet and other electrical instruments has brought a great deal of benefits for(to) our studies by easily achieving plenty of information. However, Much(much) time and energy spent in(on) search of necessary information has decreased our efficiency, at least to some extent. Take a common scene in our daily study as example. When we decide to collect some useful knowledges(knowledge) on the Internet, millions of items, which includes advertisements, news, comments and so on,  has been emerged on our screen as soon as we google(search，别用网络词汇) it. How could people find what they want in this large amount of information? How could we students to decide which one is correct or subjective or meaningful for us to use? While, printed book has already been selected by editors. The quality has been guaranteed compared to what we read on the Internet. Scientific classification alas help us find what we need easily. By which means, large improvement of efficiency both in time and our energy has come true.

On the other hand, as the  rapidly development of our society, individual pay more and more attention to health. The radiation of the screen as well as long time stimulus to our eyes are something we are forced to focus on. A recent investigation showed that, nearly eighty percent of students'parents appeal to a limited time of their children using computer or other electrical book. Students, especially those who are growing, should pay much attention to protect their eyes and physical fitness. That is another reason that printed book can'be replaced by electric books completely.

Finally, numerous though the advantages that electric resources enjoys are, we should balance its pros and cons.Taking all the factors  mentioned above,we may safely reach the conclusion that printed book cant'be replaced completely after twenty years. High efficiency of searching information and healthy consideration are factors why we choose to read printed books

额啊，总体看了下，没改错别字
1 语法和拼写错误不少
2 文章不少句子太复杂
3 尽量不要用疑问句

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27号 独立作文 Agree or disagree: The next twenty years from now on, students will not use printed books any more.0 k1 f& e& `& {
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21# heqiang_1001 写的很不错，例子充分又有说服力。划线的为经典句式，用的很顺手嘛，红色的为修改部分With the burgeoning of science and technology, reading with （多余）electric books has played a more and more important role in people's daily life. There is an controversial discussion about whether printed books will not be used twenty years latter. When it comes to me, I definitely disagree with this arguments considering several merits of printed book, which can't be substituted .
Admittedly, the use of
Internet and other electrical instruments has brought a great deal of benefits for our studies by easily achieving plenty of information. However, Much time and energy spent in searching of necessary information has decreased our efficiency, at least to some extent. Take a common scene in our daily study as example. When we decide to collect some useful knowledges on the Internet, millions of items, which includes advertisements, news, comments and so on,
has been emerged（要用主动） on our screen as soon as we google it. How could people find what they want in these large amount of information? How could we students to decide which one is correct or subjective or meaningful for us to use（多余）? While, printed book has already been selected by editors. The quality has been guaranteed compared to what we read on the Internet. Scientific classification alas help（s） us find what we need easily. By which means, large improvement of efficiency both in time and our energy has come true.
On the other hand, as（with） the
rapidly development of our society, individual pay more and more attention to health. The radiation of the screen as well as long time stimulus to our eyes are something we are forced to focus on（有点难懂）. A recent investigation showed that, nearly eighty percent of students'parents appeal to a limited time of their children using computer or other electrical book. Students, especially those who are growing, should pay much attention to protect their eyes and physical fitness. That is another reason that printed book can'be replaced by electric books completely.


Finally, numerous though the advantages that electric resources enjoys are, we should balance its pros and cons.Taking all the factors
mentioned above,we may safely reach the conclusion that printed book cant'be replaced completely after twenty years. High efficiency of searching information and healthy consideration are factors why we choose to read printed books., \

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The listening material is mainly discussing that giant-impact theory that the Moon form from the earth. However, the reading passage contends that this theory is questionable. The professor's lecture casts doubts on the reading by several points that are contrary to what are stated in the passage.

First of all, in contract to the argument stated in the passage that no trace of a huge mark on the surface of the Earth has been found, so that there is no evidence to prove that a huge collision took place, the professor holds the view that the Earth had been smacked about four billion years ago, the huge mark or other evidence may be disappeared by force of time 听力里面是force of nature   不知道你写time 对不对  . It's also that rock collided the Earth for millions of years. No evidence could be found in the map of planet is natural for it may disappear long ago.
这一点听的有出入  后面一个理由意思是   地球的表面是由几大板块组成的  这几大板块也已经相互碰撞了几百万年   所以痕迹有可能消失了  
However  这个连词的有点突兀 , the lecture opposes to the point made in the passage that there should be some similar in composition between the Earth and the Moon, if the Moon came from the Earth. The professor claims that we should take different environment into consideration. Take water as an example, The Moon has been heated entirely, so the temperature there is much higher than on the Earth. The water has been evaporated and got to the space. That is why there is no water on the surface of the  Moon.

Furthermore, while the reading passage demonstrates that the density of the Moon is much lower than that of the Earth, the lecture maintains a different point of view, the professor indicates that the Moon are is not from the core of Earth, so its density should be consistent to the earth surface, which  evidence has already been found 这个非定感觉不对.....


To sum up, the contents in the reading passage are totally contradicted by the lecture and the lecture advocates totally different ideas on the topics made in the reading passage.

hualazimiUID: 2707120

With the burgeoning of science and technology, reading with electric books has played a more and more important role in people's daily life. There is an (改成a) controversial discussion about whether printed books will not be used twenty years latter（later）. When it comes to me, I definitely disagree with this arguments considering several merits of printed book, which can't be substituted .4 a- ?  O# G8 B1 ]% P: s, I" _

Admittedly, the use of  Internet and other electrical instruments has brought a great deal of benefits for（for应该改成to 因为是bring to） our studies by easily achieving plenty of information. However, Much time and energy spent in search of necessary information has decreased our efficiency, at least to some extent. Take a common scene in our daily study as （an）example. When we decide to collect some useful knowledges（knowledge 不可数） on the Internet, millions of items, which includes advertisements, news, comments and so on,  has been emerged on our screen as soon as we google it. How could people find what they want in these （还是用a large amount 比较好，因为我不知道可不可以these amount of 这么用）large amount of information? How could we students to decide which one is correct or subjective or meaningful for us to use? While, printed book has already been selected by editors. The quality has been guaranteed compared to what we read on the Internet. Scientific classification alas（also） help us find what we need easily. By which means, large improvement of efficiency both in time and our energy has come true.
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On the other hand, as the  rapidly development of our society, individual pay more and more attention to health. The radiation of the screen as well as long time stimulus to our eyes are （应该是is）something we are forced to focus on. A recent investigation showed that, nearly eighty percent of students' parents appeal to a limited time of their children using computer or other electrical book. Students, especially those who are growing, should pay much attention to protect their eyes and physical fitness. That is another reason that printed book can'be replaced by electric books completely.

Finally, numerous though the advantages that electric resources enjoys are, we should balance its pros and cons.Taking all the factors  mentioned above,we may safely reach the conclusion that printed book cant'be replaced completely after twenty years. High efficiency of searching information and healthy consideration are factors why we choose to read printed books
总结，我认为结构很清晰，这点我应该改学习，但是我觉得我们应该写完之后留2-3分钟检查拼写之类的小错误，因为ETS判卷的时候，他的纠错系统式很强大的，基本的拼写，语法，句式错误都能检测的到。如果文章整体不错，例证也能较为有力的支持论点，那么因为拼写失误而导致分数降低就太可惜了。还有我觉得我们在有些句式拿捏不是很准的情况下，应该尽量用简单句，有的时候用不好从句反而会起反作用。我一个同学作文考了满分跟我说他用的都是简单句，即使有从句也不超过一个。（当然了，简单句也不能太过简单）。赞一个！我写的总是有跑题的嫌疑~

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The listening material is mainly discussing that giant-impact theory that the Moon form from the earth. However, the reading passage contends that this theory is questionable. The professor's lecture casts doubts on the reading by several points that are contrary to what are stated in the passage.

First of all, in contract to the argument stated in the passage that no trace of a huge mark on the surface of the Earth has been found, so that there is no evidence to prove that a huge collision took place, the professor holds the view that the Earth had been smacked about four billion years ago, the huge mark or other evidence may be disappeared by force of time. It's also that rock collided the Earth for millions of years. No evidence could be found in the map of planet is natural for it may disappear long ago.
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However, the lecture opposes to the point made in the passage that there should be some similar in composition between the Earth and the Moon, if the Moon came from the Earth. The professor claims that we should take different environment into consideration. Take water as an example, The Moon has been heated entirely, so the temperature there is much higher than on the Earth. The water has been evaporated and got （gone)to the space. That is why there is no water on the surface of the  Moon.

Furthermore, while the reading passage demonstrates that the density of the Moon is much lower than that of the Earth, the lecture maintains a different point of view, the professor indicates that the Moon are not from the core of Earth, so its density should be consistent to the earth surface, which evidence has already been found.7 z! P* N; d; \. P: A
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To sum up, the contents in the reading passage are totally contradicted by the lecture and the lecture advocates totally different ideas on the topics made in the reading passage.. A% n6 r, j2 K6 k6 P1 S
听力语法都没什么问题，但是一共写了快350字，考试的时候如果紧张的话不一定能写完了，控制一下字数，我看了别人写的经验是一般写300字左右的。加油，冲刺冲刺啊~~\(^o^)/~