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发表于 2009-10-29 14:47:23 |显示全部楼层
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10.29 Modern society has become more complex, so it is essential for the young people to have the ability to plan and organize.
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1、        for students, improve study efficiency,could do more affaris at the same period,easily achieve success  eg.朋友,安排好时间,取得成功
2、        career, P&G company,every department need employee to organize and plan

Nowadays, with the burgeoning of science and technology, there is a controversial discussion about whether it is essential for young people to improve their abilities to plan and organize. As for me, I firmly agree with such statement with following substantial aspects.

To begin with, it is necessary for college students to own ability to organize their study career. Considering a great deal of free time in college campus, students should make a clear arrangement about what they should do everyday. Both a definite goal and an orderly plan bring many benefits to our students. Take the experience of my friend as an example. He had an objective to become an financier in the future and he began to pursue his career goal the time he entranced the gate of university.There is a four-year schedule in his mind about which period he should focus on reading economic books and which period he should turn to do some practical works. When his classmates were play computer games in dormitory without any considerations about their futures, he has already made great efforts to achieve his goals. Not surprisingly, he got an admission of a famous account firm after graduated. It is good plan and organization that help him to improve his study efficiency and achieve success more easily.

In addition, with the rapidly development of this society, people, with great capacity of planing and organizing, would be more competitive. For they could accomplish their tasks from a comprehensive perspective, the tasks they do are more effectively. They could also avoid confusion and hurry.Just take the P&G Company for example. The big company has many different departments such as research and development, designing and sales department. Though different departments recruit different kinds of staff, the ability of organization is one quality that every department need. Sales department usually employ the persons who have good organization skills to arrange which market they should valued to increase market share. The research and development department usually needs employees could plan well to invent new products.

To sum up, ability to plan and organize is definitely what young people should pay attention to. Only by developing our ability of planing and organization, could young people adapt to this complex society and pursue their career goal as well as better life. This ability is a sum of  measure that we should cherish instead of limit.

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发表于 2009-10-29 23:04:20 |显示全部楼层
这几天生病了,嗓子痛到说不出来话。昨天都没有按时完成作业。
今天:1、黄金阅读 3篇 基本上稳定在2个左右现在,还是ETS挖坑就往下跳,哎。的确有必要做第二遍的。
2、听力   TTC泛听了约1个小时,还可以。高分120做了2个coversation 和 2个lecture。为嘛听的我直犯困呢……
3、作文  写了1篇独立,摘录了好句子和例子,改了几篇作文
4、把ETS的官方文件大概看了一遍……

呃……怎么觉得自己的效率这么低呢……郁闷。一天下来,貌似也没有学什么。而且还是没有练口语……郁闷。睡觉去,明天早起……
口语和综合究竟要求转述还是复述呢……?还是不太明白。看ETS给的满分作文,对reading里的内容说的很少。明天开始要加上综合作文。
今天去看了一场新生杯……原来辩论情节在我心里始终是挥之不去的。

睡觉去鸟~~~

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Nowadays, with the burgeoning of science and technology, there is a controversial discussion about whether it is essential for young people to improve their abilities to plan and organize. As for me, I firmly agree with such statement with following substantial aspects. . 开头不k' C' t  ?' \: U( l
开头不错简单。。。
To begin with, it is necessary for college students to own ability/have the ability to organize their study career/works 好一点吧. Considering a great deal of/a large amount of free time in college campus, students should make a clear arrangement about what they should do everyday. Both a definite goal and an orderly plan bring many benefits to our students. Take the experience of my friend as an example. He had an objective to become an financier in the future and he began to pursue his career goal the time he entranced the gate of university.There is a four-year schedule in his mind about感觉这里用about不怎么好 which period he should focus on reading economic books and which period he should turn to do some practical works. When his classmates were playing computer games in dormitory without any considerations about their futures, he has already made great efforts to achieve his goals. Not surprisingly, he got an admission of /offered by a famous account firm after graduated. It is good plan and organization that help him to improve his study efficiency and achieve success more easily. 6 e! n: k; X' @- p* Z/ g

In addition, with the rapidly development of this society, people, with great capacity of planing and organizing, would be more competitive. For they could accomplish their tasks from a comprehensive perspective, the tasks they do are more effectively. They could also avoid confusion and hurry. Just take the P&G Company for example. The big company has many different departments such as research and development, designing and sales department. Though different departments recruit different kinds of staff, the ability of organization is one quality that every department need. Sales department usually employ the persons who have good organization skills to arrange which market they should valued/is worthy for them to increase market share. The research and development department usually needs employees could plan well to invent new products.

To sum up, ability to plan and organize is definitely what young people should pay attention to. Only by developing our ability of planing and organization, could young people adapt to this complex society and pursue their career goal as well as better life. This ability is a sum of cherish measure should cherish instead of limit.最后一句没看懂不好意思
总体很好啊。。我觉得。。虽然流畅程度最好再加强。。比我好啊。。

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发表于 2009-10-30 06:58:58 |显示全部楼层
贴一个 如是 写的例子:
She usually learnt English and prepared for Toefl in the morning and studied her major psychology in the afternoon. Besides, she also set 1 hour aside everyday to relax and ensure the high efficiency to further study

很明显这个要具体的多,而且有说服力,相比之下,自己的例子废话太多,还没达到效果。学习。

卷卷你如果给我改作文,能不能帮我看一下,是否例子过于冗长而论证不足呢?谢谢呢。

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发表于 2009-10-30 13:55:32 |显示全部楼层
Nowadays, with the burgeoning ofscience and technology, there is a controversial discussion about whether it isessential for young people to improve their abilities to plan and organize. Asfor me, I firmly agree with such statement with following substantial aspects.

To begin with, it is necessary forcollege students to own ability to organize their study career. Considering agreat deal of free time in college campus, students should make a cleararrangement about what they should do everyday. Both a definite goal and anorderly plan bring many benefits to our students. Take the experience of myfriend as an example. He had an objective to become an financier in the futureand he began to pursue his career goal the time he entranced the gate ofuniversity(from the moment he entered theUniversity). There is a four-year schedule inhis mind about which period he should focus on reading economic books and whichperiod he should turn to do some practical works. When his classmates were playcomputer games in dormitory without any considerations about their futures, hehas already made great efforts to achieve his goals. Not surprisingly, he gotan admission of a famous account firm after graduated. It is good plan andorganization that help him to improve his study efficiency and achieve successmore easily.

In addition, with the rapidlydevelopment of this society, people, with great capacity of planing (planning) and organizing, would bemore competitive. For they could accomplish their tasks from a comprehensiveperspective, the tasks they do are more effectively. They could also avoidconfusion and hurry.Just take the P&G Company for example. The big companyhas many different departments such as research and development, designing andsales department. Though different departments recruit different kinds ofstaff, the ability of organization is one quality that every department need.Sales department usually employ the persons who have good organization skillsto arrange which market they should valued to increase market share(?which,没有读懂这句,楼主是不是想说哪个市场哦,但是which可以放在宾语的地方用么). Theresearch and development department usually needs employees could plan well toinvent new products.
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To sum up, ability to plan andorganize is definitely what young people should pay attention to. Only bydeveloping our ability of planing (planning) and organization, could young people adapt to this complexsociety and pursue their career goal as well as better life. This ability is asum of measure that we should cherish instead of limit (这个有没有涉及到数学哦。。我查了半天也没有明白是什么).

在楼主的介绍下我也跑去看了 如是 写的哈哈。恩这样说吧,第一个例子基本上大家都是写的一个观点嘛,就是合理的安排时间,如是 的语言很清晰,简洁并且不重复,最重要的是每句话都扣在提出的论点上,用楼主的第一个论点来做对比, four-year schedule, reading economic books, practical works我觉得都很好,但是这个长句 When his classmates were play computer games in dormitory withoutany considerations about their futures, he has already made great efforts toachieve his goals,译过来就是别人在玩的时候他在学,这个就有可能是在论证他努力。我觉得如果在中间加上一个he has already made great efforts following the plan to achieve hisgoals(我这句没有写好,我的意思就是要引入plan在里面的重要性),这样的话我就觉得是更紧密的围绕着论点啦
例子长只要不重复就没有关系我觉得,其实我也是新手啦,共同学习~~~~~

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发表于 2009-10-30 15:42:34 |显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 heqiang_1001 于 2009-10-30 23:27 编辑

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Nowadays, with the dynamic development of science and technology, quality of life have been improved a lot. However, there is still a controversial discussion about whether it is essential to pay much attention or invest money to agriculture research. As for me, I firmly agree with such statement with following substantial aspects.   

To begin with, with the rapid economic progress in my country, more and more fertile grounds have been used to be urbanization. With various high buildings spring up, the soil which provides bed for corns, grains and other crops is decreasing bit by bit. Decreasing agriculture areas lead directly to the declining of food supply, especially those land-extensive crops(such as wheat and rice). Taking a small aspect in daily life as an example, the price of rice was 1.3yuan on average in 2000, while it has already been 2.4yuan in 2009. As we know, urbannization is an irreversible process which means the urban area couldn't be changed to fertile grounds any more. So it is necessary for government and university to develop a centre for research in agriculture. Only by improving unit producing capacity of food, could we satisfy our rapid population growth.

In addition, as rapid population growth, food insecurity, and widespread poverty are compelling issues all over the world, research and new technology in agriculture could bring great benefits in economy to our country. China continue to import grain and other agriculture products to maintain or improve living standards, especially in urban areas, from 2004. If we achieved some success in agriculture research, it may improve China's agriculture production in order to feed the country sufficiently. On the hand, it could maintain grain independence and ensure food security without importing from other countries.

To sum up, agriculture still plays a significant role in our society which relates to everyone daily life. Considering the shortage of available farm land and the current agriculture condition in China, It's necessary to built an agriculture research centre.

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发表于 2009-10-30 23:49:19 |显示全部楼层
本帖最后由 heqiang_1001 于 2009-10-30 23:52 编辑

今天心情很复杂,开心的很开心,烦躁的很烦躁……
LRXSS竟然是高中的学弟,感叹下世界真小。和他聊聊,觉得……自己真的还不够努力,哎。
今天早上看了一些范文,摘些好句子。上午听了delta的段子和TTC。效果一般。下午作文完成,然后上课聚餐……口语又没做……死过去了。

现在睡觉去,又一个星期混过去了,真可怕。明天周末,关掉手机去自习……向100分冲刺。

现在:阅读,感觉看的比以前明白一些了。但还是保证不了正确率,有些句子理解的有问题,错完回过去看才能反应过来。第二遍黄金是绝对有必要做的。要把固定的陷阱题总结出来。单词,背,一定一定要背。
听力,感觉听懂了,做题还是错,不知道这是什么阶段呢。今天听DELTA,还是有学科词汇不清楚……
口语……郁闷,再不练就来不及了……要认真完成小组作业。
作文,感觉有点进步,但问题是,规定时间内写不出来……要了命了。唉……
越说越没信心了……我真的一点都不希望又是一个惨不忍睹的成绩!!

平静……………………睡觉去………………不要浪费明天的时间。加油,还来得及!要用心。无论做什么的都是!

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发表于 2009-10-31 09:54:58 |显示全部楼层
[/color]Nowadays, with the dynamic development of science and technology, quality of life [color=Red]have(has)[/color] been improved a lot.[color=Red] However, there is still a controversial discussion about whether it is essential to pay much attention or invest money to agriculture research(这个句子表达的很好)[/color]. As for me, I firmly agree with [color=Red]such statement(such statement 指的是什么观念?没有指明) [/color]with following substantial aspects.   
To begin with, with the rapid economic progress in my country, more and [color=Blue]more fertile grounds have been used to be(be used to be 是习惯于的意思,用be converted into可能比较好) urbanization.With various high buildings [color=Blue]spring up(用的好), [/color]the soil which provides [color=Red]bed(用nutritional atmosphere)[/color] for corns, grains and other crops is decreasing bit by bit. Decreasing agriculture areas lead directly to the declining of food supply, especially those land-extensive crops(such as wheat and rice). [color=Blue]Taking a small aspect in daily life as an example(这个用法我收藏了), [/color]the price of rice was 1.3yuan on average in 2000, while it has already been 2.4yuan in 2009. [color=Blue](记得很清楚,生活经验很丰富啊)[/color]As we[color=Red] know(known), [/color]urbannization is an [color=Blue]irreversible(词汇量很丰富)[/color] process which means the urban area couldn't be changed to fertile grounds any more. So it is necessary for government and university to develop a centre for research in agriculture. Only by improving unit producing capacity of food, could we satisfy our rapid population growth[color=Blue].(不错的句子)[/color]

In addition, as rapid [color=Red]population growth(growth of population), [/color]food insecurity, and widespread poverty are compelling issues all over the world, research and new technology in agriculture could bring great benefits in economy to our country. China [color=Red]continue(continues)[/color] to import grain and other agriculture products to maintain or improve living standards, especially in urban areas, from 2004. If we achieved some success in agriculture research, it may improve China's agriculture production in order to feed the country sufficiently. On the [color=Red](other) [/color]hand, it could maintain grain independence and ensure food security without importing from other countries.

To sum up, agriculture still plays a significant role in our society which relates to everyone daily life. Considering the shortage of available farm land and the current agriculture condition in China, It's(it is ) necessary to built an agriculture research centre.

妹妹的词汇量很大啊,而且应用起来也很自如,举例很具体也很充分,独立作文你基本上不用担心了。再注意一些细节,拿高分对你来说不是件难事。加油!

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Nowadays, with the dynamic development of science and technology, quality of life have been improved a lot. However, there is still a controversial discussion about whether it is essential to pay much attention or invest money to agriculture research. As for me, I firmly agree with such statement with following substantial aspects.   
开头不错啊。。学习

To begin with, with the rapid economic progress in my country, more and more fertile好词 grounds have been used to be urbanization. With various high buildings spring up, the soil which provides bed for corns, grains and other crops is decreasing bit by bit.太厉害了写得这几句 Decreasing agriculture areas lead directly to the declining of food supply, especially those land-extensive crops(such as wheat and rice). Taking a small aspect in daily life as an example, the price of rice was 1.3yuan on average in 2000, while it has already been 2.4yuan in 2009. As we know, urbannization is an irreversible process which means the urban area couldn't be changed to fertile grounds any more. So it is necessary for government and university to develop a centre for research in agriculture. Only by improving unit producing capacity of food, could we satisfy our rapid population growth例子虽然简单但是用得好啊。。我怎么想不到啊例子虽然简单
In addition, as
是不是用sincebecause of好一些 rapid population growth, food insecurity, and widespread poverty are compelling issues all over the world, research and new technology in agriculture could bring great benefits in economy to our country. China continue to import grain and other agriculture products to maintain or improve living standards, especially in urban areas, from 2004. If we achieved some success in agriculture research, it may improve China's agriculture production in order to feed the country sufficiently. On the hand, it could maintain grain independence and ensure food security without importing from other countries.
To sum up, agriculture still plays a significant role in our society which relates to everyone
’s daily life. Considering the shortage of available farm land and the current agriculture condition in China, It's necessary to built an agriculture research centre.

一口气看完了作者的文章。。觉得应该可以拿满分吧。。后来我又反复看了好几遍。。学习啊。。以后我要关注你的文章。。学习

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本帖最后由 heqiang_1001 于 2009-10-31 15:17 编辑

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10.31 Some people believe that a college or university education should be available to all students. Others believe that higher education should be available only to good students. Discuss these views. Which view do you agree with? Explain why.
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Available only to good students
the requirement of the society structure  
  To society, benefit to stability, prosper  to students, develop their interest, strong point, find job
Eg. Technical school
current condition of the college and university ,  facility and education recourses restriction
High Quality of education can't be maintained  guarantee   elite education
Students ability different , professor can't build an equal standard.


Nowadays, with the dynamic development of science and technology, more and more students have chance to attain admissions of university. However, there is a controversial discussion about whether higer education should be available to all students. As for me, I firmly agree with such statement with following substantial aspects.

To begin with, admittedly, people, with a high education background, command a premium on the maket in this society: they are more likely to get jobs than people without it and on average, receive a higher salary. In the view of the government, It's the social stability that guarantees rapid economic development. If all students  accept higher education, large amount of jobs are lack of people to occupy, such as faming, operating machines or looking after patients. There is no denying that our society couldn't be functioning well without these basic work to support.

In addition, students who have genius in what they are interest are no need to accept these general higher education. Considering beautiful melody from Beethoven's symphonies, magical and meaningful fair tales of Andersen, wildly-used operating system of Windows exploited by Bill Gates, histroy is replete wiht examples of great people getting high achievement without accepting general high education. That is because they need not only special practise in their professional fields but also enough space to do develop their strong points.

Furthermore, the restriction of education recoure is also a considerable factor so that only part of students could enjoy high level education. Education facilities such as classrooms, libaries and laboratories can't satisfy the teaching demands if all the students flooded into colloge. And facing students whose abilities are totally different, hardly could professors develop their teaching plans. All of these may make contributions to the decline of universtiy teaching standard.

To sum up, taking all the factors mentioned above, we may safely reach the conclusion that it is not wise to permit all the students attend to colloge. Choosing students who are suitble to accept higher education brings great benefits to not only development of our society but also the students themselves.

发现一个问题,为什么越练写的字数越少了……呃~~~

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Nowadays, with the dynamic development of science and technology, quality of life have been improved a lot. However, there is still a controversial discussion about whether it is essential to pay much attention or invest money to agriculture research(这个句子貌似会引起误解认为争论的点在于,投入更多精力还是投入更多钱). As for me, I firmly agree with such statement with following substantial aspects.   

To begin with, with the rapid economic progress in my country, more and more fertile grounds(lands是不是更合适点) have been used to be urbanization(to be不对,应该是in. With various high buildings spring up(常用rise up或者come out, the soil which provides bed for corns, grains and other crops is decreasing bit by bit. Decreasing agriculture(agricultural) areas lead(leads) directly to the declining of food supply, especially those land-extensive(这个说法没见过,你能确定对就行) crops(such as wheat and rice). Taking a small aspect(可以用piecein daily life as an example, the price of rice was 1.3yuan on average in 2000, while it has already been(risen to) 2.4yuan in 2009. As we know, urbannization is an irreversible process which means the urban area couldn't be changed(back to就可以) to fertile grounds any more. So it is necessary for government and university(没冠词) to develop a centre for research in(on吧) agriculture. Only by(去掉) improving unit producing capacity(unit of production  of food, could(为什么是could,为什么前置) we(这个we是中文句法,英语不能用we当语气助词) satisfy(这用meet更好) our(our也是中文口语) rapid population growth.
(这句话改成:Only improving unit of production of food can meet the need of rapid growth of population.

In addition, as rapid population growth, food insecurity, and widespread poverty are compelling issues all over the world, research and new technology in agriculture could bring great benefits in economy to(of our country. China continue to(constantlyimport grain and other agriculture products to maintain or improve living standards, especially in urban areas, from 2004(这个放前边好点). If we achieved(你这个不是跟事实相反,用现在时吧) some success in agriculture research, it may improve China's agriculture production in order to feed the country sufficiently. (it may improve China's agriculture productivity and feed the country sufficiently.On the (otherhand, it could maintain grain independence and ensure food security without importing from other countries.

To sum up, agriculture still plays a significant role in our society which relates to everyone(’sdaily life. Considering the shortage of available farm land and the current agriculture condition in China, It's necessary to built an agriculture research centre.


我觉得这个题目的my country应该是hometown的意思…个人意见…另外,你的文章里完全没有提到business,没有实现题目要求的比较……另外,我还是觉得作为外国人,写英语作文,应该坚持用见过的表达和句式……不能自己创造……这个问题我也有

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综合写作 120——practice 2
The reading passage hold some doubts about whether Marco Polo had ever travelled to China. The professor'e lecture give her opinion that this argument is not convincing by several points that are stated in the passage.

First of all , in contrary to the argument stated in the reading passage that Marco Polo never picked up Chinese directions or locations, the professor holds the view that there a lot of trades on the continents between Asian and Burope at time and the Persian language is the major language in the trade. So borrowing some Persian name doesn't have great influences.

Moreover, the lecture opposes to the point that made in the reading that there is no mention about Chinese tea in  Marco Polo' writing, the professor claims that the culture of tea and tea drinking as well as some ubiquitous teahouse are popular in south of China at that time. And it  is not well developed in north of China. According to the history, Marco Polo travelled most part of North China. It could be understood about this miss.

Furthermore, while the reading passage says that no evidence that Marco Polo was appointed to the post of governor of Yang Zhou has been found, the lecture maintains a different point of view. The professor indicates that Marco Polo may prefer to choose a different name when he served at the court, so it can't be recognized by modern scholars. On the hand, though he indeed use his real name, there is a possibility that some recording may simply had been lost.

To sum up, the contents in the reading passage are totally contradicted by the lecture and the lecture advocates totally different ideas on the topic made in the reading passage.

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Nowadays, with the dynamic development of science and technology, more and more students have chance to attain admissions of university. However, there is a controversial discussion about whether higer education should be available to all students. As for me, I firmly agree with such statement with following substantial aspects.开头还是很干练。。坚持
To begin with, admittedly, people, with a high education background, command a premium这个用法第一次见不知道对不对啊 on the maket in this society: they are more likely to get jobs than people/those会不会好些 without it and on average, receive a higher salary. In the view of the government, It's the social stability that guarantees rapid economic development. 加个转折词好点吧。。。If all students accept higher education, large amount of jobs are lack of people to occupy/will be vacant, such as faming, operating machines or looking after patients. There is no denying that our society couldn't be functioning well without these basic work to support.work‘s support好点吧 $ q1 b- e! J3 _3 ~+ Q . f" j( c3 B7 j4 l In addition, students who have genius in what they are interest in are/have no need to accept these general higher education. Considering beautiful melody from Beethoven's symphonies, magical and meaningful fair tales of Andersen, wildly-used operating system of Windows exploited by Bill Gates, histroy is replete wiht examples of great people getting high achievement without accepting general high education. That is because they need not only special practise in their professional fields but also enough space to do develop their strong points. 例子不错喜欢

* t2 i7 X: E& S9 f4 g+ ]- [* }5 I$ q. z/ H Furthermore, the restriction of education recoure is also a considerable factor so that/As to the limited education resourses, only part of students could enjoy high level education. Education facilities such as classrooms, libaries and laboratories can't satisfy the teaching demands if all the students flooded into colloge. And facing students whose abilities are totally different, hardly could professors develop their teaching plans. All of these may make contributions to the decline of universtiy teaching standard.4 z" o! s8 d! a' g" v( S, X 1 y. w7 b: M6 N0 p$ l( C, D- l! v `$ q

To sum up, taking all the factors mentioned above, we may safely reach the conclusion that it is not wise to permit all the students attend to colloge. Choosing students who are suitble to accept higher education brings great benefits to not only development of our society but also the students themselves.5 G0 x% {1 F" T8 \6 L
总结很好。。我觉得你的文章高分没有问题了。。真的。。。加油啊

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owadays, with the dynamic development of science and technology, more and more students have chance to attain admissions of university. However, there is a controversial discussion about whether higer education should be available to all students. As for me, I firmly agree with such statement with following substantial [email=aspects.@To]aspects[/email] 开头很直接很好

To begin with, admittedly, people, with a high education background, command a premium on the maket in this society--..没明白啥意思: they are more likely to get jobs than people without it and on average, receive a higher salary. In the view of the government, It's the social stability that guarantees rapid economic development.这句子跟主题啥关系..? If all students  accept higher education, large amount of jobs are lack of people to occupy...我记得现在很不好找工作的..有那么多岗位么?, such as faming, operating machines or looking after patients-->看护还要大学毕业么..?. There is no denying that our society couldn't be functioning well without these basic work to support.

In addition, students who have genius in what they are interest are no need to accept these general higher education. Considering beautiful melody from Beethoven's symphonies, magical and meaningful fair tales of Andersen, wildly-used operating system of Windows exploited by Bill Gates, histroy is replete wiht examples of great people getting high achievement without accepting general high education. That is because they need not only special practise in their professional fields but also enough space to do develop their strong points.

Furthermore, the restriction of education recoure is also a considerable factor so that only part of students could enjoy high level education. Education facilities such as classrooms, libaries and laboratories can't satisfy the teaching demands if all the students flooded into colloge. And facing students whose abilities are totally different, hardly could professors develop their teaching plans. All of these may make contributions to the decline of universtiy teaching standard.

To sum up, taking all the factors mentioned above, we may safely reach the conclusion that it is not wise to permit all the students attend to colloge. Choosing students who are suitble to accept higher education brings great benefits to not only development of our society but also the students themselves. 首段你说的是你同意这个观点, 最后说not wise..??首段没有说完整么..? 中间工作的例子有点不合实际. 你说的工作情况跟我们国家的貌似不一样

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发表于 2009-11-1 21:24:45 |显示全部楼层
这两天没有上来汇报进度

昨天阅读:文勇 2篇, 听力 2小时 delta + 若干泛听TTC,作文 独立 综合各一篇。口语 2道
今天阅读:文勇 2篇, 听力 高分120一套 作文 分类整理了部分例子

天哪,真恐怖,我今天都干了什么~~
下雪了,很大很大的雪,在自习室里冻得手脚冰凉。我为什么效率这么低呢?看似忙忙碌碌,一说出来,感觉什么都没干。一上淘宝就逛半天……鄙视~~~
感觉怎么没有那么紧张的状态了呢,效率很低……

收拾收拾……明天早起。又是一个新的星期了。

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