★头脑风暴-综合写作

wuqian0801UID: 2637709

综合写作: 每天一次综合写作训练:
材料: TPO1-14  <我的预想是 重复做2遍综合写作. 然后换高分120.. >
布置作业时间: 每天上午10点
上交作业时间: 当天晚上10点
上交平台: 同上
如何做:每天按顺序来做. 本周日2010/2/7开始做TPO3; 8号做TPO4 以此类推.
要求: 格式如下
  lecture  arguments           reading arguments
1.                                    1.   
2.                                    2.
3.                                    3.   

我的文章: ***
我的总结: ***
<也就是说, 综合写作的帖子包括三部分, 笔记+文章+总结>

然后自己再看一次阅读再听一次，用红色字体写出自己刚刚在听力里面没有听到的论点，或者错误的论点。 <自己修改，也算是对自己负责的一种表现。>

最后,监督同学在监督是否按时完成作业的同时 必须看看大家的笔记情况, 如若有没听清楚的地方请用蓝色字体注明, 醒目些, 方便大家解答.


成员同<互改组>


本周日<2/7>全面试行!
<为保持页面清洁, 请勿占楼..>

2/7       作业 TPO-3
              上交时间: 2/7晚10点前  [2/7 TPO-3  满分范文在 9楼  有需要请看.]
2/8          作业 TPO-4
               上交时间: 今晚10点前

elfomegaUID: 2728180

Reading arguments         
1. The woman wears a luxurious fur collar that no servant can afford.                                    
2. The R is the master of painting light and shadow who will not make the woman`s face appear partially in shadow                                 
3. The R often painted on wood panels, but no painting by R uses a panel glued together in this way form several pieces of wood                                 

Lecture arguments

1.The painting was repainted by another one who want to make the painting valuable that make the woman wears a luxurious fur collar clothe, but the woman wears a simple clothe in original. The woman`s fur collar was not the part of the painting.
2.There is also someone make the woman`s face appear partially in shadow want to make the painting valuable. In the original painting the light and shadow was realistic which we look forward to.
3.There is only one single piece of wood in the original painting. The several pieces of wood were painted to make valuable by other people.



我的文章：
It is said that in the lecture, everything in the reading passage is true, but the painting was painted by Rembrandt actually. There is someone who want to make this painting valuable repainted the painting before.
The reading passage contends that the woman wears a luxurious fur collar that no servant can afford, but the lecture argues that the painting was repainted by another one who want to make the painting valuable that make the woman wears a luxurious fur collar clothe, but the woman wears a simple clothe in original.
The author states that the Rembrandt is the master of painting light and shadow who will not make the woman`s face appear partially in shadow , however, the speaker says that there is also someone make the woman`s face appear partially in shadow want to make the painting valuable.
According to the reading passage, The Rembrandt often painted on wood panels, but no painting by Rembrandt uses a panel glued together in this way form several pieces of wood, on the other hand, the professor in the listening argues that there is only one single wood in the original painting. The several pieces of wood were painted to make valuable by other people.

我的总结
第二和第三个观点听得不是特别详细，就写了一点出来。词汇匮乏是我的缺点，写作像是小学生作文。
我听听力基本没有笔记，全是脑记，所以记也就记个词，然后回想。所以我就把我准备的写上去了。符合我一贯流程。

amanda_qinyyUID: 2632170

我报名。
我发现，不参加小组写作业，自己真的会被惰性打败的。
建议建个群，方便组员交流吧。

hulinlin24UID: 2731389

TPO3

reading  arguments                                                                             lecture arguments; @" b; (O
1. inconsisten dress: servant wear--fur collar          1.fur→not part of     100years after    →increase value                 
    servant cannot affrod     details
2. light＆shadow donot fit together                        2. fur remove→original light-colored cloth reflect light→illuminate face
    fur absorb light＞reflect light                                 realistic
3.wood glued together                                          3. fur add→enlarge→more grand&valuable
R did not use panel glue                                          single piece from same tree R's painting
我觉得应该左边的阅读，右边是听力，因为听力是对照阅读的顺序和内容来反驳的,我的笔记就这么做的，在纸上还少了→的。。

The lecture is mainly discussing that some suggestions that the Portait of an Elderly Woman could not be painted by Rembrandt. Thus, the lecture totally disagrees with what are stated in the passage.

First of all, in contrast to the argument stated in the passage that something is imcompatible with the woman dressed in the portait, the professor says that according to the X-ray, the fur collar was added after the portait finished about a hundred years to increase the value. .( making it look like a formal portait of an aristocratic lady 没听出来）


Secondly, the lecture contradicts the point made in the passage that the light and shadow in this painting do not fit together. The professor argues that when the added fur color removed, the original light color(light-colored) cloth of this collar would reflects light to illuminate part of the woman’s face. So in the original painting, light and shadow are very realistic.

Finally, while the passage states that the portrait was painted on a panel guled together, the lecture maintains a different point of view. The professor says when the fur was added, the wood panel was enlarged with extra wood pieces to make the painting more grand and more valuable. In addition, the original painting is painted on a single piece of wood which is from the same tree as the wood panel used by(use for another painting by) Rembrant. (self-portait with a hat,画的名字没听）

In sum, the contents in the reading passage are totally refuted by the lecture and the lecture advocates totally different ideas on the topics made in the reading passage.

wuqian0801UID: 2637709

Reading                                                        Listening
1. inconsistent about the way->dress             1.F C: over top of p  after 100years the p made / 人 making formal Port of a lady to ↑value
    linen cap & coat
2. light&shadow do not fit together                2.一 ? removed, ori-al p 可以 seen.
                                                                    woman wear a light color coat reflect light that illu part woman's face./ L&S very realis
3. painted on panel made of wood glued         3.当F C is added, W P也 en大 wif extra pieces to grow size and top to made P more grand&val
    together                                                    same tree, 同R's another p

Integrated Writing  TPO-3

The reading passage is mainly discussing one such painting, known as Portrait of an Elderly Woman in a White Bonnet is not the work of Rembrandt. However, in the listening material, the speaker point out that the work is really the work of Rembrandt.

In the first place, the speaker supports that the painting show that the fur collar was painted over top of the painting about 100 years after the painting was made. And people by making a look like formal portraits of a lady to increase its value.<someone probably want to increase the painting’s value by making a look like formal of a characteristic ** lady> In the contrast, the reading passage thinks that there is something inconsistent about the way the woman in the portrait is dressed. And the coat she is wearing has a luxurious fur collar that no servant could afford.

In the second place, the speaker reckons that Once the painting <of the ** for color>was removed, the original painting could be seen. In the original painting, the woman wear a light color coat reflect light that illuminate part of woman's face. And light and shadow make woman very realistic. Contradicting what is stated in the passage that Rembrandt was a master of painting light and shadow, but in this painting these elements do not fit together.

Finally, the speaker raises the issue that when fur collar was added, wood panel also will be enlarge with extra<wood> pieces to grow size and top to made <the> painting more grand and <more> valuable. <So the original painting actually painted on a single piece of work as it was expected from the Rembrandt painting>. What’s more, the painting used the same tree as the material like the other paintings by Rembrandt. The opinion disagrees in the reading passage that it was painted on a panel made of several pieces of wood glued together.

To sum up, the content in the reading passage are totally jeopardized by the speaker and the speaker has totally different ideas on the topics made in the reading.

总结:
这篇总体不算难...first second..都说的很明白..专心听就好.
但是.. 笔记还是记得不好.. 确实要训练..
还有.. 我觉得是不是我的模板废话太多了.. 字数有点多.. 这样时间就剩的少了.. 看看应该压缩下.. 最好字数260吧..

分析很久.. 红色为没听出来的.. 蓝色*是重新听后没听出来的.. 希望听懂的同学帮助解答.
谢谢..

Over~

beverly910614UID: 2728081

Reading arguments
1.        the clothes, which the woman dressed, is not coherent (with her hat, )because she was in a servant hat and a dear fur coat.

2.        the light and the shadow didn't fit with each other, because the black collar didn't reflect the light on the face.

3.        the picture was painted on several woods which glued together, but Rembrandt did paint on that kind of panel.


Listening passage
1.1. the X-Ray analysis showed that the pigment of the fur coat is not the original one.

2. when removed the added color（照搬听力原文了。）, the collar would show in light color. At this time, the collar can reflect light on the woman's face.

3. this painting actually was used on one wood, not the several woods which glued together. And, the wood is the same as the wood which Rembrandt's self-portrait.



The professor uses some points to refute the belief in the reading passage that the Portrait of an Elderly Woman is not the authentic work of Rembrandt.

Firstly, the reading passage presents that the clothes, which the woman dressed, is not coherent, because she was in a servant hat and a dear fur coat. Nevertheless, the professor states that the X-Ray analysis （没听到）showed that the pigment of the fur coat is not the original one.  

Secondly, the professor challenges the idea in the reading passage that the light and the shadow didn't fit with each other, because the black collar didn't reflect the light on the face. In fact, when removed the added color, the collar would show in light color. At this time, the collar can reflect light on the woman's face.


Thirdly, the reading passage says that the picture was painted on several woods which glued together, but Rembrandt did paint on that kind of panel. But the professor argues that this painting actually was used on one wood, not the several woods which glued together. And, the wood is the same the wood which Rembrandt's self-portrait.

其他差不多就这样子。

LS, 那个**LADY我也反复听了几遍，我觉得可能是一个画家的名字或者是一个流派的专有名词，这样想比较符合语意。

260字太多了吧。。我才200字不到。

coxUID: 2730480

TPO3 integrated writing by cox



1. inconsistent dressed
1. fur callor after 100yrs made

cap
coat luxurious fur callor
+ value / lady

2. light shadow
2. move---original: light fur

face illuminate/fur dark
light face

should shadow

3. made of wood glued
3. added---enlarge--more grand/value


no glued before
R--single same as another paint

The lecture uses some points to refute the belief in the reading passage that the Portrait of an Elderly Woman could not be a work by Rembrandt.

Firstly, contrary to the reading passage that the cap she wears is that only servants would wear while the fur collar on her coat is not that an servant could afford , the lecturer claims that the fur collar is made to the original
after one hundred years
the work has done , which is used to increase the portrait value to make this woman dress as a formal lady.

Secondly, the reading passage states that the face should appear partially in shadow which is not how it appears so light. The lecturer argues that once the added color was removed ,the original color could be seen. In the original part , the cloth she wear is a light callor and it illuminates the light on the woman's face. That's why the face is not partially shadow.

Thirdly, the lecture challenge the fact that on the back of the painting
shows that it was painted on a panel made of pieces of wood glue while Rembrandt never has used panel glued to paint. The professor claims that as the color was added , the wood panel should be enlarged to be grand and valuable. So the wood panel was added. At the same time, the original wood panel is very single form piece of wood and it
was very same as that from the other Rembrandt painting.
    总结： 新换了模版 看了前两篇PET的  开始用她的了 ！！！！
                听了好几遍啊。。。。。

fatruiUID: 2726256

The reading passage talk about that whether Portrait of an Elderly Woman in a White Bonnet is painted by Rembrandt, however in the lecture the professor argue that this painting ,indeed, painted by him. And professor provides three reasons below.

At first, the reading passage raises that issue that the servants should not wear an expensive fur collar, since no servants would have enough to buy this kind of collar. But this statement is called into question by the lecture provides that the color of the painting has changed, some one want to increase this painting's price, so he used some new pigment which is used 100 yeas ago（is invented 100 years after painting made） to cover the original painting. Finally, it looks like the servants wear an expensive dress and mislead people to doubt this painting’s painter is not Rembrandt.

Secondly, though it was said in the reading passage that in the painting the relationship between light and shadow is wrong, the professor demonstrate that in the original painting the color of fur collar is light but not dark. So this can prove that why the face is illuminated by light from below.

Finally, the reading passage asserts that the panel is made of several pieces of wood. Nevertheless, the professor argues that in the original painting is a single panel and after researcher researched proved that this panel is from a same tree. Some one want to increase its price, so add some another woods to the original painting.（Furthermore, the wood is of the same tree used in other Rembrandt paintings, like the "Self-Portrait with a Hat”.）

From what we discussed above, we can say that the painting is actually painted by Rembrandt.

Lecture arguments           

Reading arguments
1.  cap expensive cannot afford          1.    pigment 100year $ up
2.  light and shadow not fit together    2.

move religion simple reflect light face
realistic
3.  panel several wood                         3.   panel ass in large more variable signer form same tree

总结：问题出现在笔记上面，没有记清楚该记的东西不行，要努力练练，还有就是那个文章，这类型的肯能不熟悉，下次一定要熟悉，别人也是观点+例子证明，这种观点很概括，一般lecture想反驳的不是概括的观点，而是那个例子。这里尤其明显的是reading passage的理由1和理由2.还有就是阅读速度也要及时的提高才能使得自己心里有数




By Fatrui

fatruiUID: 2726256

顺便有个范文 满分的 发现 别人那个简洁啊 不是一般的简洁

TPO-3 integrated writing sample answer （满分范文）

The lecture revises the idea presented in the text, that Rembrandt was not the artist who painted the famous painting "Portrait of an Elderly Woman in a White Bonnet”.

The inconsistency between the white cap, which identifies the woman as a servant, and the expensive fur collar she wears dissolves as the Professor explains that the fur collar was apparently painted over the original painting to increase its worth by displaying an aristocratic woman.

In addition, the assumption that light and shadow in the painting do not fit together is refuted by the fact that in the original painting, the woman wears a light cloth that illuminated her face. Thus the presentation of light and shadow was indeed very realistic and accurate, as it is characteristic of Rembrandt’s paintings.

Finally, the mystery of the panel consisting of patches glued together is also solved in the lecture. Actually, the wood panel was later enlarged to make it more grand and valuable, but the original painting was painted on a single panel, as Rembrandt would have done it. Furthermore, the wood is of the same tree used in other Rembrandt paintings, like the "Self-Portrait with a Hat”.

All this information points to Rembrandt as the painter of the controversial painting.

amanda_qinyyUID: 2632170

TPO3
reading arguments:
1.the way 女dress , 白cap , coat  , inconsistant
2. light&shadow  but not fit, face  light--dark, error
3. made of wood glued together, no...use

listening arguments:
1. fur collar, made 100y after made
2. light&shadow,
   ...remove, original
    simple light cloth , reflect light --- face not shadow
3. add     large --- grand&value
     single piece of, from same tree, self-p with hat?

我的文章：
In the lecture, the professor claims that everything is true on Rembrandt’s painting which is indeed to indicate that the painting is a work by Rembrandt. That is totally against the opinion cited in the passage.

First of all, the professor says that（the X-ray analysis showed that the pigment of the painting was not the original one） the fur collar on the woman was made 100 years after the paining was finished, because some people want to increase the value of the painting(to make it like a formal portait of a ...lady). While in the reading material, it is said that the servant like dressing and the luxurious fur collar are inconsistent.

Second, the professor insists the color of the painting is realistic. The woman wore a light cloth so that the light could reflect on her face. Therefore, the woman’s face should not be in shadow. This directly contradicts what the passage indicates.(the added fur collar removed, the original of light colored cloth could reflect the...这个关系没听懂)

Finally, the painting made of several pieces of wood showed grand and valuable as well, this is where the professor disagrees with the passage that Rembrandt would not use a panel glued together. The professor also says that, Rembrandt did use a single wood for painting usually, but he used several piece of wood which were from a same tree as well.（笔记里的self-p with a hat不知道改用在哪...）

To sum up all the evidences the professor provides illustrate that she disagrees with the points mentioned in the reading materials.

总结：
这是二战复习托福来的第一篇综合作文，要不是参加这个小组，还不知我的综合作文要拖到何时...一定要坚持，保证质量的坚持！
发现自我修改，真的比别人来修改重要很多，对于综合作文来说，也许以前的都没认真修改吧我。
存在以下问题：
1. passage部分的笔记，感觉记下来的都是废话，而关键性的东西却忽略了，以后要加强阅读抓重点的能力，要一看能够找出考点。
2. listening部分，可能练的少了的缘故，内容抓的不是很好，听了好几遍。笔记记的废话太多，也是没抓住关键。
3. 模板还需进一步完善，连接词方面，要选择更好的，太生疏了，没做好准备，要多背背。

Alice520UID: 2480263

TPO3  by  纤手破新橙

Reading
1. cloth  inconsistent
2.light and shadow
3. wood panels  pieces

Listening
1. original ， added  ， increase value ，one half years
2. removed simple light face realistic
3. ground valuable piece same tree


The lecture entirely refutes the passage. It is said in the lecture that the portrait of an elderly woman in a white bonnet is indeed painted by Rembrandt.

First, in the reading passage, the author believes that the woman's dress in the portrait is inconsistent; while on the other hand, the lecturer claims that the color of the painting is not original and the fur collar's color is added after one hundred years（竟然听成了one half years，但是还给愣了一下，怎么是years啊。。。结果是给听错鸟~） to increase its value.

Second, contrary to the statement that Rembrandt who is a master of painting made the light and shadow wrong, the speaker in the lecture argues that the original color of the fur collar is light so that the face is illuminated by the color. Furthermore, the original painting is very realistic if the added color is removed.

Finally, the lecturer completely dines the viewpoint that the panel glued together from several pieces of wood shows that it could not be a work by Rembrandt. And according to the professor in the listening, the pieces of wood of this painting come from a single wood（我一听不清了就瞎猜，这个我当时猜的是这幅画的所有pieces是来自同一棵树，不幸猜错了。。。） and the reason to do so is to make the painting more ground and more valuable. What’ more, the pieces of the painting are from the same tree with the other works from Rembrandt.

To sum up, the speaker raises serious counterargument against the reading passage in this set of materials.


我觉得我现在听不懂是最主要的根源。。。
只能记下只言片语，然后就靠猜了。。。
猜对了就写的好点，猜错了就完了~
我还是好好练听力吧~
~~~~(>_<)~~~~

水晶小鱼UID: 2471655

加油加油

showgood07UID: 2605959

Reading:
1. inconsistent dressed
2. light and shadow not fit with together
3. painted on a panel made of several pieces of wood glued together

lecture:
1. 100 years after made
2. light, shadow, original
3. original painting are single piece of wood as were be aspect of Rembrandt painting

文章：
In this set of materials, the reading passage discusses some people doubts that Portrait of an Eldery Women in the White Bonnet  is not the work of Rembrandt in a certain way. But in the listening lecture, the speaker closely reexamined this theory by presenting a different prespective. She finds that this painting indeed, painted by Rembrandt which completely challenged the reading passage.

Firstly, the speaker raised the issues that the fur color. According to her, the fur collar was painting over the **of original about hundred years after painting was made. On the contrary, the passage, rather deviating from the speaker, demonstrates that Rembrandt is wearing a white linen cap of a kind that only servant would wear. So, the lecture totally disagree with the view made in the reading.

The second point the professor use to refute the reading is that the assumption that light and shadow in the painting do not fit together is refuted by the fact that in the original painting. (中间还漏了一截)However, this is different from the reading which states that in this painting these elements do not fit together directly contradicting what the lecture indicate.

Moreover, contrarty to the belief in passage that examination of the back of the painting reveals that it was painted on a panel made of several pieces of wood glued together, the professor asserts that the original painting are single piece of wood as were be aspect of 我听混了，Rembrandt painting.  The several pieces of wood were painted to make valuable by other people.
  
In sum up, the speaker has totally different opinion on the topic made in the reading.

感觉错误特别多，漏掉的信息也很多，比如： painting’s value by making a look like formal of a characteristic ** lady，至今没听明白，X-Ray analysis没听到，Self-Portrait with a Hat，没听到。
唉，要做的事情还很多啊····

hulinlin24UID: 2731389

TPO4

以前写过了。。。so很有印象，比较简单了。。哈哈

reading  arguments                                                                             lecture arguments; @" b; (O
1. polar regions                                                                 1.warmer＞today
   maintain temperature                                                        cooler→migrate
2. position&movement legs                                                2.differ
   all endotherms underneath body                                         support, large animal
3. bone structure HC→grow quickly                                   3.growing rings
                                                                                           fast warm, slow cool

According to the listening passage, the professor says that scientists found some problems about the evidence that dinosaurs were endotherms. The professor gives some reasons below to cast doubt on the reading passage that dinosuars were endotherms.

To begin with, we can learn from the lecture, the dinosaurs could not be proven to be endotherms due to the fossils of polar dinosaurs. Because the region which the dinosaurs fossils were found was warmer than today. In addition, the professor point out that when the polar became cooler, dinosaurs would not migrate like other reptiles. The reasons risen in the passage are contradicted.

Secondly, the writer infers the dinosaurs were the endotherms throgh the position of the legs differs from the reptiles. However, the professor gives another explaination about leg position of dinosaurs. The legs undereath dinosaurs’ body are use for supporting more weight. Dinosaurs were large animals.

Finally, the lecture mentions that there are second growing rings of dinosuars to oppose the evidence given by the writer. The second growing rings reflect that dinosaurs grew slowly or stopped growing in the cold periods and grew fast in the warm periods. However, the endotherms would grow rapidlly when the weather becomes cooler. There are the evidences that dinosuars were not endotherms.

这篇本身就比较简单，而且我以前写过，筒子们还改过。。。so印象很深，内容基本上都能写出来了

beverly910614UID: 2728081

占个座，我想明天早上集中突破法一起做几篇。明天交。~THX~~!