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TOPIC: ISSUE159 - "The human mind will always be superior to machines because machines are only tools of human minds."
Since the dawn of computer technology, machines have been experiencing rapid advancement, leading many to wonder whether they will be superior to human minds in the near future(near有点多余,题目只用了will,不一定是near 的future). While I agree that machines are tools of human minds, machines can still be superior to human minds in such aspects as calculation, though not in others including……(??), as discussed below.
Admittedly and indisputably, the reason for creating machines is to help us with our work. (TS主题句后面最好需要适当的论证进行过渡,然后举例子,否则感觉有点脱节)Whether it was in the First Industrial Revolution when the steam machine was invented aimed at improving industrial production, or the Information Revolution characterized by the invention of computer designed to facilitate military contact in the first place, machines were created by humans as a tool to save our time and advance social development. They have been put into factory assembly line to increase efficiency, installed in spaceships to perform difficult experiments and even applied in accidents to undertake arduous tasks. And machines have even been trained to accompany the old, play with the young and even do the housework for the family, as is the case of robots. And scientists have even been working on super microchips that can be implanted into machines to increase their intelligence dramatically, as is the case of Artifical (Artificial) Intelligence. All in all, machines have been an inalienable tool for human society.(这段的结构有待进一步改进,例子比较多,但是比较混乱)
Indeed, there is no denying the fact that machines are superior to ourselves in several aspects, especially considering the speed of calculation involved. (首句建议用Besides。。。,似乎更合适, 和上文是并列关系)Whether it was the first computer capable of doing thousands of times of calculation per second or today’s mini laptop able to calculate millions or even trillions of times during the same time, no human mind is able to match this speed. The way computers do their calculations according to established arithmetic programs is far quicker than the way our neuro units are linked up together and activated to start logical reasoning. With a simple input of numbers and a click of mouse, the answer appears immediately, which is undoubtedly far superior to whatever arithmetic tactics we use. That is why we can confidently leave our calculation work to those machines with microchips inside and engage ourselves in more complex design process.
Nevertheless, it does not amout(amount) to the conclusion that our fears of being replaced by advanced machines in the near future are justiable(justifiable), which inevitably overlooks fundamental differences between human mind and machines. (观点称述很清楚) Though it is understandable that after many fearful scenes depicted in science fiction movies, many ask the question: what if machines would be so superior to us in all aspects that the dominating role humans play and the suborbinate(subordinate) role machines take today are to be reversed in the future? However, by posing such a question, we overlook the fact that human minds are fundamentally different from machines in that machines are programmed while human minds are dynamic. That is to say, the way machines work are based on the orders given by the implanted programs that are created by human minds in the first place. Unlike human minds that are capable to learn from experience, adapt to new environment and think creatively, machines can only perform what are implanted in themselves. Unless told in advance by programmers, a machine has no idea what to perform, just like a robot trained to save people underwater has no idea what action to take if a fire breaks out, or a machine designed to detect strange smiles can sense no anomaly if strange lights flash by. As a result, unless give the same neuro network as that in our human mind, machines can never think actively. Though they can be trained to sense the feeling of sorrow according to the subtle change of muscles on human faces, they can by no means know what to do to console us. Therefore, the fact that human mind is a dynamic entity can not be surpassed by any program.(同样的感觉,全是道理论证,而且句子之间的连接不太好,感觉比较混乱。。)
In sum, machines are tools created by ourselves, and are definitely faster in calculation in face of arithmetic work. Yet, without a fair understanding of the uniqueness of the dynamic mind humans have, we are in danger of putting us in futile fear of being replaced by those order-based machines.
个人水平也有限,改的不好请见谅~~~
整体感觉文章论点清晰、完善,但是在论证段的论述中,结构比较混乱,调整一下逻辑顺序也许会更好点。
由于我级别不够,一小时只能发3个帖子,所以就把我的文章贴在下面啦~~ 带来不便请见谅~~~
Issue 103"The study of history has value only to the extent that it is relevant to our daily lives." (1 研究历史的价值只体现在这种研究和我们的日常生活相关时。
提纲:
1. 1.同意。和我们日常衣食住行相关的历史研究可以让我们了解我们现在生活的发展之路,教会我们要珍惜生活,并启迪我们如何去让生活过得更好。
2. 2.反对。对和我们日常衣食住行无关的历史研究,也有意义,了解历史有利于培养人民的爱国情感。
3. 3.对历史的研究还可以汲取治国安邦的经验教训。
Is the study of history worthy only in so far as the respects that are related to our daily lives? Partly i am in agreement of this opinion. However, to my point of view, the study which is irrelevant to daily lives is of great significance to human race as well. When the research of history been conducted, equal emphasis is supposed to be put on both of the two field.
I am in favor of the assertion that the history study that has connections with the daily life will definitely bring advantages to people. Considering that the history study that is relevant to our daily lives can help people learn the development process of living style, from the old backward original condition to the good modern life, it can motivate people to search for inspiration to make a better life, such as how to produce more healthy food with less damage to the environment and how to clean the polluted water to be potable. It would be no exaggeration to say that no one in the world will forget the hybrid rice, which can produce several times rice more than the former. The inspiration of this invention stems from the inventor, a great Chinese scientist, Longping Yuan, facing the harsh reality that millions of people were suffering from hungry due to lacking food. This person overcame a series of obstacles and ultimately succeeded in creating hybrid rice, which saved millions of people from starvation. Such history researches are of remarkable significance in that the descendants can learn diligence, courage and wisdom from the history people who have made tremendous benefits to our daily lives and then make it possible creating better lives for human beings.
However, the history study which is in relation to our daily lives is as crucial as the relevant one. The research of the important events in the history will help cultivate the people’s patriotic passion which is both a stimulation for people to make concerted efforts and a great power of pushing a country forward. There is no doubt that the Chinese people will never forget Mao Zedong, a prominent brave person who guided the masses to fight for their new lives against the invasion and oppression of Japan. After eight years’ rough fight, they Chinese won and changed the fate of China from the oppressed weaker to the host of themselves. As a result, this eminent leader is still being recalled by millions of Chinese and makes them feel proud of being a Chinese. Likely, there will be no immovable patriotic feeling and national confidence without understanding of the country’s history . Consequently, even though some investigations of the history are irrelevant of our daily lives, they are indispensible and meaningful to develop patriotic passion.
What’s more, precious experiences of running a country can be obtained by the study of history which is also not relevant of daily life. People can absorb lessons from the mistakes so as to avoid the repeated error and learn the successful experiences to guide us forward success. The rule of managing state affairs according to law which is being adopted by many countries throughout the world is the result of analyzing the history. No matter in the ancient Greece or China, facing with the drawbacks of ruling by propriety or man, the statement of regulating the country according to law is a new reform. Which has been proved by the practice of history to be correct. As a result, nowadays, there are many nations which prefer to this rule to manage the country and get excellent effect.
To sum up, history is a treasure-house with inexhaustible precious wealth to descendents. As the saying goes ”history is a mirror to today”. The study aspects of history both about the relevant and irrelevant are significant. What’s we need to do is unearthing the value historical treasure to serve today.
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