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谢谢如如来佛转世般的楼主~~求点评~~感激~~~
TOPIC: ISSUE154 - "Both parents and communities must be involved in the local schools. Education is too important to leave solely to a group of professional educators."
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Outline:
开头：作者观点——个人观点（认同）
第二段：家长在孩子成长中扮演重要角色：1.父母是孩子的“第一老师”影响着孩子的一举一动；2.父母是真心替孩子着想，关心，监督，鼓励
第三段：社会在教育中的作用：1.社会上的资助，使得教育更有质量和保障
2.孩子必须了解、接触社会
第四段：举例证明家长和社会的作用
第五段：最后，谁也不能代替教育者在教育上的作用，他们有经验和知识。
第六段：然而，三者也存在着隐患：家长不能溺爱，社会不能让学生了解太多黑暗面，老师不能不负责
结尾：教育在任何时代任何国家都是重中之重，需要所有人都参与其中
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According to the speaker's claim, education is so important that it's necessary to get parents and communities involved in, together with group of professional educators to help the society cultivating more outstanding persons. I agree with it as long as managing proper.

Firstly, parent, also can be called the "first teacher" acts as a key role in child's growth. At the time a baby was born, parents were the first people he saw, child didn't know anything until his parents told him, and gradually the baby learns to imitate every single words, movements or expressions of his parents. Therefore, he is likely to become a little copy of his parents. Moreover, child is the apple of his parents, so it's impossible for any parent to teach his child something wrong for purpose. In short, parents are the persons who teach you when you face a new question, correct you when you do something improper, supervise you when you are lazy and encourage you when you are upset.

At the same time, society factors also can not be ignored which are ultimately contributing to education. Firstly, society could help improving our quality of learning for the reason that schools could often get inconsistent assistance from it. Thus, with more advanced instruments and more comfortable circumstances of studying, students could learn better. Secondly, no students can be outstanding without exist of society effects. Students have to know, contract with and finally be in the complicated society and their mission is to apply the knowledge they learned from school to the society, so society factors are as important as parents mentioned before.

Furthermore, to fully prove the significance of parents and society, we may look down to an example relating to an organization in the United States. The organization, Parent-Teacher Association (PTA) is aiming to support and speak on behalf of children and youths in schools and in the community, and before governmental agencies and other organizations whose decisions affect children; to assist parents in developing skills they need to raise children, and to encourage parental and public involvement in public school. The organization is made up of branches in every state and a statistic has shown that in 1993 its national membership totaled about 7 million in some 27000 local units and the number is increased year by year. This evidence lends the supports to the claim that parents and communities ought to be involved as the speaker contends.

Last, there is no substitute for a group of professional educators when coming into the importance of education. Educators are so experienced that they can easily tell which way is the most effective in learning that students would not go to the wrong way. Also, educators have abundant knowledge which could impart to their students, equipped them with more information. In addition, not only the knowledge but also some virtues like diligence, persistence, humility, politeness and so forth can students required from their teachers.

However，at the time parents, communities and educators exploit their advantages, they also bring about certain disadvantages which are sometimes hidden and overlooked. When care eventually becomes dotage, it's dangerous for students to form a bad habit of over depending on others. When so much darkness of society presented to the students, it will influences their judgments gradually. And if teachers at school are not that responsible, it will severely impede students' future.

In sum, education is something which can not be despised in any period of time. And raise a new generation is the biggest project in any countries. Therefore all members of society should be involved in the local schools as the speaker claims.（608 words）

sinbad_28UID: 2147500

TOPIC: ISSUE40 - "Scholars and researchers should not be concerned with whether their work makes a contribution to the larger society. It is more important that they pursue their individual interests, ...
王梦然8851 发表于 2010-7-21 03:23

Under the circumstance of such diversified subjective diverging subject for researching, we have a strong tendency in turning tend to lean toward the side of allowing the researchers and scholars sufficient liberty degrees of freedom to decide their own subjective is always effective approach through which the talent and intellect of researchers and scholars could be dug out cultivated or inspired. Significantly endowing the right of liberal research is, it can never overshadow the significance of restriction and regulation towards research. In taking various factors into consideration, I reckon that the claim in which the liberty of research is overemphasized would be too vague to be informative.

Admittedly, as is often the case, passions and interests of researchers accepted to be the most impulsive strength for encouraging them to devote in the whole process of research without any extraction and idle, for the reason that one's interests could ignite the courage of researchers to overcome the most sophisticated complex problems. As a common sense, only the raw interests are the straight forward stimulation stimulus for achieving progress in any fields. To confirm justify this point, one needs to look no further than the case of Marie Curies. She lost her mother in her childhood and suffered from poverty, so her family cannot support her to study in education institution. However, it was her great interests towards science that promoted her to learn hard by herself. Finally, under impulse of her passionate enthusiasm of science, she was get the admission from accepted by a famous university.

The inherited inherent nature of research based on one's interest poses some problems that hinder the blue print of successful achievement from being converted to reality. Theoretically, sounded as liberal research is, while in practice some impediments such as wasting the talent of our researchers and even non-profitable investment are the fatal elements that make the feasibility of this proposal vulnerable to any questions and challenges. The very meaning of research is to improve the human life standard and to promoting the human civilization. In this sense, only the research which is can be beneficial to human beings was is the meaningful and valuable, otherwise it is only a kind of wasting of money and talent. To attest this viewpoint, the case of the invention of military weapon was a good example. After the world war two individuals reevaluated the science and technology which brought about fire guns, warship, submarine and even nuclear. These destructive inventions derived from science and technology threatened the peace of our world. [战争经费是否必要，是否有利人类呢？这个问题就比较难说了。和平固然重要，但如果战争经费是用于防御的呢？是应该花还是不应该花呢？可能有更好的例子吧。]

In addition, there is no point to claim that researches based on individual's interest unexceptionally are the most promising one. Indispensable indulging the interests of researchers is, it can never overshadow the advantages of doing researches for contributing to the society. Some researches which was designed from the prospective of the requirement of society are also important that cannot be overlooked. To substantiate this point, the case of the exploration of universe serves as an appropriate illustration. Some countries work on exploring the outer space cooperatively such as United States and former Soviet Union to discover the available spaces and resources for human. The population explosion and shortage of the resources are the most complicated and urgent problems for human beings.

To bring the idea further elaborate this idea, it is unwarranted and sometimes even dangerous for us to just rely on the interests of research always effective approach for guaranteeing the morality and legal, as it stands, it can only do part of the job. Some of scientific research was not only influence human dignity but also destructive to morality and legal, which [这个which是修饰research呢还是morality and legal呢?如果从结构上说应该是后者。建议断句，which改成It] should be banned by regulation or restriction restricted by of governments. Extending The extension of giving the priority for researching according to one's declination without any restriction and regulation would be deemed to suffer from the huge lost loss and even great
bigger failure. To demonstrate this point, the case of clone serves as an example. Clone was an astonishing and promising technique for conserving human genes, however it was banned by religions and laws on the ground that human clone is immoral and illegal.

To sum up, it is essential for us to restrict the liberty of researchers and scholars for deciding their subjective. The research must be assured to be moral and legal. Every research must contribute to human civilization; otherwise, it is doomed to be meaningless.

sinbad:
1.这是我改过的写的最好的一篇：逻辑清晰，语言流畅，推导连贯，恭喜恭喜！！！
2.内容（例子）上可改可不改。语言上有一个小小的问题：which从句用得略微有些多，给改了一句，有时候断句其实表意更清晰，但不是大问题。

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77# sinbad_28
感谢斑竹的指点与鼓励，请受小女子一拜！学习去鸟！

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[i=s] 本帖最后由 美丽太阳花 于 2010-7-23 10:02 编辑 [/i]

48"The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten.


谢谢楼主，欢迎拍砖新手上路，还不太会使用这个，我编辑了好几次格式，发现每次都是字的大小调整不过来，请楼主见谅
According to the speaker, the groups are much more emphasized to a point where the individuals are overshadowed. In taking many factors into consideration, I reckon that they intertwine during the history, both should be focused on. It is hard to decide who are more important.

There are not deniable that famous individuals play an important role in the significant events. With long run thinking, they have a deep understanding of the contemporary social conditions and possess the ability to come forward in the critical time. Just like the beacon which is lighting up the dark, they lead the confused mass to attend new ideology and historical age. Famous American president Lincoln was against with slavery, so he tried his best to win the battle of American Civil War and abolished this disastrous system, bring freedom and democracy to the blacks. Hidalgo is hailed as the 'Father of the Nation' whose speeches gave courage and shock to an entire nation. He was one of the great leaders in the Mexican War of Independence. He brought a new political and educational system here, which opposed tyranny.

In addition, the groups are very vital which does the real propelling of history, no one can disavow the efforts and scarification in the evolution of human progression. According to the historical law, if the leaders could not win the support of common people, he could not fulfill the final goal, so were many social activists. On the other hand, the groups work hard for create the material and spiritual wealth. The famous Ancient pyramids, which cost 100,000 people three years’ hard working, still attract all the tourisms in the world. Without the manufacturers who provide him the raw materials, Henry Ford’s ideas of car production would not exists. Also without the workers, the patent protectors, the salesmen, and the consumers, his ideas cannot be applied into practicality, produced by large quantities and have a unique impact on transposition.

However, the overstating of few famous elites would jeopardize the study of history and society. Firstly, it is impossible for the few elites that can present all the aspects of contemporary community, in sharp contrast groups stand for much more kinds and classes, such as sailors, farmers, soldiers and so on. Most of the accidents or events are caused by few problems which may intensively hampered the interest of the common people or some group of persons. For this reason, the study of the celebrities can only provide the researchers with the general view. In addition, it would lead the heroism which is not thinking of others. But in modern society, we need more cooperation. With the quantum leaps in science and technology, much more tasks can not accomplish by only few. Thirdly, every coin has two sides, famous elites also have advantages and disadvantages, but we may just focus on their merits with no comprehensive views of things.

In sum, few individuals and the groups play respective indispensable roles in history, we can not overshadow anyone. Social progress is all the favors of humans.

jiaojiaocUID: 2807152

55555... 现在还在改吗？？

第一次写...哎....

自己觉得有几个问题：1。语言不够好 2。例子不够多 3。感觉有些跑题..或者写的有点散...

自己不知道怎么再改了.. 555...麻烦楼主不胜感激~~


I agree with the author insofar that sometimes children’s socialization determines the destiny of society. However, other factors will also be decisive to the fate of society. In addition, we already have some of the methods of teaching children, yet which kind of is society is better, whether these methods will be conducive to bring a better society?

Admittedly, children are the future and hope of the society, and similarly they play a crucial role in society. Thus, parents and society take more and more attention on children’s socialization. Nevertheless, children prematurely being socialization to experience a complex inner world of adults result that their aesthetic ability, language and self-awareness was prematurely mature. However, they become "well-behaved sensible", but also lost the most precious innocence. And sometimes the socialization of children just only rich their life experience.

Only socialization of children will be the crucial factor of the destiny of society? Of course not, other factors will also determine the destiny of society. Children’s intelligence, wisdom, creativity and perseverance are the main factors to determine the fate of society. Because of the perseverance and creativity, Isaac Newton discovered gravitational theory, built up classic mechanics. He is so obsessed in the discovering of the truth, and creation is the biggest pleasure to him. He is one of the most important scientists in the history, and his impact on society is also indubitable. Based on the example of Isaac Newton, the conclusion that children’s socialization is the decisive factors of the destiny of society is incomplete. Children’s creativity, perseverance, intelligence and wisdom are the main conditions for determining the fate of society.  

Moreover, we already have some methods of teaching children. Such as, attending school, taking piano or painting classes and something like that. Yet, some shortcomings need to improve. Education begins at home, most parents ignore the family environment. Children do not only acquire knowledge from a teacher but also from their parent or family members. Former Soviet Union, once a famous educator called Sukhomlinski likened children to a piece of marble. He said, six sculptors are needed to mold this piece of marble to a statue: family, school, the group of children, children himself, books and occasional factors. Judging from the order of it, family is on the top of the list, it means that family play an important role in raising children.

By the same token, which kind of society is better? Whether methods that one teaching children will be conducive to bring a better society? If we define a better society as a rich one, then we will see the increasing health problem by fast food, drug trade, violence and other problems. The better society we need is a moral, safe, stable, harmony and peaceful one. To bring about this society, family education is one of the most decisive factors.

In sum, the importance of children’s socialization is indubitable and the children’s creativity, perseverance, intelligence and wisdom are the main conditions for determining the fate of society. And it will bring about a better society, only if when children develop comprehensively in all aspects.

zjlvmiaoUID: 2809137

130我的理解：
(train for a social environment) "The children must be properly socialized"
(prepare for social life) "Children have to be socialized in school"
来源
http://wordnetweb.princeton.edu/perl/webwn?s=socialize

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另附一篇，请指正
TOPIC: ISSUE144 - "It is the artist, not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value."

*a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.

Artist and critic are of great value to our society. The former creates the art work such as novels, music, paintings, films and so forth, while, the latter helps us understand the true meaning of the works and offers us different angle to see the world. And of course, in some cases, the latter tells us how to identify whether the works are fatigue or not. Although it's hard to evaluate who is more valuable, as far as I'm concerned, the former gives society something of lasting value, and the latter helps us to understand the value.
First and foremost, critic is important to both artist and society. Though writing articles, talking in the TV program or public, critic expresses his own thinking about the works of art. If it's to their taste, they praise the art works, along with the artist who composes it. Adversely, if they don't like the works, they will speak out frankly and openly. Whether they speak highly of the art works or not, the artist benefits from it for he can improve his works' shortcomings and do the good better. As terms to the society, everyone can enjoy the art works better.
Apart from the great importance of critic, artist's function is obvious. It is the artist who creates works of art, so that critic has the chance to evaluate it and speak, at the same time, we have the possibility to enjoy it. Without works of art, we can hardly know "Romeo and Juliet", see "The Titanic", hear "the moonlight sonata", enjoy "Mona Lisa Smile". If that is the case, our society will lose its color.
Artist brings us his works of art. We can recite the famous sentences from Shakespeare "It is the east, and Juliet is the sun"; we can also beat with the same beat with Jack and Rose; we will also savor the happiness and sorrow from Beethoven; we will also smile a sweet smile just like Mona Lisa. It's the art works that artist presents us that makes the society colorful.
Not only works of art, the artist also gives us his spirit though his works. We know Romeo and Juliet were fighting their happiness against their parents; we also know love can be forever in the Titanic; Beethoven's struggle against fate moves us to tears; Mona Lisa gives us hope and courage though her smile. All in all, the spirits in art works helps us to grow up, be mature, and be strong.
In sum, although critic plays an important role in society, it is the artist that gives society something of lasting value.

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此生第一篇issue。。盼指点
OPIC: ISSUE88 - "Technologies not only influence but actually determine social customs and ethics."
WORDS: 868                   DATE: 2010/7/25 16:58:01

In an age when the internet is daily necessity, air-conditioning common practice, automobile another pair of shoes, it is really easy for any of us to ignore the existence of technology. Yet if deprived of all these, even for a single day or an hour, one’s life becomes a catastrophe. Cities suffering from power cut are best examples of the significance of technology today. I fundamentally agree with the author that technology influence social customs and ethics, either subtly or significantly. But whether it determines these depends on the type and timing of a certain technology.

If we look through history, there were times when every new technology brought about great changes in people's actions and ideas. With fire, our forefathers learned to eat cooked foods and became civil; with paper and pen, our ancestors found ways to record history and became knowledgeable; with car and plane, they freed their feet and learned about their regions; with the internet, they freed their thoughts and learned about the globe. It is definitely hard for any of us to say that we are not affected by technology, either interior or exterior. Take plastic as an example: such invention-- after changing what we wear, use and eat-- exerted considerable influence on what we think and believe. People began to sense the power of human beings to reconstruct the world and took the belief that, not only god but we can create things as well.  In this way, along with technological breakthrough are new lifestyles and beneath that style are new customs and ethics.

But it is arbitrary to quickly say that technology influence customs and ethics simply by changing life styles. Close scrutiny reveals that technology works in an endless cycle like this: it was invented to satisfy people's needs; after such satiation it creates a lot more needs. In light of this, technology, other than changing life style, is eventually making people more and more voracious and such desires drive the changes in man's own customs and ethics. We have all heard about the story: when train was first invented, experts commented that, not to say taking, even seeing a train, may leave someone mentally disordered since the train was so quick, quicker than people could stand. It sounds ridiculous for people today, for whom even super-sonic plane becomes not as quick as expected. The desire for speed is only a reflection of social life. People are now in want of fast restaurant, fast hotel, fast education and even fast marriage.  It is seemingly that technological breakthrough which leads to better physical speed, has now made people accept what they originally refused, such as one-night stand. Ethics and social conventions have been changed due to people’s unsatisfied desires.

If we get down to fundamentals and examine how many of these technologies are changing lifestyles and creating desires, we will sure find that it was not like yesterday when nearly all inventions had an impact. No one spares time to study how many patents are patented worldwide every day. We all know it must be an astonishing number. That is to say, with limited speed of adjusting customs and ethics, not all technology are having influences. Say, a new Macintosh software, no matter how powerful it is, cannot affect a PC user. People who are living diversified lives are less influenced by the even more diversified technologies, compared to their ancestors.

Today, the impact of a single technology is reduced to a limited extent, and the influence of it becomes more unconscious. However, as a whole, technology is exerting larger than ever influence on the way people socialize. The distance between countries and even continents has been diminished to be unrecognizable. The result of bridging geographical gap is profound. People contact each other regardless of ethnic, gender, occupation, region and anything we would consider decades before. It is safe to draw the conclusion that people today are more tolerant and willing to accept differences. And such tolerance changed people’s view of the world and of themselves, which is underlined in every social custom and ethic.

After all, no one can deny the influence of technology on social customs and ethics, yet determination is a one-way process, which cannot readily explain the impact of social customs and ethics on technologies. It is clear to all that Japanese cars are different from European ones, as is obvious that people there have different hair colors and complexions. Technology, although somewhat abstract, is a product, which is decided by the one who makes it and is influenced by the social conventions this certain one takes. Furthermore, beyond interactive influence, technologies and social customs and ethics, when contradicting each other, are actually readjusting themselves and making compromises from time to time. For example, hot issues like cloning are challenging both science and ethics. Therefore, it is not precise to say that technology determines social customs. It might be better to define an interactive relationship.

Here comes the conclusion: technology, by changing lifestyle and creating needs is surely influencing social customs and ethics. And its way of influencing people is now in a broader sense. Social customs and ethics, in turn, exert influence on technology as well.

sinbad_28UID: 2147500

请楼主帮我修改一下 感激不尽
题目：ISSUE8 - "It is often necessary, even desirable, for political leaders to withhold information from the public."
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superlonglongdf 发表于 2010-7-21 01:58

I agree with the speaker that it is often necessary, even desirable, for political leaders to withhold information from the public. Politicians may, in some special circumstances, be not wisdom wise to tell the truth in consideration of the interest of the party or the nation. however, we must not allow [we must not allow我觉得不合适，what you gonna do? They are the most powerful people in the nation. ] the politician undue freedom to withhold information from the public, otherwise, we will risk sanctioning demagoguery and the democracy of the society will also be undermined.

One reason for my fundamental agreement is that, considering their special career acquirement, it would better to withhold some information from the public, as the political leaders  should be much aware of their exposing of the private life lives, since good imagines of the politicians in the public are very important if the politicians want to gain more supports from the public and to win more ballots in the coming vote. For example, if the president of a country exposed of being afraid of his wife, or with some personal flaws and bad habits or trapped in a sex scandal, these the exposure of a president's family violence, love affair, inappropriate private behavior or what is worse, sex scandal, would throw a mud on his imagines and he would be possibly consequently lose most supports in the populace [这个词哪里学来的？呵呵。我还没见过呢。]. So in the position of the politicians themselves, the view concerning withholding information is realistic.


Another reason why I essentially agree with the speaker is that politicians withhold ing the information to some degree is due to that some plans are associated to the countries’ interest and safety thus keeping them complete confidential from the public is necessary. For example, the government must keep the plan of fighting against the terrorists as a secrete of the highest level of the country, to assure the action to be a success, in turn the public's safety is protected. And also every country’s limitary disposition and plan must withhold from the public, since military link with the safety of a country.

Additionally, withhold information from the public can also avoid the horror panic of the public which would result in the unrest of the society, For example, when a ravage disease such as SARS, or bird flu was pervasive in a country, the government may disclose the early number of people that killed by these disease to make the populace aware of the fatal results caused by the disease so they would take some measurements to keep themselves away from the disease. But the government won't expose the real number when it become too large, because it would be not conducive but perhaps would cause the disorder of the society, all they can do is invest more money and more experts to cure the disease as early as possible. In such crucial time, withhold information from the public is very important to keep the society go on well. [写的非常好！我有一点想法供你参考：前年美国猪流感流行的时候，官方公布的数字和你的说法恰恰相反——感染数少量的时候，几乎每天更新，而到后期阔大的时候却逐渐不公布了。当然，各国政府的做法都有各自的考虑，所以你不必在意。]

      Having recognized that withhold information from the pubic is often necessary for the interest of the public, political leaders must never tell lies lie to the public or withhold the information too often, otherwise the public risk sanctioning demagogy, and the result is very destructive. We will never forget the fact that there were inter-religious massacres and nations conflicts in history since the misunderstanding and hates hatred between each religion caused by the lies and the deception of the government. Many people died and the cities were destroyed. Then when people become conscious informed and found they were deceived by the politicians, the government lost the credibility of the populace forever and were finally substituted by the new government. the old government ended up losing credibility and failed in regaining it. The replacement of governing system sadly became the only option for the country.

     In sum, the way of politics requires the political leaders to withhold information from the public. Such behavior is necessary means to the final objective of effective political leadership and the interest of the country. Nevertheless, if a leader goes too far away on this point, depends on the lies and deception to preserve his leadership, he is destined to ends up with a failure as a betrayer of the people and the country.

sinbad:
这是个非常难写的题目，能写到这个水品已经相当不错了。语言和写作技巧都很娴熟，没什么大要改的。一个建议：withhold这个词用的稍微多了点，我能想出的近义词有disclose, cover, non-release, non－publicize等，以及相关反义词和名词可以用。祝你考试成功！

sinbad_28UID: 2147500

谢谢楼主O(∩_∩)O哈哈~如果忙的话，语法错误标注就好啦，不用费心帮我想啦。
TOPIC: ISSUE153 - "Students should bring a certain skepticism to whatever they study. They should question what they are taugh ...
费话先生 发表于 2010-7-21 09:33

Skepticism, broadly defined, is an attitude of incredibility towards everything including a general theory or a specific object [没看懂你想说啥。。。]. The author claims that every student should hold such an attitude toward what they study in daily's education. I agree with what the author says since skepticism can stimulate a student's interests in studying, encourage him to innovate and think independently.
Students who hold a certain skepticism to study will have more incentives to study and more likely to discuss with teacher. When students start to doubt what the teacher tells to them, they will try to collect information to verify the validity of the teacher's argument afterwards. Through this procedure, they can have a better mastery of knowledge and are more likely to find their favorite field. On the contrary, those who used to accept no matter what the teacher teaches to them have few incentives [这个词全文用的都不对，自己去查一下。] to rebel the existing theories, so they feel needless reluctant to search for more knowledge voluntarily. Additionally, those students who are so full of skepticism incline tend to debate or discuss with teacher, which further arouse their inspiration and exploratory spirit [探索精神？这是中式英语] in turn, In short, due to the strong incentive to doubt whether the teachers are right and the discussions with teachers, the students will devote themselves in study more and better understand what they learn..
  Another obvious advantage is that skepticism can encourage students to innovate and think independently. As we all know, skepticism is one of the best impetus to the innovation in one's study. For example, a student who has a skepticism attitude[这个词全文用的也不对，skeptism是一种思维方式，不是一种态度。另外，建议查一查attitude的意思，英文解释会和你想象的不一样] towards the solution on a social issue may try to find the most suitable way he thinks to solve or improve it. Through the procedure of improving and correcting the existing defects, the students learn how to think independently and innovate. Both the creativity and the critique thinking will be quite beneficial to one's future work or further research. Also, due to our students' innovation and critique thinking, the current wrongs [mistakes] can be corrected instead of being repeated in the future.
   Many people would hold a strong opposition to the opinion from two aspects. The first reason is that the skepticism may lead the class into a situation of disordered. However, the disordered class to a large measure is more easily inspire students' critique thinking and stimulate the interests than an ordered class since the above reasons. The second reason may be that it is not proper for students, especially young students, to doubt everything since they do not have enough ability. But such opinion overlooks the real spirit of skepticism. Skepticism does not mean that a student should deny everything that other tell him. In fact, skepticism is something that encourages you to ask question and explain the question resting on his independent critique thinking rather than an authority's thinking. So, even if students are young and have pretty limited knowledge, students can also benefits a lot from the procedures of collecting information and demonstrating his ideas. A student is allowed to be unfamiliar with Goldbach’s conjecture; but it is rather a pity that he never doubts why one plus one really equates two.
   Overall, we should encourage our students to hold certain skepticism in their daily study. The original goal of education is to help a student find his interested field and obtain his goal based on his own independent thinking and own ability. A famous educational professor once said: when people are over thirty years old, most of them will forget ninety percent of what they have ever learned in university. So the most lasting advantage for education is to teach a student how to think himself and make judgment. From the angle, why should we oppose our students to doubt the existing knowledge?

sinbad: 很抱歉，最后2段我只是粗粗的看了一下，实在不想改了。我不知道以前给你改过没有，我觉得全文像是在读中文翻译。这样的文章3分估计都困难，你要加油了。刨去语言，像这样一个简单的题目居然只有寥寥几个例子，论述只有泛泛而谈，最末端应该收尾了却用了个名人名言（这是英文写作和中文写作的区别）。

费话先生UID: 2788924

没关系没关系~这篇文章我打算重写了。。。嗯，Sinbad，对于例子方面有什么好建议没有？我是这样考虑的，它不是说students嘛，我实在很难举出students的例子。单举质疑精神如何的例子，是不是又有偏题之嫌。。。。 85# sinbad_28

PsMaggieUID: 2861847

谢谢楼主~~如果楼主时间不是特别充裕的话给个整体评价好了，关于本句的第一句话do not do it我一直觉得别扭，但是不知道改成什么好，还有就是第四段也就body的第三段，这种把三个小论点凑成一大段的写法您看看这样可以吗

TOPIC: ISSUE51 - "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."
WORDS: 591          TIME: 00:54:39          DATE: 2010/7/22 11:35:16

From this assertion it seems that the speaker put a premium on satisfying students’ needs and interests in education while the education would fail if teachers do not do it.  I find this allegation to be specious. It wrongly suggests that in no circumstance can teaching succeed without meeting all the students' need. To a contrary this kind of pattern sometimes brings harmfulness. My points of contention with the speaker involve the fundamental objectives and nature of research, as discussed below.

First by scrutinizing some aspects of this assertion, indeed, carrying about one's truly needs and interests can bring up a student in a better way. One of the greatest scientists Newtown had a saying: the best teacher is called interest. Educants may feel being valued and respected when schools think a lot of what they really looking for, thus they perform better in their studying. For example, Samuel ChaoChung Ting who received the Nobel Prize was nurtured according to his own hobbies by his parents early in his life. "Just let him do what he interested in!", this is the father's answer while asked about how he trained a son of Nobel Prize-winning successfully. Parents guided Ding's learning orientation by his personal loving and then made Ding finally become a winner of Nobel Prize through letting go, trust and the type of respect of friends. Therefore, in this case we can learn that a personal interest plays an important part in one’s learning career.

However, there might cause a counter-effect in efficiency if such considering use into every student specially. Just suppose if there are 100 children who are holding different needs and interests totally, what could educator do with the 100 kids? In terms of the speaker’s saying, teacher should find out the 100 kinds of needs and interests first of all and then designs 100 methods of teaching on a one-to-one basis----there is no need to explain how much time it will take, while students have already left school probably----then carrying out teaching programs on the students one by one. From this it appears that the speaker's suggestion is entirely low in efficiency.

Secondly, it would cause too much human and material cost. To treat each learner by different courses based on what he or she likes may lead to a consequence of admission of insufficient income which may result schools run down in worse. Thirdly, it is not so sure that scholasticals have already own the ability to perceive their social identity. They may not know what they really want clearly and may disable to figure out right judgments. Therefore there may has a minus effect if the instructor hands the initiative to the students blindly. Furthermore, people always love to do what they are good at. If let the students choose the subjects only they are interested in randomly, students will probably miss plenty of significant learning content and what's more they may become more and more self-center of which in some circumstance may the school bring up incomplete-knowledge-structural students while the purpose of the education is to culture all-round development of human resources. If we separate education from the individual needs and interests of each student, the system of education would become formalistic and consequently, a students' potential is tempting to be neglected and buried forever.

To sum up, the author fails to recognize that not in all situations will the type of education meeting individual needs and interests of each student be effective. In the final analysis, to bring up a kid should pay attention to many aspects such as one's performance in morality, one's absorbing in important knowledge, one's self-care ability and so on----and I would be hard-pressed to imagine a worthier end.

sinbad_28UID: 2147500

没关系没关系~这篇文章我打算重写了。。。嗯，Sinbad，对于例子方面有什么好建议没有？我是这样考虑的，它不是说students嘛，我实在很难举出students的例子。单举质疑精神如何的例子，是不是又有偏题之嫌。。。。
费话先生 发表于 2010-7-26 19:03

例子可以是完全详细，也可以是不完全详细，比如：

完全详细的例子：Facebook CEO Zach M's business idea stems from a course project when he was a college student in Stanford. He believed that sharing of personal life by posting photos and writing short comments on internet can create a dynamic in networking and thus become a new value.

不完全详细的例子（没名没姓的例子，当然这是我随便起的）：A Phd student must have an attitude of skepticism on his/her area of studies. Skepticism, in a sense can be rephrased as a critic-thinking, is a fundamental of re-evaluating truth and false, reality and hypothesis, axiom and pseudo-science. An absence of that...( blablabla......)

b6ppUID: 2770374

谢谢前辈！请您指教。
150 "Because of television and worldwide computer connections, people can now become familiar with a great many places that they have never visited. As a result, tourism will soon become obsolete."

There is no way around the fact that in this day and age television and the Internet (and some other modern media) have become more indispensable than before. However, when it comes to the relations between tourism and these media, I, though with some reservation, cannot agree with the speaker's claim that tourism will be obsolete since people can get more information of unfamiliar places through these modern technologies.

To begin with, if "tourism" are defined as one characterized by going to some "new" place just to see the scenery and listen to the guider's introduction, the speaker's assertion might be true in some extent. With the development of technology of television and computer connection, people today are given the ability to "see" the beautiful sceneries all around the world at home and learn a lot of knowledge about  the climates, customs, geography, etc. about other religions just sitting before the screen. Apparently, tourism must be obsolete and decrease as a result, under this circumstance.

However, I hold the view that we should define "tourism" more essentially--in terms of an overall view including our spiritual outlook--then the speaker's claim might become a dual one. Specifically, tourism is a sort of spiritual communication between the traveler and a new place rather than a poor and icy image or a word-description. For instance, one can certainly appreciate the pictures of classical architecture built in Ming dynasty via a connected computer and even scan the history of it, but what he cannot attain is the real feel of standing before the glorious palace and "touch" the history of this great dynasty, a period during which Chinese classical architecture art reached its top level. That is to say, a man without a trip to the architecture of Ming, most of us would believe, is an unfortunate victim of credulity of modern media, deprived one of the greatest opportunities of achieving a private experience about these cultural relics which is indispensable if one want to get a unique and unforgettable impression from there.

Admittedly, tourism, in some extent, is indeed experiencing a decline in terms of the time we spend on it. For example, according to a recent survey in Kaohsiung conducted by Heckman Chang, a celebrated socialist in southern Taiwan, most people (more than 70%) nowadays prefer to spend their holidays at home and less time is spent on tourism. However, this decrease results from the modern life style (instead of TV and connected computers) which gives people so much pressure that they do not have enough time to have a tour. Therefore, it is not necessarily the case that TVs and computers will lead to a decrease of tourism.

Moreover, by contrast, television and computer connections, in my viewpoint, is not only an important part of our daily life, but also a great help of tourism‘s development. Firstly, television programs tell people more about the various attracting places all around the world, so people can save much time spent in looking for tourism destinations. Secondly, computer connections will help tourists find the path, transportation, hotels, and even native guiders, without which people would waste a lot of time hunting for these proper necessities. Also from the survey I just mentioned, over half of people claim that they will not have a hard time when deciding to have a tour, which means it is more convenient and time-saving than before with the help of television and computer connection. Consequently, it is not television and computer connections per se that make tourism obsolete and we should note the positive effects of them. This is especially true when we accede to the second definition of tourism.

In sum, I would like to come to the conclusion that the speaker’s assertion is an arbitrary one. We should first be aware of what is tourism and then understand how television and computer connection can makes a contribution to enhancing tourism, instead of make it obsolete.

ruanzuoqishiUID: 2851619

社会化的定义是如何培养孩子融入社会。正确积极地培养孩子   
有两方面
1 基本的生活技能  读写 与人交流  。。。
2 正确的价值观 人生观   
这些培养对孩子以后有深远的影响
1是他们以后学习更多知识，更好的和他人打交道的基础   
2  对他们的价值判断起很大影响
但是孩子在长大之后有很大可能改变 甚至完全颠覆。

所以说 当前对孩子的社会化并不完全能决定社会的未来  还有以后多年的教育
对于孩子的教育

C 我们的教育在启蒙阶段还是不错的  但是有两个问题   
1． 没有更好的适应社会   分数
2． 社会的教育  拜金主义   很多丑恶的现象人们的冷漠  
D 教育是多方面 长时间的过程

刚接触issue,写个提纲，不知道跑题了没。