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8月21日 独立作文 小修改~

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Actually, the professore contrasts all the assumptions made in the reading passage. His point is that the settlements of Chaco Canyon are not residential or for storage,neither cremonial centers

First of all, the professore thinks it unconvincing to judge the settlements as houses just from their outside apperance.Outside主要是说外部结构和那个TON是一样滴，但是内部却不同 If the hypothesis made by the author was right, there would be many fire places for daily cooking. However, even in one of the largest settlements, exist fire places for only 10 family复数. But according to the estimate of excavators, there should be more than 100 families。其实第一段说的是反驳阅读里的房子很大，能容好几百人，但是听力中说，不是的啦，最大的房间才能容100个，况且那取暖设施最多容十个家庭，所以有矛盾。
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Secondly, there is no strong evidence to show that the Chaco Canyon was used to store food like maize in the past. From findings,researchers didn'see any traces of maize on the floor, not to mention its containers.

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At last, the third theory is also reputed by the professore as the excavators found much more materials for buildings like sands, stone and contructure tools besides the broken pots mentioned in the reading passage. It may only a place to keep trash and have regular meals for construction workers这段是反驳这个房子是用来做仪式的，因为发掘的材料都是建筑材料，罐子什么的可能是存放建筑工人的饭的

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Actually, the professore （拼写……）contrasts all the assumptions made in the reading passage. His point is that the settlements of Chaco Canyon are not residential or for storage,neither cremonial centers.（neither应该是两者之间吧？）
First of all, the professore thinks it unconvincing to judge the settlements as houses just from their outside apperance（拼写……）. If the hypothesis made by the author was right, there would be many fire places for daily cooking. However, even in one of the largest settlements, exist（单数） fire places for only 10 family. But according to the estimate of excavators, there should be more than 100 families.

Secondly, there is no strong evidence to show that the Chaco Canyon was used to store food like maize in the past. From findings,researchers didn'see any traces of maize on the floor, not to mention its containers.（新东方老师说，正式语体里一般不用简写）

At last, the third theory is also reputed by the professore as the excavators found much more materials for buildings like sands, stone and contructure tools besides the broken pots mentioned in the reading passage. It may only a place to keep trash and have regular meals for construction workers

Thus, it can be inferred that the professore challenges the passage by casting strong reasons.

不好意思啊楼主，我刚刚接触综合写作，答题方面没有太多经验，只能改改语法方面的小问题了。

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8-23 独立作文

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八月二十三号 综合作文

The speaker actually contradicts the disadvantages of communal online encyclopedias presented in the reading passage.

First of all, the reading passage argues that more errors will arouse as the contributors to a communal online encyclopedia lack academic credentials. However, the speaker's view is that the original ones are also far from perfect. On the contrary,the encyclopedias are easy to be
corrected on the internet while printed ones remain unchangable.

Secondly, the worry of the encyclopedias' security is also meaningless. In fact, they are setted in reading-format which guarantees that the cuicial parts are well protected. In addtion, some special editors will minitor the unproper changes.

At last, regarding the third concern, the speaker points out that traditional encyclpedias's space is often limited and they can not reflect the interests of most people. However, the on-line ones can be available to various people. Thus,the diversity of users is right the strongest advantage of online encyclopedias.

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独立作文
八月二十四日

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The most imperative element in a country is men. They establish the frameworkestablish the framework 我觉得有点怪 of the whole society , play various kinds of roles in all fields and so forth. Obviously, the development of a country connects extremely close with men. Therefore, speaking of the important factors of advancing a country, I am definitely In favor of schools.
To begin with, by receiving formal education from schools, the civil quality can be greatly enhanced. It will be a disaster if most people have difficulties in basic skills like reading or writing and know nothing about the science. Being prepared before stepping into society, civilians are able to handle different jobs, enrich individual life and foster well their children. Just take an example of Italy. In the 1950s, large amount of Italians were illiterate, even not speaking Italian for the reason that Italian was only literary language among nobles in the past. With the policy of compulsory education, the national language was popularized even in the most remote areas. And in the 1970s, Italy experienced “ economic miracle” and the society enjoyed a prosperous period.
Secondly, schools can cultivate numerous talents for the country, which offers a powerful impulse to its development. Children can get acquaint with knowledge of different fields like astronomy, chemisty, physics , biology, art, music, etc. According to their own wills, they continue to study further in certain areas and finally become the experts in their own professions. The large finance of many governments in the whole world is a strong evidence to show how much attention schools get. Admittedly, there is the possibility that parents can educate their children at home. But it is just an exception and so far, only schools are competent to reach this goal in a quite efficient and effective way.
We can not deny other factors like transforming welfare system, building up a fair legal system, protecting the environment and helping needy people. But we should be aware that all this good changes depend on those who take real actions. And schools are right the places [the right places 吧]to cultivate them.
感觉第2短内容好多……可以分成两段写

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TPO 7 综合作文
In the lecture, the professor reputes the statement in the reading passage that american wood companies will not pursue ecoecrtification.

First of all, the passage asserts that Americans will not trust in ads as they get used to them and think them unreliable. However, the professor contends that americans can distinguish from claims made by manufacturers and those from customer agencies. In general, these agencies have international reputation and are more convincing.

Secondly, the professor does not regard the enhanced price caused by the additional cost of ecocertification as a big problem. If the increase is lower than five percent, it's still acceptable. What' more,americans also realize the value of enviornment,so they think the cost is worth.

At last,the passage argues that it's unnecessary for american wood companies to obtain the ecocompetition as they face to native custmers rather than those abroad. The professor rejects that in the domestic market floods great international competition. The rivals of american wood companies come from the whole world. As a result, the ecocertification is a sharp weapon for them to grasp their own proportion in the market.

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Ps: 楼主给我改的那个TPO6 贴在我帖子上的不是我写的文章 -。-   你找找是不是别的同学的

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八月二十五日
独立作文


最后三个星期的冲刺，亲们，猛拍吧！！！

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69# serena-blue \

In the lecture, the professor reputes the statement in the reading passage that american(大写) wood companies will not pursue ecoecrtification. 8 |* k* Y7 _/ S* Q3 @. k7 F

* n" H$ N4 t1 t. v( G/ oFirst of all, the passage asserts that Americans will not trust in ads as they get used to them and think them unreliable. However, the professor contends that americans can distinguish from claims made by manufacturers and those from customer agencies. In general, these agencies have international reputation and are more convincing.
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# }7 D4 x* U- p; N+ m# x& s' _Secondly, the professor does not regard the enhanced price caused by the additional cost of ecocertification as a big problem. 概括的好！If the increase is lower than five percent, it's still acceptable. What' more,americans also realize（适合吗？） the value of enviornment,so they think the cost is worth. 阅读的内容没怎么写？
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At last,the passage argues that it's unnecessary for american wood companies to obtain the ecocompetition as they face to native custmers rather than those abroad不能这样搭配. The professor rejects that in the domestic market floods（？？） great international competition. The rivals of american wood companies come from the whole world. As a result, the ecocertification is a sharp weapon for them to grasp their own proportion in the market.
多做些同义转换 多写点~把文章放word查一下语法什么的。。

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In the lecture, the professor reputes the statement in the reading passage that americanAmerican wood companies will not pursue ecoecrtification.

First of all, the passage asserts that Americans will not trust in ads as they get used to them and think them unreliable. However, the professor contends that americans can distinguish from claims made by manufacturers and those from customer agencies. In general, these agencies have international reputation and are more convincing.
Secondly, the professor does not regard the enhanced price caused by the additional cost of ecocertification as a big problem. If the increase is lower than five percent, it's still acceptable. What' more,americans also realize the value of enviornment,so they think the cost is worth.

At last,the passage argues that it's unnecessary for american wood companies to obtain the ecocompetition as they face to native custmers rather than those abroad. The professor rejects that in the domestic market floods这个不很确定能不能酱紫用 great international competition. The rivals of american wood companies come from the whole world. As a result, the ecocertification is a sharp weapon for them to grasp their own proportion in the market.

感觉挺好的了。。

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八月二十六号作文