serena-blue的作文贴

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8月25，独立已改

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八月二十七日独立作文

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童鞋还是你的这个帖子的第一篇作文写的最好o(╯□╰)o

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改好了，请查收~

https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1138090-2-1.html回改请见19楼，谢谢啊~

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77# serena-blue

一点个人意见
ps：楼上也很速度嘛～呵呵～

serena-blueUID: 2811284

八月二十八号独立作文

Considering the intense competition flooding all areas, many people turn to movies and TV programs, relieving the pressure in the study or work. However, disagreement arouses, speaking of which ones are more interesting, those domestic or those made in other countries? Honestly, I lay the priority on those made in our own countries.

Firstly, movies and TV programs made in one's own country are more close to his daily life and thus are much easier to understand. As we know, the directors often collect materials of the films or TV programs from our familiar bits and pieces of life and present them in the means of artistic expression. It's quite common that some scenes flashed into our mind as we may have experienced somewhere before. On the contrary, if we don't get acquainted with customs of other countries, we may feel confused and even disgusting. I remembered once I saw a scene in a Japanese movie in which a lot of people were having bath together, both men and women, totally naked. I was shocked and could not comprehend why they seemed at ease. After reading some books, I knew it is a Japanese tradition and in this situation, nobody will feel embarrassed. But I still can not accept it.

Secondly, the ways to express comic effects in different countries are distinct. Some like to use funny words, some prefer strange props and customers and others make jokes by body language. Chaplin's film gained great popularity in America but my parents are perfectly unmoved by the tiny, badly-dressed tramp. They admire more a traditional Chinese artistic form named Cross Talk in which two men just stand there and make fun of trifling matters in daily life. My friend, Mei who comes from another province, even can not catch the jokes when seeing Cross Talk as sometimes the actors speak in dialect, let alone with those foreigners. What's more, it's impossible to have subtitle in English at the risk of losing fascination of linguistics when the actors play.

To sum up, I firmly agree with the statement that movies and TV programs made in one's own country are more interesting than those made in other countries. We are much familiar with their content and way of expression is more acceptable. Compared with Jim Carrey's exaggerated facial expression, I'd like to enjoy a Cross Talk.

chenxingjian0UID: 2707401

BY: serena-blue
Younger school children (aged five to ten) should berequired to study art and music in addition to math, language, science andhistory

Considering the intense competition in thepresent days[C1] , more and morechildren are forced to study courses like math, languages, science and history,in order to be well-prepared before stepping into the high school, universityand even society. However, I am firmly in favor [C2] that art and music should also be concludedin the education of younger school children.

To begin with, younger school children have the right todiscover their own preference[C3] .Not being born diviners, we have not the ability to predict that our childrenare fond of dealing with numbers, doing experiment with mice or frogs but [C4] pay no attention to dance or draw pictures.On the contrary, many kids show great passion of art and music. I have seen thegreat work of my nephew. Under her pens, the sky is pink with bigpumpkins hanging on[C5] , the littleand pure rabbits [C6] livein the mushrooms with a shining star on the chimney. Admittedly, it’s far frommy imagination and I am really proud of her. It will be a disaster if kids likemy nephew are deprived to [C7] developtheir interests.

Secondly, art and music can lead a colorful and myriad[C8] life for children. Asknow to all,[C9] the beautyfollowed by art and music has the magic power to lighten our lives. It’s notsurprising to see a group of kid[C10] dancingaround a piano, smiling from heart[C11] .In addition, even children have the period of being fed up and tired. The artand music have the strength to keep them calm and pull back the sweet smile onthe face.

In a word,  I repute drastically to limit youngerschool children(aged five to ten) study only math, language, science andhistory. With full right to discover what they are in favor and adding thebeauty of art and music in children’s life, they will have a world muchliberal.

[C1]直接用now
[C2]In favor后似乎不能加从句in favor of sth/sb
[C3]Their interests怎么样？
[C4]不知道是否正确
[C5]改成：there are big pumpkins hanging on the pink sky.
[C6]纯种兔子？ Lovely怎么样？
[C7]本段没提贫困的事情啊？不是很懂。直接用cannot吧？
[C8]无数的？
[C9]刚刚百度的：as is known to all,这里的as指代的是后面所说的东西，作代词
as it is known to all,这里as是连词，连接一个完整的句子，是“因为”的意思，这样就是“因为这个已经众所周知”。
[C10]kids
[C11]From the inside

jonathan0929UID: 2588704

8.28. H.W. by jonathan

Considering the intense competition flooding all areas, many people turn to movies and TV programs, relieving the pressure in the study or work. However, disagreement arouses, speaking of which ones are is more interesting, those domestic or those made in other countries? Honestly, I lay the priority on those made in our own countries. (too complicate!! Hard to understand your point ~ You can simplify your sentence and made it clear)

Firstly, movies and TV programs made in one's own country are more close to his daily life and thus are much easier to understand. As we know, the directors often collect materials of the films or TV programs from our familiar bits and pieces of life and present them in by the means of artistic expression. It's quite common that some scenes flashed into our mind as we may have experienced somewhere before. On the contrary, if we don't get acquainted with customs of other countries, we may feel confused and even disgusting. I remembered once I saw a scene in a Japanese movie in which a lot of people were having bath together, both men and women, totally naked. (><…haha is that AV?) I was shocked and could not comprehend why they seemed at ease. After reading some books, I knew it is a Japanese tradition and in this situation, nobody will feel embarrassed. But I still can not accept it. 9 ?% \8 Y1 h2 \0 }# k; \, X

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Secondly, the ways to express comic effects in different countries are distinct. Some like to use funny words, some (others) prefer strange props and customers and others (still others) make jokes by body language. Chaplin's film gained great popularity in America but my parents are perfectly unmoved by the tiny, badly-dressed tramp. They admire more a traditional Chinese artistic form named Cross Talk in which two men just stand there and make fun of trifling matters in daily life. My friend, Mei who comes from another province, even can not catch the jokes when seeing Cross Talk as sometimes the actors speak in dialect, let alone with those foreigners. What's more, it's impossible to have subtitle in English at the risk of losing fascination of linguistics when the actors play. 0 @4 R- f. a: a Good! But basically two supporting points (paragraph 1&2) are almost the sameà people cannot understand. May you can figure out other points!

To sum up, I firmly agree with the statement that movies and TV programs made in one's own country are more interesting than those made in other countries. We are much familiar with their content and way of expression is (double verbs in one sentence) more acceptable. Compared with Jim Carrey's exaggerated facial expression, I'd like to enjoy a Cross Talk.

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8-28 独立 改

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八月三十日
独立作文

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8.30 独立 改

水平有限，改得不一定对，你自己再看看

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8yue 30

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8-31的独立写完了到我帖子来个链接，我怕我忘了

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我也是 不然偶就忘了

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九月六号独立作文