sad0oo的作文 11月15日

sad0ooUID: 2914120

独立部分：From my respective,I definitely agree that movies and televisions should always show audience goodpeople are being rewarded and bad people are being punished, for showing thiscertain plots in the movies and televisions can help us to hold our hope, leadus to keep the reasonable moral values as well as guide us to have an ignorantheart.

First of all, ifthe movies and televisions could do this, we might believe that there are hopesin this world despite the unfair things happened in our everyday life. Thepurpose of us to watch movies and televisions is that it is helpful to escapethe real world. No one will want to see the movies and televisions unless itgives us hopes to believe that the justice will be done eventually, like thecriminals will be convicted finally and warm-hearted people should earn therespect he or she deserves. Only by doing this can we believe there are justicein the world and everything is fairly enough.

Second, by doingthis, reasonable moral values showed in the stories will root in our heart,thus the whole society will be channeled to a more stable and strong one, as itis known to us all that what you think determines what you do. For example, onewho is surrounded by sick moral values and is told that good people are not likelyto have a happy ending will never plan to achieve his or her goals throughnormal methods but there is more possibility for him or her to do it bywhichever the way he or she can use, whether it is legal or not. So, toinfluence the way we think and to show us many healthy moral values has benefitin keeping moral values being accepted in the whole society, which will improvethe moral condition of the society.

Third, as we aregrowing older and older, most of us are tired of modern life and want to seethings from a simple angle. By seeing easy but comfortable plots will help usrelax our heart and feel more happy. With more and more people becoming complexand sophisticated, a great many people like to hide a naïve heart deep. I learnfrom one of my friends that he thinks watching movies and televisions showingthat good people deserve good result make him feel enjoyable, for he is tooexhausted to see the real sad things playing in the stories again. When itcomes to me, I believe showing such plots is good for us to have a moreignorant and relax heart.

From the discussionabove, I may safely conclude that movies and televisions should always show usstories in which good people are being rewarded and bad people are beingpunished, because this make it possible to help us to hold our hope, lead us toobey the reasonable moral values and make us to have an naïve heart.

sad0ooUID: 2914120

综合部分：The reading material made the point that the population of sea otter declined because of the environmental pollution. In contrast, the listening material insisted that it is the predators that make the population of sea otter decline.
    First, the writer discussed that there were pollution sources along the Alaskan coast which made the population of sea otter decline. The lecturer, however, held a different view that the pollution hypothesis was weakened by the fact that there was no polluted sea water found in this area. Also, the population of the sea mammals was not declined at all, which proved that the pollution theory is unbelievable.
    Second, the author stated that other sea mammals were also declined. On the contrary, the professor showed that the reason of the declining of other sea mammals like whales resulted from the hunting of the humans.
    Third, the speaker refuted the viewpoint showed in the passage that the pollution along the coast caused the uneven pattern of the otter decline by saying that the factor which determined whether the sea otter will decline or not is the accessibility for sea otter to reach the certain place. The shadows or the rocks, which was unreachable to the sea otter, had not been found that the declining of the sea otter.

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综合批改：
The reading material made the point that the population of sea otter declined because of the environmental pollution. In contrast, the listening material insisted that it is(was) the predators that make(made) the population of sea otter decline.
    First, the writer discussed that there were pollution sources along the Alaskan coast which made the population of sea otter decline. The lecturer, however, held a different view that the pollution hypothesis was weakened by the fact that there was no polluted sea water found in this area. Also, the population of the sea mammals was not declined at all, which proved that the pollution theory is unbelievable.(我怎么觉得听力里面不是这么说的啊...它里面说没有Sea otter的尸体在海岸上发现而已...而且加粗的句子与第一段自相矛盾)
    Second, the author stated that other sea mammals were also declined.（这个观点是没有争议的，争议在于为什么） On the contrary, the professor showed that the reason of the declining of other sea mammals like whales resulted from the hunting of the humans.（听力是说吃whale的orca，不得已选择吃其他的小型sea mammals因为人把whale捕杀殆尽）
    Third, the speaker refuted the viewpoint showed in the passage that the pollution along the coast caused the uneven pattern of the otter decline by saying that the factor which determined whether the sea otter will decline or not is the accessibility for sea otter to reach the certain place. The shadows or the rocks, which was unreachable to the sea otter, had not been found that the declining of the sea otter.
总之，听力你最好在听一遍，文章里很多lecturer的观点是不符的

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From my respective, I definitely <agree>这是主句的谓语 that movies and televisions should always <show>这是从句的谓语 audience good people (are) 这个are要么去掉要么去掉being（后面一个are同解） being rewarded and bad people (are) being punished（,）这里该句号了 （for showing this certain plots in the movies and televisions）这个不能做主语，去掉for即可 can help(1) us to hold our hope, lead(2) us to keep the reasonable moral values （as well as）三个并列是不能用as well as的要用<，and> guide(3) us to have an (ignorant heart)无知的心？没看懂.
First of all, if the movies and televisions could do this指代不清, we might believe that there are hopes in this world despite the unfair things happened in our everyday life. The purpose of us to watch movies and televisions is that it is（应该是they are吧，你指的应该是前面的movies and television吧） helpful to escape the real world. No one will want to see the movies and televisions unless it gives us hopes to believe that the justice will be done eventually, like（such as 会好些） the criminals will be convicted finally and warm-hearted people should earn the respect <he or she 前面是people 后面就仍应为 they> deserves. Only by doing this can we believe there are justice in the world and everything is fairly enough.
Second, by doing this（依旧指代不清）, reasonable moral values showed in the stories will root in our heart, thus the whole society will be channeled（说真的没见过channel这么用的，或许可以试试去其他词） to a more stable and strong one, as it is known to us all that what you think determines what you do. For example, one who（这个who一定要去掉，否则就没有谓语了） is surrounded by sick moral values and is told that good people are not likely to have a happy ending will never plan to achieve his or her goals through normal methods but there is more possibility for him or her to do it by whichever the way he or she can use, whether it is legal or not. So, to influence the way we think and to show us many healthy moral values has（觉得应该是have吧 因为前面你是两个to并列） benefit in keeping moral values being accepted in the whole society, which will improve the moral condition of the society.
Third, as we are growing older and older, most of us are tired of modern life and want to see things from a simple angle（可以换成aspect 注意活用）. By seeing easy but comfortable plots will help us relax our heart and feel more happy. With more and more people becoming complex and sophisticated, a great many people like to hide a na&iuml;ve heart deep. I learn from one of my friends that he thinks watching movies and televisions showing that good people deserve good result make him feel enjoyable, for he is too exhausted to see the real sad things playing in the stories again. When it comes to me, I believe showing such plots is good for us to have a more ignorant（这个词是无知的，幼稚的意思，你可以再查下） and relax heart.
From the discussion above, I may safely conclude that movies and televisions should always show us stories in which good people are being 和第一段那个错误一样建议去掉being rewarded and bad people are being punished, because this make it possible to help us to hold our hope, lead us to obey the reasonable moral values and make us to have an na&iuml;ve heart.

恩，就第一次，还算好，把理说清了。语法错误很多，比如说指代不清（太多了没有一一标出来），一“逗”到底(就是一直逗号，不考虑句子结构)，还有的词个人认为不太恰当。

总之毕竟是第一次，还不专业，建议你多看些范文，模仿其中的句式进行练习，多模仿些。平时看文章留心一些好词。慢慢会好的~

windslpUID: 2903140

From my respective(respective),I definitely agree that movies and televisions should always show audience good people are being rewarded and bad people are being punished, for showing this certain plots in the movies and televisions can help us to hold our hope, lead us to keep the reasonable moral values as well as guide us to have an ignorantheart.(这个单词没有看懂- -。)
First of all, if the movies and televisions could do this, we might believe that there are hopes in this world despite the unfair things happened in our everyday life. The purpose of us to watch movies and televisions is that it is helpful to escape the real world. No one will want to see the movies and televisions unless itgives （不认识）us hopes to believe that the justice will be done eventually, like the criminals will be convicted finally and warm-hearted people should earn therespect he or she deserves. Only by doing this can we believe there are justicein（？） the world and everything is fairly enough.（论点不错~）
Second, by doing this, reasonable moral values showed in the stories will root in our heart, thus the whole society will be channeled to a more stable and strong one, as itis known to us all that what you think determines what you do. For example, onewho is surrounded by sick moral values and is told that good people are not likelyto have a happy ending will never plan to achieve his or her goals throughnormal methods but there is more possibility for him or her to do it bywhichever the way he or she can use, whether it is legal or not. So, toinfluence the way we think and to show us many healthy moral values has benefitin keeping moral values being accepted in the whole society, which will improvethe moral condition of the society.
Third, as we are growing older and older（这个最好替换掉~）, most of us are tired of modern life and want to seethings from a simple angle. By seeing easy but comfortable plots will help us relax our heart and feel more happy（happier）. With more and more people becoming complexand sophisticated, a great many people like to hide a na&iuml;ve heart deep. I learnfrom one of my friends that he thinks watching movies and televisions showingthat good people deserve good result make him feel enjoyable, for he is tooexhausted to see the real sad things playing in the stories again. When itcomes to me, I believe showing such plots is good for us to have a moreignorant and relax heart.（如果能举出具体例子就好了~）
From the discussionabove, I may safely conclude that movies and televisions should always show usstories in which good people are being rewarded and bad people are beingpunished, because this make it possible to help us to hold our hope, lead us toobey the reasonable moral values and make us to have an na&iuml;ve heart.
阐述有点问题，思路还可以，建议上传前先用word进行修改- -。