11-23 homework argument 51

zcsdtcUID: 2875047

The author asserts that all patients should be advised to take antibiotics as a part of their treatment when they suffer muscle strain. The author provides a study of two groups of patients which compared the difference of patients’ outcome to support the conclusion. The conclusion seems to be reasonable, however, after further consideration, I find some flaws in it.

First, the condition of these two groups of patients is not introduced by author, such as age, gender, body situation, etc. If the age of two groups is different, the result may not be favorable for the conclusion. The younger group took antibiotics, and they healed more quickly than the elder. The reason may not be related with the antibiotics but the age, so did the gender or body situation.

Secondly, the two doctors who were distributed to two groups are different: one is good at sports medicine, the other is not. So the way they cured the muscle strain is definitely distinctive to each other. So the result of experiment is more likely to depend on doctors than antibiotics. As we know, sports medicine has special treatment for muscle strain that a general physician may not master. The patients cured by sports medicine with the special therapy for muscle strain would be easier to improve than those cured by general physician. The effect could be no relationship with antibiotics.

Finally, the hypothesis focused on the severe muscle strain but the conclusion set it on the muscle strain. The common muscle strain could not generate the secondary infection because the strain itself is so tiny that the process of healing cannot be influenced by infection. The more severe the strain is, the higher the chance of secondary infection is. So the author forgot this priority for the conclusion.

In sum, the conclusion is vulnerable in many details, so new proof is necessary for the conclusion and the author needs to do more homework to search, such as a new study which is more reasonable to convince, more information about muscle strain, etc.
As a result, the author can conclude a convinced argument.

彼年豆蔻UID: 2791778

The author asserts that all patients should be advised to take antibiotics as a part of their treatment when they suffer muscle strain. The author provides a study of two groups of patients which compared the difference of patients’ outcome to support the conclusion. The conclusion seems to be reasonable, however, after further consideration, I find some flaws in it.
First, the condition of these two groups of patients is not introduced by author, such as age, gender, body situation, etc. If the age of two groups is different, the result may not be favorable for the conclusion. The younger group took antibiotics, and they healed more quickly than the elder. The reason may not be related with the antibiotics but the age, so did the gender or body situation.
Secondly, the two doctors who were distributed to two groups are different: one is good at sports medicine, the other is not. So the way they cured the muscle strain is definitely distinctive to each other. So the result of experiment is more likely to depend on doctors than antibiotics. As we know, sports medicine has special treatment for muscle strain that a general physician may not master. The patients cured by sports medicine with the special therapy for muscle strain would be easier to improve than those cured by general physician. The effect could be（改为have ）no relationship with antibiotics.
Finally, the hypothesis focused on the severe muscle strain but the conclusion set it on the muscle strain. The common muscle strain could not generate the secondary infection because the strain itself is so tiny that the process of healing cannot be influenced by infection. The more severe the strain is, the higher the chance of secondary infection is.这一段不应该是陈述，而是perhaps…So the author forgot this priority for the conclusion.
In sum, the conclusion is vulnerable in many details, so new proof is necessary for the conclusion and the author needs to do more homework to search, such as a new study which is more reasonable to convince, more information about muscle strain, etc. As a result, the author can conclude a convinced argument.（结尾给出的建议有点抽象）