A10_彼岸小组第6次作业_by McNeil

McNeilUID: 2272415

"The department of agriculture in Batavia reports that the number of dairy farms throughout the country is now 25 percent greater than it was 10 years ago. During this same time period, however, the price of milk at the local Excello Food Market has increased from $1.50 to over $3.00 per gallon. To prevent farmers from continuing to receive excessive profits on an apparently increased supply of milk, the Batavia government should begin to regulate retail milk prices. Such regulation is necessary to ensure both lower prices and an adequate supply of milk for consumers."



In this letter, the arguer cites the evidence that the price of milk at local Excello Food Market has grown up to over $3.00 per gallon from $1.50, based on which the arguer draws the conclusion that government should settle some necessary restrictions to pull down the price and keep a balance of the whole market. The grown number of farms in Batavia is the additional reason for the assumption. A careful examination of the argument, nevertheless, reveals how groundless the conclusion is.

The major problem of the state is that the arguer fails to convince us that the increased number of farms in the whole Batavia cannot provide an assurance to the boom of farms around the Market, that is to say, the experience of the whole situations cannot illustrate the same ones in a certain part of the whole. It may be in the case that, due to the government' rules, some new farms are built in Batavia besides at local Excello Food Market, which contributes to the increased number of farms in the whole city. On the other side, the number of farms is stable or even cut, and the high price is a measure to balance the market and make true of the basic profits. Without looking up the real situations, the arguer cannot conclude the state so simply.

Another problem of the logic state is that although the increase of farms' number is true, the arguer provides no evidence to prove the rise in price is ungrounded. More farms cannot represent more milk could be produced, for that government wants to improve the quality of cows' living environments and takes out the plan of dispersing those farms. Also, it may be in the case that those improving measures really cost more than the past, and the $3.00 can just gain the cost. The arguer overlooks those unknown factors undermines the argument.

Last but not least, there is no assurance to provide a bright future by taking that retail method. Firstly, without knowing clearly about the real reasons of the high price, this rude retailing may bring disadvantages to farmers, such as losing one's capital. Secondly, retailing without unwarranted reasons will arouse resistances and rejections to some extent. Without ruling out those unstable factors, the arguer cannot provide surely assurance to the conclusion.

To sum up, the argument is logically flawed and therefore unconvincing as it stands. To solidify the state, the arguer should provide more evidences which are tenable and accurate. Additionally, the arguer must also take an all-sided consideration about the whole market and take out a plan to gain the win-win chance.

melody-quUID: 2970250

In this letter,the arguer cites the evidence that the price of milk at local Excello FoodMarket has grown up to over $3.00 per gallon from $1.50,
based on which（感觉是作者觉得农民获了暴利才建议减价的，这个不确定可以再讨论） the arguer drawsthe conclusion that government should settle some necessary restrictions topull down the price and keep a balance of the whole market. The grown number offarms in Batavia is the additional reason for the assumption. A carefulexamination of the argument, nevertheless, reveals how groundless theconclusion is.
The major problemof the state is that the arguer fails to convince us that the increased numberof farms in the whole Batavia cannot provide an assurance to the boom of farmsaround the Market, that is to say, the experience of the whole situationscannot illustrate the same ones in a certain part of the whole. It may be inthe case that, due to the government' rules, some new farms are built inBatavia（题目中是说全国农场数目增多，其实这是一个漏洞） besides at localExcello Food Market, which contributes to the increased number of farms in thewhole city. On the other side, the number of farms is stable or even cut, andthe high price is a measure to balance the market and make true of the basicprofits. Without looking up the real situations, the arguer cannot conclude thestate so simply.（感觉有一点牵强，都在一座城市，远不到哪里的，不会围绕超市专门建立很多农场。。。。。）

Another problem ofthe logic state is that although the increase of farms' number is true, thearguer provides no evidence to prove the rise in price is ungrounded. (赞！句子很棒)More farms cannot represent more milk could be produced,for that government wants to improve the quality of cows' living environmentsand takes out the plan of dispersing those farms. Also, it may be in the casethat those improving measures really cost more than the past, and the $3.00 canjust gain the cost. The arguer overlooks those unknown factors undermines theargument.
Last but notleast, there is no assurance to provide a bright future by taking that retailmethod. Firstly, without knowing clearly about the real reasons of the highprice, this rude retailing may bring disadvantages to farmers, such as losingone's capital. Secondly, retailing without unwarranted reasons will arouseresistances and rejections to some extent. Without ruling out those unstablefactors, the arguer cannot provide surely assurance to the conclusion.
To sum up, theargument is logically flawed and therefore unconvincing as it stands. Tosolidify the state, the arguer should provide more evidences which are tenableand accurate. Additionally, the arguer must also take an all-sidedconsideration about the whole market and take out a plan to gain the win-winchance.（结尾的模板总结的很好，赞！）

muzhihao1UID: 2959675

In this letter, the arguer cites the evidence that the price of milk at local Excello Food Market has grown up to over $3.00 per gallon from $1.50, based on which the arguer draws the conclusion that government should settle some necessary restrictions to pull down the price and keep a balance of the whole market.（最好还是不要讲细节，概括一下论据） The grown number of farms in Batavia is the additional reason for the assumption. A careful examination of the argument, nevertheless, reveals how groundless the conclusion is.

The major problem of the state is that the arguer fails to convince us that（for 很关键） the increased number of farms in the whole Batavia cannot provide an assurance to the boom of farms around the Market, that is to say, the experience（？） of the whole situations cannot illustrate the same ones in a certain part of the whole. （这个是英语表达吗）It may be in the case that, due to the government' rules, some new farms are built in Batavia besides at local Excello Food Market, which contributes to the increased number of farms in the whole city. On the other side, the number of farms is（can be）stable or even cut, and the high price is a measure to balance the market and make true of the basic profits.（谁的方法？） Without looking up the real situations, the arguer cannot conclude the state so simply.
感觉意思表达得不是特别连贯

Another problem of the logic（？） state is that although the increase of farms' number is true, the arguer provides no evidence to prove the rise in price is ungrounded（用词不对）. More farms cannot represent（assure that） more milk could be produced,（that不用句子很乱） for that government wants to improve the quality of cows' living environments and takes out the plan of dispersing those farms. Also, it may be in the case that those improving measures really cost more than the past, and the $3.00 can just gain the cost. The arguer overlooks those unknown factors undermines the argument.
感觉你句子结构有点乱，这样看得会很累

Last but not least, there is no assurance to provide a bright future by taking that retail method. Firstly, without knowing clearly about the real reasons of the high price, this rude retailing（零售？） may bring disadvantages to farmers, such as losing one's capital. Secondly, retailing without unwarranted reasons will arouse resistances and rejections to some extent. Without ruling out those unstable factors, the arguer cannot provide surely assurance to the conclusion.

To sum up, the argument is logically flawed and therefore unconvincing as it stands. To solidify the state, the arguer should provide more evidences which are tenable and accurate. Additionally, the arguer must also take an all-sided consideration about the whole market and take out a plan to gain the win-win chance.

整体蛮不错的