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TOPIC: ARGUMENT161 - In a study of reading habits of Leeville citizens conducted by the University of Leeville, most respondents said they preferred literary classics as reading material. However, a follow-up study conducted by the same researchers found that the type of book most frequently checked out of each of the public libraries in Leeville was the mystery novel. Therefore, it can be concluded that the respondents in the first study had misrepresented their reading habits.
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TIME: 00:30:00
DATE: 2010/12/31 13:20:16

Merely based on unwarranted evidences and suspicious assumption, the author draws a conclusion that the respondents in the first study had misrepresented their reading habits. To substantiate this conclusion, the author cites the results of
two studies. At first glance, the conclusion appears to be somewhat convincing. Close scrutiny of each of these facts, however, reveals that none of them lend credible support to the recommendation.

In the first place, no evidence has been provided to prove that the results of the first study are statistically reliable. In order to draw a convincing conclusion from the study, the respondents should be sufficient in size and representative the overall population of readers in Leeville. The smaller the amount of the respondents, the larger possibility of bias conclusion and the less reliable of the study. Lacking evidence of a sufficient representative sample, the author cannot justifiably rely on the study to draw any conclusion whatsoever.

In the second place, even assuming the results of the first study are reliable, the author falsely rely on the further assumption that the type of book most frequently checked out of all public libraries in Leeville representative of the overall book styles which citizens were reading. Perhaps citizens in Leeville prefer to buying books to read rather than to borrow from libraries. Or perhaps,
more other types of books are checked out by citizens from other non-public libraries. Without considering these possibilities, the conclusion is open to doubt.

Finally, even both of the results of the two studies are reliable, it doesn`t necessarily indicates that the respondents in the first study had misrepresented their reading habits. It is entirely possible that there was a long time between the two studies, and their reading habits had changed during the period. Since the author fails to exclude this explanation, he has committed a
fallacy of hasty generalization.

To sum up, the argument is unpersuasive and the author should prove that the results of the first study are statistically reliable. In addition, he should substantiate that the books` style borrowed from public libraries representative all of the types of books that the citizen were reading. Moreover, he should also demonstrate that the effects of time between the two studies can be ignored. If the argument has included the factors given above, it would have been more thoroughly and logically acceptable.

开始感觉写的比较顺了 不过其中一些句子感觉表达很不地道，请高手狠拍

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1# upcdaniel

Merely based on unwarranted evidences and suspicious assumption, the author draws a conclusion that the respondents in the first study had misrepresented their reading habits. To substantiate this conclusion, the author cites the results of two studies. At first glance, the conclusion appears to be somewhat convincing. Close scrutiny of each of these facts, however, reveals that none of them lend credible support to the recommendation.(呃，这个开头实在是被用过太多次了，我怕你再用有麻烦）

In the first place, no evidence has been provided to prove that the results of the first study are statistically reliable. In order to draw a convincing conclusion from the study, the respondents should be sufficient in size and representative the overall population of readers in Leeville. The smaller the amount of the respondents, the larger possibility of bias conclusion and the less reliable of the study. Lacking evidence of a sufficient representative sample, the author cannot justifiably rely on the study to draw any conclusion whatsoever.(既然题目是怀疑第一个study的真实性你就应该反着说第一个study的结果是怎么可靠，我觉得没必要把重点放在这上面）

In the second place, even assuming the results of the first study are reliable, the author falsely rely on the further assumption that the type of book most frequently checked out of all public libraries in Leeville representative of the overall book styles which citizens were reading. Perhaps citizens in Leeville prefer to buying books to read rather than to borrow from libraries. Or perhaps,more other types of books are checked out by citizens from other non-public libraries. Without considering these possibilities, the conclusion is open to doubt.

Finally, even both of the results of the two studies are reliable, it doesn`t (小细节，正式的英文写作是不允许简写的，所以应该用does not) necessarily indicates that the respondents in the first study had misrepresented their reading habits. It is entirely possible that there was a long time between the two studies, and their reading habits had changed during the period. Since the author fails to exclude this explanation, he has committed a
fallacy of hasty generalization.

To sum up, the argument is unpersuasive and the author should prove that the results of the first study are statistically reliable. In addition, he should substantiate that the books` style borrowed from public libraries representative all of the types of books that the citizen were reading. Moreover, he should also demonstrate that the effects of time between the two studies can be ignored. （连着三个should句型有点单调了，比如第二句可以换成 the credibility of the second study would be significantly enhanced if the author stipulate that survey results from public libraries are statistically representative to the reading preference of the residents.)  If the argument has included the factors given above, it would have been more thoroughly and logically acceptable.

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2# wasripple
谢谢，欢迎狠拍