看了大家的建议，很感谢，看看这篇有没有好一点。作文向来差到不行。

书小月UID: 2912402

大家的建议都认真的看了，在写的时候也很小心尽量不犯，由于语法基础不好，可能还是存在很多问题，请指出，十分感谢。
It's better for choose the job similar to their parents or different from their parents

It's important to choose a proper job for children,which may produce a profound influence on the rest life of children themselves,their family or even the society as a whole. Each and every child has his/her own preference for job. Some prefer to choose the job similar to their parents,while others pick different job with their parents. Both first choices have their own relative merits.

When the children take a job similar to their parents,they can obtain many help. First,their parents can provide instruction of working which contribute directly to enhancing the promotion opportunities. Second,parents can impart many valuable experience of job if children choose the same job with them. For example,my little brother and father have chosen the same career as a reporter. When my brother just started his working after graduated,he encountered many difficulties. My father,as a experienced journalist,taught him how to communicate with the interviewee,how to write the main point of interview and how to ask the questions. All those experience from my father helped him to achieve the task successfully and finally became a excellent reporter. Moreover,people who own the same job have lots of topics which can communicate easily and narrow the increasing the between families.

In addition,it provide a mature network of relationship to children which play a important role in the development of profession which cannot be compared by the second choice. Children who choose the job different from their parents should accumulate their human recourse by themselves.   Nowadays,many people equate the sources of human with the success of profession,because it can bring many opportunities to us. Bill Gates would be a suitable example to mention. Gates,who led the Microsoft enjoying a very great success in the past 20 years,got his first trade opportunity which came from his mother who was one of the leaders of IBM.

It should be admitted that it's enjoy many obvious advantages if child selecting the same work with their parents,but we should not fail to take into account the benefits of the second choice which conduct to cultivate the healthy character like independence and bravery of children. As you know, children will ask the help from their parents,which may limit the thought and ability of children, when they encounter some difficulties in the working. while the children who choose distinct job will face the problems bravely and search the methods actively as well as think independently.

In summary,taking the same job of parents can obtain the instruction,valuable experience,more communication between families and network of relationship while choosing a distinct profession  brings the independent thought and bravery to children. Form what have been discussed above,we can safely draw a conclusion that if I am a child who need some instruction of job,I will choose my parents' profession. If I am a person who want to pursue my dream by myself,the second one would be a better choice.


Are people never satisfied with what they want?
People never satistied with what they want.so they always persue something better and new.In my opionion,I am firmly convinced this unsatistication of people strongly stimulate human to continuiously work,research and study.along with those constand efforts,our society had been changed dramatically and enjoy the extraordinary progress over the last centruies.
The invention and development of computer has promoted the growth of economic and has allow people enjoying more leisure time than before.Our enviroment has been protected by reducing
using of paper documents.But,would you have ever thought about which power push the scientists to constantly innovate?Obviously,unsatisfication.If Bill gates have contented with the great achievements which made by Microsoft.how we can use those continuously updated products such as vista,Window 7.Thanks for people’carving of something new,and something better,we can enjoy a more confortable and convenient life.
When it come to the realms of politics.unsatification also play a very important role in the progress of democracy. The Civil War would be a suitable event to name.As you know,Before the Civil War,white farmer was allowed to own the black people as their pricate slaves by the law of the south of the America.this law not only kept the privileges for white people,but also violate the basic right of black people. Abraham Lincoln guaid the Union to destory the unjust law,and reenact laws which entitled everyone with the same right. No one can suppose how the freedom and equality can be realized if the black people and Abraham Lincoln content themselves with the situation of America.
The spirit of never satisfication can also conduce to the improvement of a person himself.One of my best friends tent to live under this illusion that her knowledge is enough when she finished her schooling.Until she,however, take her first job and want to have a promotion,she suddenly realized that knowledge is not enough for one person who live in the changing society and the education is a life time study.Even the best possible excellent graduate needs to continue study before they become the erudite person.H
From what have been discussed above,we can safely draw the conclusion that with the satisfication,our technology can not develop,democracy can not progress.ourselves can not constantly improve.without the unsatisfication,we may still live a life like our ancestors who suffer the dangers of starvation and exposure.hence, people should be encouraged not to satisfy with the existing things but to persue better things

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越看问题越多。。

wuqian0801UID: 2637709

字数少吧。
字数多 不一定就高分。
但是字数少 分数一定不高。。

cupidamorUID: 2122942

楼主第一句应该是are satisfied with吧，然后第三句里有两个谓语be convinced和stimulate。建议你看看新概念2，先把基本语法再复习一下吧。标点符号大小写什么的也要留心。

jiang08UID: 2391146

论证的观点相当好，但是语法错误实在太多。不能一个个改，给你提几个方面，自己复习一下吧：
主谓单复数一致 eg：When it come to the realms of politics
主动被动 eg：our society had been changed
固定搭配 eg：allow people enjoying
句子前后平衡  eg：something better and new
以上的eg都是你原文中错误的地方，不一一列举了。
另外如其他同学说的，拼写，大小写。。。

teenteenUID: 2742580

语法那个语法。。。

我考试时写完作文又花了足足5分钟从头读一遍，改出了无数语法错误。我觉得平时练的时候需要随时对语法保持警惕，因为考试时实在不一定有时间给你从头检查

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3# wuqian0801
要写多少字呢，500吗？

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5# jiang08
x谢谢，语法问题我一定努力克服。。不懂语法写句子的时候很痛苦。。

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4# cupidamor
谢谢。。正头痛怎么搞定语法呢。。