ISSUE 69 写着写着就觉得跑题·····o(╯□╰)o

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69"Government should place few, if any, restrictions on scientific research and development"

Considering the disastrous effects the totally liberal scientific researches may bring about, I disapprove of the speaker's point of view that few restrictions should be placed on scientific research and development by government.

Generally speaking, government should place few restrictions on scientific research and development.Sometimes scientific research is precocious and innovative so that government may not be able to judge it. If  government puts too many restrictions on scientific research, it might bring detrimental effects to the development of science. For instance,in the era of medieval, the action of dissecting human bodies was absolutely prohibited, which obstruct the sense of anatomy for over a thousand years.The maintenance of the independence of scientific research and the respect to scientist contribute to the development of science, that is why tremendous achievements always raise in a enlightened society.

But in the course of history, scientific developments cause a large number of disasters to human beings while we benefit a lot from them.In 1939, an invention named DDT was regarded as the gospel of the world's farmers and people in tropical region who suffered from the raging of tropical diseases. In the following thirty years millions tons of DDT was applied all over the world: DDT might had saved several millions people in Africa suffering from malaria and it largely raised the output of the crop by clearing away pests in fields. But soon after, scientists began to worry about it, because some insects had developed resistance to DDT, and the resistance cumulated for long and finally resulted in a serious problem of ecological balance. At the same time, DDT entered the food chain, leading to a number of meateating and fisheating birds close to extinction. Since DDT can not be degraded in vivo, fears raised that it would go through the food chain, and the ultimate victims will be us human. From 1970's, the use of DDT was prohibited in the world, but the effects of that did not fade simultaneously, even today, scientists can detect DDT from many animals and in the absence of suitable alternative products,the spread of malaria seems come back to Africa. Many of the scientific gains indeed benefit to the world at beginning, yet the blind sides frequently emerge latter. We are still paying for rude ways of consuming energy in the last century and the influence of nuclear contamination may last for over 800 years, said experts. What we should learn from the sharp lessons is that proper restrictions must be placed on scientific researches, and government should conduct a risk assessment of the research to decide whether it should proceed or be put into application.

Who can guarantee a world taken over by robots just like the one in the film The Terminator will not appear in the future if we accomplish the research of artificial intelligence and produce plenty of intelligent robots? Who has the capacity to deal with the moral problems or legal problems raising with human cloning? For issues under the moral controversy or those may endanger the stability of the society, government should put powerful restriction on them.

Science has always been a double edged sword. However, whether a scientific research or development is beneficial to mankind depends on the way people see it and use it. Government has the responsibility to interfere with scientific research to try to reduce the potential drawbacks of science to maximize the advantage of science as far as possible.

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o(╯□╰)oo(╯□╰)o为什么怎么都改不了这个格式·····

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第一段你就提出了自己是反对的观点“I disapprove of the speaker's point of view that few restrictions should be placed on scientific research and development by government. ”

可第二段开头“Generally speaking, government should place few restrictions on scientific research and development.” 让人感觉你好像又开始agree。

我觉得把过渡的transition word改一下，重新整理一下这两句比较好：
It is necessary for government to place some restrictions on scientific research & development, because sometimes scientific research is so precocious(这个词MS用得不太恰当) and innovative（也需要后文详细的分析） that government may not be able to judge it."  

然后接下来这一段就可以着重写：为什么政府没有办法掌控很多科学研究 - 以至于导致了DDT的问题 - 所以"more restriction should be reinforced"。

这样改过应该可以省去很多不必要的篇幅，最后你简单提到的机器人/克隆的例子就可以解释的更详尽。ETS貌似很喜欢我们把讨论的课题分成大类，我觉得以DDT(environmental issue)和human cloning(moral issue)这两个着重点下手，效果会好很多。