daily writing---我的作文帖。。

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2.26 revised

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2.28综合

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The lecture argues that the memoir writtenby Chevalier[url=]has reliable sources although the thing were recorded accurate,[/url][是因果关系吧，although是转折了]
which is not in agreementwith the reading passage. The passage claims that the Chevalier distorted manyevents.


First, the lecture suggests that the loansborrowed from the merchants are reasonable. Although he was very rich, moneywas needed before he gambled, so he borrowed money from merchants. However inthe reading passage, critics argue that his wealth was contradict to his large numbersof loans, and propose his memoir was not true.


Second, the lecture argues that there isevidence to prove that Chevalier got used to [url=]recorded[/url][名词形式]
something important inhis notebook, for example some conversations, and that can explain why hismemoir was so accurate. The reading passage insists that it is impossible forhim to remember exact what the conversations were.


Finally, the lecture suggests thatChevalier's escape from the prison [url=]is truth[/url][强调句型会更好， It is truth that。。。]
. There is no point forhim bribing the jailers, as many other people who had more [url=]powful[/url][Microsoft4]
friends still
failed to gain the freedom. And the more [url=]valied[/url][拼写]
evidence, thegovernment's documents, recorded that the prison had been repaired after the [没有escaption这个词吧]
, which could indicatethat he escaped the prison. However the [url=]readng[/url][拼写]
passage insists that the escapewere by the means of bribe.


So, the contents in the reading passage arejeopardized by the speaker and the speaker has totally different ideas on the topics
made in the reading.

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3.1 independent writing

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Nowadays, people gradually put more emphasis on the higher education, as it provides the society energy both in the aspect of labor force but also (and) the support of intelligence. Thus, it is no wander (wonder) to find the universities obtain more grants from the not only local government but the central government, but rare money got by the basic education sectors. However, I strongly object to this phenomenon which will do harm to our education system and finally restrict the country's development overall (overall development).

First, more attention should be paid on the basic education, as it provides qualified students for the higher education. (这点理由特别好，我当时就想了半天没想出来怎么说) It is a common sense that children are born with more gifts to do innovative things and what they learnt in his childhood may influence them lifelong (their future lives/careers). However, in China, it is common to see the lack of necessary facilities for primary schools to conduct physical experiments and a flat playground for the young to play soccer, which result in the low quality of basic education and side effects on the children's body development. On the contrary (In contrast比较好吧，没有预期的相反的意思), there are much considerable resources in the universities can not have a full play.

Second, the governments have more responsibility to add the basic education sector in financial aspect, for its absence of the ability to collect money. It is undeniable that the universities have more accesses to get more financial assistance, for their reputation, direct
contribution to the society , some other commercial purposes and the donations from schoolmates (alumni). However, what the secondary schools and middle schools can gain is limited. As far as I know, in some area of China, it is prevailing for schools owe the large numbers of salaries to teachers.

Finally, as the government over invested (has excessively funded) in the higher education, together with the deficiencies in supervision, sensational events related to corruption in China's universities spread very quickly. And the huge investments are often inefficiency (inefficient). More labors are built (这个词不太好，不知道换成什么invest?) but little achievement can bear out, which is an embarrassment has bothered China's education for a long time. Furthermore, inadequate financial assistance in the basic sector has greatly hindered the overall reform in the country's education.

To sum up, government should have a clear mind in the use of power to distribute the grants. As the basic education sector is the foundation, it is deserved more assistance than the universities. And we should make a balance to build a brighter future for Chinese children.
结构和理由都非常好，语言上有一些地方需要再斟酌一下，总体来说不错，继续加油！

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来晚了些，8好意思：）

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3.2综合

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3.2独立修改~

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37# bibby00888 3.2独立修改

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综合已改

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3.3综合

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3.4独立+++综合

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3.3

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综合
In the lecture, the professor makes several points about the links of the portrait to Jane Austen is questionable, challenging what is stated in the reading passage that there are good reasons to believe the painting's subject is Jane Austen.

First, the professor argues that it is after Jane's death for 70 years that her family gave permission to use the portrait as an illustration in an edition of her letters. So, her family members might do not see her by themselves. On the contrary, the reading passage believes the family's claim can ensure the subject on the painting is Jane.

Second, according to the professor, the subject had a possibility to be Jane's female cousins because she had a large family in which her relatives resembled the most. Thus, the similar features can not guarantee the subject is exact Jane Austen.

Finally, another point the professor uses to cast doubt on the reading passage is that there is evidence to prove the painting may have a latter date. In other words, the painting was sold, when Austen was 27 rather than when she was a teenager. However, the reading passage holds the point that the portrait's date meets the period when Jane Austen was a girl.
没什么问题，写的挺好的，结构清晰，用了一些模板，细节差不多都注意到了

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3.5独立++综合