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The following appeared in a newsletter on nutrition and health.

Although the multimineral Zorba pill was designed as a simple dietary supplement, a study of first-time ulcer patients who took Zorba suggests that Zorba actually helps prevent ulcers. The study showed that only 25 percent of those ulcer patients who took Zorba under a doctor's direction developed new ulcers, compared to a 75 percent recurrence rate among ulcer patients who did not take Zorba. Clearly, then, Zorba will be highly effective in preventing recurrent ulcers and of health experts inform the general public of this fact, many first-time ulcers can be prevented as well.



Convincing as the ratiocination it is at the first glance, further contemplation reveals that the conclusion is predicated on some dubious assumptions and biased evidences. First, the author does not provide us with concrete information involving the study. Plus, the author mistakenly enlarges the function of Zorba. Finally, the author presumptuously equals the treatment medicine with the vaccine medicine.

The first issue to be addressed is that whether the study is valid enough to be the guide. First of all, the author fails to mention the sample size which may be too small to be representative. The sample size is 50 and as a medicine study, this sample size is definitely inadequate. Moreover, the credibility and reliability of the survey is indeterminate, because the ulcers patients are directed under a doctor who may have a decisive influence on the survey. Probably, the patients take doctor's advice that they should less eat piquant food and drink more water every time and the like.


Even if the above possibilities are excluded, it is not convincing that Zorba can serve as an effective pill to treat ulcer patients. Clearly, the first-time ulcer patients are usually sensitive to the medicines that exclusively sure ulcers. However, to patients who have suffered ulcers more twice, their physical bodies may form antibodies to the medicines against ulcers. Consequently, Zobra is not so effective as it is thought to be.

Last, the author commits a fallacy what we call red herring. All the above evidences mentioned by the author are focused on the treatment to ulcers, while the conclusion turns to the prevention of ulcers. The latter term is apparently distinctive from the former. Furthermore, if a patient who never suffer ulcer regularly eat Zobra, perhaps he or she will form an antibody to the similar pills. Probably when he or she really suffer ulcers, unfortunately no medicine can cure his / or her the developed ulcer. That situation would be terrible.

To reiterate, the argument of the author is not cogent as it stands, and it is imprudent and incautious for the author to claim that Zobra can even prevent the first-time ulcers. To make this argument more acceptable, the author would have to offer us the specific number of the sample size and eliminate other factors which may impact on the impartiality and equality of the survey and prove that Zobra is effective not only to the first-time ulcer patients but also the general ulcer patients and can efficiently immune this disease. After all, this result of the survey may have direct influence on people's health.

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大家帮帮忙吧~~！

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Convincing as the ratiocination it is at the first glance, further contemplation reveals that the conclusion is predicated on some dubious assumptions and biased evidences. First, the author does not provide us with concrete information involving the study. Plus, the author mistakenly enlarges the function of Zorba. Finally, the author presumptuously equals the treatment medicine with the vaccine medicine.

The first issue to be addressed is that whether the study is valid enough to be the guide. First of all, the author fails to mention the sample size which may be too small to be representative. If the sample size is 50 and as a medicine study, this sample size is definitely inadequate. Moreover, the credibility and reliability of the survey is indeterminate, because the ulcers patients are directed under a doctor who may have a decisive influence on the survey. Probably, the patients take doctor's advice that they should less eat piquant food and drink more water every time and the like这句没写完吧.


Even if the above possibilities are excluded, it is not convincing that Zorba can serve as an effective pill to treat ulcer patients. Clearly, the first-time ulcer patients are usually sensitive to the medicines that exclusively cure ulcers. However, to patients who have suffered ulcers more than twice, their physical bodies may form antibodies to the medicines against ulcers. Consequently, Zobra is not so effective as it is thought to be.
这段说实话，我觉得没说到点子上。作者说有效防止第二次发作，你说的是第二次发作以后可能就没效了。我觉得可以改成研究药理、剂量和副作用。

Last, the author commits a fallacy what we call red herring. All the above evidences mentioned by the author are focused on the treatment to ulcers, while the conclusion turns to the prevention of ulcers. The latter term is apparently distinctive from the former. Furthermore, if a patient who never suffer ulcer regularly eat Zobra, perhaps he or she will form an antibody to the similar pills. Probably when he or she really suffer ulcers, unfortunately no medicine can cure his / or her the developed ulcer. That situation would be terrible.

To reiterate, the argument of the author is not cogent as it stands, and it is imprudent and incautious for the author to claim that Zobra can even prevent the first-time ulcers. To make this argument more acceptable, the author would have to offer us the specific number of the sample size and eliminate other factors which may impact on the impartiality and equality of the survey and prove that Zobra is effective not only to the first-time ulcer patients but also the general ulcer patients and can efficiently immune this disease. After all, this result of the survey may have direct influence on people's health.

我刚查了一下，溃疡和免疫系统没啥关系吧。。。

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3# vincentme

同学 真是太感谢你了~！！我守在电脑旁等了一天，终于有人回复了，请问你是否能帮我改的更详细一点，主要是文章的文采要好一点，逻辑问题我自己去想，你就帮我把句型单词啊改的更流畅自然一点，好吗？？你是我唯一的希望了。。实在非常感谢！！！！

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4# decox

实话实说，你用词用语比我好的。。。这方面就多看范文、北美吧。

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5# vincentme
额~~~我只是想多征求别人的意见，我觉得我的词汇句型啊还不够牛逼，只是泛泛而已。。。你有什么好的就稍微改一改吧~~不行也没关系~~谢谢啦~~！大好人！

decoxUID: 3006602

没有人帮忙啊~~~:mad:

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主动去帮别人看看，留个链接让别人来不就好了....

只想要回报不去付出，有何用？