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"It is the artist, not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value."
    *a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc

The speaker asserts that it's not the art critics but artists that provide society something lasting and valuable. However, based on some empirical evidences and my personal observation, I fundamentally disagree with the assertion on the ground that it overestimates the influence of artists on creating the precious masterpieces for society, while ignores the function of comments from critics. For my part, only the combination of artists and critics that can better produce priceless works.
There is no denying that artists do play a considerable part for the artistic creation which presents us with insight into what is eternal and universal. Consider, for example, when we watch a play that is deeply compelling, we see ourselves in the role, we recognize our fates in the plot, and even experience the same circumstances of the actors of the play. This, as I convince, is the real masterpiece. And there is no exaggeration that these outstanding works are achieved by the unconceivable efforts by the artists. For example, we all appreciate the outstanding literature work "Faust" which took Goethe sixty years (from 1773-1831, and Goethe died the year after) to compose. During the time of composition, the world has witnessed a historical change which makes a great influence on Goethe’s mind. Thus, this profound artistic masterpiece is also regarded as a conclusive work for Goethe.

Accordingly, some people take for granted that artists are the only factor influencing the extent to which a creation will ultimately be the worthy work of society. I believe, however, that we should never neglect the roles of critics whose commentaries can help us have a better understanding of artistic work and even more provide feedback for artists thus can result in better work.

Firstly, critics who are familiar with one field of art can enhance the appreciation and understanding of readers who have no idea what the work really means. For instance, the famous painting
"Guernica"
which is one of the representative works of Picasso, has been so impressive due to its unique painting style and the description of the real situation which can be hard to comprehend by an individual who does not have any background about concerning information. Therefore, it's apparently that critics do play a significant role in showing the connotation behind the appearance of art work by their sophisticated acknowledgment about the particular artists.

What's more, critics can also provide earnest feedback for the artist to some extent. As my teacher of philosophy said (and I paraphrase) "Only with the objective compliment and critics together can a thing be complete." More importantly, there is no point to deny that every artist, no matter what reputation he already gets will have to face the difficult moment like lacking in inspiration or pursuing the innovation. Some tips to the point can help artists especially those who get stuck in their own field better strive for a profound work.

In sum, due to analysis and reasons mentioned above, we can easily draw a conclusion that in spite of the unconceivable contributions to the creation of artistic masterpieces from artists, we should not ignore the role of critics play in that their comments can not only boost our appreciation of arts but also provide useful feedback in pursuit of better works.


   

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The speaker asserts that it's not the art critics but artists that provide society something lasting and valuable. However, based on some empirical evidences and my personal observation, I fundamentally disagree with the assertion on the ground that it overestimates the influence of artists on creating the precious masterpieces for society, while ignores the function of comments from critics. For my part, only the combination of artists and critics that can better produce priceless works.

There is no denying that artists do play a considerable part for the artistic creation which presents us with insight into what is eternal and universal. （可以拆成带逗号的句子。。。比如 artistic creation， present us insight with eternal。。。）Consider, for example,（for instance） when we watch a play that is deeply compelling, we see ourselves in the role, we recognize our fates in the plot, and even experience the same circumstances of the actors of the play. This, as I convince, is the real masterpiece. And there is no exaggeration that these outstanding works are achieved (不错 就是有点长。。呵呵 个人意见)by the unconceivable efforts by the artists. For example, we all appreciate the outstanding literature work "Faust" which took Goethe sixty years (from 1773-1831, and Goethe died the year after) to compose. During the time of composition, the world has witnessed a historical change which makes a great influence on Goethe’s mind. Thus, this profound artistic masterpiece is also regarded as a conclusive work for Goethe. （本段的主题句还是比较明显，只是后来的论证有点不是很充分，就是例子和论点对应的不是很好。只是我个人的看法哈，这个我昨天写过，其实也不怎么样 呵呵。你可以在举例的同时说明这个作品的艺术价值是lasting 的，这样逻辑更严密。）

Accordingly, some people take for granted that artists are the only factor influencing the extent to which a creation will ultimately be the worthy work of society. I believe, however, that we should never neglect the roles of critics whose commentaries can help us have a better understanding of artistic work and even more provide feedback for artists thus can result in better work.

Firstly, critics who are familiar with one field of art can enhance the appreciation and understanding of readers who have no idea what the work really means（who can't comprehend the work completly）. For instance, the famous painting
"Guernica"(take the painting in vogue, "Guernica" for example)
which is one of the representative works of Picasso, has been so impressive due to its unique painting style and the description of the real situation which can be hard to comprehend by an individual who does not have any background about concerning information. (好长。。。呵呵)Therefore, it's apparently that critics do play a significant role in showing the connotation behind the appearance of art work by their sophisticated acknowledgment about the particular artists.

What's more, critics can also provide earnest feedback for the artist to some extent. As my teacher of philosophy said (and I paraphrase) "Only with the objective compliment and critics together can a thing be complete." More importantly, there is no point to deny that every artist, no matter what reputation he already gets will have to face the difficult moment like lacking in inspiration or pursuing the innovation. Some tips to the point can help artists especially those who get stuck in their own field better strive for a profound work. （这段和上个都说的是评论家的作用，也算是和艺术家的结合，那么对于题目来说，评论家到底是不是会带来一些恒久价值的东西呢？可以和题目再呼应下，摆明立场。呵呵）

In sum, due to analysis and reasons mentioned above, we can easily draw a conclusion that in spite of the unconceivable contributions to the creation of artistic masterpieces from artists, we should not ignore the role of critics play in that their comments can not only boost our appreciation of arts but also provide useful feedback in pursuit of better works.（总结的不错）

我不是高手，第一次在寄托改作文，原来也只改过托福作文。我只是看看你怎么写的，呵呵 由于我的这一篇是手写的，没法上传了，呵呵 就不能让你帮我改了。不过你写的总的来说提纲不错，就是有的逻辑衔接的再紧密一点，只是个人意见，希望对你有帮助。加油加油！

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emeraldyuenUID: 2865055

2# 蜥蜴也飞


恩，逻辑这块我确实做的不太好。。
不过，真是太感激你啦~~~~以后有什么经验互相交流哦~~~~~~~呵呵:)

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4# emeraldyuen 呵呵 一起努力