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130"How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society."  

The speaker's dual claim are one-sided. The view that how the destiny of society is determined by the socialization of children, on some extent, is over-absolute but reasonable. However, there is no evidence inferring that we cannot learn how to raise children who can help creat a better society.
Consider first the speaker's arbitrarily assertion that the destiny of society depends on how children are socialized. What we called socialization is to provide individuals with skills and habits for participating with their own society. The future society would be made up of today's children and their abitily at that time would have decisive influence on the society.
However, socialization is merely one factor influcing the extent to which an individual will ultimately contribute to a better society, but not the only one. Consider certain prominent leaders who have contributed profoundly to a better society. Mahatma Gandhi's contributions sprang mainly from the courage of his inner convictions and Martin Luther King's contribution was primarily the result of his strong upbringing, which had more to do with his parental influence than the socialization. Moreover, when taking the outstanding science and technology's contribution to the advancement of society into account, the Newcomen steam engine, invented by James Watt, which is fundamental to che changes brought by the industrial revolution, whose contributions impetus the advent of industrialization.
Consider the speaker's next claim that we have not yet learned how to raise children who can creat a better society. But what is a better society? If we define the better society as a world that people have more comfortable life and more rights, which people don't have to worry their food and clothes, besides, they could enjoy themselves by watching films or appreciating an opera and have right of speech, the most recent quarter-century has seen that our life have become more convinence because of the new and high technology and the rights of women have been protected. These all prove that we have known how to teach children to help bring about a better society.
In the final analysis, I agree with the speaker as the solization of children is a key factor for the future of our society. Nevertheless, other factors that equally  or even more important to determine the destiny of society. And also the speaker obviously ignores our progress toward the education of children.

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Consider the speaker's next claim that we have not yet learned how to raise children who can creat a better society. But what is a better society? If we define the better society as a world that people have more comfortable life and more rights, which people don't have to worry their food and clothes, besides, they could enjoy themselves by watching films or appreciating an opera and have right of speech, the most recent quarter-century has seen that our life have become more [url=]convinence[/url][x6]
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of children is a key factor for the future of our society. Nevertheless, other factors that equally  or even more important to determine the destiny of society. And also the speaker obviously ignores our progress toward the education of children.

我认为这篇文章是应该对socialization展开进行陈述的，因为题目说‘社会化决定了社会的未来，我们还没有学会怎样教会孩子创造一个好的未来’作者在说明人们还没有学会怎样让孩子更好的社会化！
我认为你理解的有些偏差，社会化影响的是孩子的思维方式和行为方式，社会化又不单单是学校的责任或者父母的责任，应该是学校、家庭、朋友、社会等共同的责任。所以展开以后有很多问题都围绕着社会化陈述，比如孩子的学校教育、孩子的道德情操教育、孩子的社会知识的教育。
作者的题目写的有点儿偏了，否则应该会有很多东西写。
还有有不少的短语的介词用错了，上面我可能没有完全改出来。
还有每段之间要空行。
快考试了就不鼓励了，多批评多进步哈！！------PUMA


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