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[i习作temp] 不写不行了,第一篇正式的ISSUE,大家多多指导啊 [复制链接]

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130"How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society."

When we look at the children, there are love and hopes in our eyes. That is because we are aware that children will become the future of our society, country and the world. Knowing it let us be nervous, for having no confidence in raising them very well, though we have been working hard on it for many years.

The growth of children, the constructers and designers of our future world, determines the destiny of society. Everyone has their own dream about the future. For example, we expect the superior students to become the leaders in all fields, while the others who are born with talents of art, music are hoped to create new art conceptions and forms. Not only their parents and teachers, all people are prepared to make the children grow to take over their careers.

Seen from the promoting educational system, we are always concerned about the raising methods and objectives. More parents have learned to cultivate the kids from young age than the past, claiming little kids have potential intelligence waiting to be explored. Is that true? We have no idea at this time, however, we must admit the notion of paying attention to education is a good thing. The school and college are making their efforts to think about better teaching methods, available to any type of students, which are able to dig out every child’s characteristic, urging them to take advantage of their different talents. Even the society changes the attitudes towards young people, such as encouraging rich variety of organizations for the youth. They have no more treated them just as the ones should be taken care of, but as the ones should be given opportunities waiting to be made choice on their own. And there is a point we should know that providing great conditions and circumstances are a continuing effort.

The efforts are clear to see, while the weakness and disadvantages also have to be faced. For shouldering the better society, the young cannot just have fun during their childhood, which has been a long term contradiction. Parents force them to study hard. Schools make them learn all kinds of courses, ignoring whether they like or dislike. However, when they walk out of the gate of college, they catch sight of helplessness of no use of most what they have learned. How does this happen? Does the theory of teaching have something wrong? Or is the blame belongs to parents and teachers for using the inappropriate way? These are waiting to be worked out.

Maybe it’s too strict to say we have not yet learned how to raise the children, but we have to get an clear eye on our situations now. We work very hard on how to teach. We think very hard about the future of the children and the society. However, we must also prepare to walk very hard on the long road leading us to make sure how to raise them so well to bring about a better society.
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发表于 2011-4-6 09:59:51 |只看该作者
为啥没人点评呢,难道是我写的太不可理喻。。。

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你这个说了和没说一样啊。。
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大家都是伸手党....怎么会有点评呢....
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发表于 2011-4-6 21:38:53 |只看该作者
你这个说了和没说一样啊。。
狐狸大叔 发表于 2011-4-6 14:55


意思是指我写的不符合主旨?没说明白?

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发表于 2011-4-7 04:52:41 |只看该作者
你说了任何内容了吗
似乎就是重复了一遍题目
如果你赞同的话,你要对后半句(题目)解释清楚,为什么我们不知道。
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发表于 2011-4-7 11:47:44 |只看该作者
明白了,确实后半句着墨太浅了。多谢指导!

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发表于 2011-4-7 13:19:44 |只看该作者
兄弟,你让找到了自信;P

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发表于 2011-4-7 13:50:59 |只看该作者
怎么能把你的幸福建立在我的痛苦之上。。。

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发表于 2011-4-7 13:57:35 |只看该作者
展开说,,,,,不展开就只有空话了
例如你可以用这种结构论证
1. 作为教育者,我们只是大概知道哪些是很不好的行为和人格,但不知道最理想的应该是什么样的。尤其是将来,没人知道30年以后的观点来看,什么样的品质,知识,etc是被需要的。我们对未来的预测是建立在对过去的观察上的,which 是不够的,因为世界变太快
2.即使我们知道我们希望把孩子教育成什么样,教育方法也很可能达不到预期,甚至有副作用。例如说教会造成逆反,严格导致厌学,放松式管理造成懒惰,etc。
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发表于 2011-4-7 14:16:53 |只看该作者
非常感谢,受益匪浅!
恩,我就是不会展开,只想到的到比较基础的论点,再往下就空了。要好好地挖一挖思想,往脑髓里挖。。。

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发表于 2011-4-7 14:20:33 |只看该作者
你不要过于着急写习作
先想想怎么写
你列出来个提纲
例如2大块,3大块
然后下面每一块怎么写,有几个小点,具体有没有例子

这些想通了,半个小时一口气写一整篇儿就是水到渠成的事情了。
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发表于 2011-4-7 14:27:41 |只看该作者
膜拜~
我是时间太赶了,所以狗急跳墙了。。。还是要静下心来,先多动脑子。

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发表于 2011-4-7 14:34:44 |只看该作者
我自己只写过一次,就是考试的时候
之前就是翻翻题目,脑子里想下提纲,有些很奇怪的是要琢磨下怎么写
argument没复习
这样复习大概一周就够了。。
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发表于 2011-4-7 14:39:24 |只看该作者
继续膜拜~~~笨鸟还是要早飞,虽然我已经飞的太晚了。。。

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