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发表于 2011-6-13 15:37:39 |只看该作者
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important for students to understand ideas and concepts than it is for them to learn facts.

On this contemporary era, with the advancement of the society, the revolution of the way of education has sparked spirited controversy. It would be ridiculous to argue which is more important between the understanding of ideas and facts. As far as I am concerned, both are vital in study. They are just two hands of a man and two wings of a bird.
First, ideas and concepts play a vital role in the study of new knowledge as they are basis and principle. Under no circumstance could facts develop without well comprehend of ideas and concepts. Had Tomas Edison not realized the character of tungsten filament, he would not have invented light bulb. Had astronomers not understand Bode’s law, they would not have discovered the Asteroid Belt.
Moreover, learning facts is important as facts are vivid and fascinating that students would feel easier to study and understand the abstract ideas and concepts. That’s why teachers would love to quote examples when illustrate a new idea or concept. Knowledge which is felt to be boring is of little use but knowledge which is assimilated eagerly becomes a permanent possession. And students prefer lively knowledge; only in this way could students study with high efficiency.
Furthermore, ideas and facts are interrelationship. Ideas and concepts play a key role in the study of new knowledge under certain circumstance when combining with practice. It means, when doesn’t contact with facts and reality, ideas and concepts won’t come into play. And with the deep research of facts, researchers could discover more new ideas and concepts. They are in interaction.
Therefore, both ideas and facts are critical in the process of study. Under certain circumstance, it makes sense to say that one is more important than other. Nevertheless, without defining the exact case, by no means can one conclude either one is more important.
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发表于 2011-6-14 00:02:44 |只看该作者
46# xiangtuo 第一段应该是In the era而不是on the era吧

第二段
in the study of sth. 在研究……的过程中
without后面应该加名词,所以是不是改成comprehension呢

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facts are vivid and fascinating SO that students ...

倒数第二段
interrelationship n.: the way in which each of two or more things is related to the other or others. 所以可以说the interrelationship between A and B但是不可以说A and B are interrelationship.
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发表于 2011-6-15 23:59:48 |只看该作者
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
To achieve successful development of a country, a government should focus its budgets more on young children’s education rather than on universities.

Is it possible to tell whether the left hand is more useful than the right one? It would be ridiculous to argue that whether more budgets should be focus on primary school or universities. In fact, both are vital in the process of achieving successful development. They are just like two hands of a human and two wings of a bird. Each plays a role and couldn’t be replaced.
Young children, primary school students, who just start their study, need more focus of every aspect, including budget support. As young children lack the abilities of self-control and telling right from wrong, they should be treated patiently and carefully involving all kinds of fascinating and interesting ways of education. As the result of that, more finance should be put into rudimentary education. Another main reason is that primary education is basis of further study. No one could deny the importance of elementary education is the cornerstone of cultivating person with abilities the more the better to a country. If they don’t have a good habit and developed way of study, they won’t be success in study in the end. Had Newton not be educated well in his childhood, he would not have discovered the law of gravity when he was bungled by an apple by accident. So, budgets should be used on young children to improve the quality of their education as high as better.
Meanwhile, the education on campus is the same as that of primary school because the main responsibility of universities is to provide professional on all walks of live to the society. However, professional courses are composed of many team works, experiences, model presentations which all need a large amount of money, and only in this way could undergraduate’s skills of their major treated well. Moreover, students in the universities need more chances of practice and internship during their study especially for senior students as working experience would play a vital role in the future when searching for a post. Many camps are held as well to broaden their horizon and improve their abilities of every aspect. In a word, education in the university needs financial supports as well.
Therefore, education on both young children and universities are critical in the development of society. Under certain circumstance, it makes sense to say that one way is better or more important than the other. Nevertheless, without defining the exact case, by no means can one conclude that one should focus more budget than another.
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:6 t' @8 ]' P: b! ]
To achieve successful development of a country, a government should focus its budgets more on young children’s education rather than on universities.. g$ W* ^+ P) H% J9 ~; x

Is it possible to tell whether the left hand is more useful than the right one? It would be ridiculous to argue that whether more budgets should be focus on primary school or universities. In fact, both are vital in the process of achieving successful development. They are just like two hands of a human  ortwo wings of a bird. Each plays a an importantrole and couldn’t be replaced.

Young children, primary school studentswho just start their study, need more focus fromevery aspects, including budget support. As young children lack the abilities of self-control and telling right from wrong, they should be treated patiently and carefully involving all kinds of fascinating and interesting ways of education. As the result of that, more finances should be put into rudimentary education. Another main reason is that primary education is thebasis of further study. No one could deny the importance of elementary education is the cornerstone of cultivating person with abilities the more the better to a country. If they don’t have a good habit and developed way of study, they won’t  success in study in the end. Had Newton not be educated well in his childhood, he would not have discovered the law of gravity when he was bungled by an apple by accident. So, budgets should be used on young children to improve the quality of their education as high as possible.+ q4 g! I' U$ {

Meanwhile, the education on campus is the same as that of primary school because the main responsibility of universities is to provide professional knowledgeon all walks of live to the society. However, professional courses are composed of many team works, experiences, model presentations which all need a large amount of money, and only in this way could undergraduate’s skills of their major be treated well. Moreover, students in the universities especially for senior students need more chances of practice and internship during their study as working experience would play a vital role in the future when searching for a post. Many campus are held as well to broaden their horizons and improve their abilities of every aspects. In a word, education in the university needs financial supports as well.! N( f' Z- n+ _3 ?: h

Therefore, education on both primary school and universities are critical in the development of society. Under certain circumstance, it makes sense to say that one way is better or more important than the other. Nevertheless, without defining the exact case, no one couldconclude that one should focus more budget than another.

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发表于 2011-6-16 13:02:04 |只看该作者
搞死。。传不了文档,如果你要的话,我可以qq给你传。。哦对了。。如果我改的有误的话,希望你能告诉我哦。。谢谢了。。

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发表于 2011-6-19 23:46:19 |只看该作者
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The reading passage and the listening material discuss whether the long memoir of Seingalt was really written by himself. The author claims three points TC by critics while the speaker denies the three points in the passage.
First of all, the reading passage contends that he was not wealthy enough as he had borrowed money. In contrast, the lecture argues that he was really rich. He loaned from merchant as he didn't have cash which could supports the point that he had money just couldn't wait to arrive.
Secondly, according to the reading passage, it was impossible for him to remember exact words for many years. On the contrary, the professor in the lecture casts doubt on the viewpoint by saying that he could remember and every could remember because he keep the habit of writing dairy for many years, which completely contradict what the reading passage indicates.
Finally, the writer holds the opinion that he couldn't escape from the prison although he have many powerful friends. Nevertheless, this is challenged by the lecturer. She thinks that he really escaped from the jail as the ceiling was repaired after he left there. If he were not escaped, the ceiling would not be repaired, which directly refutes the reading material.
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发表于 2011-6-21 16:03:32 |只看该作者
52# xiangtuo
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The reading passage and the listening material discuss whether the long memoirof Seingalt was really written by himself. The author claims three points TC(??) by critics while the speaker deniesdeny有点太大了,用否认罪名的时候用deny,这个仅仅是观点不同,这样用不恰当。可以用cast dounts或者contrast之类的)
the three points in the passage.

First of all, the reading passage contendsthat he(本段第一次提到人应该先说明人名。) was not wealthy enough ashe had borrowed money. In contrast, the lecture argues that he was really rich.He loaned from merchant as he didn't have cash whichcould supports the point that(啰嗦了。帮你改一下。On thecontrary, the lecture believes he was actually quite rich, and that he loanedfrom merchant was due to the money that he couldn’t wait to arrive.
he had money just couldn't wait to arrive.


Secondly, according to the reading passage,it was impossible for him to remember exact words for many years. On thecontrary, the professor in the lecture casts doubt on the viewpoint by sayingthat he could remember and every could remember(表达的什么意思??) becausehe keepkept the habit of writing dairyfor many years, which completely contradict what the reading passage indicates.本段on thecontrary句逻辑不对,应该是the professor contents=> he kept diary=>hecould remember everything=>which is completely contradict the readingpassage



Finally, the writer holds the opinion that hecouldn't escape from the prison although he have many powerful friends.Nevertheless, this is challenged by the lecturer. Sheshe指代lecture…. thinks that he reallyescaped from the jail as the ceiling was repaired after he left there. If hewere not escaped, the ceiling would not be repaired, which directly refutes thereading material.

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发表于 2011-6-23 22:43:26 |只看该作者
13# zjxdxokzzy
那个一分为二的表达可以用a coin has two sides

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发表于 2011-6-30 23:28:35 |只看该作者
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Agree or not? Television advertising directed towards young children (aged 2 to 5) should not be allowed.

In this contemporary era, with the advanced of the society, competition was more and more zealous. As the result, more advertising which show a variety kinds of products are played on the TV, including the advertisings directed towards young children. As far as I am concerned, I think the advertisings of that should not be forbidden all the time; some of them of actually perfect and benefit products should be allowed on the TV.
Admittedly, no one could deny the shortage of advertisings directed towards young children. That was mainly because young children may lack abilities of telling the right from the wrong and attract by some certain thing such as bright color easily as they were too young. If this disadvantage of young children was used by the company to introduce their products, more would be purchase for the reason that parents would satisfied the wish of children if their willing of owning on is strong. That result may strongly borrow the parents and disturb the balance of sales market.
However, for companies, television advertising is a key way to establish their brands. If their products were actually perfect or good enough, why shouldn't they introduce their products to people and bring benefit to them? Had the advertising of paper nappy not introduced to the public, the problem of all the parents would not be solved in a tremendous way. Moreover, young parents may obtain more knowledge from those advertisings, such as which kind of WJ was prefer to their child or which style of milk powder should be bought at every stage of their baby. In this way, young parents could do better as parent.
In a nut shell, the television advertising direct towards to the young children should not be allowed but some advertising of perfect and benefit good could be showed on the television to the public.
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Agree or not? Television advertising directed towards young children (aged 2 to 5) should not be allowed.
In this contemporary era, with the advanced of the society(此处是想表达社会是先进的么? in this advanced society是不是会更好), competition was more and more zealous(换做fierce是不是会更恰当
. As the result(应该是as a result), more advertising which show (shows,advertising是不可数的。但是这里我觉得用promotes 会更恰当,广告是为了促销不仅仅是展示产品)a variety kinds of products are played on the TV, including the advertisings(此处换做those会更简洁) directed towards young children. As far as I am concerned, I think the advertisings of that (此处是不是可以更简洁用this kind of advertisings或者是the advertising of this kind)should not be forbidden all the time(我觉得这句很下句很不连贯诶,前句重点在这样的广告不能一直禁止,后面说有些广告不错;但是应该是并不是所有的广告都应该禁止,因为有些广告不错。即改为not all of those advertising should be forbidden because some of them are perfect and the products promoted in them are of benefit); some of them of (是不是笔误啊,应该用are吧)actually perfect and benefit products should be allowed showed (这样会不会有利于理解)on the TV. ! q# [" }1 {7 A! m; g



Admittedly, no one could deny the
shortage(shortage的意思是不足不够的意思,没有缺点的意思吧,用shortcomings或者说是negative effects) of advertisings directed towards young children. That was mainly because young children may lack abilities of telling the right from the wrong and attract(are more easily attracted) by some certain (some 和certain重复)thing(things) such as (有点不通顺,孩子们容易被一些商品吸引,例如明亮的颜色?商品和颜色不是同类的吧,改为which have)bright color easily as they were aretoo young. If this disadvantage of young children was used by the companies to introduce (promote)their products, more would be purchase (purchased)for the reason that parents would satisfied (satisfy)the wishes of children if their willing of owning on ??is strong. That result may strongly borrow(bother?) the parents and disturb the balance of sales market(这个理由有点牵强吧).

However, for companies, television advertising is a key way to establish their brands. If their products were(are) actually perfect or good enough(重复), why shouldn't they introduce their products to people and bring benefit to them? Had the advertising of paper nappy not introduced to the public, the problem of all the parents would not be solved in a tremendous way. Moreover, young parents may obtain more knowledge from those advertisings, such as which kind of WJ was prefer to their child or which style of milk powder should be bought at every stage of their baby. In this way, young parents could do better as parent. , J; [7 Z; E- V6 [3




In a nut shell, the television advertising directed
towards to (有没有重复)the young children should not be allowed but some advertising of perfect and benefit good could be showed on the television to the public.

这是我修改的第一篇作文,因为喜欢钻牛角尖而且都是从自己的写作习惯来修改的,水平有限实在抱歉,大家一起加油吧。
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发表于 2011-7-2 09:57:46 |只看该作者
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The reading passage and the listening material both discuss the topic of whether the hydrogen-based engine would replace the internal-combustion engines. The author believes without hesitation. The speaker, however, states the opposite and denies the three points in the passage.
First of all, the reading passage contends that the fuel-cell engines utilize easily available. In the contrast, the lecture argues that the fuel is not easily available for it was purer liquid as needed which was difficult to produce and store. In this way, the professor contradicts the first view.
Secondly, according to the reading passage, using fuel-cell engine would solve many pollution problems. On the contrary, the professor in the lecture casts doubt on the viewpoint. She said that during the process of producing the purer liquid fuel, it would produce a lot of pollution by burning carbon and oil. The car won't release the pollution while the factory would.
Finally, the writer holds the opinion that less money would cost to operate a fuel-cell engine. Nevertheless, this is challenged by the lecturer. She says that one metal called platoon was needed in the operation which was very expensive. And without it, even the operated car won’t undergo. Moreover, the cheaper material won’t replace it. In this way, the professor contradicts the view made in the passage.
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发表于 2011-7-2 12:47:32 |只看该作者
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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.

In this contemporary era, with the advancement of the science and technology, our way of lives have changed a lot from before and our daily lives are filled with technology. However, the use of technology has sparked a widespread controversy. Someone points out that technology has made children less creative than they were in the past. I agree with this point with my own idea.
First of all, the wide use of high-tech machine may have great impact on children’s basic abilities like reading or accounting which are the basis of creative. Nowadays, more and more study computers for children are invented which contain a large amount of functions. It may bring convenience to students as they don’t need to write, just click on the mouse. However, as the result of that, the abilities of writing or accounting may reduce, which may directly impact the children’s creativity. No one could deny the idea that creative cannot be built on poor basis.
Furthermore, the use of technology may decrease the frequency of using brain. As too much functions provided by the high-tech machines, students don’t need to use their brain, just read or do as the machine says. Keeping doing in that way for a long period of time, their brain would not be as active as before. Under no circumstance could ability of creative developed in this situation. Hence they couldn’t be as creative as they were in the past.
Moreover, children may be dependent on technology and would not like to think. They would not love to take a lot of brain to think if technological machine has told them what to do and how to do. Had Newton not figured out the reason why the apple would fall, he would not have discovered the law of gravity. As the same, had children not thought of what and why, they would not have developed the ability of creative.
In a nut shell, technology do has made children less creative than they were in the past as the lack of basis, shortage of using brain and too much dependence.
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The reading passage and the listening material both discuss the topic of whether the hydrogen-based fuel-cell(建议补充完整)engines would replace the internal-combustion engines. The author believes without hesitation. The speaker, however, states the opposite and denies the three points in the passage.5 ^' }: `/ b. s3 Z& K6 r
First of all, the reading passage contends that the fuel-cell engines utilize easily available. In the contrast, the lecture argues that the fuel is not easily available for it was purer liquid as needed it was needed as pure liquid which was difficult to produce and store. In this way, the professor contradicts the first view.
Secondly, according to the reading passage, using fuel-cell engine would solve many pollution problems. On the contrary, the professor in the lecture casts doubt on the viewpoint. She said that during the process of producing the purer pure liquid fuel, it would produce a lot of pollution by burning carbon and oil. The car won't release the pollution while the factory would.
Finally, the writer holds the opinion that less money would cost to operate a fuel-cell engine. Nevertheless, this is challenged by the lecturer. She says that one metal called platoon platinum was needed in the operation which was very expensive. And without it, even the operated car won’t undergo. Moreover, the cheaper material won’t replace it. In this way, the professor contradicts the view made in the passage.

综合按照这个结构写就行了,建议找一个听力文本,可以提前修改听力不准确的地方。
这次木有退路了!

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