【Daily Writing作文特训小组】蜂鸟的作文贴！TOEFL之旅已结束，谢谢大家！

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7月21日作业修改版
谢谢theflyfish, wendi316, jenniferso的批改！  我的问题：1. 用词不准确，尤其是形容词  2. 用词多样性不够

9/11/2009 Do you agree with the following statement? It is only worth watchingmovies that can teach us something about real life?

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7月23日 独立作业
6/19/2010Do you agree with the following statement? If you need to discuss upsetting orcontroversial problems with others, using e-mail/text messaging is better thanusing telephone/voice-messaging.
又超时了>< 下次一定早交作业！

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7月23日综合作业
严格按时间完成，听力只听一篇>< 第二次写综合，还不会写，望狠批！


The lecture is mainly discussed that theevidence support by the article that the recently published painting is JaneAusten is unconvincing.

First of all, the speaker demonstrates thatthe portrait was published around seventy years later after Jane Austen'sdeath, which means that there are no Austen family members who had the chance tosee the portrait still living. This point is contrary to the article thatAusten's family recognized it and point out the girl is Jane.

Moreover, the speaker points out that thereare some cousins of Jane Austen are at about the same age with Jane and they resembleJane Austen pretty much. And it is possible that the recently published portraitis a sketch of one of her cousin. This claim destroys the statement in thearticle that the resemblance of Jane's sister Cassandra's sketch of Jane provethe teenager girl is Jane.

Finally, the speaker argues that it cannot drawthe conclusion merely because the portrait style is similar to the paintingstyle of Ozias Humphrey, who was a professional portrait painter Austen familywould hire. In fact, the portrait was sold by a man called William at a timewhen Jane Austen has been 27 years old, an age obviously older than the girl inthe portrait.

In conclusion, the speaker challenges thethree points in the article that the teenager girl in the portrait is not JaneAusten.

theflyfishUID：2101420

谢谢帮我改文章。

冰雪蜂鸟UID：2754485

65# theflyfish

咱们是一组的，你还没有改我的作文。
你上传的作文和你楼上上传的是一样的！

theflyfishUID：2101420

不好意思传错了。

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6/26/2010 Do you agree with the following statement? People whohave learned many different skills are more likely to succeed than those whofocus on learning only one skill.: d0 ?5 n2 ?' n( m




Over the past several years,more and more widely specialized talents have been required in society.Carefully observation can find that holding various skills are(is) one of (我觉得加一个those更好，更有强调的意味~) common characteristics those people have. Following this trend, I am inclined to believe that learning more different skills can promote one’s career success.) m+ i: I3 b  ?9 l4 r/ w$ |* x
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Those who assert that people who focus on one skills are more likely to have a prosperous future may believe that focusing on only one field can dig in a specific area deeper due to the limited energy one may has. What those people should do is trying to be more professional and skillful in this area and only in thisarea. Can we draw a telling conclusion that it is this notion limited one’s scope and barricaded one’s step?（这也是一种新写法吖，学习了~）, S# ^' S. X( |9 v
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As for me, a multi-skilled background is more helpful for my future career. Amulti-skilled background can help one has access to different fields and, what is more important, it means one are knowledgeable and have better understanding of the task appointed to his or her. A friend of mine has focused on his major in literature for his entire college time with little basic science courses. After graduate, he got an internship in Electronicfield. Due to his limited knowledge about other area, he did not make any sense about Electronic and technical term and of course have great difficulties in doing his work. Finally the company did not offer him the job. Hence, more knowledge on other field will widely broaden（意思重复了） somebody’s future road.



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Moreover,possessing various skills can not only benefit individual but also the society. Inscientific research, cross field research, which is more and more demanded in thesociety（修饰对象不明）, is a strong force that drives the scientific and technology advance.（主语不明） Myprofessor, who has Computer Science, Psychology and Linguistic degree, used to do a research related to Web Science. She implemented one of experiment by psychology method. Without doubt, it was a breakthrough in Web Science and she also rewarded a great success and reputation. I cannot help myself to say that to learn more skills is compelling for me.

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To be admitted, one can have a deeper understanding when only focus on one field and thus making great contribution, learning more skills can bring about morebenefit for us individual to success and also the society.& V  Y$ R5 }8 S3 U  m5 U
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要注意词与词之间的空格吖，不然很多地方会有误解

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70# rlj021

谢谢啦>< 互相帮助，继续加油！

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7月29日
独立写作

theflyfishUID：2101420

改好了

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7月29日
综合写作TPO17