【Daily Writing作文特训小组】小呆的作文贴，求监督求指导~

应小呆UID：3109940

7月19日
综合写作

应小呆UID：3109940

独立写了小马的预测机经~所以和我一组的可以选择不改哈~

应小呆UID：3109940

7月20日
独立
30min

cherrycarrieUID：2943359

没有批独立，为了弥补，所以改的综合= =见谅啦。

另：来看看我的作文吧~
https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1240367-5-1.html

应小呆UID：3109940

综合写作

7月20日

TPO9
The lecturer holds the view that although what the reading provides is true, the internal-combustion engine do lots of harm to the environment, fuel-cell engines are not a better solution to the problem. She has the following reasons to support herself.

Firstly, although hydrogen can be derived from various plentiful sources, it is not easy to attain. For example we usually derive hydrogen from water. But the water we need is pure liquid water, which can only be made artificially. For instance, producing pure liquid water needs considerable low temperature. What’s more, it is hard to store pure liquid water. So hydrogen is not so easily available as what is said in the reading.

Secondly, there will be a lot of pollution in the progress of producing pure water, from which we derive hydrogen to get fuel-cell engines. In the progress of manufacturing pure water, we need to burn a lot of coal and oil, which will do harm to the environment. If we use fuel-cell engines, we just remove the pollution from using progress to producing progress. This makes no sense.

Thirdly, money will be saved. In the progress of producing pure water, we need a lot of materials, one of which is a kind of very rare metal. There is no doubt that this kind of metal is very expensive. What’s more, the alternative material has not been manufactured successfully. Moreover, as we can see from the information above, progress of producing pure water and storing it also needs lots of money, so using fuel-cell engines can not be cheaper at all.

lyn7981UID：2758158

写的很不错呢~！
我的作文：https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1284659-2-1.html

lyn7981UID：2758158

7.20 TPO 9 改好啦啦啦~【Annie】5 [0 |# e" @) j" E" T
The lecturer holds the view that although what the reading provides is true,(这里用破折号） the internal-combustion engine do lots of harm to the environment（能不能改成does/inflicts irreparable/lasting harm on the environment)  , (这个逗号也改成破折号）fuel-cell engines are not a better solution to the problem. She has（lists会不会比has好一些些？） the following reasons to support herself.

Firstly, although hydrogen can be derived from various plentiful sources, it is not easy to attain. For example we usually derive hydrogen from water. But the water we need is pure liquid water, which can only be made artificially. For instance, producing pure liquid water needs considerable low temperature. What’s more, it is hard to store pure liquid water. So hydrogen is not so easily available as what is said in the reading.（听力里说，通常我们认为H2能从水里得到，但这种方法是行不通的。要得到H2我们必须先把它弄成液态【liquid state】，我特地再去听了一遍，你再去听听是不是这样的？）$ @$ W9 R+ v+ a' Q) Y2 J. y' r
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Secondly, there will be a lot of pollution in the progress of producing pure water（一样的问题，producing pure 【hydrogen】creates a lot of pollutions）, from which we derive hydrogen to get fuel-cell engines. In the progress of manufacturing pure water, we need to burn a lot of coal and oil, which will do harm to the environment. If we use fuel-cell engines, we just remove the pollution from using progress to producing progress. This makes no sense.8 [1 w) m2 z# O0 S; k6 _
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Thirdly, money will not be saved. In the progress of producing pure water, we need a lot of materials, one of which is a kind of very rare metal. There is no doubt that this kind of metal is very expensive. What’s more, the alternative material has not been manufactured successfully.(听力里讲用【其他便宜的材料不管用】~其实我们都知道的，说白了就是铂能催化氢气的传电子反应，而其他金属不能罢了，有时候没听清可以试试用常识自己解释解释~我觉得还挺有用滴~分享给你，希望对你有帮助）Moreover, as we can see from the information above, progress of producing pure water and storing it also needs lots of money, so using fuel-cell engines can not be cheaper at all.

改好了改好了~~~嘿嘿，我发现用彩色的字改很漂亮诶~哈哈哈哈。不过如果我能把内容改得这么漂亮就好了。。。。T T

闫颜UID：2788503

我7-20号独立，现在才写完， 麻烦了！！

82# 应小呆

闫颜UID：2788503

There are no two leaves, which are exactly the same. So there is no team, whose members hold the same opinion from the beginning. People holding different opinions can achieve success as a team. What's more（后文用了很多次，建议多储备几个）, in my opinion, teams with various kinds of views are more easily to succeed. From my perspective, the following discussion can support my point of view.

First and foremost, the more the better（我觉得这里没有说明的很清楚，the more views, the better?）. As an old Chinese saying goes, three stupid shoemakers can take the place of a genius. So the power of discussion is enormous. Every opinion has its own virtues. As long as we can collect all the virtues and avoid all the withdraws and discuss them thoroughly, we can make up（应该是用come up with吧？）a solution better than all the others. For example, when we decide the topic of our study group to research for a history class, the more the better. That means, when different people have different opinions, then they will try to find different means and materials to prove their rightness. When we stop collecting and present(presenting )to others what we have, we will have a broader viewpoint than any individual of our group would do. As a result, our report will cover all the corners of a specific topic and have a general conclusion. What's more, as everyone using different way, the way others used can give us inspiration of new idea to look at the world.

In addition, people hold（holding） different views can see what you do not pay enough attention to. As we all know that, you cannot see the hole on the back of your pants, but others can. When you work with people with different opinions, your eyesight will be broadened. You can analyze things from a more thorough perspective. Thus you can learn more from what you are doing. Moreover, to work with people hold different opinions, you need to learn how to communicate with different people. As we all know that communication skills are very critical quality for both a individual and a group to be successful. Dealing with different people in a group is a very useful practice for you to deal with different people in a society. For example, if you can learn how to reach a consensus in a group, then you will know how to persuade other people to admit your idea. If you can persuade other people to admit your idea, then you will get more help from others. Thus success is nearer to you. The same is to groups.

Some people may take the view that, there will be more conflicts in a team, whose members have different opinions. But as a matter of fact, as long as the team has a mutual-helpful and harmonious atmosphere, there won't be so many conflicts. What's more, people will learn more about how to communicate with other people, as I have said above. Moreover they will learn how to deal with people who have different opinions and learn from each other.

That is why I think different opinions in a team will help it to be more successful.

写的很好很好很好啊，好羡慕啊~~我总觉得自己词汇和句型变化很少~~一定要学习楼主。
我的文章是附件
7-16号的文章没有人给我改，楼主要是有时间就看下吧谢啦！！，https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1278705-1-1.html
82# 应小呆

应小呆UID：3109940

7月21日
独立
我明天要坐车去济南考试==（小城市木有考点）
所以今天和我一组的同学，请问我23号考完回来再改可以吗？

幕阳素素UID：3025800

观点挺好，我怎么就想不出那么多观点来呢