【Daily Writing作文特训小组】Anne的作文贴！我弱的不得了，欢迎大家狂拍砖！！！

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Season, 我贴出来了 ：D

The article states that there are some doubts with the "the woman's face" painting that suggest it could not be a work by Rembrandt. However, the professor disagrees with the standpoint of the article and also shows some evidence to strength his own view.

First, the article asserts that Rembrandt was known for his attention to the details of his subjects' clothing, so he wouldn't have been guilty of such an inconsistency. But the professor says the fur collar was adder by another person later and it serves the way to increase the value of this portrait. And this fur collar makes the portrait seem formal.

Additionally, the article supposes that Rembrandt was a master of painting light and shadow and he wouldn't make such an error in the painting.  The professor uses some light knowledge to further explain this part. He says, if we remove that added fur collar, the light would illuminate the face, and in fact, the light and shadow fit together realistically.

Finally, the professor judges it's incorrect that Rembrandt never use a panel glued together in this way from several pieces of wood. As we admitted the fur collar is added later, the extra wood in the panel is enlarged later, too. Meanwhile, we also have found the piece of wood in the original form of Portrait of a woman is from the very same tree as the wood panel used for another painting by Rembrandt.

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47# happinessvivi

The article states that there are some doubts with the "the woman's face" painting that suggest it could not be a work by Rembrandt. However, the professor disagrees with the standpoint of the article and also shows some evidence to strength his（讲话的是个女的吧我记得） own view.（要点没列全哇，质疑的三点和反驳的三点要在第一段列全哦）) [7 K5 u' F- t4 i

# L; p- m" `/ u) L4 o; X$ g% j5 NFirst, the article asserts that Rembrandt was known for his attention to the details of his subjects' clothing（真的说了这句话？？呃。。我没听到哎，我只听到了说这幅画本身有inconsistent，而没说rembrandt注重这个）, so he wouldn't have been guilty of such an inconsistency. But the professor says the fur collar was added by another person later and it serves the way to increase the value of this portrait. And this fur collar makes the portrait seem formal（我听到的貌似是protrait of formal lady）.
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Additionally, the article supposes that Rembrandt was a master of painting light and shadow and he wouldn't make such an error in the painting（点出具体的error是啥会不会比较好？）.  The professor uses some light knowledge to further explain this part. He says, if we remove that added fur collar, the light would illuminate the face（少了一个要点，说是本来的那个颜色是simple light color所以才有有反光到脸上）, and in fact, the light and shadow fit together realistically.4 V. B7 ]1 y' ~( X, ^9 o
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Finally, the professor judges it's incorrect that Rembrandt never use a panel glued together in this way from several pieces of wood（这句话木有读懂，外加貌似曲解了原文中的意思？）. As we admitted the fur collar is added later, the extra wood in the panel is enlarged（这个词用的不是太好，听力中说的是那些多的木头加在了原来木头的sides和top，为了让这个画显得更valuable and grand） later, too. Meanwhile, we also have found the piece of wood in the original form of Portrait of a woman is from the very same tree as the wood panel used for another painting by Rembrandt.

加强细节的一些描述，和再加个结尾小小总结下就完美了！加油！

PS：你给我改的那篇作文我下下来也是乱码呢，能在我的帖子上再贴一下吗？谢谢啦！https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=1292662&page=2#pid1775427532

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809独立+综合写作 ：D

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The article states that dinosaurs have beenproved that they were endotherms. However, the professor in the lecturedisagree with this standpoint, he also shows three evidences to argue againstthe article at the same time.


First, the article asserts that dinosaursare endotherms because their fossils have been discovered in polar regions. Butthe professor disputes it and explains that the polar regions were warmer inthe past than today. And when the polar regions become colder, dinosaursinclined to hibernate or migrate to warmer places in the cold days.


Additionally, the article supposes thatdinosaurs are dinosaurs because their legs are underneath the body. In theopposite side, the professor says the legs of dinosaurs are just used to supporttheir weight and large size.
It doesn'tmean to they are endotherms.


Finally, the professor considers it'sincorrect that dinosaurs can be proved as endothermy by their Haversian canals.He comes up with the idea that dinosaurs also have growth rings in their bodieswhich can be seen as the signal of non-endothermy. Plus, the growth processwould become slow or even stop because of the cold weather condition, it canprove dinosaurs are different from endothermy. (咦最后一段有关reading的内容呢？)



感觉综合写作没啥大问题，就看听力的要点能覆盖多少了...

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写得真棒

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对不起，我迟到了，才批好，楼主的独立可以，不过综合让人遗憾啊。有些错误真的不应该啊。

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对不起，我迟到了，才批好，楼主的独立可以，不过综合让人遗憾啊。有些错误真的不应该啊。
愤怒公爵 发表于 2011-8-10 21:05

你的批改让我收获很多~~~3q!!!:D

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52# julijone

今天来迟了，现在去看你的文章~~：）

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810独立+综合：

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综合，改好了

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56# happinessvivi

8.10 独立
加油！

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8.10 integrated

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看下我的8.10号的吧...时间错了真抱歉...麻烦了
今天写完后补上昨天的修改