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2007年5月A类Task 2考题
Computers care increasingly used in education. In which areas do you think are computers more important and in which areas are teachers more important?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.


Due to the fast pace of development of technology, computers are now replacing human in some areas. However, this is not the real case in education. From my point of view, teacher cannot be fully replaced both now and in the future.

It is admitted that computers do play an important role in expanding one’s horizon and help students to learn the basic principles. Besides, computer is an essential role for self-study due to its convenience and fast speed.

In contrast teachers are more important in a higher level in learning. First of all, students cannot really get experience from the non-living computers, but the teachers are always ready to pass on their experience and knowledge. For example, for biological students like us, we can acquire experimental techniques form our teachers instead of the computer. Secondly, teachers can help their students to overcome the difficulties they are facing in life. This is also an important process in learning. Teachers can guide them when students are missing from their directions; Teachers can comfort students when they are in a bad mood and encourage them when students are down.

In conclusion, though computers are playing more and more essential role in our life day by day, their functions in education are limited to only few areas. However, teachers play roles in other areas that the computers are not able to reach.

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求关注~求批改~

wrathUID: 2704440

lz 什么时候考啊？

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4.5-5

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5# bqiana
老师您好，我们学校是全英文教学方式，不停地再写专业课内容，雅思作文形式可能不大适应，不大会写。是否可以给点详细的建议。不胜感激~

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4# wrath
2月18。

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5# bqiana  
老师您好，我们学校是全英文教学方式，不停地再写专业课内容，雅思作文形式可能不大适应，不大会写。是否可以给点详细的建议。不胜感激~
泡泡情结 发表于 2012-1-18 10:39

你的基本功很好
就是思路逻辑不是很英式
可以参考几篇雅思官方范文

推荐剑桥6的Test1 7.5分范文

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8# bqiana
老师，看过之后的感受是那篇文章的思维比较direct，我的思维是中式的螺旋式，是这个意思吗？

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字数够么~~感觉很有套模板的感觉咧.~~我也是2.18考哇~

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10# 偷睡眠者
字数不够，飞机上写的。
模板是什么，好吃吗？