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谢谢各位回复修改！

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7.30独立写作：
Do you agree ordisagree with the following statement? Does advice given by older people morevaluable than from people your age?
   Life contains ups and downs. When you are in adversity, valuable and effective advice will be expected to give you guidance and help you out. In my opinion, it is older people that can give you such advice, for they are more experienced and resourceful, as well as more calm and considerate in front of difficulty.
    In first place, life and knowledge leave older people great fortune of experience and resource. Advice from them is extracted and purified from all their life experience, so their advice is always practical and precious .For example, I used to have a difficult time in learning math. My father suggested me that I should keep notes of all the problems which I did wrong, and review them every weekend. After conducting his advice for one month, I surprisingly saw my math score rise for 10 percent! This amazing outcome benefited from my father, who encountered similar problem as me in his young age. Older people may have faced same difficulty you are struggling in, therefore, their advice from experienceis more probable to give you valuable guidance, as well as prevent any waste of effort or time.
   Secondly, older people are more cool-headed and calm in front of difficulty, while people of your age always exhibit anxiety and overwhelming worry. A calm mind is essential to come up with valuable advice.Besides, young people are impetuous to do whatever they want, without considering consequence, so their advice may come from their short-time excitability.In contrast, older people may pay more attention to thorough process andpossible result when resolving a problem. Thus, advice from older people more likely leads to long term desirable result.
    Some people may hold that people of same age know more well of their demand and thought, which contributes valuable advice. However, I disagree with this viewpoint, because sometimes youngsters haven't developed proper values. For instance, some naughty pupils may advise their classmate to lie when he/she does something wrong. If this classmate lies and get away from punishment, he/she is likely to advise others to lie. What a horrible consequence this kind of advice would bring out! In contrast, older people obviously have more solid moral sense, and they can judge between right and wrong before giving you advice.
   All in all, Advice from older people is more valuable for their possession of experience and knowledge.  Moreover, they are more considerate and cool-headed when giving advice in emergency. What's more important, their advice is based on moral values, which wouldn't mislead youngsters.

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7.31独立写作：

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: It is impossible to be completely honest with your friend.

Friends are those who share both happiness and sorrows with us, give us support, and always well comprehend our feelings. Admittedly, trust lays foundation of true friendship. However, in my point of view, to be completely honest with friends is impossible.
    To begin with, I'd like to distinguish incompletely honest with dishonest. Dishonest behavior, which reflects one's irresponsible and deceitful, undoubtedly kills friendship and seriously hurts friends. However, incompletely honest behavior, is not tricky or cheating, but sometimes even more sincere with hidden concerns about friends. It might be caused by well intentions to protect friends, or occurred in uncontrollable circumstance.
    For further explanation, just think about white lies. Sometimes people would like to choose not to be completely honest with your friend, considering the honest truth might hurt him or her. For example, my friend Jude kept on a diet for one month. When I saw her yesterday, she excitingly asked me whether she looked slimmer. Although she seems no different to me, for encouraging her and not letting her down, I said she became thinner. On hearing what I said, she became unexpectedly delighted and confident. As such lie doesn't break the bottom line of moral virtues, and leads to a more harmonious relationship, how could we refuse it? To be not completely honest, is not untrustworthy, sometimes it can be owing to protection and love.
  Another reason is that some secrets have to be seriously hidden, even between friends. How could a manager share business secrets with his or her friends without considering the loss of whole company? How could a general talk about national defense secrets with friends, taking the risk of devastating the whole country’s security? Such secrets prevent us from being completely honest with friends, for they are not secrets only between friends, but closely related to more people, or even a country, which call on our responsibility.
    As the saying goes, "No person is without defects". Sometimes we are unconsciously to be not honest with friends, for the reason like we are habitually used to hide some part of life and do not like to share. In a nutshell, it is impossible to be completely honest with friends, considering both social reality and human nature. As long as this kind of not completely honest behavior does not betray moral virtue, as long as it keeps friendship stable or even more satisfactory, why not accept it?

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改好了，多交流~

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已改

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8.1 独立写作：

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Movies andtelevisions have more negative effects than positive effects on the way youngpeople behave.

Nowadays movies and televisions play an irreplaceable role in keeping up with the latest trend in the global environment. Every part of our life is somehow influencedby them. Despite the fact that media has a great power to expose the young to amore colorful and alluring world, I am inclined to the view that the negative effects of movies and televisions overweigh the positive ones.

    The foremost reason is that young people are probable to spend bulk of time on watching movies and televisions. This addiction, on the one hand, detrimentally harms their eyes for long-time watching, which easily leads to nearsightedness. On the other hand, the more time consumed on television or movie, the less time for them to concentrate on school work. Hardly can a student who indulges in television all day be devotedto his/her course work, for the reason that most of his time and energy is spent on entertainment through televisions or movies. I'd like to stress a survey carried out by an educational institution, which shows that eight out of ten students see a decrease in academic grade after they watch movies ortelevisions for more than 3 hours a day. For further thinking, if a boy addicts to movies and televisions, leaving study totally unattended, how could he take care of his career in the future? How could he well educate his children if they both watch televisions and movies all day?

   In addition, the programs on television,and the themes of movies, sometimes are related to violence and salacity. Young children, because of admiration or simply curiosity, may passionate on inimitating the characters in television or movie, including their immoral behavior of lying, cheating, or even fighting. If the character imitated is vicious or violent, if there is no proper guidance, it would undoubtedly contribute to negative effects on young people themselves, their friends, and even the community.Considering the miserable Aurora mass shooting happened on premiere of BatmanIII, the criminal declared himself as the antagonist of the movie. He already internally fell into the movie, and his virtue is also contaminated by the evil character. Such imitation is not just self-entertainment, but seriously becomes a threat to the community.

    Some people may hold the view that watching televisions and movies brings in knowledge, as well as relax oneself.Admittedly these are positive effects, but reading books can also expand knowledge, and taking exercise is as well a way for relaxation. As reading and sports are not harmful to our eyes, why don't we choose them? Therefore,positive effects of televisions and movies are obviously incomparable to the negative effects stated above.

   All in all, negative effects of televisions and movies leave deleterious impact on young people, especially the addiction and ill imitation, which more influential to them than positive effects. Moreover, we should pay more attention on controlling these negative effects and guide the young on correct way.

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7.31的……趴地……某这种小白有给大爪改作文的时候，学习了！TUT~PS,LZ的头像好可爱，我看了半天才发现是只俯视的羊
Friends are those who share both happiness and sorrows with us, give us support, and always well comprehend our feelings. Admittedly, trust lays foundation of true friendship. However, in my point of view, to be completely honest with friends is impossible.
To begin with, I'd like to distinguish incompletely honest with dishonest. Dishonest behavior, which reflects one's irresponsible and deceitful, undoubtedly kills friendship and seriously hurts friends. However, incompletely honest behavior, is not tricky or cheating, but sometimes even more sincere with hidden concerns about friends. It might be caused by well intentions to protect friends, or occurred in uncontrollable circumstance.这个区分真好！ 为了跟后面的内容照应，是不是加一个unconsciously to be not honest的情况？
For further explanation, just think about white lies. Sometimes people would like to choose not to be completely honest with your friend, considering the honest truth might hurt him or her. For example, my friend Jude kept on a diet for one month. When I saw her yesterday, she excitingly asked me whether she looked slimmer. Although she seemed no difference to me, for encouraging her and not letting her down, I said she became thinner. On hearing what I said, she became unexpectedly delighted and confident. As such lie doesn't break the bottom line of moral virtues, and leads to a more harmonious relationship, how could we refuse it? To be not completely honest, is not untrustworthy, sometimes it can be owing to protection and love.
Another reason is that some secrets have to be seriously hidden, even between friends. How could a manager share business secrets with his or her friends without considering the loss of whole company? How could a general talk about national defense secrets with friends, taking the risk of devastating the whole country’s security? Such secrets prevent us from being completely honest with friends, for they are not secrets only between friends, but closely related to more people, or even a country, which call on our responsibility.
这里是不是加一个过渡句啥的？这貌似又是一个论点“习惯性、无意地隐藏秘密”As the saying goes, "No person is without defects". Sometimes we are unconsciously to be not honest with friends, for the reason like we are habitually used to hide some part of life and do not like to share.
In a nutshell, it is impossible to be completely honest with friends, considering both social reality and human nature. As long as this kind of not completely honest behavior does not betray moral virtue, as long as it keeps friendship stable or even more satisfactory, why not accept it?

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8.2 独立：Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: the ability of adapting to new environment is more important than excellent knowledge
It is commonly believed that accumulating knowledge elevates one's insight and ability. However, I'd like to cast doubt on whether excellent knowledge is the foremost reason for success. From my point of view, the ability of adapting to new environment plays a more important role than excellent knowledge.

    In the first place, excellent knowledge does not always apply to practical life, under which circumstance ability of adaption is crucially important. For one thing, knowledge gained from school or books is sometimes obsolete, which cannot keep in pace with the variably updating world. For example, considering electronic industry, most college students majored in electronics master the use of BJT transistor, which commonly used in last century. However, what applied most in nowadays industry is not BJT transistor, but FET transistor. If a college student fails to adapt to new trend of industry and market, how can he/she manage to find a satisfactory job? For the other thing, some knowledge might not be workable in real practice. How could a teacher well manage a new class of naughty children, with only theory of education? How could a company quickly occupy a new market, with only theory of strategy? The teacher should devote to grasping the characters of these students in new class, and the company had better investigate the new market first. Both are typical procedures for adaptions in new environment, which are essential and extremely important.
   
    In addition, people, with ability of adapting to new environment, are more probably be recruited or promoted. According to a recently released research by an economic magazine, over 85 percent of companies’ boss and human resource managers prefer hiring new workers with great adapting ability. Excellent knowledge is what you have learned, which generally explicates your capability in the past. In comparison, ability of adaption not only displays your current knowledge, but also excavates your ability to learn new things, measure your potentiality, as well as shows your passion on challenge and self-promotion. Therefore, it is the ability of adaption that counts more than knowledge.


    All in all, ability of adapting to new environment overweighs excellent knowledge, considering both perspectives of practical work and employers. Thus, to develop ability of adapting motivates you to expose to new things, enlarge your knowledge, and benefit future improvement.

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唔，不好意思，改晚了……

8.1
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Movies and televisions have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Nowadays movies and televisions play an irreplaceable role in keeping up with the latest trend in the global environment. Every part of our life is somehow influenced by them. Despite the fact that media has a great power to expose the young to a more colorful and alluring world, I am inclined to the view that the negative effects of movies and televisions overweigh the positive ones.
The foremost reason is that young people are probable to spend bulk of time on watching movies and televisions. This addiction, on the one hand, detrimentally harms their eyes for long-time watching, which easily leads to nearsightedness. On the other hand(on one hand/on the other hand 貌似是用来表述两个对立面的？例如优点和缺点,这里用for one thing/ for another reason 之类的吧……俺也想不到更好的表述方法了QAQ), the more time consumed on television or movie, the less time for them to concentrate on school work. Hardly can a student who indulges in television all day be devoted to his/her course work, for the reason that most of his time and energy is spent on entertainment through televisions or movies. I'd like to stress a survey carried out by an educational institution, which shows that eight out of ten students see a decrease in academic grade after they watch movies or televisions for more than 3 hours a day. For further thinking, if a boy addicts to movies and televisions, leaving study totally unattended, how could he take care of his career in the future? How could he well educate his children if they both watch televisions and movies all day?
In addition, the programs on television, and the themes of movies, sometimes are related to violence and salacity. Young children, because of admiration or simply curiosity, may passionate on in imitating the characters in television or movie, including their immoral behavior of lying, cheating, or even fighting. If the character imitated is vicious or violent, if there is no proper guidance, it would undoubtedly contribute to negative effects on young people themselves, their friends, and even the community. Considering the miserable Aurora mass shooting happened on premiere of Bat manIII, the criminal declared himself as the antagonist of the movie. He already internally fell into the movie, and his virtue is also contaminated by the evil character. Such imitation is not just self-entertainment, but seriously becomes a threat to the community.（捧大脸~这个例子真好！）
Some people may hold the view that watching televisions and movies brings in knowledge, as well as relax oneself. Admittedly these are positive effects, but reading books can also expand knowledge, and taking exercise is as well a way for relaxation. As reading and sports are not harmful to our eyes, why don't we choose them? Therefore, positive effects of televisions and movies are obviously incomparable to the negative effects stated above.（貌似“看书和运动可以代替看电视”跟“看电视的坏处大于好处”没有因果诶，不如改成“Therefore the positive effects of televisions and movies can be reached by reading and sports. And accounting the huge negative effects of television and movies, even these replaceable positive effects is inconsiderable.”）
All in all, negative effects of televisions and movies leave deleterious impact on young people, especially the addiction and ill imitation, which more influential to them than positive effects. Moreover,（个人觉得后面这个跟前面应该是因果关系吧，换成So/therefore/as a result……之类的？） we should pay more attention on controlling these negative effects and guide the young on correct way.

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ZoeX 发表于 2012-8-2 21:45
唔，不好意思，改晚了……

8.1

哈哈，谢谢啦！

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8.3独立 ask help from a student or tutor student&tutor1.doc (29 KB, 下载次数: 16)

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8.2已改。

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不好意思，最近断网了，8.1的作文改好了晚上给你发过来。

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0801- lazysheep-revised by 夏洛克.doc (16.7 KB, 下载次数: 7)

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不好意思