lhm77499作业贴（10.20）

lhm77499UID: 3420601

只有梦想 发表于 2013-10-9 14:38
前辈您好！

T1

非常感谢！
t5我同意他的观点，当然30秒是一个上限，我觉得问题加人物的两种选择控制在30秒内，后面三十秒用来说自己的观点。
t6我听错了。应该是一个朋友drop by然后夫妻觉得很兴奋。感谢指出了这个错误.

DjocovicUID: 3414314

I have to admit that it has been twice that your advices are the best ever, even though there is some confusing part, which I would like to discuss later, it is still quite useful to notice the flaws. And I will provide my feedback, with some critics about your assignment all together.

About the task1, I quite agree with your idea that about the funny part of the language learning ability. But my question is, I have tried to cover the detail in the former item, and the time left is not allowed to provide more information about the second item. What’s more, I usually prepare two aspects about the topic and try my best to make the first specific, while the second one to fill the remaining time, so is that acceptable?
Move back to your work, I personally think there is minor problems about the pronunciation, such love, way. And another problem is I am not sure about the pace of your speech. It may sounds a little slow, but I can ensure that it is your comfortable zone, so just choose what you like.

About the task2, enhance the focus would be better?
And your work is perfect that I can hardly find out any flaws.

The task3, about the time ending, as far as I know that one second less is not a serious problem, but i will try to control it better next time.

For task 4, you mentioned about how to describe a process. May I can try this way next: at the very beginning…, and then when…., at last…
And you have covered all the key points in listening section, only one problem- too many Insist, frequently repeat in a short interval may leave a negative impression about your limited vocabulary.

The rest two tasks are seemingly perfect.

at last, I wonder if it is possible to invite you to crtitize my work everyday?  it may give some extra work, so if it is imconvenient, let me know, many thanks

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Djocovic 发表于 2013-10-10 21:31
I have to admit that it has been twice that your advices are the best ever, even though there is som ...

It is safe if you try to give details as much as possible while preparing a second point to fill the possible gap.
Well, as in my comment, help you focus on the lecture is a better choice.  For "focus" often refers to center or issue hotly disputed when used aas noun.
using link verbs is good way to show that you are describing process.  I often use this to organize my words as well.

As for the review, I am afraid that I could not come to put comments on your work everyday, as I will take the test in the coming weekend.  
Still, if you have questions, we could discuss together.  Remember we have become fans of each other?:lol

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lhm77499 发表于 2013-10-10 22:21
It is safe if you try to give details as much as possible while preparing a second point to fill t ...

yeap, so wish you the best in the coming weekend
a critical question I start to worry about the writing part, partly due to my 3.0 AW in the GRE, so what is your advice about it

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Djocovic 发表于 2013-10-10 22:32
yeap, so wish you the best in the coming weekend
a critical question I start to worry about the w ...

this is a very general question that I could not answer.  maybe practice will be of help to raise your score.

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10.11题目
Task 1 Why do you think it is hard for university student to manage time?
Task 2 Some people believe that students should attend field trips such as visiting a zoo, museum or park to learn knowledge. Other people believe that students should study in classrooms to learn knowledge. What is your opinion and why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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T1: pretty good reasons. but you need to be more specific.
T2: you waste too much time on stating your opinion. still, be more specific.
T3: email, not message. you should be very accurate in the first sentence. participate, not 'partic'.  you lose one point from both the news and conversation: students do check email every day. Usually there are two goals or two reasons. But this question is a little different. In this question, there's one goal (up-to-date news) and one reason to make sure it will work (students check email daily).

T4:  waste too much time in  definition. Most important, 'question her' not 'told her'. It seems to be a small problem, but it's a key point of the example.

T5: 'lines', not 'lies', totally different!

T6: the volume becomes lower and lower. I can barely hear it at the end. Your second point is not clear.

You don't have much problem with pronunciation. You have the chance to get high scores. Read crazyrobin's suggestions carefully and follow the rules.

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xueyicathy 发表于 2013-10-11 10:57
T1: pretty good reasons. but you need to be more specific.
T2: you waste too much time on stating y ...

Thank you!
I have to relisten TPO21.  I have to pay more attention to my pronunciation and my voice.

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lhm77499 发表于 2013-10-11 08:12
10.11题目
Task 1 Why do you think it is hard for university student to manage time?
Task 2 Some  ...

task 1 : is lacking ... ---> lack
task 2: 前面好顺畅
task 3  每个点都涉及到了。赞 ~、
task 4-task 6 内容都没有问题啊，什么时候我能像lz一样记得这么多detail就好了。lz的练习可能是以流利为目标吧

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gyygtt 发表于 2013-10-12 02:34
task 1 : is lacking ... ---> lack
task 2: 前面好顺畅
task 3  每个点都涉及到了。赞 ~、

谢谢。
你在米国吗？回复的时间

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lhm77499 发表于 2013-10-12 07:30
谢谢。
你在米国吗？回复的时间

额~没有没有。误会了。最近比较混乱。所以都会折腾到很晚。

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10.12题目         
Task 1 Which would you choose to be your future career: a university professor, an environmental expert, or a businessman?
Task 2 Some students prefer to study or work on difficult class assignments early in the morning. Other students prefer to do this type of work in the evening. Which do you prefer and why?
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10.13题目
Task 1 Which do you think is the biggest challenge that new university students face: being away from family, having no time to relax or making new friends? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer.
Task 2 Some people prefer to write diaries or take photos to records things they've experienced. Other's don't. What is your opinion and why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your response.
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10.14题目
Task 1 What kind of clothing do you usually wear and why. Please include specific examples and details in your explanation.
Task 2 Do you agree or disagree with this statement: Yong people today know more about world events than their parents did before.
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lhm77499 发表于 2013-10-13 09:01
10.13题目
Task 1 Which do you think is the biggest challenge that new university students face: b ...

第一次点评别人的作业，如有不周请包涵……
T1：逻辑非常好，语速虽然不快但是内容比较充实。一些缺点是
are has been ?? 不知道是不是这个意思？我觉得楼主有点可以追求时态的复杂吧，直接用is就好了吧……
小的时态问题：when I first enter(ed)...

T2:这个内容就不如T1充实了，按照ben神的观点，是否也应该举一个例子？况且题目中提到了examples?

T3:choir发错音了吧，campus没有儿化
as well as 用的是否有点滥了，而且可能不太合适，因为它重点强调前面一项，而你在最后一句里面重点强调后面一项，and even就可以了吧。

T4:这个语速比前几个快了点，我觉得最大的问题是最后没有点明这个例子和Relict Behavior 之间的关系，听完之后觉得少点什么。

T5：这个超赞，比我说的好多了就是最后那个although之后有个停顿有点不自然。

T6：the other.... are(is)
第一个句子好长啊，听到最后都没气了，是否可以稍微断一下句呢？