雅思作文太差了，准备重考。今天练习写一篇，请指教。

guozaiUID: 33200

Topic: There are many different tyes of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays? (At least 250 words)

The reason why we need music is that music is a way to express feelings that are held in heart without expressing in any other means. It is my way to expose myself and to reduce pressure from work and life.

For the second question, I agree that the traditional music is important. However, ther is no sign showing that the traditional music is more important than the International music that is spreading around the planet.

As I said, music is a means of expressing your feeling against everyday life. Tranditional music, as I consider, expresses the feeling against traditional life. Nowadays, we are living in a situation much more different and quicker than the traditional life, which involves more international matters. I can hardly express my feelings and reduce pressure through listening to the traditional music. On the other hand, when listening to the International music, I feel relaxed and my feeling is expressed because it has the element that reflects the crowded and busy modern life. For example, when listening to Air-Supply's "All out of love", I feel that I feel the same though we are from different nations. International music is important because our culture and soul have been modernized. We must face new problems and live new life different from our ancestors.

Internationl music helps me to have new friends worldwide. I am working in Microsoft with people from United States, India, Italy, and Japan. So, having something morein common to talk about is always a good idea.

From the above two points, I come to the conclusion that the International music is more important than the traditional music.

huangjin_suzhouUID: 37183

Overall logic is all right I think except some small words,such as verbs and preps

guozaiUID: 33200

Oh, thanks! These things are difficult to be improved in a short period of time:( Still thank you.