5T互助小组 第一组 专用贴

stephanie_sisuUID: 201114

AceLee mm滴作文不错呀
从语言运用上来看没有大问题，几处小的语法错误自己再回顾一下就可以改好了
结构来说topic sentence-supporting evidence也比较清楚

LizKwanUID: 2150199

Many people have a close relationship with their pets. These people treat their birds, cats, or other animals as members of their family. In your opinion ,are such relationship good? Why or why not?

Basic to any understanding of the important qualities of a person is whether he or she has a kind heart to pets. Whether a person has a kind heart could be seen from his or her attitude towards pets.Nowadays, the rapid increase of pets, which are the friends of human beings, has play a larger role in our daily life.这句话表达的不好.  Such a relationship is universally acclaimed.
There are circumstances that the price of feeding pets is large and time spend on walking, bathing and entertainment can be a lot. It is at least partly if not wholly the reason for a family not to raise pets feeding no pets. Experts from CMCO (Chinese Media and Communication Organization) with great anxiety移到that后 pointed out that, the number of people who have been infected with diseases from pets in China this year doubled compared with last year.
From my point of view, one of the main reasons why it is common for some people treat their birds, cats, or other animals as members of their family might be that they could add color to the dull routine of everyday life. These animals invariably capture people’s love. No matter one is single or not ,it is much better to see pets than just look at a bare room after people comes back from work. .As it is revealed in the 2-year research conducted by the Department of Sociology in Princeton University ,those who treat their pets as family members are happier and have a more colorful life. From my perspective ,people behave quite different when they can not change the circumstance of loneliness and to begin to treat their pets as family members.
Despite these obvious benefits ,there are another good reason for treating animal as a friend in the family that pets can help us when we are in danger. It can be shown by the following example . In May ,1996,inSan Francisco, a house caught fire and the puppy of a resident in the flat barked in alarm. He barked till he woke the whole household and saved everyone from harm.
All in all, taking care of pets is both hailed and reviled, pets never do the least harm to us or our belongings .还是结构问题Therefore, such relationships could be valuable to our health.

AceLeeMM,鉴于你还是高中阶段,我不提倡你用非常复杂的句式.而且T作文事实上也不需要这种复杂的长句子.真正的好文章从来都是长短相间,能用一个词就不用一个句来表达.
不过必须承认的是MM在英文方面潜力很大,比偶高中时候强太多料~~~:L
期待你的下一篇作文.:D

hynixiaUID: 2147629

Many people have a close relationship with their pets. These people treat their birds, cats, or other animals as members of their family. In your opinion, are such relationships good? Why or why not?

Basic to any understanding of the important qualities of a person is whether he or she has a kind heart to pets.(what do u mean by “basic” here? BTW, this kind of inversion seems quite weird, though this style is grammatically right) Nowadays, the rapid increase of pets(increase of possession), which(confusing, pets or increase?) are the friends of human beings, has(notice the logic subject) play(played) a larger(...) role in our daily life.  Such a relationship is universally acclaimed.

There are circumstances that the price(better “cost”) of feeding pets is large and (the)time spend on walking(with them), bathing and entertainment(cannot parallel) can be a lot. It is at least partly if not wholly the reason for a family feeding no pets(not feeding a pet). Experts from CMCO (Chinese Media and Communication Organization) with great anxiety, pointed out that, the number of people who (are) infected with diseases from pets in China this year doubled compared with (the number of, that of )last year.

From my point of view, one of the main reasons why it is common for some people (to) treat their birds, cats, or other animals as members of their family might be that they could add color (?) to the dull routine of everyday life. (a good sentence)These animals invariably capture people’s love. No matter one is single or not, it is much better to see pets than just look at a bare room after people comes(come) back from work. As is revealed in the 2-year research conducted by the Department of Sociology in Princeton University,those who treat their pets as family members are happier and have a more colorful life.(some traces of AW???) From my perspective ,people behave quite different(adv) when they can not change the circumstance of loneliness and to? begin to treat their pets as family members.

Despite (In addition to, better not use concession here)these obvious benefits, there are(is) another good reason for treating animal as a friend in the family that(--) pets can help us when we are in danger. It can be shown by the following example. In May ,1996,  San Francisco, a house caught fire and the puppy of a resident in the flat barked in alarm. He barked till he woke the whole household and (thus) saved everyone from harm(better change a word here).

All in all, taking care of pets is both hailed and reviled,(these are two sentences, so you have to add a conj. Such as AND) pets never do the least harm to us or our belongings (you mean, they do harm to us?) .Therefore, such relationships could be valuable to our health.  

My comments:
In general, considering that you are still a high school student, this essay is almost perfect. For example, the structure is clear and you ideas are well articulated. Besides, the illustrations you employed in you article are really cogent and compelling. Nevertheless, small errors, which are all annotated above and are not vital, hopefully, exist.
(*O*的确不错的一文hehehaha)

[ 本帖最后由 hynixia 于 2006-4-20 23:21 编辑 ]

assura1985UID: 2135004

组长我是没有编组的,也想问你个问题.
我做阅读的时候错的题很多都能够找到准确定位,但还是选错了.比如0001第一篇的题中讲费城怎么是怎么发展起来的.其中有一道题是问new markets opened in Philadelphia because?
定位我就跟答案定的一样,是在文中举出了很多markets都已经开了,可是我的选择就是
they provided more modern facilities than older markets.
而答案是existing markets were unable to serve the growing population.
可他文中根本就没有说不能满足人口增长的需要么?

类似的这种情况还有很多.已经成为我做阅读的一个障碍了。大家说我应该怎么办？

还有听力，以前都是听过的题重新再听，所以做的还挺好，因为脑袋里有记忆了么。可是前天拿了一套新题，从来没有做过的，错了14个，所以我就觉得是不是听力水平还是没有真正的提高，以前的都是因为记住题了所以做对了。可现在还有20天了，我还有听力提高的余地么？对待以前做过的题，脑子里有印象的我应该怎么处理啊?

LizKwanUID: 2150199

原帖由 hynixia 于 2006-4-20 23:19 发表
Many people have a close relationship with their pets. These people treat their birds, cats, or other animals as members of their family. In your opinion, are such relationships good? Why or why no ...

修改的时候用不同颜色再标注一下就更好了.:)

approachUID: 2101189

好长时间没说话了..来这里吱个声儿,最近有点烦..MP3崩溃了,也不知道为什么坏的,结果导致00年到05年的题还一套没听呢...
好不容易写了个作文,结果发现WORD还没安呢,下了一个晚上都没下到.
希望明天这两件事情都可以变正常了.
每天一套题仍在继续.阅读5个左右,语法4个左右.
五一快到了,学校串休来串休去,结果算了一下,从25号休到7号.真猛,大家开始疯狂报旅行社去旅游.同寝的人报了个我家那边的团,那边有个为期6个月的世界性活动.结果,结束那天正好是G的考试日期.自己想想,留在这个还在下雪的气温一直在零度左右徘徊的城市里学T吧,那个春暖花开的家不晓得要什么时候才能回去...

hynixiaUID: 2147629

不好意思，我是用word改的，没有用frontpage所以没加html标签（我不想用寄托自带的编辑器，太麻烦。）

还有，我觉的我们组讨论的力度还不是很够，我本来时间就少，可还是经常来此逛逛，但看到好几天才几个贴，我又发现我才是真的“ 水手 ”了！！？！！



to assura1985 ：
其实还是应该留一些没听过的当模考，先听一遍再做题没什么效果的，比如，由于时间紧，我一开始就是当模考用的，一般错10个，而就在今天，我做0105时，由于昨天随意听了一边，受了点影响，只错了5个，估计不是能力强了，而是预先的一些东西让你听得时候是有目的听了，这样，就没啥效果了。。。（抱歉，思维有点乱，这些日子忙着期中的一堆东西）
你还是在找点别的听听，或是背背原来听的，把原来的那些听抄下来
只是个人意见，希望有用


to all
我发现了一个比较好的播放器，KMPlayer，可以调速的，大家不妨把mp3速度调快来听
我觉得这样会有本质上的提高。我是一般调到大概1.3倍，可以用来听听过的。



to …ΑСЕ…
加油，你小子一定有出息的，我相信你
还有，有什么问题千万别犹豫，发出来问，一定有人答的（在本组，或直接在版上发）


下来是我的问题
1。0110的题是不是有点简单啊？？？for listening8grammar0reading2-me（我前几 套一直reading都是7、8个的）
2。哪位组长好心，发个比较权威的答案，00-05的，谢谢了
3。只做00-05的题够不够啊，要不要做下00之前的阅读，听力（听说比较简单，但比较有借鉴价值）？？

多谢了

（bear in mind, we are pursuing mutual benefits. I love to share, and wish others too.）

[ 本帖最后由 hynixia 于 2006-4-21 23:44 编辑 ]

LizKwanUID: 2150199

原帖由 approach 于 2006-4-21 22:55 发表
好长时间没说话了..来这里吱个声儿,最近有点烦..MP3崩溃了,也不知道为什么坏的,结果导致00年到05年的题还一套没听呢...
好不容易写了个作文,结果发现WORD还没安呢,下了一个晚上都没下到.
希望明天这两件事情都可 ...

嗯呀,小毛病不要放在心上.好好利用假期时间休息,但也不要放松对T的复习.
希望MM有个愉快心情.:D

LizKwanUID: 2150199

原帖由 hynixia 于 2006-4-21 23:36 发表
不好意思，我是用word改的，没有用frontpage所以没加html标签（我不想用寄托自带的编辑器，太麻烦。）

还有，我觉的我们组讨论的力度还不是很够，我本来时间就少，可还是经常来此逛逛，但看到好几天才几个贴， ...

嗯,要有问题才上来问.纯粹水贴对复习T没有帮助.
另外,关于X年X月具体题目要看其他组长或组员能不能帮你.我手头没有T的真题了,G倒是一大把.:p

mxggUID: 2111875

原帖由 assura1985 于 2006-4-21 08:00 发表
组长我是没有编组的,也想问你个问题.
我做阅读的时候错的题很多都能够找到准确定位,但还是选错了.比如0001第一篇的题中讲费城怎么是怎么发展起来的.其中有一道题是问new markets opened in Philadelphia because ...

1.对于阅读:注意两点,一是是否真的定位准确,二是是否理解正确.
2.对于听力:对于听过的一定会有印象的,这个是难免的,对于听过的要提高要求的水平,达到听到上句能说下句,答案都能说出来,对没有听过的,要加强对错题目的认真剖析,新的短语的记忆,在20天内提高真正提高听力不太可能,但是提高成绩还是可能的,你要加强对题目规律性的总结.

mxggUID: 2111875

原帖由 approach 于 2006-4-21 22:55 发表
好长时间没说话了..来这里吱个声儿,最近有点烦..MP3崩溃了,也不知道为什么坏的,结果导致00年到05年的题还一套没听呢...
好不容易写了个作文,结果发现WORD还没安呢,下了一个晚上都没下到.
希望明天这两件事情都可 ...

希望一切变的好.

其实挺好的，大家都走了,一个人静静的学习.加油

mxggUID: 2111875

原帖由 hynixia 于 2006-4-21 23:36 发表
不好意思，我是用word改的，没有用frontpage所以没加html标签（我不想用寄托自带的编辑器，太麻烦。）

还有，我觉的我们组讨论的力度还不是很够，我本来时间就少，可还是经常来此逛逛，但看到好几天才几个贴， ...

恩，那套题目还可以的说,
寄托的答案总体上来说,准确性是可以的.
00之后的题目其实已经够了,之前的较为简单一些对于阅读方面.

KMPLAYER,OK,下来用一下.THANKS

approachUID: 2101189

事情有点不顺利,但是一定要一直坚持走下去.我们一组的人好象都没什么声音了哈?送大家一句话,以前忘记在哪里看到的了,一直挺激励我的~
"坚持...当你达到后回望起点,也许不过是一米的距离,走过了就可以拥抱天地"

汇报一下自己的进程,MP3的事情弄好了,今天做了套0205的,听力4个，语法6个,阅读两个.还是语法烂死了,改进方式是准备明天把95到99的语法错的都再看一遍,对容易错的地方提高敏感度.
目前准备做个工作就是把阅读里的题目答案在原文的哪里都标记出来,看看是不是出题点附近会有什么明显特征什么的,这样考试读文章时候觉得是要出题了就去问题哪里看看.感觉这样不会是在被牵着走吧~~体会一下出题人的心理~
听力要狂听了,这次有点冒险了， 今天才开始弄听力.

作文打印了好多资料,准备把里面的优秀句型弄出来,然后拼个自己的摸版.还有仔细看看题库,能用同一个例子的就用同一个例子,提前写写那些话题.
恩,下面帖个同主题第三期.

最后,感谢一个偶GG,当机立断又给我买了个MP3救急.拿到时候真的很感动.

topic
How do movies or television influence people's behavior? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.



From the topics people talked about at tea time, from the dresses people wear on from the movie stars, from the wild knowledge people learn from the TV and movies, we can recognize the fact that TV and movies are playing an increasingly important role in influencing people's behavior. There are numerous reasons witness my standpoint and here I would only explore a few of the most significant ones.
First of all, the reason can be presented to develop my point is that movies and series become the topics people talked about which can be an emotional tie among peoples. For example, two weeks ago, I come across a new friend and we did not talk much until we found that we all have a crush on the playing TV series "LOST". By discussing what will be on in the following play, we became close friends. Thanks to the TV play we both have enthusiasm in, I make one more friend in my life who can share my happiness and sadness.
In the second place, another persuasive reason is that a large part of one's knowledge is learned from what one saw in TV programs. With the information we acquire from TV, we can catch up what is going on in the outside unlimited world in our limited personal room. Take myself for instance, from my childhood till now, I have been watching the TV program which called "DISCOVERY". Only by this can I know that the outside world is so colorful that I can not even imagine. Much of what I know about the amazing world is benefit from TV. There are no better examples than this one to demonstrate my view more clearly.
In addition, the influence of the TV or movies  can be seen by everyone from what people dress themselves followed by the movie stars in a recently  dominate movie. What is more, not only does it lead the way one dress, but also it affects the way people speak. No surprise that young people will imitate the way of the superman speaks to show as if he is another superman when facing his friends.
Taking into account all these factors discussed above, which sometimes intertwine to form an organic whole and thus become more persuasive. We can comfortably reach the conclusion that TV and movies do influence people's lives to a large extent.

思路
1.电影电视的内容可以成为人和人之间的共同话题以促进感情交流.
2.电影电视明星的穿着是大众跟风的潮流.
3.电影电视扩展人们的知识面.

问题
1.最近学到一种方法比较讨好的是"排比",于是想在开头弄个排比,弄得不太成功.
2.BODY中,第一段写FIRST OF ALL,第二段能用IN THE SECOND PLACE吗?这两个对应吗?
第三段中IN ADDITION衔接的对吗?

[ 本帖最后由 approach 于 2006-4-23 03:19 编辑 ]

hynixiaUID: 2147629

to approach
我是觉得语法其实很简单，主要是看懂句子的结构，谓语和连词的组合以及很少词的用法，看看一些专项的语法资料可能有用。

你的听力怎么练得啊？？怎么才能错到5个以下？？阅读是不是越多做题越有感觉？？？

谢谢approach呵呵

susan8940UID: 160449

看完了，用词还是相当丰富阿，句子、结构也没得说。
不过主题有点偏吧，topic是<how> to influence,
你写的是不是<what> influence they give?

我的，请楼主指教 :)
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... &extra=page%3D1

[ 本帖最后由 susan8940 于 2006-4-23 13:12 编辑 ]