第二三四五六七期同主题写作欢迎拍砖,有拍必回!

u571UID: 2175894

你是照笑来的提纲写的吗？还是参照的范文？
我总觉得笑来的文章思路有点中文化

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原帖由 u571 于 2006-4-29 20:18 发表
你是照笑来的提纲写的吗？还是参照的范文？
我总觉得笑来的文章思路有点中文化

没有啊，什么是思路中文化？  如果要克服这个不足的话在哪方面改动？

u571UID: 2175894

there is very good essay on taisha ,by leoyy, about twe ,esp how to avoid chinglish and 八股风

maybe it is on the top

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Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Internet plays a more and more significant role in people’s lives, primarily because it provides people with lots of information, both valuable and harmful. People have different opinions on whether access to so much information creats problems or benefits, to my standpoint, it depends on distinct situations.

On one hand, it is Internet that offers people numerous opportunities to get a variety of valuable information, which is beneficial a lot. For example, professiors have to surf on net every day to catch the latest knowledge and technology in certain fields of their researches. Because scientific reasearch is more likely to be a teamwork, a professor’s topic may be based on some foreign coworker’s outcome, for that matter, he/she will never be able to do the job without searching for other’s thesis on Internet. Although there are many ways besides to achieve the goal, Internet, admittedly, is the most efficient way by which the professor’s efficiency can be largely increased. Similarly, Internet serves to advance quality and efficiency in people’s work, study, entertainment, and daily affairs, which is really a good thing for people.

On the other hand, there are several harmful information contained in Internet, which may terribly affect people’s behaviors. Take e-book for example, there are countless novels shown in Internet, including adventure tales. With reading too many such tales, teenagers may be fascinated in the descriptions. As a consequence, they will fail in study. Worse still, they are eager to imitate those harmful actions in reality and enjoy the process, which is really harmful not only to themselves, but also to the whole society.

Take all above into account, I believe whether information in Internet is good or bad depends on people’s attitude and capability of identification. When we meet some valuable information, we should try our best to make use of it. However, when we realize that some information is really useless or even harmful, we have to immediately cancel it from our minds. This is not an easy task, which will need adults’ and experts’ directions as well as the efforts of the whole society.

u571UID: 2175894

Internet plays a more and more significant role in people’s lives, primarily because it provides people with lots of information, both valuable and harmful. People have different opinions on whether accessing to so much information creats problems or benefits, ..to my standpoint, it depends on distinct situations.

On one hand(i am not so sure about this expression....), it is Internet that offers people numerous opportunities to get a variety of valuable information, which is beneficial a lot(i think "a lot"can not be post modified like this ^_^). For example, professiors have to surf on net every day to catch the latest knowledge and technology in certain fields of their researches. Because scientific reasearch is more likely to be a teamwork, a professor’s topic may be based on some foreign coworker’s outcome, for that matter, he/she will never be able to do the job without searching for other’s thesis on Internet. Although there are many ways besides to achieve the goal, Internet, admittedly(admittedly,   i only use it in presenting an argument that i oppose ^_^), is the most efficient way by which the professor’s efficiency can be largely increased. Similarly, Internet serves to advance quality and efficiency in people’s work, study, entertainment, and daily affairs, which is really a good thing for people
if i have used the example of the professor's coworking, i would cut down some statement sentences)

on the other hand, there are several(information uncountable! harmful information contained in Internet, which may terribly affect people’s behaviors. Take e-book-s or books,^_^ for example, there are countless novels shown in Internet, including adventure tales. With reading too many such tales, teenagers may be fascinated in the descriptions. As a consequence, they will fail in study. (i do not think the cause-result relation is so obvious,maybe another case is better^_^Worse still, they are eager to imitate those harmful actions in reality and enjoy the process, which is really harmful not only to themselves, but also to the whole society.

Take all above into account, I believe whether information in Internet is good or bad depends on people’s attitude and capability of identification. When we meet some valuable information, we should try our best to make use of it. However, when we realize that some information is really useless or even harmful, we have to immediately cancel it from our minds. This is not an easy task, which will need adults’ and experts’ directions as well as the efforts of the whole society

末段很好！例子用的也不错！！

我一般到末段时就写不下去了。
主要是因为没时间了^_^
我的文章。。出了点问题，有点跑题了吧。。
我没看全题目，只瞄了一眼是INTERNET就开写了，结果。。。。
我发上来，你看看吧，希望大家别犯我这样的错误！！

u571UID: 2175894

https://bbs.gter.net/viewthre ... page%3D4&page=1
up!!

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It has recently been announced that a new high school may be built in your community. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details in your answer.

So far, there is not a high school near my community. If a new one will be built in the community, I will fully support this event. There are three main reasons as follows.

First and formost, building a high school in the community will make it safer and easier for children to go to school. Nowadays, it will take approximately half an hour for teenagers to ride to the nearest high school. In order to avoid being late, some students ride pretty fast, which is possible to cause an accident, since the traffic is usually so crowded. If a high school is built near our community, however, children will be able to walk to school in about ten minutes, which is considerably safer. Additionally, they don’t need to get up rather early every morning to rush to school, which will enable them with better sleep and more enegy to study.

Further more, a new high school will improve the atmosphere of the community. When the school has been built, several stores wil be in need simultaneously, such as book stores, stationery shops and so forth. These stores wil provide people with much more opportunities to read books and absorb latest knowledge. In this way, people’s diathesis will be largely improved, which will benefit the whole community.

Last but not least, a new high school means more enpolyment and will stimulate the development of the community. Once the high school has been built, a large amount of people are need to work in the school, for example, teachers, cleaners, and so on. Many unemploied people will have chances to get jobs. What’s more, people in other community or city, who have specific skills or knowledge, may be attracted here, which will increase the population of the community and make it more flourishing.

Admittedly, some problems will be raised at the same time, for example, a lot of noise will be made during the process of building the school. But the advantages argued above obviously overweigh the disadvantages. So i fully support the building of the high school in the community.
感觉写的很普通，今天没什么心情写。给点建议吧，不擅长写这类文章。
明天再加油！

u571UID: 2175894

其实我觉得这类文章最容易了,不费脑力想论点.
AGREE就极力写它怎么好，DIS 就使劲写它不好，2个或3个BODY，然后最后一段再添点相反的论述，显得你的思维严谨。。。
我最不喜欢的是自由举例的。。。。
奋斗ON TOPIC75 ING

u571UID: 2175894

改完拉，
今晚写同主题，明早争取再来一篇！！！
加油！！12days count down!!!!

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原帖由 susan8940 于 2006-4-28 11:49 发表
Neighbors are the people who live near us. In your opinion, what are the qualities of a good neighbor? Use specific details and examples in your answer.

The importance of a good neighbor  ...

刚刚上来，收到楼主的短信，所以过来看看
一些拙见，希望能对楼主有些用处：）

首先是关键词的选择
kindness不用说，responsibility作为第二论述段的中心有一点。。怎么说呢，第一个例子当然是很确切的啦，不过第二个就有点，比较不恰当
然后是friendly，确切地说也许是affability吧，虽然是近义词还是有差别的

然后是举例，我认为与其对一个例子做很多描写，不如多举些例子
比如kindness，因为我在我的文里也写了这一点拉，当时举了些，比如说给个顺路的ride，下雨了借一下伞，生病了照看一下，当然有一个跟你一样的小孩一个人的时候
比如responsibility，除了看见小偷以外，还有很多可以写啊，比如说闻到煤气漏的味道，看到花盆放得很危险

夜一UID: 2130338

原帖由 susan8940 于 2006-4-28 11:49 发表
Neighbors are the people who live near us. In your opinion, what are the qualities of a good neighbor? Use specific details and examples in your answer.

The importance of a good neighbor  ...

刚刚上来，收到楼主的短信，所以过来看看
一些拙见，希望能对楼主有些用处：）

首先是关键词的选择
kindness不用说，responsibility作为第二论述段的中心有一点。。怎么说呢，第一个例子当然是很确切的啦，不过第二个就有点，比较不恰当
然后是friendly，确切地说也许是affability吧，虽然是近义词还是有差别的

然后是举例，我认为与其对一个例子做很多描写，不如多举些例子
比如kindness，因为我在我的文里也写了这一点拉，当时举了些，比如说给个顺路的ride，下雨了借一下伞，生病了照看一下，当然有一个跟你一样的小孩一个人的时候
比如responsibility，除了看见小偷以外，还有很多可以写啊，比如说闻到煤气漏的味道，看到花盆放得很危险

夜一UID: 2130338

原帖由 susan8940 于 2006-4-28 11:49 发表
Neighbors are the people who live near us. In your opinion, what are the qualities of a good neighbor? Use specific details and examples in your answer.

The importance of a good neighbor  ...

刚刚上来，收到楼主的短信，所以过来看看
一些拙见，希望能对楼主有些用处：）

首先是关键词的选择
kindness不用说，responsibility作为第二论述段的中心有一点。。怎么说呢，第一个例子当然是很确切的啦，不过第二个就有点，比较不恰当
然后是friendly，确切地说也许是affability吧，虽然是近义词还是有差别的

然后是举例，我认为与其对一个例子做很多描写，不如多举些例子
比如kindness，因为我在我的文里也写了这一点拉，当时举了些，比如说给个顺路的ride，下雨了借一下伞，生病了照看一下，当然有一个跟你一样的小孩一个人的时候
比如responsibility，除了看见小偷以外，还有很多可以写啊，比如说闻到煤气漏的味道，看到花盆放得很危险

夜一UID: 2130338

我汗。。发贴的时候告诉我出错要重发，结果就发成三贴一样的了。。

susan8940UID: 160449

Some people believe that students should be given one long vacation each year. Others believe that students should have several short vacations throughout the year. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.

Vacations play an important role in students’ lives. When it comes to what kind of vacation should be given to students, some people believe that there ought to be one long vacation every year, whereas others argue that students should be given several short vacations throughout the year. As far as I am concerned, the latter viewpoint will be better. There are two main reasons supporting my standpoint.

First of all, students will be able to modify themselves better when given several short vacations each year. Students all experience such situation, that is, when having many months’ study, their minds seem to become a little rusty and can hardly be put in any more knowledge. At this time, a short vacation will release them from study load, and provide them with something relax, such as traveling, movie watching, and the like. Therefore, it is really necessary. After having such kind of rest, students will be more energic in learning when they come back to school, which will improve their efficiency in study.

Besides, shorter vacations are better for students to master the subject they learn. If given a long vacation each year, students may easily forget what they have learnt last semester, which is a block for their further study. For example, a friend of mine got sick when junior and had to leave school for an operation, which lasted three months. After she came back to class, hardly could she catch up with the professor. She had to review what was taught several months ago, and it largely decreased her efficiency and turned out to be an overload. However, these will never happen when vacations are shorter.

Although one long vacation may enable students with longer beneficial programs, like field trips, traveling to comparably more distant places, and so forth. I maintain that several short vacations will benefit students more, because they prepare students better with further study and offer them appropriate relaxation.

三十分钟。不过是用电脑打的，不知手写怎么样。