第二三四五六七期同主题写作欢迎拍砖,有拍必回!

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先提一个问题，modify themselves better是什么意思？不好意思没有见过这样的用法，所以搞不清楼住的确切含义
第二段的be put in，感觉怪怪的，absorb是不是好一些？
relax有形容词的用法么？我认为没有
我最近也很头疼这种事，有时候写出来自己也觉得意义不明确

论述虽然不能说很精彩，但是楼主能用30分钟写完这样的文已经很了不起了，至少对于我来说

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Vacations play an important role in students’ lives. When it comes to what kind of vacation should be given to students,maybe how vacaions should be given some people believe that there ought to be one long vacation every year, whereas others argue that students should be given several short vacations throughout the year. As far as I am concerned, the latter viewpoint will be better. There are two main reasons supporting my standpoint.

First of all, students will be able to modify themselves better when given several short vacations each year.???confused Students all experience such situation, that is, when having many months’ study, their minds seem to become a little rusty and can hardly be put in any more knowledge. At this time, a short vacation will release them from study load, and provide them with something relax(verb), such as traveling, movie watching, and the like. Therefore, it is really necessary(blah blah blah ..the more datails the better. After having such kind of rest, students will be more energic in learning when they come back to school, which will improve their efficiency in study.

Besides, shorter vacations are better for students to master the subject they learn. If given a long vacation each year, students may easily forget what they have learnt last semester, which is a block for their further study. For example, a friend of mine got sick when ()junior and had to leave school for an operation, which lasted three months. After she came back to class, hardly could she catch up with the professor. She had to review what was taught several months ago, and it largely decreased her efficiency and turned out to be an overload. However, these will never happen when vacations are shorter. (better an example of vacation , not a unforeseen incident , i think)

Although one long vacation may enable students with longer beneficial programs, like field trips, traveling to comparably more distant places, and so forth. I maintain that several short vacations will benefit students more, because they prepare students better with further study and offer them appropriate relaxation. better chang the order of the last setence)

挺好的!!  例子换些更具说服力的就更好了.

zhenzhen_163UID: 196150

我不敢再给你们打分了，我用的是iBT的标准，差点害Lanccy去跳楼！   ;P

Susan，在你往下看之前，你必须发誓不论如何，不寻短，否则你不许看。  ;P

People may experience a variety of changes during their transition from a child to an adult. However, there’re three events (common processes. Note: events are generally short-lived; something that happened. Processes generally last for a period of time.) that almost all the people share during this period, namely, establishing one’s sense of responsibility, obtaining (developing) the ability to support oneself, and acquiring the custom (custom is wrong, an error caused by translating Chinese—Chinglish. Perhaps you can say acquiring the habit of thinking independently) to think independently.|留学|签证|TOEFL|GRE E c5W5I
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        Firstly (you would not hear Americans say firstly, they say first, second and third), I believe it is the sense of responsibility that tells children and adults apart (separates children and adults). For example, when we were fed by our parents as children (when we were little), we ate what they cooked, wore clothes they bought us, spent money they earned. Everything seemed normal, because we took it as a matter of course (took everything for granted). When we’ve grown up, however, we’re aware of our responsibility to support our parents when they get old. Only when a young boy/girl (person) realizes what his/her (their. Note: “his/her” is not wrong but I like “their” better) responsibilities are can they (Note: Here the use of “they” to refer to a neutral person, not male, nor female, but neutral, is acceptable)  get the access to the adult world. (I am going to stop here. I have made some little changes to your sentences. These are not the most important thing an ETS rater would look at. Although they would notice your errors at a glance and know what level, in terms of your language abilities, you are at. But don’t forget they are also examining how you develop the topic and how good your supporting arguments are. You are so Chinese—so family-oriented, I mean. When a Westerner thinks about responsibilities, they mean a lot of things. How about responsibilities to the environment; to people around you, your friends and coworkers; to your community, etc? Well, you did a nice job. Keep writing and good luck on your exam.)

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我也觉得put in 感觉挺怪~~~

第二理由段的例子最后一句话However, these will never happen when vacations are shorter. 前面是生病，后面是假期，建议多说一句话比较两者的联系，否则感觉不连贯

susan作文都是打得吗？建议现在要开始手写了。当然如果你手写大牛拼写什么的都没问题就当我没说

susan8940UID: 160449

Is it more important to be able to work with a group of people in a team or to work independently? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.

Somebody argue that it is more significant to be able to work with a team, whereas others oppose this viewpoint, believing that working independently is more important. As far as I am concerned, the former standpoint is more believable.

First and foremost, teamwork is the requisite of most projects in the modern world. Take doing operations for example, not only one doctor, but also several assistants and nurses are needed. In such case, whether they can work together well means the difference between life and death. Similarly, there are several departments in a company, each in charge of certain fields of the company, such as manufacture, marketing, financial affairs, and so forth. Only when departments get along well with each other, and people in the same department own the capability to work with others in the team can the company run well. So people’s capacity to work with a group is really significant for the projects and institutions they work for.

Additionally, whether people can work well with a group of people in a team decides whether they can succeed in career. Just like arguing above, in most cases, people can hardly do their job well without cooperation with others. On the other hand, once they are able to cope with coworkers well, they are more likely to finish tasks better. As a result, they can gain more appriciation from their boss and more opportunities to get a higher salary and to be promoted.

Admittedly, capability to work independently is also quite important, especially for those writters, salesmen, and so on. Because they have to work alone mostly. However, for most people who work in a team, it is more significant to be able to work well with a group of people .

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susan你也太强了，2 papers per day?

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原帖由 susan8940 于 2006-5-2 20:47 发表
第六期

Some people believe that students should be given one long vacation each year. Others believe that students should have several short vacations throughout the year. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your cho

Vacations play an important role in students’ lives（such as建议举些例子，在哪些方面比较重要）. When it comes to （we face ）what kind of vacation should be given to students, some people believe that there ought to be one long vacation every year, whereas others argue that students should be given several short vacations throughout the year. As far as I am concerned, the latter viewpoint will be better. There are two main reasons supporting my standpoint.
First of all, students will be able to modify themselves better when given several short vacations each year. Students all experience such situation, that is, when having many months’ study, their minds seem to become a little rusty and can hardly be put in any more knowledge. At this time, a short vacation will release them from study load, and provide them with something relax, such as traveling, movie watching, （and the like删除 有了such as 就别再 and so on 这些了）. Therefore, it is really necessary. After having such kind of rest, students will be more energic in learning when they come back to school, which will improve their efficiency in study.
Besides, shorter vacations are better for students to master the subject they learn. If given a long vacation each year, students may easily forget what they have learnt last semester, which is a block for their further study. For example, a friend of mine got sick when junior and had to leave school for an operation, which lasted three months. After she came back to class, hardly could she catch up with the professor. She had to review what was taught several months ago, and it largely decreased her efficiency and turned out to be an overload. However, these will never happen when vacations are shorter.
Although one long vacation may enable students with longer beneficial programs, like field trips, traveling to comparably more distant places, and so forth. I maintain that several short vacations will benefit students more, because they prepare students better with further study and offer them appropriate relaxation.;O

半小时能写出来感觉水平比我高很多了 继续加油

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susan8940UID: 160449

Decisions can be made quickly, or they can be made after careful thought. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The decisions that people make quickly are always wrong. Use reasons and specific examples to support your opinion.

People have to make numerous decisions during their life time. Some decistions(of them) are made after careful thought, whereas others are made really quickly. But that doesn’t mean those made quickly are always wrong.(The former ones are mostly right, because they are under careful evaluation. However, the latter ones are not always wrong.) There are twe main reasons ought to be considered.

First of all, many decisions are so easy or simple to make that they don’t need complex thinking. When we are going to a super market to buy some instant noodles, for example, we don’t need to think about many hours to decide which band of noodles should be taken. Because after having tried several different kinds,we know exactly which one tastes better. For that matter, what we have to do is just to get one from shelves and put it in our shopping basket. If we do spend much time comparing different noodles, we may still make the same choice eventually. In many cases, we don’t need to think carefully before making decisions, because they are so easy to make or not very important. After quickly making those decisions(determinations), the consequence don’t turn out to be wrong.

Besides, some people are so smart or hardworking that they can make correct decisions without thinking carefully. For example, Bill Gates is an excellent expert in software, if given some choices related to computer to make a decision, he can quickly find out the most appropriate one. Similarly, when a class is having a biology exam, those who have done good preparations can always choose the correct answer without careful thinking. In these circumstances, decisions are made rapidly because people, by some means, have already got the correct conclusions.

Arguing above, it is obvious that decisions made quickly are not always wrong. However, when facing with some significant decisions and lacking the confidence to make the right choice, we should still think carefully and do some homework before making the final decision.

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原帖由 zhenzhen_163 于 2006-5-3 12:00 发表
我不敢再给你们打分了，我用的是iBT的标准，差点害Lanccy去跳楼！   ;P

Susan，在你往下看之前，你必须发誓不论如何，不寻短，否则你不许看。  ;P

老大，做人要厚道，差点害人跳楼不忏悔居然还在这偷笑吗？

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seat taken

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原帖由 susan8940 于 2006-5-4 19:23 发表
Decisions can be made quickly, or they can be made after careful thought. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The decisions that people make quickly are always wrong. Use reas ...

You did a good job, now you can go out and play.

Decisions can be made quickly, or they can be made after careful thought. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The decisions that people make quickly are always wrong. Use reasons and specific examples to support your opinion.

People have to make numerous decisions during their life time (note: lifetime is one word). Some decistions(of them) are made after careful thought, whereas others are made really quickly. But that doesn’t mean those made quickly are always wrong.(The former ones (note: take our ones) are mostly right, because they are under careful evaluation. However, the latter ones (note: take out ones) are not always wrong.) There are twe main reasons ought (note: take out ought) to be considered.
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First of all, many decisions are so easy or simple to make that they don’t need complex thinking. When we are going to a super market (note: supermarket is one word.) to buy some instant noodles, for example, we don’t need to think about (note: take out about) many hours to decide which band of noodles should be taken (how about “bought”?). Because after having tried several different kinds,we know exactly which one tastes better. For that matter, what we have to do is just to get (All we have to do is get) one from (don’t forget “the” here) shelves and put it in our shopping basket. If we do spend much time comparing different noodles, we may still make the same choice eventually. In many cases, we don’t need to think carefully before making decisions, because they are so easy to make or not very important (Remember, the topic wants you to talk about the decisions being wrong or not; not important or not.). After quickly making those decisions(determinations), the consequence don’t turn out to be wrong (This last sentence is problematic. You don’t need it to make a point so get rid of it.).

Besides, some people are so smart or hardworking (note: hardworking could imply  “thinking carefully”  so you are contradicting yourself here.) that they can make correct decisions without thinking carefully. For example, Bill Gates is an excellent expert in software, if given some choices related to computer to make a decision (take out “to make a decision”), he can quickly find out the most appropriate one. Similarly, when a class is having a biology exam, those who have done good preparations (have prepared well) can always choose the correct answer without careful thinking. In these circumstances, decisions are made rapidly because people, by some means (somehow), have already got the correct conclusions.

Arguing above (from the above), it is obvious that decisions made quickly are not always wrong. However, when facing with (“faced with” is a much more common usage, although “facing with” is acceptable. It is these little things—usage—that make your writing look native.) some significant decisions and lacking the confidence to make the right choice, we should still think carefully and do some homework before making the final decision.

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回拍:)
Some people believe that students should be given one long vacation each year. Others believe that students should have several short vacations throughout the year. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.
Vacations play an important role in students’ lives. When it comes to what kind of vacation should be given to students, some people believe that there ought to be one long vacation every year, whereas others argue that students should be given several short vacations throughout the year. As far as I am concerned, the latter viewpoint will be better. There are two main reasons supporting my standpoint.
开头不错！
First of all, students will be able to modify themselves better when given several short vacations each year. Students all experience such situation(cannot understand the meaning), that is, when having many months’ study, their minds seem to become a little rusty and can hardly be put（cramed） in any more knowledge. At this time, a short vacation will release them from study load, and provide them with something relax(relaxant), such as traveling, movie watching, and the like. Therefore, it is really(truely) necessary. After having such kind of rest, students will be more energic (和什么比较？)in learning when they come back to school, which will improve their efficiency in study.

Besides, shorter vacations are better for students to master the subject they learn. If （if删掉）given a long vacation each year, students may easily forget what they have learnt last semester, which is a block for their further study. For example, a friend of mine got sick when junior and had to leave school for an operation, which lasted three months. After she came back to class, hardly could she catch up with the professor. She had to review what was taught several months ago, and it largely decreased（lowered） her efficiency and turned out to be an overload. However, these will never happen when vacations are shorter.

Although one long vacation may enable students with longer beneficial programs, like field trips, traveling to comparably more distant places, and so forth. I maintain that several short vacations will benefit students more, because they prepare students better with further study and offer them appropriate relaxation.
Lz写的很好啦，尽管有些不妥之处，整体很好，文采和词汇。。佩服楼主，看了lz 不少文章:)，我觉的我写的太少了:L   争取拿满分哦:):):victory:

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原帖由 susan8940 于 2006-5-3 19:15 发表
Is it more important to be able to work with a group of people in a team or to work independently? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.

Somebody argue that it is more ...

感觉总的来讲不错,有的词性和句子结构有一点问题,结尾可以多写一点.
cope好像是竞争的意思吧?

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Vacations play an important role in students’ lives. When it comes to what kind of vacation should be given to students, some people believe that there ought to be one long vacation every year, whereas others argue that students should be given several short vacations throughout the year. As far as I am concerned, the latter viewpoint will be better. There are two main reasons supporting my standpoint.

First of all, students will be able to modify themselves better when given several short vacations each year. Students all experience such situation, that is, when having many months’ study(after having been studying for several months), their minds seem to become a little rusty and can hardly be put in any more knowledge. At this time, a short vacation will release them from study load, and provide them with something relax(relaxation), such as traveling, movie watching, and the like. Therefore, it is really necessary. (it 指什么)After having such kind of rest, students will be more energic in learning when they come back to school, which will improve their efficiency in study(the efficiency of studying).
Besides, shorter vacations are better for students to master the subject they learn. If(可去掉吧) given a long vacation each year, students may easily forget what they have learnt last semester, which is a block for their further study(further studying,建议不要用那么多their). For example, a friend of mine got sick when junior and had to leave school for an operation, which lasted three months. After she came back to class, hardly could she catch up with the professor. She had to review what was taught several months ago, and it largely decreased her efficiency and turned out to be an overload. However, these(this) will never happen when vacations are shorter.

Although one long vacation may enable students with longer beneficial programs, like field trips, traveling to comparably more distant places, and so forth.(,一句话没完呢) I maintain that several short vacations will benefit students more, because they prepare students better with further study and offer them appropriate (moderate)relaxation.
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