20天托福110分复习计划，由于另一个帖子楼数太高，现在本帖也开始为各位改作文

wouldratherUID: 2623576

再接再厉 呵呵 又是我呀:loveliness:

Question:Renewable resources of energy (Sun, wind, water) will soon replace fossils fuels such as gases, oil, and coal. Do you agree or disagree?

With the increasing price of gasoline, debate in this field is heated in recent years. There are countless arguments about how long it may take for renewable resources, such as water and sun, to replace fossils fuels. So far as I am concerned, it is never an easy task that can be achieved in a short period of time due to several reasons.

First, the main problem of renewable resources of energy is its limited output. We are living in a crowded planet with more than 60 billion habitants, and this number is increasing everyday. The energy produced by renewable resources, though recommended by many governments and organizations, can hardly meet our needs due to its restricted capacity. What's more, it is universally acknowledge that the more developed a society is, the more energy it consumes. Take The United States for example, with about 1/30 of the world's population, it uses nearly one quarter of the energy in the globe. Thus, it is obvious that accompanying with the booming of some developing countries, such as India and China, the gap between need and supply will become even bigger. In sum, since the need of energy is far beyond its capacity, it is not possible for renewable resources to dominate the energy market very soon.  

Furthermore, different kinds of resistances will arise during the replacing process. Companies will refuse to use it because of the extra expenses on replacing suited equipments; gas and coal investigators will try to prevent green energy from entering the market because it will hurt their interests; ordinary people will feel it difficult to handle when they use the alternative energy for the first time. From this perspective, using renewable resources is more of a complicated social challenge rather than a technical innovation.

Another reason that worth mention is the wildly usage of renewable resources might bring some new problems to the world. One good evidence is the nuclear energy. It might be a potential threaten to the safety of neighbourhood citizens if is not carefully controlled. Another instance is the corn energy, which is now used in USA to replace gasoline. It is reported by Scientific American that it will probably heaven the severe greenhouse effect for that some farmers are cutting down the forests to plant corns, which are more profitable. Thus, it is not a perfect solution to world energy shortage.

In conclusion, there is a long way to go before these "wonder energy" can totally replace traditional fuels because of the limitation of itself and the hurdles outside. However, while changes are often resisted, they are nonetheless necessary for any individual, organization and society to improve and progress.

yichengfanUID: 2608182

295# 腾格里旅狼
谢谢啊^ 文章等改完再贴过来让你过目下吧~~
晚安~

gxy9910UID: 204592

Ding!Ding!Ding!

奔跑蜗牛UID: 2579189

272# 腾格里旅狼  
谢谢~  我会努力加一些例子的。
不过什么是“不该语法”? 有一点不理解...是语法问题比较多吗？
tiny.shirley 发表于 2009-5-14 11:29

强烈支持旅狼不改语法

语法改起来一天能改几篇

想累昏人吗

princessaneurinUID: 2527062

谢谢Lz,希望 对 我 有 所 帮助

腾格里旅狼UID: 2573178

301# wouldrather 又是一篇模版问……写作文最好抛开模版写……然后在尝试从自己的文章中总结模版。作文总体来讲问题不大，个人建议，应该加入一些反方观点，最好在文章最后加入一些“使用新能源的好处”，这样能是T作文的批改者看到你的思考全面性。

腾格里旅狼UID: 2573178

304# 奔跑蜗牛 呵呵，蜗牛你说的太好了，（悄悄地说：我的语法真的很不好……改起来真的很慢……）

goafterdreamUID: 2215745

267# goafterdream  你和楼上的朋友缺点差不多，都是在首段就不断的用问句，给人的观点是你对自己的论述很不自信。问句可以有，但最好在第一段以后。你的第三段写的有些偏题了，题目只是问你是否鼓励。encourage。你 ...
腾格里旅狼 发表于 2009-5-14 08:10

多谢楼长，辛苦了！

评语收到，转考到6.21了，觉得目前还差得太多。

螺丝扣UID: 2328316

1# 腾格里旅狼

129. A university plans to develop a new research center in your country. Some people want a center for business research. Other people want a center for research in agriculture (farming). Which of these two kinds of research centers do you recommend for your country? Use specific reasons in your recommendation.




Without stable development of social economy, we will face more serious social problems, such as theft, unemployment, and so forth. And if there is no advanced development of agricultural technology, each member of a certain society will struggle for survival. Which aspect is urgent part to our country? Considering the current situation in our country, I bolster the latter one without hesitation. Of course, I will approve to develop a new agriculture research center in our country.



In the first place, one of the heaviest burdens for governments in our country is to efficiently solve the issue about food supply. As we all know, China is a developing country with a large number of people. That means in order to survive, abound food should be provided no matter when. However, due to various nature disasters and agriculture technique, it is hard to always provide enough food. Hence, it is the main responsibility of the new agriculture research center that to research some new species of high-productive crops and some strategies to avoid the shortage of food to some extents.



Another aspect about the benefit of building new agriculture research center in our country is that improvement of peasants' skills of growing crops. There is no doubt that all of peasants in our country are lack of relatively high-level knowledge about how to effectively plant crops. In that sense, even if peasants have tries their best to grow crops in their fields, owing to the shortage of scientific methods, they will yield little. Obviously, the new agriculture research center will lend a hand to deal with this problem. The researchers can give some relevant reports to peasants and teach them the right method to cultivate their crops according to specific conditions of different regions.



Last but not least, the whole society will also benefit from the new agriculture research center. Firstly, people without concern about food will spend more energy on other businesses, such as the developments of science, economy, and health. All of these developments will definitely impel progresses of whole society. Besides, once we have formed enough food supply chain, we even can export some of food production to other countries and make profits. Admittedly, the premise lies in the advanced development of agriculture in our country. And the optimal way for us to accomplish this goal is mainly to further research by our agricultural experts. Of course, the foundation of the new agriculture research center plays a crucial role in this process.


On balance, with these points mentioned above I firmly make the conclusion that new agriculture research center will bring several benefits to country once it is built. And with the promotion of agriculture, people will have better lives.




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奔跑蜗牛UID: 2579189

304# 奔跑蜗牛  呵呵，蜗牛你说的太好了，（悄悄地说：我的语法真的很不好……改起来真的很慢……）
腾格里旅狼 发表于 2009-5-19 09:54

恩 支持旅狼 要是你啥都改了 你想想那些小组的人的作文都拿来 你……
改语法这样费时费力 留给他们互改吧
估计现在这么多 也够旅狼受的了 多吃点 好吃的别累着

zh3fenixUID: 2619360

LZ很牛叉啊~~~

芝星芋泥UID: 2604014

很谢谢。再是一片。试着找感觉。
What do you want most in a friend-someone who is intelligent, or someone who has a sense of humor, someone is reliable? Which one of these characteristics is most important to you?
Use specific reasons and examples to explain your choice.

Everybody needs some friends who he shares interest with, who gives him safety, and he is happy staying with. In my opinion, reliability is the key quality of a friend, rather than humor or intelligence.
The first reason why I want a reliable friend is that he can bring me safety. If you tell him your secrets, he will keep it as a mineral secret as well. Jane is a lovely girl with dark eyes and sweet voice. What’s more, she is my vital friend. Once, when I just quarreled with my boy friend YU and called a taxi to home, on the way I phoned Jane and told her everything in an unclear sad voice. I shouted that YU was wield and ugly, and that I didn’t want to meet him again. However, Jane said nothing, but comforted me with her sweet mature voice. The next day, I was calmed down. It was Jane who pulled me out of sadness. But she never told my embarrassment to others. Her appearance moved me whole. I am sure that she is the kind of friend I seek for. The safety my friend gave me was of great comfort.
The second reason why I choose a friend who I can rely on is that I ought to own a natural and delighted feeling while hanging out together. I can express whatever I think, such as “how well-designed the flax dress is!” and so on. We do not fear about discussing with each other, since both of us can hold our secret. Disguises aren’t required, we show each other our inner side. How crystal we are!
In summary, reliable guys are chosen to be my amies. Because I feel safe  with them. Also because I can create a happy atmosphere between us. It counts to me.

腾格里旅狼UID: 2573178

312# 芝星芋泥 你的这篇文章写得太简单了，就好像是应付一样，虽然我说过文章的首段要简洁，但是你最好在首段能够提一下反面的观点，提一下别的选择的优点。另外，你的第二段例子不正确，不高密并不意味者reliable。reliable更强调的是一种依赖的感觉。而且safety并不是只能通过不高密就能带给你的。……通过整篇文章发现你并是很擅长写reliable，感觉你找不出东西写。最好尝试一下别的选择。

网兜妮妮UID: 2612538

题目：Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Observation or studying animals can help us to human nature. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer (其实这个题目不太会写，希望楼主帮我看看？....还有，逻辑和语言的问题，希望lz的建议)

I have a dog in my home for almost a year, whose name is TATA, and I can feel I was different from a year ago when I had no pets. Actually, now TATA is treated as a family member, and I believe living with him, I learnt more not only about animals but also human beings. So，as to me, I do think observation and studying animals can help us to human nature, my pet told me a lot about these.

First, animals can show things directly than we do, so, observation through animals may be easily to find the cause and effect, which is always the same to human. Take my dog as an example, last month my dog was ill, I can find that he was unhappy all day and showed no interested in anything, including his favorite food. The only exception was he likes being stroked by my hands as before. From this little thing, I just find that every one needs care, although some one apparently shows he/she do not need us stay with him/her when he/she was in blue, he/she indeed needs us. But for other reasons, maybe he/she thought we are busy as well, he/she speaks out the untruth words. After that, every time when my friends meet difficulties, I was there with them, no matter how busy I was, I know they need me, this is a human nature.

Secondly, when we study animals, like doing researches about how they organized, we will learn lessons as well. I can think of a research as an example, which was sited in my paper and it is about how ants working together to let the community out of danger. It says when the ant hole was in fire, the ants hugged with each other to consist a big ball, and then they were rolling out of the fire. The result was that the outside ants were fired and dead but which in the center were alive. The out circle ants save others in a way by sacrificing themselves. It is great indeed. And the study provides a good way to reexamine the human nature. When a community or even a country was in danger, some humans did as the out circle ants which sacrificed their life for other’s safety. The examples are numerous like in earthquakes or during a war. They are heroes and it is showing the human nature.

In short, as the reasons showed above, I do agree that observation or studying animals can help us a lot to human nature, through which we will know ourselves deeper and do better in the future.

钱小QUID: 2645002

好东西诶~~~~