Issue83【0906G背水一战三月小组】第7次作业 by yunfeiyang4ever

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【提纲】论点：政府应该保护那些疆域范围内，非常偏僻的、很少有人能够到达的荒野，保持其原始状态，在此基础上，小范围内对这些荒野进行开发，则有利于大众；
        1. 出于保护环境的目的，政府应该保护疆域范围内的荒野；
        2. 而且，出于保护荒野当地居民文化习俗的目的，政府也应该保护疆域范围内的荒野；
        3. 但是，政府可以在小范围内开发偏僻的荒野；
        总结：同论点；

【原文】
   The speaker asserts that government should converse publicly owned wilderness areas in their region where are often extremely obscure and seldom could access. I fundamentally agree with it. Moreover, based on the preservation, government should develop these barren areas to some extent that could benefit tremendously the public.

    Admittedly, in order to protect the environment, government should save desert regions as their natural state. These wilderness areas play an active role in the ecosystem despite they are extremely out-of-the-way. In fact, there is a very delicate balance in nature that we human beings also cannot demonstrate with any accuracy. The chains of life are intricately tied up together in a beautiful method. Hence any species being wiped out could destroy the chains that might lead amounts of living creatures endangered. For example, majority people would agree that permanently clearing away flies and mosquitoes is a good idea, but we don't comprehend the consequence that might have in the long period of time. Admittedly flies decompose waste materials. We could not image that without them how dirty the world will be. Also, Mosquitoes may be a significant food source for other animals in the food chain that directly leads to food for humans. Therefore, extinct species is entirely possible that the survival of us might be challenged. Undoubtedly, government should make a tremendous effort to protect these wilderness areas for fear that human are confronted catastrophe.

    Furthermore, for the sake of preserving the customs and traditions of the endemic there, government should still converse these desert regions. To illustrate this point, Take my country as an example, there are enormous areas in the southwest of my country where only a few habitants live there, whose cultures, including customs of daily life, are cardinal in researching of the history in our country, nevertheless, imaging that some of these areas were evolved for tourism, these residents would surely be incorporated by the foreigners and under the strong irruption of popular culture, their culture would hardly ever survive. From this example, thus, to protect the wilderness areas could effectively preserve their customs and traditions.

    However, these desert areas could be developed in some circumstances by the government. Common sense informs me that there are rich natural sources in wilderness region, for example, oil. Alaska is an obvious example, which sold to the United States by the Russia as something worthless and which has been substantiated to have a huge storage of oil, forest as well as resources. As is well known, oil is indispensable to develop the industry. If the country is rich in oil rather than importation, the government is able to make better use of it to build their country and could directly invest more money that used to import the oil to contribute the public programs in fields ranging from education to public welfare. In short, government partly, even in small area develop the wilderness areas is benefit the public.

    In conclusion, based on the purpose of protecting the environment and cultures of there, government should develop these wilderness areas to some extents for the public good.

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The speaker asserts that government should converse publicly ownedwilderness areas in their region where are often extremely obscure andseldom could access. I fundamentally agree with it. Moreover, based onthe preservation, government should develop these barren areas to someextent that could benefit tremendously the public.

    Admittedly, in order to protect the environment, government shouldsave desert regions as their natural state. These wilderness areas playan active role in the ecosystem despite they are extremelyout-of-the-way. In fact, there is a very delicate balance in naturethat we human beings also cannot demonstrate with any accuracy. (这附近应该加一句说政府的开发会对这种Chain或者Balance造成负面的影响，否则就会显得和TS脱离了关系)Thechains of life are intricately tied up together in a beautiful method.Hence any species being wiped out could destroy the chains that mightlead (不及物动词.)amounts of living creatures endangered. For example, majoritypeople would agree that permanently clearing away flies and mosquitoesis a good idea, but we don't comprehend the consequence that might havein the long period of time. Admittedly flies decompose waste materials.We could not image that without them how dirty the world will be. Also,Mosquitoes may be a significant food source for other animals in thefood chain that directly leads to food for humans. Therefore, extinct(ing)species is entirely possible that the survival of us might bechallenged. Undoubtedly, government should make a tremendous effort toprotect these wilderness areas for fear that human are confrontedcatastrophe(算是绕回来了).

    Furthermore, for the sake of preserving the customs and traditionsof the endemic there, government should still converse these desertregions(这句话可以提升一下，By putting efforts on conversation of those desert regions from the government, the customs and traditionsof the endemic could be preserved---小建议，我这句也可以在改改). To illustrate this point, Take(Taking) my country as an example, thereare enormous areas in the southwest of(in) my country where only a fewhabitants live there, whose cultures, including customs of daily life,are cardinal in researching of the history in (the)our country,(这里断开一下吧)nevertheless, imaging that some of these areas were evolved fortourism, these residents would surely be incorporated by the foreignersand under the strong irruption of popular culture, (so that)their culture wouldhardly ever survive. From this example, thus, to protect the wildernessareas could effectively preserve their customs and traditions.

    However, these desert areas could be developed in(with?) somecircumstances by the government. Common sense informs me that there arerich natural sources in wilderness region, for example, oil. Alaska isan obvious example, which sold to the United States by the Russia assomething worthless , and which(DELETE) has been substantiated to have a hugestorage of oil, forest as well as (other) resources. As is well known, oil isindispensable to develop the industry. If the country is rich in oilrather than importation, the government is able to make better use ofit to build their country and could directly invest more money that(was/或者直接去掉that)used to import the oil to contribute the public programs in fieldsranging from education to public welfare. In short, government partly,even in small area develop(ing) the wilderness areas is benefit(benefiting/beneficial to) the public.
//这一段的例子和论述不错v，不过最好能在加点什么来突出circumstances 这个概念

    In conclusion, based on the purpose of protecting the environmentand cultures of there, government should develop these wilderness areasto some extents for the public good.


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